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runescapeguy9 wrote...
Craaaaaap....
Well either way doesnt really matter I'd die of a heart attack in the first 30 seconds.
Lividity Jones wrote...
GuardianAngel470 wrote...
cannedcream wrote...
BigKahuna25 wrote...
i've got a baaad feeling about this.JeanLuc761 wrote...
Given that it always results in the death of the person who said it.....yeah, it's pretty much the most cliche thing ever.cannedcream wrote...
Simon9one wrote...
Things just got really quiet in here...
It's quiet. Too quiet. <_<
. . .has there ever been a more cliche movie line then that?
At least it can't get any worse.
How hard can it be?
Let's split up.
hahahaha it censored the c*ck in co*ks her head. pretty cute though.MrBoomba wrote...
Feel free to criticize all you want when I do post, it's my first, but i'm not afraid of tough critics =p
This is also about half way into this chapter, and it is the last half of it, sorry for the length of it as well, btw.
Tali chuckles as Shepard fiddles with ED’s control panel. Thinking to herself how nice it would be if she could just simply tell Shepard how she really feels.
Shepard: Ah, finally, the mute botton! Now, what was it you wanted to talk about Tali?
Tali blushes, having hoped Shepard would have made the first move and stumbles with her words.
Tali: Well, you see… I was hoping… Maybe… No, that isn’t right… I wanted to know how you could stand up for me with such… power, nobody has riled up a crowd like that in so long.
Tali takes a deep breath thinking she had saved herself from having to admit anything just yet, hoping to see if Shepard feels the same way first.
Shepard: Hmm, well, it isn’t exactly hard standing up for someone who has done so much good and asks for so little, now is there?
Not expecting Shepard to reverse the game back onto her Tali looks away, waving her hand infront of her face. Shepard grabs her hand and lowers it away, trying to get a better look at Tali’s mask.
Shepard: You know you can say anything to me right? I would trust you with anything myself.
Surprised, Tali struggles for words, but only speaks brokenly, barely getting off any words that can be recognized.
Tali: I.. You… I’m Quarian… I thought… (Finally swallowing for a breath of fresh air)... Ahem, I just want to say that you are more to me than just a friend.
Shepard sits down next to Tali and takes her other hand in his
Shepard: Something more than friends? I thought we already had that…
Tali tilts her head in a puzzled fashion.
Tali: Wait, what? You thought we were already more than that? I had no idea… I’m sorry… I just didn’t think that…
Shepard hugs Tali as she begins stumbling with words, hoping to ease her confusion. Tali panics for a second, but soon realizes that this is right, returning the hug, as they touch forehead and visor together.
Time for plan B.Simon9one wrote...
Lividity Jones wrote...
GuardianAngel470 wrote...
cannedcream wrote...
BigKahuna25 wrote...
i've got a baaad feeling about this.JeanLuc761 wrote...
Given that it always results in the death of the person who said it.....yeah, it's pretty much the most cliche thing ever.cannedcream wrote...
Simon9one wrote...
Things just got really quiet in here...
It's quiet. Too quiet. <_<
. . .has there ever been a more cliche movie line then that?
At least it can't get any worse.
How hard can it be?
Let's split up.
Head 'em off at the pass.
Lividity Jones wrote...
*Several epic snips*
Let's split up.
cannedcream wrote...
runescapeguy9 wrote...
Craaaaaap....
Well either way doesnt really matter I'd die of a heart attack in the first 30 seconds.
Oh Rune, your collection of words and pictures never fail to make me smile.
. . .or fear that one night I'll wake up tied to the bed in your house like the guy in Misery.
"Tali can't die! She can't die you dirty birdy! Write it again!"
. . .I say this, assuming you have even the faintest idea what I'm talking about.
MrBoomba wrote...
snip
cannedcream wrote...
Lividity Jones wrote...
*Several epic snips*
Let's split up.
At least it's not raining.
Guest_runescapeguy9_*
If you're thinking of killing Tali again the underlined may become truer than you think.cannedcream wrote...
runescapeguy9 wrote...
Craaaaaap....
Well either way doesnt really matter I'd die of a heart attack in the first 30 seconds.
Oh Rune, your collection of words and pictures never fail to make me smile.
. . .or fear that one night I'll wake up tied to the bed in your house like the guy in Misery.
"Tali can't die! She can't die you dirty birdy! Write it again!"
. . .I say this, assuming you have even the faintest idea what I'm talking about.
Could be worse...cannedcream wrote...
Lividity Jones wrote...
*Several epic snips*
Let's split up.
At least it's not raining.
BigKahuna25 wrote...
Time for plan B.Simon9one wrote...
Lividity Jones wrote...
GuardianAngel470 wrote...
cannedcream wrote...
BigKahuna25 wrote...
i've got a baaad feeling about this.JeanLuc761 wrote...
Given that it always results in the death of the person who said it.....yeah, it's pretty much the most cliche thing ever.cannedcream wrote...
Simon9one wrote...
Things just got really quiet in here...
It's quiet. Too quiet. <_<
. . .has there ever been a more cliche movie line then that?
At least it can't get any worse.
How hard can it be?
Let's split up.
Head 'em off at the pass.
BigKahuna25 wrote...
hahahaha it censored the c*ck in co*ks her head. pretty cute though.MrBoomba wrote...
*snip*
runescapeguy9 wrote...
If you're thinking of killing Tali again the underlined may become truer than you think.cannedcream wrote...
runescapeguy9 wrote...
Craaaaaap....
Well either way doesnt really matter I'd die of a heart attack in the first 30 seconds.
Oh Rune, your collection of words and pictures never fail to make me smile.
. . .or fear that one night I'll wake up tied to the bed in your house like the guy in Misery.
"Tali can't die! She can't die you dirty birdy! Write it again!"
. . .I say this, assuming you have even the faintest idea what I'm talking about.
Simon9one wrote...
MrBoomba wrote...
snip
Some sentences could use polishing, and a few lines of dialogue are a little awkward.
But overall, well done. I look forward to seeing more.
runescapeguy9 wrote...
If you're thinking of killing Tali again the underlined may become truer than you think.cannedcream wrote...
runescapeguy9 wrote...
Craaaaaap....
Well either way doesnt really matter I'd die of a heart attack in the first 30 seconds.
Oh Rune, your collection of words and pictures never fail to make me smile.
. . .or fear that one night I'll wake up tied to the bed in your house like the guy in Misery.
"Tali can't die! She can't die you dirty birdy! Write it again!"
. . .I say this, assuming you have even the faintest idea what I'm talking about.
well law and order SVU just came on so someone's getting raped.GuardianAngel470 wrote...
runescapeguy9 wrote...
If you're thinking of killing Tali again the underlined may become truer than you think.cannedcream wrote...
runescapeguy9 wrote...
Craaaaaap....
Well either way doesnt really matter I'd die of a heart attack in the first 30 seconds.
Oh Rune, your collection of words and pictures never fail to make me smile.
. . .or fear that one night I'll wake up tied to the bed in your house like the guy in Misery.
"Tali can't die! She can't die you dirty birdy! Write it again!"
. . .I say this, assuming you have even the faintest idea what I'm talking about.
Ooooh, scary tree.
Guest_runescapeguy9_*
You think I kid.cannedcream wrote...
You're playing with fire, cannedcream. See that you don't get burnt.cannedcream wrote...
Simon9one wrote...
Could be worse...cannedcream wrote...
Lividity Jones wrote...
*Several epic snips*
Let's split up.
At least it's not raining.
cannedcream wrote...
Simon9one wrote...
Could be worse...cannedcream wrote...
Lividity Jones wrote...
*Several epic snips*
Let's split up.
At least it's not raining.
Is this some kind of joke?
chool77 wrote...
hmmm... i should write a fan fic with tali dying in it... hehehe... naaaa rune already hates me
cannedcream wrote...
Simon9one wrote...
Could be worse...cannedcream wrote...
Lividity Jones wrote...
*Several epic snips*
Let's split up.
At least it's not raining.
Is this some kind of joke?
Lividity Jones wrote...
I do. And good luck getting out of that one.
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