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[Lividity Jones]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

JeanLuc761 wrote...

Godur wrote...

JeanLuc761 wrote...

aaaaaaaaand this thread is dead.

Guess we're waiting for the morning crew now.

Does that mean crazy europeans? If so then I am one of them.
I only just arrived as it were.

Good mornin to ya.

3:50 AM here, still holdin together.  Sleep is for the weak 

There is a time for sleep, and a time for action.

Now is a time for action.

Sleep can wait til I'm dead.

Indeed.

So, any topics on anybody's mind?

Hmm... not really, working on a Tali/Shepard picture that's coming along...

Everyone else seems to be sleeping...

Hmph. Weaklings.

Trying to make some progress with my current fanfic, but I think I've hit a snag.

[RiptideX1090]

Lividity Jones wrote...



Hmph. Weaklings.

Trying to make some progress with my current fanfic, but I think I've hit a snag.

Writer's block is a ****.

[Lividity Jones]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...



Hmph. Weaklings.

Trying to make some progress with my current fanfic, but I think I've hit a snag.

Writer's block is a ****.

Ain't it just?

Trying to figure out how to have Shepard's parents get brought up without forcing it.

[RiptideX1090]

Lividity Jones wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...



Hmph. Weaklings.

Trying to make some progress with my current fanfic, but I think I've hit a snag.

Writer's block is a ****.

Ain't it just?

Trying to figure out how to have Shepard's parents get brought up without forcing it.

Maybe I can help?

[Lividity Jones]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...



Hmph. Weaklings.

Trying to make some progress with my current fanfic, but I think I've hit a snag.

Writer's block is a ****.

Ain't it just?

Trying to figure out how to have Shepard's parents get brought up without forcing it.

Maybe I can help?

Sure.

It's basically how the fic begins. Can't decide if it's something Tali just asks, or another crewmember, or something Shepard just lets slip and Tali asks him about it later.

The whole fic was originally meant to be divided between two, the actual attack on Mindoir and Shepard and Tali visiting Mindoir. After awhile getting nowhere with either of them, I thought it would be a good idea to just combine the two, covering the key events of the attack through Shepard relating the story to Tali. I think I can fit it all together into one, I just need to figure out how to best introduce Shepard's past to Tali.

Modifié par Lividity Jones, 22 avril 2010 - 08:24 .

[RiptideX1090]

Lividity Jones wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...



Hmph. Weaklings.

Trying to make some progress with my current fanfic, but I think I've hit a snag.

Writer's block is a ****.

Ain't it just?

Trying to figure out how to have Shepard's parents get brought up without forcing it.

Maybe I can help?

Sure.

It's basically how the fic begins. Can't decide if it's something Tali just asks, or another crewmember, or something Shepard just lets slip and Tali asks him about it later.

The whole fic was originally meant to be divided between two, the actual attack on Mindoir and Shepard and Tali visiting Mindoir. After awhile getting nowhere with either of them, I thought it would be a good idea to just combine the two, covering the key events of the attack through Shepard relating the story to Tali. I think I can fit it all together into one, I just need to figure out how to best introduce Shepard's past to Tali.

Hmmm... well... best way I can think of would be to start the fic with the attack on Mindoir, telling it from Shepard's perspective as if it's happening now, get to a climactic part in the story, such as where Shepard finds his dead parents, then have it cut out, and have Shepard wake up from a dream in present day, maybe with Tali cuddled up next to him. Shepard's episode wakes her up, she asks what's wrong, and Shepard tells her he was remembering Mindoir and his parents. Then take it from there.

[Lividity Jones]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...



Hmph. Weaklings.

Trying to make some progress with my current fanfic, but I think I've hit a snag.

Writer's block is a ****.

Ain't it just?

Trying to figure out how to have Shepard's parents get brought up without forcing it.

Maybe I can help?

Sure.

It's basically how the fic begins. Can't decide if it's something Tali just asks, or another crewmember, or something Shepard just lets slip and Tali asks him about it later.

The whole fic was originally meant to be divided between two, the actual attack on Mindoir and Shepard and Tali visiting Mindoir. After awhile getting nowhere with either of them, I thought it would be a good idea to just combine the two, covering the key events of the attack through Shepard relating the story to Tali. I think I can fit it all together into one, I just need to figure out how to best introduce Shepard's past to Tali.

Hmmm... well... best way I can think of would be to start the fic with the attack on Mindoir, telling it from Shepard's perspective as if it's happening now, get to a climactic part in the story, such as where Shepard finds his dead parents, then have it cut out, and have Shepard wake up from a dream in present day, maybe with Tali cuddled up next to him. Shepard's episode wakes her up, she asks what's wrong, and Shepard tells her he was remembering Mindoir and his parents. Then take it from there.

I actually have a nightmare I had written pertaining to the attack on Mindoir around somewhere. I had written it when I was bored. I tried to fit bits and pieces of the vision from the beacon in there as well, for example seeing Sovereign in the sky during the attack. I figured it would be a cool little horror fic I could use at some point.

Hmm... It might work. You don't think it might be too sudden? Just dropping it into their laps without a buildup?

[Nivenus]

That's really weird. I've also been working on a Shepard origin story (sole survivor), though it's far-less Talicentric. In fact, while I originally intended to frame it within the present (namely during Grunt's loyalty mission) I'm not certain if I'll keep that element since the flashbacks are growing much longer than I initially intended them to.



If it's a story about Shepard talking to Tali about Mindoir, I feel like the subject of his parents would come up naturally. Probably he'd mention them off-handedly as part of his retelling and she'd ask for more details.

[RiptideX1090]

Lividity Jones wrote...


I actually have a nightmare I had written pertaining to the attack on Mindoir around somewhere. I had written it when I was bored. I tried to fit bits and pieces of the vision from the beacon in there as well, for example seeing Sovereign in the sky during the attack. I figured it would be a cool little horror fic I could use at some point.

Hmm... It might work. You don't think it might be too sudden? Just dropping it into their laps without a buildup?

You'd have to build up to it during the dream. Start somewhat slow, and work your way up. At the tension point, where things are about to get really bad, cut it off. It keeps the intrigue up. If they want to keep reading what's going on on Mindoir, they'll keep reading to get to the next part where the story continues.

When crafting a story, you HAVE to think like you're holding a carrot on the end of the stick, you want the audience to want to get the carrot, that's what keeps them turning the pages, they want to see what happens. With the proper application of suspense, you can get someone to read 1000 pages of text. Tom Clancy, JK Rowling in her later books, and Stephen King are all masters of suspense, and it's what makes them successful. As long as YOU find a way to make it interesting, the audience will keep going.

[Lividity Jones]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...


I actually have a nightmare I had written pertaining to the attack on Mindoir around somewhere. I had written it when I was bored. I tried to fit bits and pieces of the vision from the beacon in there as well, for example seeing Sovereign in the sky during the attack. I figured it would be a cool little horror fic I could use at some point.

Hmm... It might work. You don't think it might be too sudden? Just dropping it into their laps without a buildup?

You'd have to build up to it during the dream. Start somewhat slow, and work your way up. At the tension point, where things are about to get really bad, cut it off. It keeps the intrigue up. If they want to keep reading what's going on on Mindoir, they'll keep reading to get to the next part where the story continues.

When crafting a story, you HAVE to think like you're holding a carrot on the end of the stick, you want the audience to want to get the carrot, that's what keeps them turning the pages, they want to see what happens. With the proper application of suspense, you can get someone to read 1000 pages of text. Tom Clancy, JK Rowling in her later books, and Stephen King are all masters of suspense, and it's what makes them successful. As long as YOU find a way to make it interesting, the audience will keep going.

I think I have the perfect moment in mind.

I had originally wanted to go as extreme with the attack on Mindoir as I could. I wanted to describe things that would make the audience cringe. But, if I present it this way, the mystique is lost. The real horror of what happened is wasted. It might make a bigger impact if it is described through Shepard's own words to Tali after the nightmare.

Modifié par Lividity Jones, 22 avril 2010 - 08:42 .

[Godur]

Riptide's idea is much better for drama than the one I was going to suggest, so I think you should go with that one.

[RiptideX1090]

Lividity Jones wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...


I actually have a nightmare I had written pertaining to the attack on Mindoir around somewhere. I had written it when I was bored. I tried to fit bits and pieces of the vision from the beacon in there as well, for example seeing Sovereign in the sky during the attack. I figured it would be a cool little horror fic I could use at some point.

Hmm... It might work. You don't think it might be too sudden? Just dropping it into their laps without a buildup?

You'd have to build up to it during the dream. Start somewhat slow, and work your way up. At the tension point, where things are about to get really bad, cut it off. It keeps the intrigue up. If they want to keep reading what's going on on Mindoir, they'll keep reading to get to the next part where the story continues.

When crafting a story, you HAVE to think like you're holding a carrot on the end of the stick, you want the audience to want to get the carrot, that's what keeps them turning the pages, they want to see what happens. With the proper application of suspense, you can get someone to read 1000 pages of text. Tom Clancy, JK Rowling in her later books, and Stephen King are all masters of suspense, and it's what makes them successful. As long as YOU find a way to make it interesting, the audience will keep going.

I think I have the perfect moment in mind.

I had originally wanted to go as extreme with the attack on Mindoir as I could. I wanted to describe things that would make the audience cringe. But, if I present it this way, the mystique is lost. The real horror of what happened is wasted. It might make a bigger impact if it is described through Shepard's own words to Tali after the nightmare.

THERE YOU GO!

That's what I'm talking about. It'll allow for much more drama and characterization than flipping back and forth. Very nice.

[RiptideX1090]

Godur wrote...

Riptide's idea is much better for drama than the one I was going to suggest, so I think you should go with that one.

Well, if you've got a good idea, no need to hold back.

[Lividity Jones]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...


I actually have a nightmare I had written pertaining to the attack on Mindoir around somewhere. I had written it when I was bored. I tried to fit bits and pieces of the vision from the beacon in there as well, for example seeing Sovereign in the sky during the attack. I figured it would be a cool little horror fic I could use at some point.

Hmm... It might work. You don't think it might be too sudden? Just dropping it into their laps without a buildup?

You'd have to build up to it during the dream. Start somewhat slow, and work your way up. At the tension point, where things are about to get really bad, cut it off. It keeps the intrigue up. If they want to keep reading what's going on on Mindoir, they'll keep reading to get to the next part where the story continues.

When crafting a story, you HAVE to think like you're holding a carrot on the end of the stick, you want the audience to want to get the carrot, that's what keeps them turning the pages, they want to see what happens. With the proper application of suspense, you can get someone to read 1000 pages of text. Tom Clancy, JK Rowling in her later books, and Stephen King are all masters of suspense, and it's what makes them successful. As long as YOU find a way to make it interesting, the audience will keep going.

I think I have the perfect moment in mind.

I had originally wanted to go as extreme with the attack on Mindoir as I could. I wanted to describe things that would make the audience cringe. But, if I present it this way, the mystique is lost. The real horror of what happened is wasted. It might make a bigger impact if it is described through Shepard's own words to Tali after the nightmare.

THERE YOU GO!

That's what I'm talking about. It'll allow for much more drama and characterization than flipping back and forth. Very nice.

Yes, I like this plan.

Thank you! Thank you so much!

I will begin work immediately!

[Godur]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Godur wrote...

Riptide's idea is much better for drama than the one I was going to suggest, so I think you should go with that one.

Well, if you've got a good idea, no need to hold back.

My idea is like yours except it wouldn't start with the nightmare, so it owuld be incredibly tame in the beginning.

[RiptideX1090]

Lividity Jones wrote...

Yes, I like this plan.

Thank you! Thank you so much!

I will begin work immediately!

 
Not a problem. As an artist and writer, I fully appreciate the importance a second opinion.

I can't wait to see what you come up with. Best of luck and skill to you.

[Godur]

Hm, maybe I should return to writing my own fic.

[RiptideX1090]

Godur wrote...

Hm, maybe I should return to writing my own fic.

Indeed.

I plan on writing one to accompany the picture I'm working on.

Havent' written in a while. Should be interesting.

[RiptideX1090]

Rakia_Time wrote...

 Crap, i'm having serious problems writing, as someone mentioned above - WRITER'S BLOCK IS A ****

time to get a drink...........or ten 

I'm here all night.

Need some help?

Modifié par RiptideX1090, 22 avril 2010 - 08:58 .

[Godur]

Here's a link to my first chapter for those that are interested:
Virtue

[RiptideX1090]

Godur wrote...

Here's a link to my first chapter for those that are interested:
Virtue

Need to work on your sentence structure and grammer mate.

Poor structure and the like makes it hard to read...

[RiptideX1090]

Rakia_Time wrote...
If it was for something specific i would need help, the problem is i just don't know how exactly to continue 

Anyway, thanks for the offer 

Well, I'm always brimming with ideas, if you change your mind, I'll be here.

[Godur]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Need to work on your sentence structure and grammer mate.

Poor structure and the like makes it hard to read...

Yes I agree. I need to get better at proofreading my stuff too, I think it might be related.