I have to say as manipulative as TIM is, he very likely has no need at all to behave in a Mao-like style, and he'd likely use less crude measures if he had. His followers are all in Cerberus of their own will. So, no funny pictures, no subliminal messages. But the Cerberus logo on the visor is hilarious.
Miranda Lawson - our favorite woman in the galaxy (III)
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#12102
Posté 20 février 2011 - 06:04
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MsSihaKatieKrios wrote...
@drwells123
That poster is a problem? Hmm... Anyways, TIM with a clown hat and roses in his rifle would be more appropriate.
@LuxDragon
That's because that pic is so damn hilarious that nobody gives a damn if it's ooc. Heck, not many care about ooc these days anyways. And I saw chapter 40 is in beta...that's why I never beta honey. Too damn long. My fics are all 100% Katherine Jameson proofread, 0% beta contamination.
The length of my chapters calls for a beta. Beyond grammer mistakes, he's also pretty good at pointing out some of the weirdness I let in by accident and helps me make the fic flow better.
#12103
Posté 20 février 2011 - 06:25
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snfonseka wrote...
Oh...I almosts overlooked this one. Very beautiful!!!
#12104
Posté 21 février 2011 - 01:47
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LuxDragon wrote...
For some reason, I always liked that pic of Miranda. I don't know why considering how OOC it is
I think that's why I like it. It's a cute expression but it's never going to happen in real life
And that artist's style just seems suited to her.MsSihaKatieKrios wrote...
@LuxDragon
That's because that pic is so damn hilarious that nobody gives a damn if it's ooc. Heck, not many care about ooc these days anyways. And I saw chapter 40 is in beta...that's why I never beta honey. Too damn long. My fics are all 100% Katherine Jameson proofread, 0% beta contamination.
I try to make the characters in my fics do things a little outside their normal range - else what would be the fun of using them? - without the reader saying "yeah right". But I'm no doubt guilty of getting overexuberant on occasion.
I'm used to being sliced up with red ink in a professional capacity (writing tech docs) so I don't care to deal with it in my recreational writing as well
#12105
Posté 21 février 2011 - 02:02
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A very long time ago I wrote a story called Be All Our Sins Remembered. I was never quite happy with it, but it wasn't until recently that fongiel and I got around to revising it. So I present to you:
Title: All I See Is Ghosts
Pairing: Miranda/M!Shep
Rating: R
Summary: There's nothing Miranda Lawson hates more than the rogue agents who give
Cerberus a bad name. But the divide isn't as sharp as she'd like to
believe.
For those of you who've read the original version, I've reworked the ending and softened both Shepard and Miranda a bit. It's still not a happy story or a romance per se, but there's some hope that wasn't there before.
Title: All I See Is Ghosts
Pairing: Miranda/M!Shep
Rating: R
Summary: There's nothing Miranda Lawson hates more than the rogue agents who give
Cerberus a bad name. But the divide isn't as sharp as she'd like to
believe.
For those of you who've read the original version, I've reworked the ending and softened both Shepard and Miranda a bit. It's still not a happy story or a romance per se, but there's some hope that wasn't there before.
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#12106
Posté 21 février 2011 - 04:19
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She is an intriguing character, and has an interesting personality, once we can get past certain "physical insecurities". And Bioware's very peculiar camera angles.
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Posté 21 février 2011 - 10:29
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@jtav:
I like this new version. This is more how my Cyrus Shepard would have reacted, but now there is some inconsistency between his earlier behaviour and the latter. There is a need to explain why he can disassociate her from Akuze so easily given his earlier rather obsessive behaviour. His reaction in the end I find appropriate for a more emotionally mature Shepard who can deal with the demons of his past, but it does come a bit suddenly.
As for Miranda, by making TIM deliberately keeping Cerberus atrocities from her knowledge, this story shows how she can still believe in TIM without making her appear stupid. I like that. It also hints at a much more convincing reason to leave Cerberus that what the game gives us.
I like this new version. This is more how my Cyrus Shepard would have reacted, but now there is some inconsistency between his earlier behaviour and the latter. There is a need to explain why he can disassociate her from Akuze so easily given his earlier rather obsessive behaviour. His reaction in the end I find appropriate for a more emotionally mature Shepard who can deal with the demons of his past, but it does come a bit suddenly.
As for Miranda, by making TIM deliberately keeping Cerberus atrocities from her knowledge, this story shows how she can still believe in TIM without making her appear stupid. I like that. It also hints at a much more convincing reason to leave Cerberus that what the game gives us.
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#12108
Posté 21 février 2011 - 10:41
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I've already posted a review, jtav, but I just want to suggest some con-crit here.
I feel that you could have actually left the original ending intact, extend it even to have Shepard visit Miranda at the sickbay several days after the incident. That he seeks initially to keep a distance between them is entirely understandable, but that he eventually capitulates because he still cares about her, would then be in keeping with the more uplifting tone you intend for this revision. I keep thinking you could even keep Miranda's internal thoughts which were spiralling down into potential depression in the earlier version intact, only to have Shepard prove her wrong, thus creating a pleasant twist to the end of your current version.
I feel that you could have actually left the original ending intact, extend it even to have Shepard visit Miranda at the sickbay several days after the incident. That he seeks initially to keep a distance between them is entirely understandable, but that he eventually capitulates because he still cares about her, would then be in keeping with the more uplifting tone you intend for this revision. I keep thinking you could even keep Miranda's internal thoughts which were spiralling down into potential depression in the earlier version intact, only to have Shepard prove her wrong, thus creating a pleasant twist to the end of your current version.
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#12110
Posté 21 février 2011 - 04:45
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I just saw this image on a visit to www.strahotski.com, which made me laugh out loud for some reason - I can imagine Miranda being this intense in conversation but would probably need more provocation than Sarah does i.e. with Chuck being so keen to get involved but also being a hindrance by trying too hard (as in this episode).
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#12112
Posté 21 février 2011 - 05:23
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snfonseka wrote...
^LOL
I'm trying to think of captions for it, in funny picture/motivator style...which I will now open up to this thread if anyone would care to suggest any
#12113
Posté 21 février 2011 - 05:27
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GuitarShredUK wrote...
snfonseka wrote...
^LOL
I'm trying to think of captions for it, in funny picture/motivator style...which I will now open up to this thread if anyone would care to suggest any
How about...Being Sensitive: We get it. You don't have to do it every episode, Chuck.
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Posté 21 février 2011 - 05:29
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GuitarShredUK wrote...
snfonseka wrote...
^LOL
I'm trying to think of captions for it, in funny picture/motivator style...which I will now open up to this thread if anyone would care to suggest any
No Chuck, you can't take my Porsche and put Nerd Herd stickers on it.
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Posté 21 février 2011 - 05:31
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GuitarShredUK wrote...
snfonseka wrote...
^LOL
I'm trying to think of captions for it, in funny picture/motivator style...which I will now open up to this thread if anyone would care to suggest any
*de-lurks*
I LOVE a good suicide mission!
*re-lurks*
#12116
Posté 21 février 2011 - 10:14
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I'd rather have a caption for this old classic....
#12117
Posté 22 février 2011 - 01:39
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"Shepard? Shepaaard?"
"Will you please stop staring and... Oh, why do I even bother?" *Sighs*
"Will you please stop staring and... Oh, why do I even bother?" *Sighs*
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Posté 22 février 2011 - 02:10
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And another story. I had a productive weekend. :innocent:
Title: The Modern Prometheus
Pairing: Miranda/Thane
Rating: PG-13
Summary: The doctors say curing Thane is impossible, but Miranda has already raised the dead and survived a suicide mission. Disease is just another enemy that can be defeated.
Prologue
Title: The Modern Prometheus
Pairing: Miranda/Thane
Rating: PG-13
Summary: The doctors say curing Thane is impossible, but Miranda has already raised the dead and survived a suicide mission. Disease is just another enemy that can be defeated.
Prologue
#12119
Posté 22 février 2011 - 08:02
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http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6708374/4/
Let me add a huge thank you to everyone who's taken time to write reviews. That's what really makes this rewarding.
Let me add a huge thank you to everyone who's taken time to write reviews. That's what really makes this rewarding.
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#12120
Posté 22 février 2011 - 11:09
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I've read your story, drwells. Your scenario is interesting, but I'm still not sure what to think about your version of Miranda. Miranda as caring as you wrote her, that seems a bit off to me. On the other hand, the parallels between her being engineered and Shepard's remaking are well worth exploring.
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Posté 22 février 2011 - 12:37
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GuitarShredUK wrote...
GuitarShredUK wrote...
snfonseka wrote...
^LOL
I'm trying to think of captions for it, in funny picture/motivator style...which I will now open up to this thread if anyone would care to suggest any
No Chuck, you can't take my Porsche and put Nerd Herd stickers on it.
LOL
#12122
Posté 22 février 2011 - 02:01
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Ieldra2 wrote...
I've read your story, drwells. Your scenario is interesting, but I'm still not sure what to think about your version of Miranda. Miranda as caring as you wrote her, that seems a bit off to me. On the other hand, the parallels between her being engineered and Shepard's remaking are well worth exploring.
Thank you very much for reading and for your thoughts as well Ieldra2. I've tried to show her reservations about this role in a few words and thoughts (such as where she suggests to Jacob that her taking care of Shepard is no different than him cleaning his gun), but yes, her actions are definitely speaking more loudly.
The other parallel, of course, is that she's infertile (unless and until that's solved) and yet she's given life to Shepard. I've tried to downplay that aspect (to avoid squick). I previously had a line where she thinks that taking care of Shepard reminds her of taking care of Oriana (briefly, after rescuing her) - then I realized that was also a bad idea. In retrospect, it might have been better to scrap their romantic relationship and let this play a part in her motivation instead.
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Posté 22 février 2011 - 10:55
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Yes. That viewpoint never occured to me, actually. It's never been a factor when I play, neither with maleShep nor femShep, so it would've been interesting to see it explored in a fanfic. I tend to like scenarios that out-squick most people, because they challenge us to look at things rationally. But combining that angle with a romantic relationship would have been a bit much, even for me.drwells123 wrote...
The other parallel, of course, is that she's infertile (unless and until that's solved) and yet she's given life to Shepard. I've tried to downplay that aspect (to avoid squick). I previously had a line where she thinks that taking care of Shepard reminds her of taking care of Oriana (briefly, after rescuing her) - then I realized that was also a bad idea. In retrospect, it might have been better to scrap their romantic relationship and let this play a part in her motivation instead.
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#12124
Posté 22 février 2011 - 11:20
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The angle occurred to me some time last summer. She "gives birth" to Shepard via Lazarus. She tells you herself that it was her job to know everything about you. Your relationship is a thousand times more intimate than any parent-child relationship will ever be, even if you hate each other. I wish they'd done something with that besides bad banter about how Shepard was wearing a lot less than you were. Grr. Yes, I'm bitter.
I wish they'd split the character into two: the genius who raised the dead and the sexually alluring femme fatale.
I wish they'd split the character into two: the genius who raised the dead and the sexually alluring femme fatale.
#12125
Posté 23 février 2011 - 01:16
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GuitarShredUK wrote...
I just saw this image on a visit to www.strahotski.com, which made me laugh out loud for some reason - I can imagine Miranda being this intense in conversation but would probably need more provocation than Sarah does i.e. with Chuck being so keen to get involved but also being a hindrance by trying too hard (as in this episode).
*snip*
"No, Shepard, I will not go on a 'date' with Jack, in your cabin."
Now that's the story I'd write if I was feeling really brave (and possibly stupid, like hopping on a motorcycle and playing "chicken" with a rock wall).
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