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Vanguard1219 wrote...

@Sable:
For your music collection, might I suggest You May Call Me Father and The Greatest Jubilee from Bayonetta (don't let that stop you), Rising Empire by Immediate Music, Interstellar by Groove Addicts and Agressive Intervention by Future World Music. You already have damn near everything else I was going to throw at you :lol:


I already have Interstellar.  :P  Rising Empire I'd checked out before but for some reason I didn't feel fit the rest of the list, but I'm surprised I missed Aggressive Intervention, so that one's added.  Thanks!

edit:  Oops, top of page.  New screenies!

One of the few times Jessica is genuinely happy in Mass Effect 2: Garrus' triumphal entry into the comm room.

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"I knew a little rocket to the face couldn't keep you down."

Of course, she's also not buying his story about why he was hunting three whole mercenary armies:

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"Why were you trying to get yourself killed down there?"

And finally, sometime later when her hair finally starts growing out, Jessica makes it to the Citadel and picks up some Ice Brandy for Dr. Chakwas (why was that stuff in Omega instead of the Citadel, anyway, makes no sense), resulting in my favorite Shepface in the entire game:

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It looks really funny on Jessica for some reason.

Modifié par Sable Phoenix, 09 novembre 2010 - 02:50 .


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I might have to check out your playlist one of these days, Sable. I've also been wanting to make my own FemShep trailer but I've been stuck on finding an epic song for my video.

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Skyline_Stanza wrote...

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See, that's not what I imagine at all.  That picture, paired with the "Garrus looks like he's having fun again" screenshot below:

... played itself out in a little story in my head as the first time Garrus admitted to himself that he was in love with Kyrie, as follows:

"Garrus!"

Shepard's exclamation jerked the turian's attention across the walkway as if his head were on a leash, just in time to see his commander finish a mnemonic and duck back behind her bulletproof glass barrier as enemy fire frosted it with silver spiderwebs.  The asari vanguard that was attempting to flush Shepard out of cover yelped and sailed lazily into the air, arms flailing in a fruitless attempt to remain upright.

Garrus’ body responded to that single word instinctively: he had swung his rifle over the barrier at his right side, sighted down on the merc’s center mass and placed a single bullet through her heart before Shepard’s biotic halo even had time to fade.

As the body dropped bonelessly behind her, Shepard glanced over, caught his gaze with her eyes, and flashed him a grin like the morning sun on the water of Neerum Lake on Palaven before darting back out of cover, arms reaching forward to trace the graceful outline of a singularity…

… leaving Garrus transfixed, staring at Kyrie’s waist as it arched above her rolling hips, tilting her backwards to lithe her away from enemy tracers behind a convenient shipping crate, the low-profile armor clinging as tightly to her curves as a turian’s plates…

“Vakarian!” Garrus jerked in surprise; Miranda’s voice was ice water to Shepard’s warm contralto.  The Cerberus operative threw herself into Shepard’s newly vacated bolthole with less than half the grace of its previous occupant, her omnitool flashing briefly as some merc’s shields probably vanished in an orgy of lightning somewhere.  “Eyes on target!”

Dazedly, Garrus turned and propped his elbow on his forward cover.  Spirits! he thought, head spinning, as his fingers told his rifle to kill the human merc foolishly standing up to fire a rocket launcher.  Shepard?!


I love Garrus.  I love writing Garrus.  I love writing Garrus with Shepard, even if it's unrequited.


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Sable...you.....Kyrie....Garrus....unrequited love.......I love you, Sable. You write SO FANTASTICALLY WELL IT MAKES ME SPEAK IN ALL CAPS AND ITALICS

Phrases like: "behind her bulletproof glass barrier as enemy fire frosted it with silver spiderwebs" and "her omnitool flashing briefly as some merc’s shields probably vanished in an orgy of lightning somewhere" as well as "reaching forward to trace the graceful outline of a singularity…"

THAT is how I hope to write someday. You are a FANTASTIC writer, I love the imagery and wordplay you used. It's fantastic and I love and I could go on and on about it, but I won't because then it would make me look like a depraved loon.

Suffice to say, I wish I could paint a picture with words like you could. You're a master.


I really, really appreciate your words, but I'm not a master, just an aspirant.  For some reason, this particular vignette just flowed.  It was nearly effortless to write and even I am amazed at some of the word pictures I was able to paint.  Oddly enough, the part I'm proudest of is when Garrus is frozen watching Shepard running between cover.  There are a couple of subtexts going on there: I actually used an adjective as a verb successfully ("lithe", I was going to use "slithy" as an homage to Lewis Carrol but he said that was a combination of "lithe" and "slimy", and Shepard isn't slimy... I hope); it's the only time that Garrus thinks of her as "Kyrie", a very subtle thing but a signal that she's suddenly shifted in his conscious mind from pure commander to object of desire; and I also had to make her seem sexy from a believable turian perspective, but still impart that feeling of desire to the reader, hence the fixation on her waist, but describing it through arches and curves, and the comparison of her armor to turian plating (which was a perfect fit given the old gray merc armor suit that sagequeen modded in)...

... really, I just described the screenshots from Garrus' point of view and the scene wrote itself.  I would go back now to make some very minor edits, mostly in sentence structure, but I'm actually pretty solidly happy with the entire thing, which is a rarity.  So thank sagequeen for her amazing camera skills more than anything.

Regardless, to everyone who complimented the vignette, thank you very much, I appreciate it greatly and am really glad you enjoyed it.

Modifié par Sable Phoenix, 09 novembre 2010 - 02:40 .


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Finally, it's impossible to keep up with everything going on in this thread, but the screenshots and videos are just great and need to keep coming at a steady pace. I'm still constantly amazed at the level of creativity everyone in this thread has.

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Yay for Garrus fic-bits! I like how they managed to make Garrus a tragic figure without making him a cliche in ME2. He should have a lot more dialogue, but at least his arc wasn't something that ended up in total OOC'ness.

And speaking of our favorite turian, flycam has just revealed the true intentions behind BioWare's cinematic design, since...guess where Garrus is during the romance scene before femShep is walking out into the cabin?

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Guess dem Archangel infiltration skillz are all dat!

And Jane finally figures out why her clothes have been disappearing:

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Evil Twin!

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Chignon wrote...

Okay, here's a question for everybody:

What was your FemShep's proudest career moment?


Besides destroying Sovereign?  She felt sorry for Saren in the end, but she destroyed the indoctrinated remains of him, so she's happy that she's the Saviour of the Citadel.

Having experienced a colony attack before, she's proud of her work on Feros.  She knows what the colonists were going after, but she got there as fast as she could and disabled the geth transmitters and found adequate food/fixed the water for the colony. 

And she saved as many as possible when they were indoctrinated by the Thorian.

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I don't have the gift of words, so it's always nice to read all these pieces people write in this thread.

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fortunesque wrote...

Here's another question:

What is your femShep's greatest regret? What does she feel she could have done better?


For Madeline, it would have to be Mindor....for not saving her parents from death.  Even though it was not her fault, nor could she have done anything to save them (she would have been killed too), carries a deep seeded regret for not trying. She feel that, being her "Father's daughter" and after everything he taught her about being strong and how to fight, all se could do is watch....paralyzed with fear as her parents were butchered:

"Go on Maddy, what happened next?"

"Just then, my father comes running in yelling about something that is happening....just can't understand him. He has fear in his eyes.....something I had never seen in him before. My mother is scared too, and comes to find me...rambling....almost about needing to hide me..I...don't know why....I..I am terrified now as well....I can feel tears welling up in my eyes..."

"....After my mother puts me into the service tunnel beneath the house 5 Batarians kick our front door in and barge into the house...I can hear my mother scream as one of them grabs her and drags her into the living room.....I can hear my father yelling at them to leave mother alone, I know that is what he said... I just couldn't hear his exact words..."

"..I stick my head up through the service hatch in the dinning room so that I can see what's happening....I remember seeing one of them hit my mother really hard and my father jump up to attack the Batarian...the one that hit her.....then.....um....they uh....." *choking back tears*

"Then what happened..... to your father?"

"(tearful sigh) .they....the one he attacked, stabbed him with uh...a uh..large knife......when he uh..fell to his knees…another one shot him in the temple...and it splattered all over my mother…..who began screaming...and screaming, until....they uh..um (chokes back tears) ....they..(voice falters)..slit her throat..."

"Her blood...was everywhere, it ran like ...um...like..a river..as one of the Batarians drug their bodies out the front door.  That was the last time...I..I saw either of them (tearfully panting, trying hard not to cry).."

*long pause*

"..what happened after that Maddy...how did you escape?"

"....Don't really remember exactly how I got out, but I remember the tears....the lump in throat and in my stomach......and the pure, unbridled rage and hate …..that consumed me like a black hole.   I remember making it to the kitchen and finding the knife.."

"What knife?"

"...The 14 inch kitchen knife that my mother had been using just minutes earlier" I remember picking it up and...the rest is a little blurry"

"well what do you remember from that time?"

"......I just remember using what my father had taught me....and killed every last one of those f***ers…..who had killed my parents......I stabbed them, sliced and hacked at them until I was to weak to hold the knife anymore....or see through the tears, blood and rage.......It was the first time I had ever taken a life." (clears throat and wipes her eyes)…….I was a different person after that….I felt…different..”

Her feelings of regret are also strengthened by her mother's ultimate sacrifice, hiding her and "taking the fall" in the hopes that they would not find Maddy....something Madeline feels she needs to "earn" through her own life.

...Sorry, that was a bit "long winded" :whistle: That was a bit from my FanFic I'm workin' on, just hope it painted a good picture

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Chignon wrote...

Okay, here's a question for everybody:

What was your FemShep's proudest career moment?


For Lia it was Elysium when she saved the colony from slavers, pirates and the other scum of the galaxy. As a colony kid, Lia was scarred by the horror of interstellar slavery and she fought ferosciously to keep the civilians of Elysium safe. It was something she took rather personal.

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Delerius_Jedi wrote...
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Huh, flycam shows some of the strangest things...

Speaking of Garrus, I've been taking Morgan through another run-through as I gear up to start writing for "Chronicles". I just picked Garrus up on Omega.

This is one of those times that I really wish I wasn't playing on the 360, because after it happened I really wish I had a screen of it. Anyway, as the Blue Suns were running through the lobby of Garrus's base up the stairs both Morgan and Garrus, sniper rifles out, were at the wall overlooking the area picking them off. After Morgan used up the thermal clip in her Viper she ducked behind the wall just as Garrus was taking cover after a shot. The pair of the ejected their heat sinks at the exact same time.

And somehow it was adorable :lol:

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Vanguard1219 wrote...

Delerius_Jedi wrote...
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Huh, flycam shows some of the strangest things...

Speaking of Garrus, I've been taking Morgan through another run-through as I gear up to start writing for "Chronicles". I just picked Garrus up on Omega.

This is one of those times that I really wish I wasn't playing on the 360, because after it happened I really wish I had a screen of it. Anyway, as the Blue Suns were running through the lobby of Garrus's base up the stairs both Morgan and Garrus, sniper rifles out, were at the wall overlooking the area picking them off. After Morgan used up the thermal clip in her Viper she ducked behind the wall just as Garrus was taking cover after a shot. The pair of the ejected their heat sinks at the exact same time.

And somehow it was adorable :lol:


I know what you mean, Vanguard. Sometimes, I'll have this perfect screen, and just wish that I could share it with the FemShep thread...then the horrible reality come crashing down: I have an Xbox 360. *sigh*

Been reading up on some squadmate fanfics by Electric7. Really a phenomenal writer. I'm going to be asking a lot of advice from him/her about squadmate interaction for my fanfiction. Lord know I'll need it.

@ Sable: You're SO very welcome, my dear. You deserve much praise, IMO, for that fic-bit. I LOVED IT. Characterization was spot on and wordplay was fantastic. Wish I could just get mine to just...flow, like yours. One day. ;D

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Sable Phoenix wrote...

*snip*

Regardless, to everyone who complimented the vignette, thank you very much, I appreciate it greatly and am really glad you enjoyed it.


it was awesome. gosh... *shoves screenshot album at sable* write moar!

okay, joking (mostly), but it was lovely. thanks for sharing!

@ delirious - that is awesome

@ vanguard - Awwww... love in the trenches. 

@ fort - faith really is lawful evil, isn't she? i like her character so much though. she's always...right. spooky is what it is.

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Sable Phoenix wrote...

Regardless, to everyone who complimented the vignette, thank you very much, I appreciate it greatly and am really glad you enjoyed it.


Sable, do you have a fanfic page anywhere so we can read more of your writing?

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avalon30 wrote...

Sable Phoenix wrote...

Regardless, to everyone who complimented the vignette, thank you very much, I appreciate it greatly and am really glad you enjoyed it.


Sable, do you have a fanfic page anywhere so we can read more of your writing?


This. I didn't even realize I wanted this until now. I can haz wonderful fic-bits?

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avalon30 wrote...

Sable Phoenix wrote...

Regardless, to everyone who complimented the vignette, thank you very much, I appreciate it greatly and am really glad you enjoyed it.


Sable, do you have a fanfic page anywhere so we can read more of your writing?


I concur. (: Your style of writing is absolutely lovely, Sable.  I really think you should try writing more of vignettes.  Especially ones with FemShep and Garrus. (;

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@Mr. Vakarian

I like it. What happened to Maddy is similar to what happened to Holly. I'll have to write a fanfic about how it actually went down. My writing skills are mediocre at best, though.

I also agree that Sable's writing is wonderful!  I'd love to see more.  ^_^

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Aislinn Trista wrote...

@Mr. Vakarian

I like it. What happened to Maddy is similar to what happened to Holly. I'll have to write a fanfic about how it actually went down. My writing skills are mediocre at best, though.

I also agree that Sable's writing is wonderful!  I'd love to see more.  ^_^


Thank you kindly Aislinn! I'm glad you liked it!  That is only a small portion of my Fic that I am slowly making progress on...on my 5th draft now :?

Pfsh! I bet your fic on Holly would be great! ...you just have "go for it" and get it down on paper, then go back over it and refine it. There are plenty of FanFic nuts on here that can help too! 

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fortunesque wrote...

Here's another question:

What is your femShep's greatest regret? What does she feel she could have done better?


Horizon was a failure to Zorya.  It reminded her too much of Mindoir when she saw the colonists frozen in place and Collector bugs all around, and half the colony still got taken away.  Then she derped up with Kaidan and realized just how long she had been gone.  Then she discovered that TIM gave intel that lured her and put the colony in danger, which made her feel even more like shi*.

She couldn't do much about the colonists, but she wishes she had just gone after Kaidan and explained everything to him.

She also regrets letting the council die; even though she knows it was the best chance to tell the Alliance to focus on Sovereign, she did not anticipate that humanity would be the only species on the council and essentially rule Citadel space, nor did she think the other council species would be so willing to accept it.


And my other FemShep, Telse, doesn't believe she's ever failed.  She puts blame on everybody else except herself.  It's one of her flaws.

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Mr.Vakarian wrote...

Aislinn Trista wrote...

@Mr. Vakarian

I like it. What happened to Maddy is similar to what happened to Holly. I'll have to write a fanfic about how it actually went down. My writing skills are mediocre at best, though.

I also agree that Sable's writing is wonderful!  I'd love to see more.  ^_^


Thank you kindly Aislinn! I'm glad you liked it!  That is only a small portion of my Fic that I am slowly making progress on...on my 5th draft now :?

Pfsh! I bet your fic on Holly would be great! ...you just have "go for it" and get it down on paper, then go back over it and refine it. There are plenty of FanFic nuts on here that can help too! 


Mr. Vakarian and I have been working on developing his fic together. I've been giving advice, so if you'd like to ask for advice from either of us, I think we'd be glad to help! Posted Image

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fortunesque wrote...

Here's another question:

What is your femShep's greatest regret? What does she feel she could have done better?


As of ME2, my Ari Shepard's biggest regret is that she didn't make it onto the escape pod when the Normandy was attacked.

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Skyline_Stanza wrote...

Mr. Vakarian and I have been working on developing his fic together. I've been giving advice, so if you'd like to ask for advice from either of us, I think we'd be glad to help! Posted Image



I will second that!  Skyline here, has been a HUGE help to me with my Fic.  I would cetainly be honored to lend a hand If I can.

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avalon30 wrote...

fortunesque wrote...

Here's another question:

What is your femShep's greatest regret? What does she feel she could have done better?


As of ME2, my Ari Shepard's biggest regret is that she didn't make it onto the escape pod when the Normandy was attacked.


This.

So I guess her biggest regret is that she didn't install a remote-control escape pod that could have enclosed the pilot's chair and jettisoned him out of the ship at a press of the button.

but then again, i kind of think the collectors were after shepard specifically, and if she had made it out, they would have come after the pod she was in. i mean, they came back at the ship when she was in it, and why? it was going down - only 2 people were on it at that point. that makes no sense unless they knew she was there.

things that make you go "hmmmm...."

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Thank you again, everyone. No, I do not have a page for fiction, fan or otherwise. I did check FanFic.net but Sable Phoenix was taken already by someone who, from my brief scanning of his page, writes Harry Potter fanfics. I did make another profile purely for commenting on people's stories, but I'm not sure I actually want to use it for posting things. I have nothing to post anyway.

And yes, Shepard was targeted specifically by the Collectors; she even comments on it, "The same ship dogging me for two years?"

What I don't get is if they could track her so closely they knew she was still on the gutted and falling Normandy, why didn't they follow her body on its plunge down to Alchera and recovered her themselves?

And why specifically target her?  That still hasn't been given even a hint of exposition.  I'm deathly afraid that it will not be explained in ME3, relegating that particular (and particularly interesting) plot point to a mere footnote the way they did with the Lazarus Project as a whole.

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Skyline_Stanza wrote...

Mr. Vakarian and I have been working on developing his fic together. I've been giving advice, so if you'd like to ask for advice from either of us, I think we'd be glad to help! Posted Image


Thanks for the offer!  I'll be sure to keep that in mind if I ever get around to writing anything.  ;)

Now for fun stuff.  Here is my next video:

ME2 Paragon FemShep Trailer

This video was a lot of work.  I made it from scratch, as in captured all the audio/video/etc and synced it up.  I used audio envelopes, custom transitions and edited everything by hand.  I think it turned out pretty cool.  ^_^

I call it 'Paragon' because most of the lines FemShep speaks in the video are from those responses.  

It's also Holly Shepard's on screen debut!  Hope you guys like it.

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 @ sable - not true. what you posted here is (lowers voice) better than a lot of the stuff on fanfic. but even if you only post it here, we will all enjoy it.

ugh. i forgot that after krogans comes horizon. :crying:

can i just put this off until later in the game? why does it have to come so early? it's the only time kyrie will get to see kaidan and he'll be yelling at her. :crying::crying: <--twice for emphasis.

alright - horizons some other time. krogan for now:

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