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[Dark Lilith]

Hainkpe wrote...

The beauty of love shared can last a lifetime. I hope you don't keep your hearts desire secret for long. Best wishes.

thank you for the words of wisdom,they are appreciated

[Dark Lilith]

Turtles in the
Water,
Turtles on the
Sand
Turtles in the
Soup pot add
Some Brandy; it’s
Grand
 
Turtle eggs protected
For generations yet
To see
Look at the
Two headed turtles
Rolling around in
Glee
 
What happened to
The turtles you’d
Catch in places
Rare?
Oh so delightful
To give two
Headed turtles a
Scare!
 
Beach, dune or
Bog
You catch them
At their best
But with winters
Chill upon us
Damn! where’s all
The nests?

[Randomname1212]

Since we're all sharing poetry (well not really) I  decided to share one of my own:

All lies I hear,

All dreams I see,

Your face is but a shadow,

In the window.

To chase my love,

Pursue a dove,

Never in my grasp,

You’re behind glass.

I must not hear your false promise.

Modifié par Randomname1212, 30 octobre 2010 - 10:23 .

[Randomname1212]

This one is a rather pessimistic view on politics in general:

They lie to you with silver tongues,
As you laugh and dance and sing your songs.
You take in their honey-coated words,
As they cage you all up like swallow birds.
You are but sheep, and they the shepherds.
Lamb for the slaughter, food for the leopards.
You are blind to your fate,
Not learning ‘till it’s too late.

Modifié par Randomname1212, 30 octobre 2010 - 11:02 .

[Dark Lilith]

both very nice,thank you for adding them

[Randomname1212]

Its an honour. ^^

EDIT: I  just finished reading your collection, and you're a very skilled poet. I like your work.
I'm humbled as I'm just an amateur myself, but it seems you have a real knack at this.

Modifié par Randomname1212, 31 octobre 2010 - 02:40 .

[Dark Lilith]

Randomname1212 wrote...

Its an honour. ^^

EDIT: I  just finished reading your collection, and you're a very skilled poet. I like your work.
I'm humbled as I'm just an amateur myself, but it seems you have a real knack at this.

then I am honored and humbled by your praise

[Randomname1212]

Dark Lilith wrote...

Randomname1212 wrote...

Its an honour. ^^

EDIT: I  just finished reading your collection, and you're a very skilled poet. I like your work.
I'm humbled as I'm just an amateur myself, but it seems you have a real knack at this.

then I am honored and humbled by your praise

Ditto, heh I'm making a new one now. Might add it later, if you want.

[MrnDvlDg161]

And here I just found this thread.

It is nice to see a fellow word crafter, the petals  flaking away from your mind's cherry blossom tree are great representations of your world's view.

If I may ask --- if someone were to give you  4 distinct words, could you perhaps churn a verse from them? No, I'm not trying to get English homework done --- I am just always curious as to another writer's creative angle to things.

Unfortunately, I have a very sick piece of writing that has been stuck in the emergency ward for quite a while now because I can't seem to figure out how to cure it of its inability to find a conclusion.  Its a sad state of affairs really but when my muse train comes, it goes just as fast and there's no telling when it will come back for a long piece.

Once again --- keep your pen rolling away. 

[Dark Lilith]

Randomname1212 wrote...

Dark Lilith wrote...

Randomname1212 wrote...

Its an honour. ^^

EDIT: I  just finished reading your collection, and you're a very skilled poet. I like your work.
I'm humbled as I'm just an amateur myself, but it seems you have a real knack at this.

then I am honored and humbled by your praise

Ditto, heh I'm making a new one now. Might add it later, if you want.

please feel free to

If I may ask --- if someone were to give you  4 distinct words, could you perhaps churn a verse from them? No, I'm not trying to get English homework done --- I am just always curious as to another writer's creative angle to things.

I'm not sure if I could,I've never tried. I write from experiences,thoughts and my outlook on life and the world. To limit me to four words may not work for me.
Alos I appreciate your kind words

[Randomname1212]

Here's my next bit, I  just finished it and I'm feeling a bit nervous but here it goes:


I have forgotten the path of light,
Residing only in shadow.
I see with my eyes the beacon of your life,
Forever in the horizon.
On this grey land I tread on,
Like an eternal desert of ash.
I lost my way.
Forever to wander away.
The sun shines down,
Like a patient vulture.
Its dark gloomy ray,
Not a piercing spear,
But a dull droning glow.
Voices become distant echoes,
And memory becomes a blurry dream.
What road have I taken?
To come down this voyage,
Of despair and misery.
The reasons such,
I cannot ponder.
But I can speculate,
This is the way,
Forever shall it be.

Modifié par Randomname1212, 31 octobre 2010 - 07:58 .

[Dark Lilith]

Randomname1212 wrote...

Here's my next bit, I  just finished it and I'm feeling a bit nervous but here it goes:


I have forgotten the path of light,
Residing only in shadow.
I see with my eyes the beacon of your life,
Forever in the horizon.
On this grey land I tread on,
Like an eternal desert of ash.
I lost my way.
Forever to wander away.
The sun shines down,
Like a patient vulture.
Its dark gloomy ray,
Not a piercing spear,
But a dull droning glow.
Voices become distant echoes,
And memory becomes a blurry dream.
What road have I taken?
To come down this voyage,
Of despair and misery.
The reasons such,
I cannot ponder.
But I can speculate,
This is the way,
Forever shall it be.

very nice, Bravo

[Randomname1212]

Thank you, it was part of an assignment so I had to change it around a bit. But this is the real edited version.

[Randomname1212]

I've got one last poem, I think I've posted enough of my own work:

The devil plays his hand well on me,

For I am of hell’s kin reluctantly,

Once of good intentions, white heart, and speech uttered honestly,

Of wicked actions, lying tongue, and black countenance I now be.

In everlasting night, evil I see.

Of my awful destiny, shall I ever be free?

Lord give me peace, answer my plea,

And save me from my tragedy.

Modifié par Randomname1212, 01 novembre 2010 - 06:44 .

[marbatico]

Randomname1212 wrote...

I've got one last poem, I think I've posted enough of my own work:

The devil plays his hand well on me,

For I am of hell’s kin reluctantly,

Once of good intentions, white heart, and speech uttered honestly,

Of wicked actions, lying tongue, and black countenance I now be.

In everlasting night, evil I see.

Of my awful destiny, shall I ever be free?

Lord give me peace, answer my plea,

And save me from my tragedy.

very nice! i dunno why, but i love this kind of dark and powerfull poetry!

[Randomname1212]

Thank you. I'll stop posting for now, and let others share their work.

[MrnDvlDg161]

Oh it may or may not, I often use these as a mind gymnastic just to get the creative juices going.

Ok lets say --- " four ideas" and they are: A blade of grass, silk, fall ( as in season) and " a knowing gaze"

You may think of some for me to be fair about it if you like.

Modifié par MrnDvlDg161, 01 novembre 2010 - 11:22 .

[Randomname1212]

Bump, don't want this thread to disappear into the unknown.

[deleted]

The fluffy pigeons

Make a pleasant crunchy noise

When stepped upon

[MrnDvlDg161]

The Prodigy

By MjS



A triumph! A beautiful breakthrough!
watch the one thousand faces
Rise up and give off a human wave,
Exploding in deep elation for
The world and its days shall spark anew!



It’s the greatest feat assured
By a single mind,
Winning over even the most skeptical
Into true believers!



Famine --- has ended.
Peace – spreading across the land!
With sprouting neo renaissances
Bringing fourth cutting edge creations!



Why, even long dead masters of old
Are begging to be resurrected
In order to witness such a rebirth
With fresh mortal eyes!



And who is this stranger
This incorruptible knight,
Bringing back such treasures
To a world so akin to chaos?



Why its ----





“ Thank you,” said the nurse
“ Come this way please,”



And in five minutes afterwards
There was nothing more to be said
He/She never made it to be known.

Modifié par MrnDvlDg161, 05 novembre 2010 - 02:42 .

[Dark Lilith]

lmao...take is awesome!!!!!!

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 I gazed upon the heavens on a friday night
Only to see nothing but the starry sky
Instead of gratefulness for the absence of light
I felt bored out of my mind, and I'm not sure why

But as I shook my head in rhythmic motions
A subtle glow lit up the constellations
I sprang to my feet, expecting an alien ship
My heart started pounding, and I bit my lip

In the darkness above, who knew what species stirred?
Incomprehensible cultures, masters of thought?
I couldn't wait to be taken from this grey world
It didn't matter if they probed me or not.

As the glow intensified I held my breath
A new beginning... or maybe a painful death?
Too late for second thoughts, the clouds started to part
Like an inverse black hole, it felt better than art

I closed my eyes, awaited the tractor beam
Extended my arms in a gesture of welcome
Tears flowed from me as I gargled a primal scream
The first transcendent human I was to become

I stood there for a long time, in this awkward way
But there were no sounds, no lasers, no loading bay
No gleaming gunship, no interstellar vessel
Nothing but silence. Not even a small missile.

I opened my eyes, awaiting alien blokes
But it was not to be. Like a cruel cosmic joke
The sky was filled not with green men but falling snow
At the end of july, flakes a bright orange glow

The first one landed softly on my open palm
It did not melt, squirmed as if imbued with spirit
No doubt it was alive, but I remained calm
More stricken than scared by this... watchamacallit

All around me, the strange snow reached the fertile soil
The creature I held doubled in size, burst and split
I thought to myself : what the f*** is this s***?
I crushed the small thing into a puddle of oil

The ooze glistened on my hand, but did not sting
A useless act; the rest were also dividing
Into a growing bioluminescent mass
Panic filled me, but I slipped and fell on the grass

In seconds the snow had covered me whole
My clothes rapidly dissolved but I was intact
Moments before I thought I would play a role
On the galactic scene. Dreams are not based on fact

I was now doomed to serve as nutritious paste
To the barely sapient cells expanding at speed
I pondered my planet's fate, soon to be a waste
Nations engulfed by a merciless alien breed.

There would be no peace talks, no cultural exchange
For cells may only multiply and not reason
Our last vision will be radioactive orange
Erasing all achievements and all persons

Foolish was I to think I was the chosen one
Nature has other plans for me. I gaze towards space
which I will never see, the battles never won
The sadness is crushing, I've been put in my place

Death comes slowly, but I don't really care anymore
The critters have entered my body and filled my throat
My organs stiffen as they are choked with spores
In the vermillion ocean my body floats

Congestive heart failure : everything fades to dark
My consciousness remains as I dissolve quietly
Nothingness evades me ; I can still feel a spark
I sense each of my cells flowing in a different sea

I am one of them now, there's no fighting it.
Each snowflake was once part of a sentient being
Such as me. I feel myself growing bit by bit
and I smile.
There's a whole universe for the taking...


Any feedback appreciated! 

Modifié par deleted, 05 novembre 2010 - 11:52 .