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[RiptideX1090]

Runescapeguy9 wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...
Worst? Mary Sues. Poor Gramma r. Poor Formatting. Poor Storytelling.

You're probably going to slap me, but it needed to be done.

In the past 48 hours, I've had three hours of sleep, have typed up a standalone story, edited two full chapters of another, and added entries for a third, as well as done 3 speed paintings. I think I'm entitled to a few spelling mistakes god dammit.

[RiptideX1090]

RedTracer7 wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...


Apologies. I simply get sick and tired of people trying to censor me. I believe fully in the rights of free speech, and am of the opinion that if you want to write or draw it, no matter what it is, you should be able to do so without people saying you shouldn't. The onus is on the viewer not to look. Suffice it to say, it's a touchy issue.

Best qualities? Weaving plotilines, characteres you get attached to, even fan ones, interesting takes and twisting of perspective.

Worst? Mary Sues. Poor Grammer. Poor Formatting. Poor Storytelling.

Except for you.

Shut up. <_<

[Lividity Jones]

Everyone needs to shut the **** up right now and get back to Tali. Repostan because, hey, **** you.


*Zaeed throws another knife, the blade landing just shy of it's intended target. Shepard stands to his right, leaning up against the desk.*

Zaeed: So... The quarian?

Shepard: How could you tell?

*Zaeed shrugs, tilting his head towards the security monitors.*

Zaeed: You notice these things when you get about my age.

*Shepard grins, crossing his arms. The two soldiers share a long silence.*

Zaeed: She's good in a fight, I'll give her that much.

*Shepard shakes his head before standing upright and continuing out of the Starboard Cargo Area.*

Shepard: Talk to you later, Zaeed.

*Zaeed leans back against the wall, the silence his only companion. With a flex of his fingers, his omni-tool flares. Bringing it up, he deftly works the holographic keys until a pic is shown. A much younger man hefts a familiar assault rifle over his shoulder, a man with less scars and a good eye. One tattooed arm is holds a quarian female by the waist, her diamond-like eyes visible under a pale blue visor. Zaeed sighs.*

Zaeed: Treat her good, Shepard...

Modifié par Lividity Jones, 28 juin 2010 - 03:20 .

[NuclearBuddha]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

social.bioware.com/318855/blog/6258/

Any one who missed that, go read it, and never **** to me again about not writing mushy crap.

Aw, what am I saying, I enjoyed it.

This was good.  I have only one comment:  you missed a great place to reference a big scar on her wrist that she doesn't really want to talk about.

[Titanium Man]

Lividity Jones wrote...

Everyone needs to shut the **** up right now and get back to Tali. Repostan because, hey, **** you.


*Zaeed throws another knife, the blade landing just shy of it's intended target. Shepard stands to his right, leaning up against the desk.*

Zaeed: So... The quarian?

Shepard: How could you tell?

*Zaeed shrugs, tilting his head towards the security monitors.*

Zaeed: You notice these things when you get about my age.

*Shepard grins, crossing his arms. The two soldiers share a long silence.*

Zaeed: She's good in a fight, I'll give her that much.

*Shepard shakes his head before standing upright and continuing out of the Starboard Cargo Area.*

Shepard: Talk to you later, Zaeed.

*Zaeed leans back against the wall, the silence his only companion. With a flex of his fingers, his omni-tool flares. Bringing it up, he deftly works the holographic keys until a pic is shown. A much younger man hefts a familiar assault rifle over his shoulder, a man with less scars and a good eye. One tattooed arm is holds a quarian female by the waist, her diamond-like eyes visible under a pale blue visor. Zaeed sighs.*

Zaeed: Treat her good, Shepard...

Is this the same quarian being detailed in those other minifics with Zaeed?

[Lividity Jones]

Titanium Man wrote...

Is this the same quarian being detailed in those other minifics with Zaeed?

Nah.

I wrote this forever ago.

You'll notice that, in mine, her visor is a different color.

[RiptideX1090]

NuclearBuddha wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

social.bioware.com/318855/blog/6258/

Any one who missed that, go read it, and never **** to me again about not writing mushy crap.

Aw, what am I saying, I enjoyed it.

This was good.  I have only one comment:  you missed a great place to reference a big scar on her wrist that she doesn't really want to talk about.

****...

That's what I get for writing it at four in the morning while doing AOD and working with Jones...

[huntrrz]

NuclearBuddha wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

social.bioware.com/318855/blog/6258/

Any one who missed that, go read it, and never **** to me again about not writing mushy crap.

Aw, what am I saying, I enjoyed it.

This was good.  I have only one comment:  you missed a great place to reference a big scar on her wrist that she doesn't really want to talk about.

If you mean what I think you mean... Tali would never do that.  Her sense of duty to her people is too strong.

P.S.  Or I guess I need to read AoD.  Renegade Tali rings false to me, so I have not had the desire.

Modifié par huntrrz, 28 juin 2010 - 03:28 .

[NuclearBuddha]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

NuclearBuddha wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...
social.bioware.com/318855/blog/6258/

Any one who missed that, go read it, and never **** to me again about not writing mushy crap.
Aw, what am I saying, I enjoyed it.

This was good.  I have only one comment:  you missed a great place to reference a big scar on her wrist that she doesn't really want to talk about.

****...

That's what I get for writing it at four in the morning while doing AOD and working with Jones...

I swear to god I thought that's where you were going with the scars.  I had a huge grin on my face... that slowly turned brittle and broke.  Oh well.

[NuclearBuddha]

huntrrz wrote...
If you mean what I think you mean... Tali would never do that.  Her sense of duty to her people is too strong.

I'm referencing the horrific infection she had in Rip and I's "Noir Tali is Noir."

[RiptideX1090]

NuclearBuddha wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

NuclearBuddha wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...
social.bioware.com/318855/blog/6258/

Any one who missed that, go read it, and never **** to me again about not writing mushy crap.
Aw, what am I saying, I enjoyed it.

This was good.  I have only one comment:  you missed a great place to reference a big scar on her wrist that she doesn't really want to talk about.

****...

That's what I get for writing it at four in the morning while doing AOD and working with Jones...

I swear to god I thought that's where you were going with the scars.  I had a huge grin on my face... that slowly turned brittle and broke.  Oh well.

*holds up magic marker*

Son. I have a mother****in' edit button. The laws of reality no longer apply to me.

Your mind = blown.

Yeah. That just happened.

I'll be right back.

[huntrrz]

NuclearBuddha wrote...

huntrrz wrote...
If you mean what I think you mean... Tali would never do that.  Her sense of duty to her people is too strong.

I'm referencing the horrific infection she had in Rip and I's "Noir Tali is Noir."

Okay, so I'm wrong twice over.

Won't be the first time...

Modifié par huntrrz, 28 juin 2010 - 03:30 .

[mikethor007]

Runescapeguy9 wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Except for you.

Shut up. ../../../images/forum/emoticons/angry.png

This.

This again.

[Andaius20]

Titanium Man wrote...

Lividity Jones wrote...

Everyone needs to shut the **** up right now and get back to Tali. Repostan because, hey, **** you.


*Zaeed throws another knife, the blade landing just shy of it's intended target. Shepard stands to his right, leaning up against the desk.*

Zaeed: So... The quarian?

Shepard: How could you tell?

*Zaeed shrugs, tilting his head towards the security monitors.*

Zaeed: You notice these things when you get about my age.

*Shepard grins, crossing his arms. The two soldiers share a long silence.*

Zaeed: She's good in a fight, I'll give her that much.

*Shepard shakes his head before standing upright and continuing out of the Starboard Cargo Area.*

Shepard: Talk to you later, Zaeed.

*Zaeed leans back against the wall, the silence his only companion. With a flex of his fingers, his omni-tool flares. Bringing it up, he deftly works the holographic keys until a pic is shown. A much younger man hefts a familiar assault rifle over his shoulder, a man with less scars and a good eye. One tattooed arm is holds a quarian female by the waist, her diamond-like eyes visible under a pale blue visor. Zaeed sighs.*

Zaeed: Treat her good, Shepard...

Is this the same quarian being detailed in those other minifics with Zaeed?

Did you take Jokers comment about Zaeed being liek shepard but takes pay checks into this him and another quarian romance?

[mikethor007]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

*holds up magic marker*

Son. I have a mother****in' edit button. The laws of reality no longer apply to me.

Your mind = blown.

Yeah. That just happened.

I'll be right back.

Ooooh, UPDATE!

[RedTracer7]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

*holds up magic marker*

Son. I have a mother****in' edit button. The laws of reality no longer apply to me.

Your mind = blown.

Yeah. That just happened.

I'll be right back.

Operation RetCon is a go.

Go! Go! Go!

[NuclearBuddha]

huntrrz wrote...

Don't suppose you saw this yet?  I know you've commented on some of my older stuff.

---

“Why is he shooting at us?”

In reply, a grain of tungsten moving at supersonic speed blew a fist-sized divot of ornamental stone into powder centimeters from the speaker’s head. Whimpering, she pressed closer to her partner, trying to bury her face in his chest. He shielded her head with his hand instinctively, though it would hardly provide any more protection than her helmet already did.

“We’re just aliens to him. He doesn’t know the difference.”

---

Hero

[RiptideX1090]

Fixed.

[RedTracer7]

mikethor007 wrote...

Runescapeguy9 wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Except for you.

Shut up. ../../../images/forum/emoticons/angry.png

This.

This again.

I am confused.

[NuclearBuddha]

RedTracer7 wrote...

mikethor007 wrote...

Runescapeguy9 wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Except for you.

Shut up. ../../../images/forum/emoticons/angry.png

This.

This again.

I am confused.

They both want you to shut up.  I think.

[RiptideX1090]

RedTracer7 wrote...

mikethor007 wrote...

Runescapeguy9 wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Except for you.

Shut up. ../../../images/forum/emoticons/angry.png

This.

This again.

I am confused.

We don't tolerate...

Your kind...

'round these parts.

[Lividity Jones]

Andaius20 wrote...

Did you take Jokers comment about Zaeed being liek shepard but takes pay checks into this him and another quarian romance?

I just thought that a guy like Zaeed has been around for a long time.

He's seen everything the galaxy has to offer, good and bad.

The mystery of her character was really what I wanted to get across.

Who was she? What happened to her? Where is she now? What was she doing with Zaeed? How did they meet?

[NuclearBuddha]

RiptideX1090 wrote...
Fixed.

Very nice.  I approve.

I love it when everything seems to cohere into a setting continuity, like the Lovecraft Mythos, or Tarantino's films, or such.

[RiptideX1090]

Lividity Jones wrote...

Andaius20 wrote...

Did you take Jokers comment about Zaeed being liek shepard but takes pay checks into this him and another quarian romance?

I just thought that a guy like Zaeed has been around for a long time.

He's seen everything the galaxy has to offer, good and bad.

The mystery of her character was really what I wanted to get across.

Who was she? What happened to her? Where is she now? What was she doing with Zaeed? How did they meet?

Unfortunately, you were also ninja'd by Buddha.