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[jtav]

it's the little things: the way she slides her hand up and down his chest, the way she walks toward him, cocky and challenging, before the kiss. I want more like that, albeit not right before the end. That should probably be more serious and emotional. But before that, I want fewer sex scenes and more playfulness and flirting. Especially since the sex scenes will be fairly mild anyway.

[Td1984]

Ieldra2 wrote...

jtav wrote...
I'm reworking Matt because I'm paranoid. Are there any ME1 Paragon choices you think Miranda couldn't respect?

Perhaps the Council decision - saving the DA and the Council. Shepard's taking a huge gamble there. You can rationalize the decision by saying that there wasn't enough space for the whole fleet to attack Sovereign together, but apart from that, it sounds too much like gambling with the lives of the whole galaxy.
 

I've previously thought about sacrificing the Council, however, I always spare them out of concern that it will make ME3 overly difficult (the other races not trusting you and being very difficult to persuade them to help you).

[enayasoul]

jtav wrote...

it's the little things: the way she slides her hand up and down his chest, the way she walks toward him, cocky and challenging, before the kiss. I want more like that, albeit not right before the end. That should probably be more serious and emotional. But before that, I want fewer sex scenes and more playfulness and flirting. Especially since the sex scenes will be fairly mild anyway.

Totally like this...  I do like the playfuness and flirting. 
Mature sex scenes would be a nice touch.  

[jtav]

Not if they're as bad as what we have now. Do them right or don't do them.

[Vertigo_1]

I can see some playfulness and flirting during her mission,
and then some more when shes back on the ship.
Then mature sex scene (done right) before the final battle.

[MASSEFFECTfanforlife101]

Vertigo_1 wrote...

I can see some playfulness and flirting during her mission,
and then some more when shes back on the ship.
Then mature sex scene (done right) before the final battle.

Yeah

[goofyomnivore]

Ieldra2 wrote...

jtav wrote...
I'm reworking Matt because I'm paranoid. Are there any ME1 Paragon choices you think Miranda couldn't respect?

Perhaps
the Council decision - saving the DA and the Council. Shepard's taking ahuge gamble there. You can rationalize the decision by saying that there wasn't enough space for the whole fleet to attack Sovereign together, but apart from that, it sounds too much like gambling with thelives of the whole galaxy.

Little late and a few pages behind, but Saren was dead(as far as Shep could tell), and Saren is the only one who could open the Repear relay(the Conduit was the whole point of Sovereign allying with Saren). Sovereign was just a really really big pissed off ship at that point. I'd rather  have less Geth to worry about and more overall fire power(even if we  lose some Alliance ships) to fight Sovereign with. Compared to an all out rush from just the Alliance. Plus there were ships out patrolling near the Illos relay waiting for this attack(who were unaware of the Citadel being stormed). I imagine the Destiny Ascension crew/commanders/council could efficiently contact those fleets giving even more reinforcements to fight Sovereign with. Now that the relays were open thanks to Shepard.

I think either side can be argued as the pragmatic/rational choice. Way to many ifs and but this and that to account for.

edit; hate bsn formatting

Modifié par strive, 21 mai 2011 - 02:09 .

[jtav]

Excerpt:

We drove through the air without a word for a long time, Aunt Gwen navigating the traffic as if she'd been doing it all her life. Sometimes I forgot that she had always lived on Eden Prime and that she'd spent most of her life in Sydney. I wondered if she missed it. I would have gone crazy knowing I had given up having an entire megalopolis worth of art at my fingertips.

"I looked through your sketchbook while you were back there," she said without either preamble or a trace of guilt. "Is there something you want to tell me about you and Miranda Lawson?"

My brain just stopped for a second. I never let anyone look through my sketches unless it was for a class or something. And the sketches I'd been doing lately certainly weren't for class. Miranda and Claire might someday give me something fit for public consumption, but until then the drawings were mine alone. My way of exerting power over a woman who fascinated and scared thy **** out of me depending on what mood she was in that day. It wasn't like I just wanted to rip her clothes off. It would've been easier if that was all it was.

"I—it's not like that. She's just... interesting. And don't look at my sketches."

She made a noise of exasperation in the back of her throat. "Can you blame me? You spend more time drawing thing you do talking. And lately, it seems like it's the same two girls over and over. Who's the other one? Please tell me there something going on with her. That I could understand."

"It's Claire Eldfell."

The words came out before I could stop them, and I could tell by the look on my aunt's face that I should've kept my mouth shut. My aunt went as corpse-pale as she had the day Miranda Lawson had barged her way into our lives. "Claire Eldfell?"

My cheeks grew hotter. For the first time, I considered what my work must look like is someone on the outside. She would send me to that shrink if I wasn't careful. "Well, what I imagine she looked like before she died." I searched and fumbled for the right words, but my fascination with Claire had always been harder to explain that my fascination with Miranda, even to myself. "You called me another Eldfell. I guess you could say that I identify with her." It sounded horribly inadequate, but maybe it was enough for her. I didn't really want to think about my obsession with a dead girl, except that it was better than thinking about what Miranda wanted to do to me or waiting to go crazy again.

"Besides," I added with a smile I didn't feel, "beautiful woman who died young and tragically is one of the standard artistic subjects."

"It's morbid. Yes, what happened to her was horrible. But she's dead!" Her voice shook with barely suppressed emotion. "You don't even know anything about her. The girl you're drawing isn't even real. She's just a figment you dreamed up."

I stared at her; I couldn't help it. I'd never seen my aunt upset about anything. Exasperated, concerned, but never upset. But she was right. I didn't know anything about Claire Eldfell. I'd approached her the same way I would some mythological figure, giving her the features I thought she should have because of what she represented. I didn't know if she really had those golden curls I'd been drawing for over a month. "Any particular reason she pisses you off?"

"Besides you being obsessed with her? No."

I didn't have to look at her to know she was lying. Funny. Miranda wouldn't tell me why she hated my aunt, and my aunt wouldn't tell me why she was freaking out at the mention of a dead girl. Maybe it was time to do a little sleuthing. I was beginning to think I'd never figure anything out about Miranda, but maybe I could do a little due diligence. Stop drawing a shadow and start drawing the real girl. It beat thinking about the surgery I'd be having in a couple of days.

Modifié par jtav, 21 mai 2011 - 03:13 .

[ExtremeOne]

Thats why Miranda is a awesome because she was not shy about what she wanted after her LM

[MASSEFFECTfanforlife101]

Miri is a GODDESS

Modifié par MASSEFFECTfanforlife101, 21 mai 2011 - 03:33 .

[Ghost Yeti]

So I'm just wondering how long have shep and miri been dating? I'm asking because of the whole marriage issue that comes up in the forums lately and if it's been months or even a year then hey why not?

[SilentNukee]

I don't know if this has been shown before, but:

Full size image: http://fc03.devianta...dle-d3ec3db.jpg

...Lol, I love it!

Modifié par SilentNukee, 21 mai 2011 - 06:04 .

[Ieldra]

Nice excerpt, jtav! Your story seems to progress nicely. And you're making me terribly curious about those secrets.

Modifié par Ieldra2, 21 mai 2011 - 06:22 .

[LuxDragon]

@ SilentNukee:

I posted that and about 3 others from that artist about 5 pages ago now.

I like the latest one.

[jtav]

Well, it's a bit hard to keep that a real secret without cheating. At this point, the reader knows more than he does. Besides the fallout of the twist and how they deal with it is the important part.

[TMA LIVE]

Might be old news.

http://twitter.com/#...600022822715392

Modifié par TMA LIVE, 21 mai 2011 - 03:37 .

[MisterJB]

Miranda's dossier is full of contradictions. It was obvious that the Ipartner couldn't have happened during the mission since it goes Omega-Illium-Omega and you can complete Horizon, go to Illium and never return to Omega (unless it happened off-screen, ofc).
Then again, it couldn't have been before the mission because she uses SR2 in her username and, as Miranda stated herself, she didn't know what were TIM's plans for Shepard.
Still, good to know Miranda was not trying to get pregnant during a suicide mission.

Modifié par MisterJB, 21 mai 2011 - 04:25 .

[jtav]

Oh, thank God. My objection was always that she looked like she was trying to get pregnant during the mission. You know, the one she would probably die on. I think an obsession with natural conception is entirely in keeping with her history. I still don't want any kids in the epilogue, mind.

[Ieldra]

TMA LIVE wrote...
Might be old news.

http://twitter.com/#...600022822715392

Glad to hear he interprets that as most of us do. Such a relief. One worry less. Several others remain....

[jtav]

Please tell me Ely's theory is out and out wrong. I really, really don't want any miracle pregnancies in ME3 or the epilogue. I prefer no pregnancy at all, but I could live with Miranda either discovering or funding some treatment in the future. As long as the infertility was legitimate to begin with and she's cured via a medical procedure and not super sperm.

[enayasoul]

jtav wrote...

Please tell me Ely's theory is out and out wrong. I really, really don't want any miracle pregnancies in ME3 or the epilogue. I prefer no pregnancy at all, but I could live with Miranda either discovering or funding some treatment in the future. As long as the infertility was legitimate to begin with and she's cured via a medical procedure and not super sperm.

ROFL super sperm!!! :happy: 

I wouldn't mind if she was pregnant.  It could be hilarious and interesting.  I made a little joke about it in my story.  A baby on each hip.  One on Miranda's and Shepard's tearing up the battlefield with the babies giggling.  Funny humor, not that it'll happen just Shepard being the jokester to Miranda. 

I think Miranda is smart enough to fix herself along with Mordin help of course.  (that's how I'm doing it in my fic.  They are both working together to solve that little problem...    ) 

It'd be freaking interesting if the Shadow Broker was all wrong about Miranda being infertile.

[Td1984]

Can you get away with NOT giving Jack the files? I bluffed that I would give them to her, then once on the Normandy told her to get settled first. On my previous playthroughs, I just gave her the files immediately.

[Vertigo_1]

Td1984 wrote...

Can you get away with NOT giving Jack the files? I bluffed that I would give them to her, then once on the Normandy told her to get settled first. On my previous playthroughs, I just gave her the files immediately.

No...she needs the files to get her loyalty mission location
She will get the files regardless

Modifié par Vertigo_1, 21 mai 2011 - 10:32 .

[MisterJB]

She freakin' steals them. I have no idea how she did that. One would think Cerberus wouldn't leave sensitive information just laying around.

Modifié par MisterJB, 21 mai 2011 - 10:39 .