Ce sujet est fermé
RiptideX1090 wrote...
I also imagine something relating to the geth and friendship screwing her up.
Maybe she meets someone on Pligrimage, shows affection for the first time in her life, and he refuses to be with her because she's a quarian, or because he doesn't want to risk her health. The Talimance gone wrong. That's how I'd do it.
Of course, she'd blame the geth and become unfeeling for the rest of her life.
NCLanceman wrote...
CamoBadger wrote...
I liked all of this, and I would definately give Xen a hug.
But killing her? That's extreme. Don't do that.
Her big goal in life is to re-enslave an entire sapient race for personal gain. Killing her isn't extreme, it's business.
Now killing her as a drive-by on a rocket surfboard over a sweet explosion? That would be extreme. Also, totally rad.
RiptideX1090 wrote...
I also imagine something relating to the geth and friendship screwing her up.
Maybe she meets someone on Pligrimage, shows affection for the first time in her life, and he refuses to be with her because she's a quarian, or because he doesn't want to risk her health. The Talimance gone wrong. That's how I'd do it.
Of course, she'd blame the geth and become unfeeling for the rest of her life.
I'll have to admit that what I'm doing is more than a little over-the-top. Short, punchy sentences, dark, wry humor, cynicism, and slightly extravagant metaphors are basically what I'm shooting for.Just_mike wrote...
On an unrelated note, Ive always dabbled wit noir but never wrote anything good enough. Got any tips? All the noir stuff I know literrally came from Calvin and hobbes newspaper comic strips.
cannedcream wrote...
Lividity Jones wrote...
NuclearBuddha wrote...
I picture her doing something heroic, but not particularly helpful to the Flotilla, on her pilgrimage. She comes home and nobody cares and she can barely get a captain to accept her to a ship.
*Takes notes.*
A Pilgrimage gift... Hmm...
I get the feeling I'm going to need anti-depressants after this story.
NCLanceman wrote...
CamoBadger wrote...
I liked all of this, and I would definately give Xen a hug.
But killing her? That's extreme. Don't do that.
Her big goal in life is to re-enslave an entire sapient race for personal gain. Killing her isn't extreme, it's business.
Now killing her as a drive-by on a rocket surfboard over a sweet explosion? That would be extreme. Also, totally rad.
On a somewhat related note:Lividity Jones wrote...
RiptideX1090 wrote...
I also imagine something relating to the geth and friendship screwing her up.
Maybe she meets someone on Pligrimage, shows affection for the first time in her life, and he refuses to be with her because she's a quarian, or because he doesn't want to risk her health. The Talimance gone wrong. That's how I'd do it.
Of course, she'd blame the geth and become unfeeling for the rest of her life.
The Talimance gone wrong... Interesting...
Lividity Jones wrote...
RiptideX1090 wrote...
I also imagine something relating to the geth and friendship screwing her up.
Maybe she meets someone on Pligrimage, shows affection for the first time in her life, and he refuses to be with her because she's a quarian, or because he doesn't want to risk her health. The Talimance gone wrong. That's how I'd do it.
Of course, she'd blame the geth and become unfeeling for the rest of her life.
The Talimance gone wrong... Interesting...
cannedcream wrote...
RiptideX1090 wrote...
I also imagine something relating to the geth and friendship screwing her up.
Maybe she meets someone on Pligrimage, shows affection for the first time in her life, and he refuses to be with her because she's a quarian, or because he doesn't want to risk her health. The Talimance gone wrong. That's how I'd do it.
Of course, she'd blame the geth and become unfeeling for the rest of her life.
And this is a prime example of the heart-shredding stuff that comes out of the Night Crew.
Alright, I haven't really been paying attention here, but from the looks of things, Jones is writing a FF based on the life and times of Admiral Daro'Xen vas Moreh?Lividity Jones wrote...
Then I'll be doing it right.cannedcream wrote...
Lividity Jones wrote...
NuclearBuddha wrote...
I picture her doing something heroic, but not particularly helpful to the Flotilla, on her pilgrimage. She comes home and nobody cares and she can barely get a captain to accept her to a ship.
*Takes notes.*
A Pilgrimage gift... Hmm...
I get the feeling I'm going to need anti-depressants after this story.
If I play my cards right, people might just think twice before they pull the trigger on her.
Just_mike wrote...
http://fc00.devianta..._by_lancea.jpgp
Anyone else think this image is compromising?
Modifié par RedTracer7, 23 juin 2010 - 05:50 .
Guest_Runescapeguy9_*
The thought is petrifying. I'm done with the negativity tonight. Be on steam/tzf.RiptideX1090 wrote...
It's sad... I have all this build up negative energy... but I never really write with it. Angel of Death and Noir see a bit of it, but I've never really gone full out on my own here...
Hmmm...
NuclearBuddha wrote...
I'll have to admit that what I'm doing is more than a little over-the-top. Short, punchy sentences, dark, wry humor, cynicism, and slightly extravagant metaphors are basically what I'm shooting for.Just_mike wrote...
On an unrelated note, Ive always dabbled wit noir but never wrote anything good enough. Got any tips? All the noir stuff I know literrally came from Calvin and hobbes newspaper comic strips.
And the feeling that no matter how hard you try, it's probably not going to amount to a hill of beans in this crazy world.
Modifié par Just_mike, 23 juin 2010 - 05:51 .
NuclearBuddha wrote...
On a somewhat related note:
I've always thought that Benezia was an LI gone wrong. She could have been a moderating influence on Saren, but instead got swept along into his personal nightmare.
See, you do speak noir!Just_mike wrote...
Figures. You turn down any nook and cranny on this web, and you're bound to find something. It may not be what you're looking for, but it's always something.
NuclearBuddha wrote...
On a somewhat related note:
I've always thought that Benezia was an LI gone wrong. She could have been a moderating influence on Saren, but instead got swept along into his personal nightmare.
RedTracer7 wrote...
Happy Thoughts!!
“I can see why you hate these suits already.” He murmured before enveloping her in his arms. They stayed locked in such an embrace for what Tali assumed to be ages. Her mind, as it always did when she was with Shepard unsuited, was making it's wishes quite apparent as she delighted in this impromptu passion. She wanted to pounce on him.
Badly.
Just_mike wrote...
Lividity Jones wrote...
RiptideX1090 wrote...
I also imagine something relating to the geth and friendship screwing her up.
Maybe she meets someone on Pligrimage, shows affection for the first time in her life, and he refuses to be with her because she's a quarian, or because he doesn't want to risk her health. The Talimance gone wrong. That's how I'd do it.
Of course, she'd blame the geth and become unfeeling for the rest of her life.
The Talimance gone wrong... Interesting...
I dunno, Xen has that thing about violating a person's body.With her dissecting her toys and geth and whatnot. Maybe it was because Xen wanted too much of a "male role" if you get what I mean.
Strawberry Kiwi wrote...
Alright, I haven't really been paying attention here, but from the looks of things, Jones is writing a FF based on the life and times of Admiral Daro'Xen vas Moreh?
... I'm strangely intrigued.
Anime reference incoming: She reminds me of the villain's pet Atlantean in the Escaflowne movie. There's a scene at the end that gets me every time when the protagonist's girl meets the Atlantean and the Atlantean basically says that if she'd been better for the villain, the whole thing might never have happened.cannedcream wrote...
She wasn't evil. Not really. She just got fell under the sway of the indoctrination.NuclearBuddha wrote...
On a somewhat related note:
I've always thought that Benezia was an LI gone wrong. She could have been a moderating influence on Saren, but instead got swept along into his personal nightmare.
She's a tragic figure, really.
Well, it wasn't stated outright or anything, I figured I'd phrase it as an opinion.NCLanceman wrote...
So... was she not or something?NuclearBuddha wrote...
On a somewhat related note:
I've always thought that Benezia was an LI gone wrong. She could have been a moderating influence on Saren, but instead got swept along into his personal nightmare.
Because I just started a ME1 playthrough a little while ago and I'm pretty sure it was supposed to be kinda obvious her and Saren had a thing going. Some kind of horrible, indoctronation fueled thing going, but a thing nonetheless.
NuclearBuddha wrote...
Anime reference incoming: She reminds me of the villain's pet Atlantean in the Escaflowne movie. There's a scene at the end that gets me every time when the protagonist's girl meets the Atlantean and the Atlantean basically says that if she'd been better for the villain, the whole thing might never have happened.cannedcream wrote...
She wasn't evil. Not really. She just got fell under the sway of the indoctrination.NuclearBuddha wrote...
On a somewhat related note:
I've always thought that Benezia was an LI gone wrong. She could have been a moderating influence on Saren, but instead got swept along into his personal nightmare.
She's a tragic figure, really.
Retour en haut
