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[legbamel]

I've got the first five chapters of my new one up and Chapter 6 just about ready to go for tomorrow.

[Elnino135]

AshiraShepard wrote...

Thank you!
And here, it's
finally up with first chapter->

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5932238/1/

Using this as an excuse for a bump

Stolen from this thread
All credits go to AshiraShepard!

(also, now I only have to look 1 place when Im searching for more stuff to read )

[RShara]

I just put up chapter 3. Thanks everyone!



A Dance of Minds Chapter 3

[janeym27]

Hey. I tried my hand at fanfic. It contains Garrus. And Shepard. Guess this is the thread for this stuff.

Sialater, Xsause and Flammie: much thanks for betaing.

[Kikaimegami]

Does anyone have Legion-centric fanfic, or fanfic with Legion as a primary supporting character, in which he does not die and is happy in nature? I can't remember if I asked this here before, but I'm tired of seeing him get the short end of the stick.



Note: if it's on FFNet with Legion listed as a character, I've already seen it.



Please, help a Kikai out

[LordMandalore]

Haven't seen any other Legion works...

Will let you know if I find some though.

[screwoffreg]

I revised several of the chapters and I am working on the fifth. It should be done soon.

http://www.fanfictio...hattered_Dreams

Modifié par screwoffreg, 01 mai 2010 - 11:59 .

[LordMandalore]

screwoffreg wrote...

I revised several of the chapters and I am working on the fifth. It should be done soon.

http://www.fanfictio...hattered_Dreams

Just read this. Really great job!

[LordMandalore]

New chapter is up!

[RShara]

Chapter 4 is up if anyone has time to read it, I'd love to know what everyone thinks *pretty please*



A Dance of Minds Chapter 4

[Shazzammer2]

lol op your fanfic got character. I lol at the 'taco stand' joke. I will read some more when I have the time.



I have a fanfic up but I must realllllllllllllly warn you. I'm not a writer. Click at your own risk.

[Elnino135]

@LordM - It keeps getting better and better! Looking forward to new laughs

RShara wrote...

Chapter 4 is up if anyone has time to read it, I'd love to know what everyone thinks *pretty please*

A Dance of Minds Chapter 4

Still going good! You've really got the characters down! I can't stop hearing Mordin and Thane's vioce when I read their lines!

@Shazzammer2 - You've got some nice action, but your characters aren't very deep. Some of them even seem out of character now and then
You've improved a lot in the latest chapter, compared to your first, so keep improving! If you want a tip on how to write characters, I can recommend RShara's A Dance of Minds (linked in the quote).

I'm looking forward to your next part! and not only to see what improvements you've picked up

[RShara]

Awwww, thanks Elnino! I saw that you left a review, and I really appreciate it. I try really hard to make sure I understand a character before I write anything about them!



Shazzhammer, I will read and review your fic later today

[RShara]

Shazz, I agree that your characterization has improved immensely. There are a number of grammatical mistakes you might want to watch out for (the difference between there, their, and they're, its and it's for example), and some things that should be capitalized aren't, while others that shouldn't be, are (omnitool, turian)



There are also a few places where it's not clear who you are referring to (he, she, etc).



The action scenes are really good. Fast paced, great description, and urgency. The sense of impending mayhem is very well done.



Tali seems a lot more aggressive than I would have expected. She does get snippy sometimes, but I never really saw her as quite so trigger happy.



Grunt has a couple of lines that seem a bit too complicated for him, but I haven't studied his character as much, so I could be wrong. Jack and Zaeed are awesome



tl;dr, your fic is going places. A bit of streamlining and a few improvements are needed, but overall it'll be interesting to see where you are going with it!

[SpiderFan1217]

I'm busy writing something else, but I have an idea if someone wants to take a shot at it. Starring an paragon, earthborn, sole survivor, soilder Shepard. After Shepard gets brought back to life, Miranda and Jacob run a few tests on his memory and find that he's forgotten almost half his life. He now thinks he's still a gang member, and is a real jerk. Naterally, he still has to save the universe. If anyone writes it let me know so I can read it. If something similar has already been written post a link please.

Modifié par SpiderFan1217, 04 mai 2010 - 07:54 .

[Ashira Shepard]

@ Elnino135

Thank you for posting something of mine :3

And to that effect-> Chapter Two of Pariah

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5932238/2/

If anyone's interested

[RShara]

Ashira, very nice chapter. I liked the way you keep us on the edge of our seats!



A Dance of Minds Chapter 5 is up. A shorter chapter than usual, guest starring the wonderful Kasumi

[legbamel]

I'm up to Chapter 14 of  But Oh! Those Lips.  This chapter isn't my best but I'm trying to move the story along to the massive drama.  I do better with drama.    You guys already know the story!

Modifié par legbamel, 08 mai 2010 - 11:36 .

[LordMandalore]

Finally updated!

[Fiery Phoenix]

Started working on my first fan fiction (check signature). Currently in-progress, two chapters uploaded. Chapter 3 should be uploaded by Friday.

[RShara]

Interesting, FieryPhoenix! I like having a non-Tali quarian story, and the Pilgrimage has to be a nerve wracking experience for young adults. I like the detail you put in about the living conditions of the Fleet, it's very nicely adapted from the novels.

There are some grammatical issues (sorry yeah I always notice those, I suck that way), but your storytelling just reaches out to grab me Leni is such a cute, thoughtful character.

[KalReegarVasNeema]

When I see a fanfic thread, the first thing I think of is this forum's lack of a roleplaying area. I think we should petition for one.

[Fiery Phoenix]

RShara wrote...

Interesting, FieryPhoenix! I like having a non-Tali quarian story, and the Pilgrimage has to be a nerve wracking experience for young adults. I like the detail you put in about the living conditions of the Fleet, it's very nicely adapted from the novels.
There are some grammatical issues (sorry yeah I always notice those, I suck that way), but your storytelling just reaches out to grab me Leni is such a cute, thoughtful character.

Thanks! Glad you liked it!

As for the grammatical inconsistencies, I'd really appreciate it if you could point them out so I can edit them - preferably through PM. Thanks again, Shara!

[RShara]

FieryPhoenix7, I sent you the PM.



Also, I forgot to mention,

A Dance of Minds chapter 6 is a brief chapter finishing up the Jacob/Thane interaction (though there will probably be more in the future)

A Dance of Minds chapter 7 is also up. It involves Grunt's Rite of Passage on Tuchanka.

[Zanramon]

Anyone got any good post me2 fanfics?