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[RiptideX1090]

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

I'm not entirely sure what happened...

what don't you understand?

Who shot Tali?

[RobotNixon]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

I'm not entirely sure what happened...

what don't you understand?

Who shot Tali?

But who was phone?

[Kira Shepard]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

I'm not entirely sure what happened...

what don't you understand?

Who shot Tali?

Leader of the Reds.

[Kira Shepard]

RobotNixon wrote...


But who was phone?

I was phone.

[RiptideX1090]

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

I'm not entirely sure what happened...

what don't you understand?

Who shot Tali?

Leader of the Reds.

,,,

That just doesn't seem plausible.

*shrug*

[RobotNixon]

Kira Shepard wrote...

RobotNixon wrote...


But who was phone?

I was phone.

That's deep.

[SpiderFan1217]

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

I'm not entirely sure what happened...

what don't you understand?

Who shot Tali?

Leader of the Reds.

  He must die. 

[Kira Shepard]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

I'm not entirely sure what happened...

what don't you understand?

Who shot Tali?

Leader of the Reds.

,,,

That just doesn't seem plausible.

*shrug*

why not?

[Kira Shepard]

RobotNixon wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

RobotNixon wrote...


But who was phone?

I was phone.

That's deep.

That's what she said.

[uhdnrt]

Kira Shepard wrote...

RobotNixon wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

RobotNixon wrote...


But who was phone?

I was phone.

That's deep.

That's what she said.

hang up, then dial again.

[RiptideX1090]

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

I'm not entirely sure what happened...

what don't you understand?

Who shot Tali?

Leader of the Reds.

,,,

That just doesn't seem plausible.

*shrug*

why not?

Shepard and Tali, who have faced down entire legions of enemies, killed sentient dreadnoughts that have spent billions of years killing people, faced every possible kind of enemy in the known universe, and some that AREN'T from the known universe, get taken down by... a small time gang leader?

Sorry... that just doesn't work.

Besides... never was a big fan of "random character death" fics in the first place, though, to each their own of course.

[uhdnrt]

Time for a repostan balm to Kira's excellent, though depressing as hell fic. Oh, and Red - I will have a ficlet for you inspired from your song shortly.
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Control Breached
Prompted by Nytefyre410
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I'll be damned to hell for the second time if I let this happen, Shepard thought to himself as he listened to the admirals over the speaker as he and Tali returned to the fleet. Sharing a glance with his companions, he sped up and punched the interface on the door.

Not waiting for it to open completely, he stormed into the meeting square. The quarians near the door who saw his entrance murmured to each other and a path quickly opened. None would stand before him; the commander's biotic field was flickering around him erratically as he rushed to the admiralty board.

Tali and Garrus shared a glance. It was unusual for Shepard to get this worked up. They reached the square, and Shepard stalked up to the podium. Tali matched his stride and walked with him up to the podium as Garrus took a seat on the stairs to watch the fireworks.

"Sorry we're late...."
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"Have you seen him this worked up before?" She asked the turian after the trial. Shepard was up in the cockpit of the shuttle, discussing something with Miranda as they returned to the Normandy.

Garrus nodded. "Once or twice. Remember when you got knocked unconscious by a pirate sniper on Klensal? When we were approaching the pirate base?"

"Yes, I remember getting hit, then waking up in the infirmary."

"Well, you missed all of the fun on the ground," he stated with more than a touch of sarcasm. "Shepard evac'd you, then brought me and Wrex back down to the planet. During the drop, his biotics were flickering like that."

Garrus paused, before continuing, "When we got to the base, he used the Mako to take out the towers. Then, he blew the doors to the base open." Tali's eyes widened; that was overkill, and something she couldn't picture her commander doing. The turian wasn't done with his story though.

"Shepard told me to snip anyone that was disabled," Garrus said with a chuckle. "Then he and Wrex ran in, and used their biotics to lift or knock down every single mercenary they saw. It was a shooting gallery for me."

Tali shook her head. "That was reckless."

"You have no idea," the turian agreed. "Shepard just stood there, out in the open. It was surreal; I think the pirates were actually more afraid of him than they were of the krogan. He didn't calm down until all the merc's were dead."

"After we got back, he checked on you after setting a course for the other location that human on the Citadel told him about. Once Chakwas told him you were ok, he calmed down," Garrus finished.

"Really?" She asked. The turian nodded. "I remember I was surprised when he took Ashley and Wrex with him instead of anyone else."

"Well, I was exhausted," Garrus replied. "That, and he told me to keep an eye on you." He nodded an affirmation when the quarian just stared at him.

Her gaze turned to the cockpit speculatively. He cared that much, even back then? she thought to herself. I should tell him...no, stop being selfish, she reprimanded herself. It was just the same concern he gave everyone...

But try as she might, a small flicker of warmth erupted in her chest. Her commander cared; truly cared. It might have been an unrealistic dream, but Tali spent the rest of the trip thinking on her commander, and everything she longed to tell him but did not dare speak.

If only...
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[Kira Shepard]

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

I'm not entirely sure what happened...

what don't you understand?

Who shot Tali?

Leader of the Reds.

,,,

That just doesn't seem plausible.

*shrug*

why not?

Shepard and Tali, who have faced down entire legions of enemies, killed sentient dreadnoughts that have spent billions of years killing people, faced every possible kind of enemy in the known universe, and some that AREN'T from the known universe, get taken down by... a small time gang leader?

Sorry... that just doesn't work.

Besides... never was a big fan of "random character death" fics in the first place, though, to each their own of course.

ok howabout it being a cerberus mook? change up the dialouge a bit maybe a holo of the illusive man speaking instead of the man with the gun.

[RobotNixon]

Kira Shepard wrote...

ok howabout it being a cerberus mook? change up the dialouge a bit maybe a holo of the illusive man speaking instead of the man with the gun.

You killed Tali.

You're not going to win this battle.

[Kira Shepard]

RobotNixon wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

ok howabout it being a cerberus mook? change up the dialouge a bit maybe a holo of the illusive man speaking instead of the man with the gun.

You killed Tali.

You're not going to win this battle.

tali was going to die in this either way. that's why it's a roaring rampage of revenge. ever read the book of the movie man on fire? if not take the movie amp it up to eleven mix it with the punisher movie amped up to eleven.

[RiptideX1090]

RobotNixon wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

ok howabout it being a cerberus mook? change up the dialouge a bit maybe a holo of the illusive man speaking instead of the man with the gun.

You killed Tali.

You're not going to win this battle.

Not even that. You can't just... have a character die like that. In the opening. No build up, no anything.

Sorry... as I said, not my thing.

[RiptideX1090]

Kira Shepard wrote...

RobotNixon wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...

ok howabout it being a cerberus mook? change up the dialouge a bit maybe a holo of the illusive man speaking instead of the man with the gun.

You killed Tali.

You're not going to win this battle.

tali was going to die in this either way. that's why it's a roaring rampage of revenge. ever read the book of the movie man on fire? if not take the movie amp it up to eleven mix it with the punisher movie amped up to eleven.

I wasn't aware there was a novelization of Man on Fire. It's my all time favorite movie.

[RobotNixon]

Kira Shepard wrote...


tali was going to die in this either
way. that's why it's a roaring rampage of revenge. ever read the book
of the movie man on fire? if not take the movie amp it up to eleven mix
it with the punisher movie amped up to eleven.

Okay, except...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Not even that. You can't just... have a character die like that. In the opening. No build up, no anything.

Sorry... as I said, not my thing.

Yeah.

[Kira Shepard]

RobotNixon wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...


tali was going to die in this either
way. that's why it's a roaring rampage of revenge. ever read the book
of the movie man on fire? if not take the movie amp it up to eleven mix
it with the punisher movie amped up to eleven.

Okay, except...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Not even that. You can't just... have a character die like that. In the opening. No build up, no anything.

Sorry... as I said, not my thing.

Yeah.

We'll get the build up to that point via flashbacks and such. that's why I left the actual opening kill scene ambiguous

[RiptideX1090]

Kira Shepard wrote...

RobotNixon wrote...

Kira Shepard wrote...


tali was going to die in this either
way. that's why it's a roaring rampage of revenge. ever read the book
of the movie man on fire? if not take the movie amp it up to eleven mix
it with the punisher movie amped up to eleven.

Okay, except...

RiptideX1090 wrote...

Not even that. You can't just... have a character die like that. In the opening. No build up, no anything.

Sorry... as I said, not my thing.

Yeah.

We'll get the build up to that point via flashbacks and such. that's why I left the actual opening kill scene ambiguous

That doesn't... really work. Not when using an established character. You have no incentive to keep reading... it's like reading the ending of a book first... then reading the beginning... it just doesn't... the reader has no reason to continue reading.

[FsDxRAGE]

TZF is dead, may I join you fine mentlegen?

Modifié par FsDxRAGE, 19 juillet 2010 - 08:19 .

[Kira Shepard]

RiptideX1090 wrote...


That doesn't... really work. Not when using an established character. You have no incentive to keep reading... it's like reading the ending of a book first... then reading the beginning... it just doesn't... the reader has no reason to continue reading.

it's a roaring rampage of revange. it's more about hunting down the one's responsable then leading up to her death. I'm going for the reader wanting shepard to find and punish the one's responsable.

[RobotNixon]

FsDxRAGE wrote...

TZF is dead, may I join you fine mentlegen?

RAGE, how I've missed you.

[RiptideX1090]

FsDxRAGE wrote...

TZF is dead, may I join you fine mentlegen?

You go back and forth...?

Treason.

But yeah. You can chill in the actual Tali thread if you like. Welcome back.

Discussion?

[FsDxRAGE]

RobotNixon wrote...

FsDxRAGE wrote...

TZF is dead, may I join you fine mentlegen?

RAGE, how I've missed you.

And how I have missed you.
Been really busy typing to hang out her much