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[Sarah1281]

Oh, I also loved the whole "Hey, you look an awful lot like the King-" "Oh, not again!"



I can't just imagine he practically had a heart attack the first time someone said something about it. Being in close proximity to Cailan might not have been the BEST idea for keeping his identity secret. It really makes you wonder why he wasn't with the other Wardens...

[Raonar]

He was the junior and the army camp was too close to the front lines. Cailan and Duncan were coddling him.



Actually, I am quite sure Cailan asked for Alistair to be sent to the tower because he was well aware he had no heir.

[Raonar]

Chapter 10: To Join or Not to Join is now up of FF.net

The next one will finally explain what the sod Raonar went through in the Deep Roads, as well as what enabled him to break free of the corruption of Orzammar politics. Alim will also have a avery improtant role, as one can probably already guess.

Modifié par Raonar, 01 août 2010 - 10:11 .

[Raonar]

Chapter 11: I Am Honor is now up on FF.net.

Here is the absolutely scandalous explanation, I hope it's not overly unbelievable.

EDIT

Also changed a pair of the portraits on the first post.

Modifié par Raonar, 05 août 2010 - 08:06 .

[Raonar]

Ok, I seem to have a penchant for pictures so I added pre-metamorphosis Raonar and Leandra to the first post.

Now I'm thinking of starting on that Chapter 12 and getting the Ostagar battle underway. Still, I'd like to know if there is any particular character interaction you lords and ladies would like to see before all hell breaks loose.

Yes, quadruple post, but hey, they're hours/days apart.

Modifié par Raonar, 06 août 2010 - 07:26 .

[Raonar]

Quintuple POST! Amazing!

Anyway,

Chapter 12: The Calm Before the Storm is now up on FF.net.

And to quote a certain someone. "Do say something dear."

Modifié par Raonar, 10 août 2010 - 10:28 .

[Sarah1281]

Raonar wrote...
And to quote a certain someone. "Do say something dear."

But...but I did! A lot of somethings! It was just at ff.net. I have to wonder...is Gwen the only recruit Alistair likes at all at this point? Raonar he thinks is creepy, Alim is a blood mage, Theron terrorizes the guards, Faren and Kallian steal things...

[Lina]

And to quote a certain someone. "Do say something dear."

But were one to say something, you'd need to be present to hear it, no? Perhaps one should write something instead.

[Raonar]

Lina wrote...

And to quote a certain someone. "Do say something dear."

But were one to say something, you'd need to be present to hear it, no? Perhaps one should write something instead.

Ah, but I did....

Or do you mean i should start posting the entire story here as well? Regretfully, it would not exactly be practical, since its over 125K words long already, and is rated M, which probably isn't all that perfect for these forums.

Sarah1281 wrote...

Raonar wrote...
And to quote a certain someone. "Do say something dear."

But...but
I did! A lot of somethings! It was just at ff.net. I have to
wonder...is Gwen the only recruit Alistair likes at all at this
point? Raonar he thinks is creepy, Alim is a blood mage, Theron
terrorizes the guards, Faren and Kallian steal things...

LOL, chill, I know you did. I was half-joking because I noticed how the mods have been going on a thread-closing spree lately and was worried my multi-posts would somehow be seen as inappropriate, unlikely though that may be.

And to answer your question... Hmm, Alistair is apathetic to most of them, but doesn't exactly have any problems with anyone except Alim and Raonar. And he'll keep having issues with thm until the very end of the tale.

Modifié par Raonar, 11 août 2010 - 04:51 .

[Raonar]

Chapter 13: The Storm of the Century is now up on FF.net.

This is my take on what a blood mage can do when there is a lot of blood lying around.

[Costin_Razvan]

Don't you think you are making your Wardens TOO powerful?



Nice way of showing the Battle as unwinnable.....

[Raonar]

Actually, Alim is the powerful one, and really, it's only this once. There WAS a lot of blood there.



He isn't all that special in absence of a sea of blood.



And really, the battle IS unwinnable. Alim just stalled them for like, 5 minutes, tops. The darkspawn were still swarming and swarming.



I am a sucker for dramatic effect I guess.



And I deliberately made it look like it might not be so unwinnable,

[Costin_Razvan]

Where do you get the will to write so much though?

As for the battle unwinnable, that was meant as a compliment..

Faren's comment is proof of this: 

 But they were losing. Stone, they were being overwhelmed. They had exhausted almost all of their poultices and the soldiers were being cut down one after the other. Red and black blood flowed out and mixed with dirt and rain water. No doubt the ground would be black itself if there was enough light to actually make the colors obvious.

Now no offence, but only a blind fool would look at that battle and say it was winnable after this statement before the beacon is even light ( sure it does get light a few lines latter but ).

And no offence. Cailan does not ****ing deserve to live, so you better keep him dead

Modifié par Costin_Razvan, 14 août 2010 - 10:31 .

[Raonar]

Costin_Razvan wrote...

Where do you get the will to write so much though?

As for the battle unwinnable, that was meant as a compliment..

Faren's comment is proof of this: 

 But they were losing. Stone, they were being overwhelmed. They had exhausted almost all of their poultices and the soldiers were being cut down one after the other. Red and black blood flowed out and mixed with dirt and rain water. No doubt the ground would be black itself if there was enough light to actually make the colors obvious.

Now no offence, but only a blind fool would look at that battle and say it was winnable after this statement before the beacon is even light ( sure it does get light a few lines latter but ).

And no offence. Cailan does not ****ing deserve to live, so you better keep him dead

Ah, now I understand. Thank you then.

And as a reassurance, I'll post a smal spoiler here and say that Alim's last spell wasn't supposed to go off so horribly. Flemeth had a hand in the giant raving thunderstorm.

And I'll make sure to have Alim suffer some nasty side effects.

And yes, Cailan will die, and so will Duncan. So no worries

EDIT

Wait... did I just say you should be relieved that Cailan and Duncan will die?

EDIT 2

As for writing so much. I don't really spend that much time on the writing itself, since my job consists of typing all the time, so I type really fast. And the story has, more or less, already taken shape in my brain,  so it's just a matter of putting it in words and checking the thesaurus regularly, to expand my vocabulary.

Modifié par Raonar, 15 août 2010 - 03:16 .

[Sarah1281]

I just hope you don't get sick of it before the end. I usually get sick of a story by around 120K myself.

[Raonar]

Not much chance of that. I'm already past 120K and my interest is not dwindling in the slightest.

[Sarah1281]

Raonar wrote...

Not much chance of that. I'm already past 120K and my interest is not dwindling in the slightest.

Well that's just my interest limit. You could reach yours at, say, 300K and still not be anywhere near done.

[Raonar]

That's probably what will happen. But my interest is not dwindling, and I intend to keep experimenting with new ways of exploring emotions and all that.



In other news, I just got a review saying my story is being discussed on some other forums, and there was one poster who said it's boring how I just wrote out the machinations and told them to the reader.



Should I tell him that what I explained isn't remotely close to the magnitude of what I will drop n the heads of the readers later?



But I'll definitely keep it in mind for the future.

[Sarah1281]

I wouldn't worry if I were you. It's the Dark Lord Potter forums, right? Those are some of the harshest critics on the internet.

[Raonar]

So I've heard. The mere fact that one of them called it "the best I've seen" is definitely something, although the fact he/she said that makes it likely that he hasn't read Sundered Order.

Modifié par Raonar, 22 août 2010 - 09:25 .

[Raonar]

Okay, after my new chapter pulled off a disappearing act, I managed to post it.

Chapter 14: Surrounded by Wolves is now up on FF.net.

[Sarah1281]

I've got to say, that was probably the most sympathetically - and yet still in-character - Cailan I've ever seen and that chapter really made me upset about his death despite how inevitable it was...or maybe because of. Good job.

[Costin_Razvan]

Raonar wrote...

So I've heard. The mere fact that one of them called it "the best I've seen" is definitely something, although the fact he/she said that makes it likely that he hasn't read Sundered Order.

From the Dirt 1 and 2 are the best Fanfictions out there for Dragon Age, period.

I also think you wasted half a chapter with Cailan....but that's just me, and I hate him. One can portray his death however he likes, and I would still have the burning desire to kill him.

Modifié par Costin_Razvan, 23 août 2010 - 01:00 .

[Raonar]

@Costin_Razvan



Ah, well I guess I'll have to get started on those pretty soon. I have no delusions that my story is 'the best', not by far, so no worries there.



And I know you can't stand Cailan, but I do, just as much as I like Loghain in fact, but for different reasons, obviously. And I know it may be fairly moot at this point, but I'm quite certain you'll approve of what Raonar will do about Loghain when the time comes.



@Sarah1281

Thanks, it took a while to get that scene in order, since it's not so easy to write something about a character with so little screen time, but I based my view on him on Anora's description of him.

[Sarah1281]

From Dirt and its sequel are both horribly depressing. Basically, if something CAN go wrong then you know that it will.