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#206476
Lividity Jones

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Titanium Man wrote...

Man, I'd read more of this stuff but you guys are like, "Hey, let's make readers feel MISERABLE. This will incite trust."

I can't get through The Handmaid's Tale, you think I'm gonna try for this? :V


You can give mine a shot.

Dark in parts, but very uplifting overall.

#206477
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Kira Shepard wrote...
*snip*

“Nice try Bosh’tet.”

Oh goddamn it. Not her.


Win! :wizard:

But I'm not so sure about the planets name. He is telling his older adventure, but in the present, they have completed the loyalty mission, right? So that would make the Zorya to sound ok, or does it?

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Kira Shepard wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

And now I give you the beginning of Zaeed and Nia: Of Warlords and Mercs.

Back for more?

Alright, where was I? Right, Quarian merc and the warlord.

Goddamn that was a good fight.

Right, anyway I picked this mission up about five years after the Illium fiasco. Krogan warlord pissed off Aria T’loak herself, think it had something to do with him attempting to bomb her club I don’t know. Not too often you get someone like her as clientele; they usually have a their own outfit for that sort of work. Turned out Aria had already sent in some of her own men and the warlord decimated them and sent back their heads as a warning, now she was hiring me to finish him off.

So I take the mission and only after I agree to hunt him down does she tell me I’m not the only one gunning for this guy. She’s got about three other guys going after him too.

Lucky me.


So I get a shuttle off Omega and make my way to the planet. Entire place is covered in thick jungle. Like Zorya but worse. Any I do some recon in the shuttle. flying about looking for a good place to land, when this seeker missile comes outta f*cking nowhere and crashes the thing. Damn near killed me right on the spot. So as I’m going down in flames I open up the hatch and jump hoping for the best.

I land on my back just as the shuttle smacks right into a tree and blows the hell up, taking the supplies I’d brought with me with it. I tried to salvage some of it from the wreck but the most I found was a water canister and some extra thermal clips. I hadn’t even been on the mission for five minutes and things were already going straight to hell. Nothing to do about it now though, before I went down scanner picked up a small camp to the north, might be my warlord or one of the other mercs. Either way it was someone I’d probably have to kill.

I start trudging my way through the mud and grime making sure to smear some on my armor, and make me harder to detect. By the time night falls I see a small fire burning at the camp’s center. I crouch and switch my mask’s lens’s to night vison see what I can pick up. I’m not three feet away from the main tent, a combination of massive leaves and sticks made into a shelter, when I hear I thud right behind me. I try to turn with Jesse ready to fire, and I get a knife pressed hard against my throat by whoever it was who snuck up on me.

“Nice try Bosh’tet.”

Oh goddamn it. Not her.

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#206479
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RiptideX1090 wrote...


You'll hate Rael SO much.


Words aren't enough to describe it.
I wished so badly, that Tali would have ****slapped Rael's sorry ass out of the airlock.

#206480
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Thelacan wrote...

Before I started posting in the thread, I lurked on few thousands pages to get to know the inside jokes. And I'm honestly puzzled, that people keep giving you flakk about those drilled shins, even with that chapter one. Guess some people just like to drill those holes for more.


Well I'm honestly not a fan of the whole 'drilled shins' thing when I read it, just because it seemed excessive.

In other news:

The Zaeed/Quarian thing rocks, and should continue. Forever.

Modifié par Tairis Deamhan, 25 juin 2010 - 11:50 .


#206481
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RiptideX1090 wrote...

Go read it. It's in Buddha's Blog.

You'll hate Rael SO much.


I don't know. I'm not easily affected by these sort of things.

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Titanium Man wrote...

Man, I'd read more of this stuff but you guys are like, "Hey, let's make readers feel MISERABLE. This will incite trust."

I can't get through The Handmaid's Tale, you think I'm gonna try for this? :V

eactly my point Tali deseves better. If you gota go and freakin kill her at lest make it a good death(yes I do believe in such a thing) that counts for something!! Not saying any of you lack ability because you obviously don't but comeon real life already has enough potential to totaly suck.

Modifié par nickFury, 25 juin 2010 - 11:55 .


#206483
RiptideX1090

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Thelacan wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...


You'll hate Rael SO much.


Words aren't enough to describe it.
I wished so badly, that Tali would have ****slapped Rael's sorry ass out of the airlock.


It's horrible...

Because you know it's completely plausible.

#206484
RiptideX1090

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Someone With Mass wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Go read it. It's in Buddha's Blog.

You'll hate Rael SO much.


I don't know. I'm not easily affected by these sort of things.


The last two sessions.

Go read them.

Let me know what you think.

#206485
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nickFury wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

And now I give you the beginning of Zaeed and Nia: Of Warlords and Mercs.

Back for more?

Alright, where was I? Right, Quarian merc and the warlord.

Goddamn that was a good fight.

Right, anyway I picked this mission up about five years after the Illium fiasco. Krogan warlord pissed off Aria T’loak herself, think it had something to do with him attempting to bomb her club I don’t know. Not too often you get someone like her as clientele; they usually have a their own outfit for that sort of work. Turned out Aria had already sent in some of her own men and the warlord decimated them and sent back their heads as a warning, now she was hiring me to finish him off.

So I take the mission and only after I agree to hunt him down does she tell me I’m not the only one gunning for this guy. She’s got about three other guys going after him too.

Lucky me.


So I get a shuttle off Omega and make my way to the planet. Entire place is covered in thick jungle. Like Zorya but worse. Any I do some recon in the shuttle. flying about looking for a good place to land, when this seeker missile comes outta f*cking nowhere and crashes the thing. Damn near killed me right on the spot. So as I’m going down in flames I open up the hatch and jump hoping for the best.

I land on my back just as the shuttle smacks right into a tree and blows the hell up, taking the supplies I’d brought with me with it. I tried to salvage some of it from the wreck but the most I found was a water canister and some extra thermal clips. I hadn’t even been on the mission for five minutes and things were already going straight to hell. Nothing to do about it now though, before I went down scanner picked up a small camp to the north, might be my warlord or one of the other mercs. Either way it was someone I’d probably have to kill.

I start trudging my way through the mud and grime making sure to smear some on my armor, and make me harder to detect. By the time night falls I see a small fire burning at the camp’s center. I crouch and switch my mask’s lens’s to night vison see what I can pick up. I’m not three feet away from the main tent, a combination of massive leaves and sticks made into a shelter, when I hear I thud right behind me. I try to turn with Jesse ready to fire, and I get a knife pressed hard against my throat by whoever it was who snuck up on me.

“Nice try Bosh’tet.”

Oh goddamn it. Not her.

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#206486
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Lividity Jones wrote...
You can give mine a shot.

Dark in parts, but very uplifting overall.


Which one did you write again?

I'd post a sample of the draft but I don't want to give too much away.  The title is called "Smile", though.  It is not a gushy fic.  (But not "Let's get DEPRESSING" either.)

#206487
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Lividity Jones wrote...

Titanium Man wrote...

Man, I'd read more of this stuff but you guys are like, "Hey, let's make readers feel MISERABLE. This will incite trust."

I can't get through The Handmaid's Tale, you think I'm gonna try for this? :V


You can give mine a shot.

Dark in parts, but very uplifting overall.


I try to balance. I do some humor, some uplifting.

A whole lot of dark...

I need to do some more cheerful stuff. I do a bit of everything though.

#206488
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My Washing Machine sounds like the cylon intro for battlestar galactica

#206489
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Tairis Deamhan wrote...

Well I'm honestly not a fan of the whole 'drilled shins' thing when I read it, just because it seemed excessive.


Maybe. But those shinguards did have suspicious holes in it. Of course, they could have been dismissed simply by a shrug. But taking into account the general feel of that story, telling us how horrible the suit is, and how RT7 managed to write the reason behind the holes...
That's just pure, awesome skills in there.

#206490
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I need to do some more cheerful stuff.

I knew there was a reason I stayed on today.

#206491
Lividity Jones

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Titanium Man wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...
You can give mine a shot.

Dark in parts, but very uplifting overall.


Which one did you write again?

I'd post a sample of the draft but I don't want to give too much away.  The title is called "Smile", though.  It is not a gushy fic.  (But not "Let's get DEPRESSING" either.)


Chapter one right here.

http://social.biowar...7003/blog/4453/

The rest is in my blog as well.

The basic consensus is that it's what people want the romance DLC to be like.

Or something along those lines.

#206492
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Thelacan wrote...

Tairis Deamhan wrote...

Well I'm honestly not a fan of the whole 'drilled shins' thing when I read it, just because it seemed excessive.


Maybe. But those shinguards did have suspicious holes in it. Of course, they could have been dismissed simply by a shrug. But taking into account the general feel of that story, telling us how horrible the suit is, and how RT7 managed to write the reason behind the holes...
That's just pure, awesome skills in there.


There was a hole?

#206493
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RiptideX1090 wrote...

It's horrible...

Because you know it's completely plausible.


You mean the Rael, or my fantasy about him being ****slapped?

If Rael, then it's more than a plausible. It would be so true to his character, so true, that it actually frightens me a bit.

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No way I'm going to pass this up.



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#206495
Tairis Deamhan

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Thelacan wrote...

Tairis Deamhan wrote...

Well I'm honestly not a fan of the whole 'drilled shins' thing when I read it, just because it seemed excessive.


Maybe. But those shinguards did have suspicious holes in it. Of course, they could have been dismissed simply by a shrug. But taking into account the general feel of that story, telling us how horrible the suit is, and how RT7 managed to write the reason behind the holes...
That's just pure, awesome skills in there.


Oh I totally agree there, there juxtaposition of the putting it on and taking it off chapter was extremely well done. The story as a whole was excellent and well written.

I just found the shins bit to be too much 'shock value' without enough logic to back it up.

#206496
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Mozer121 wrote...

No way I'm going to pass this up.

Because we need more hate from them... -_-

#206497
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irrelevant post

Modifié par Just_mike, 25 juin 2010 - 11:57 .


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Just_mike wrote...

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Bring back the Shepard Boogie for ME3

#206499
Titanium Man

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Lividity Jones wrote...
Chapter one right here.

http://social.biowar...7003/blog/4453/

The rest is in my blog as well.

The basic consensus is that it's what people want the romance DLC to be like.

Or something along those lines.


I have read this!  It's not bad.

#206500
RiptideX1090

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Thelacan wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

It's horrible...

Because you know it's completely plausible.


You mean the Rael, or my fantasy about him being ****slapped?

If Rael, then it's more than a plausible. It would be so true to his character, so true, that it actually frightens me a bit.


That's why it's so disgusting.