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Ever After  (After the Credits Roll)

- Contains adult themes, violence and sexual references. Spoilers concerning DA:O, all DLC's to date, and the small amount of information we have officially received concerning DA:2.

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With Anora Queen, and the Dark Ritual ensuring her survival,  Ardinal was free to be with her love, Alistair. Or so she thought.


"There are no such things as happy endings, because nothing ends." Smendrick the Magician, The Last Unicorn"



Chapter 1 - Questions


"Did you honestly think we wouldn't notice?"

The tall wisp of a woman turned and continued to pace, her velvet robes brushing gently across the floor. A lone torch served to light the cold stone cell where Ardinal sat, bound to a wooden chair. Stripped of her armour and sword Ardinal hardly looked the picture of a Grey Warden let alone the Hero of Ferelden. 

These idignities could not rid her of the darkspawn taint flowing through her veins; the taint that enabled her to cut down an Archdemon, an act which should have killed her. Why it had failed to do so, was the question her interogator, a fellow Warden from Orlais so desperately sought.

A silver Griffon adorned Lady Secillia's robes, which for the last hour or so appeared to fly back and forth as she paced, holding most of Ardinals' attention. The relentless questions had proven tiresome and often painful when not answered, a Warden mage providing extra incentive to comply.

It had become apparent that inflicting pain on Ardinal's person was not going to extract the information they required.

"You are selfish, Ardinal!" Lady Secillia spat in a strong Orlesian accent.

"Do you know what we, the Wardens, could do with this knowledge? Think of the next Warden who must sacrifice themselves in order to kill an Archdemon? You survived! Your survival proves that there is another way!"

There was no pause for Ardinal to answer, Lady Secillia having already prepared the next stage of her interrogation. The silver Griffon disappeared into the darkness and was soon replaced by a familiar form.

Ardinal's eyes followed the contours of a her lovers torso and for a brief moment her thoughts were lead to a pleasant memory of a summer night; Blue moonlit hues, a hint of rain on the wind and the endless chorus of crickets. 

She had finally found him. 

"Alistair." she whispered.


Chapter 2 - Confrontation


"You knew it would come to this, Kadan." The Qunari said calmly, watching the Grey Warden turn and face him once more. She sneered when his words met her long elven ears. Her armour shone a hellish red and light from battle-born flames danced across her blades.

"Are you suggesting that I could see the future? My friend, I received many gifts when I became a Warden but I don't recall clairvoyance being one of them."

"Gifts?" The Qunari enquired pulling his great frame to its feet. His sword, 'Asala', once lost had been retrieved by the very being that stood before him. The Warden's dual blades had already tasted his flesh but could Asala, his very soul, bear to strike the one who had reunited them?

"No, not clairvoyance, but it appears that you have come to look upon your curse through different eyes."

The battle ebbed and flowed around them, sounds of blades meeting armour, axes searing flesh and shattering bones. The Qunari invaders hollered taunts and cries of victory over the Bas, the "things" they were to slaughter for the Qun. The Fereldans had offered fierce retaliation in defense of their homeland and, like their war dogs the Mabari, fought back with crazed abandon.

It was among this carnage that Ardinal, the Hero of Fereldan, had come face to face with an old ally. Sten had once mentioned the inevitable Qunari invasion to Ardinal; a matter quickly brushed aside and forgotten when there had been darkspawn to fight an Blight's to prevent.

"You sound like one of your Ashkaan Sten, but neither of us is here to be enlightened."Ardinal quipped.
The Warden was right. Sten belonged to the Beresaad and it was his duty to slay those who opposed the Qun. Neither of them would stand down this day; Only one would survive.


Chapter 3 - Denial


“You saw her, didn’t you?” Alistair insisted. 

Ardinal could hear the distress in his voice, his tone much like a Mabari pup, pestering his mother.
Three pints ago, Ardinal had regrettably informed Alistair of her recent excursion to the Korcari Wilds.
She hoped that in another pints time she would no longer regret her decision.
Ardinal directed her attentions to a surface dwarf who was kindly treating the patrons at the Golden Mane to a stirring dwarven ditty, hoping Alistair would do the same.

“Ardi” Alistair said softly taking hold of Ardinal’s free hand. Ardinal refused to meet his gaze. 

“Alistair. This is not the time, nor the place. It’s a tavern. Tavern’s are for making merry... and other such activities, which involve merriment of some kind.” 

In half a pints’ time, Alistair pulled Ardinal to her feet and proceeded to lead her outside. 

“Is this a better place? How about the time? Oh, and what’s this? No merry makers her..e!” A drunken dwarf had stumbled haplessly out of the tavern and into Alistair’s leg. The dwarf was promptly ushered back inisde the tavern, for which he did so happily with the prospect of more ale. 

“No merry makers; none. Zip.” Alistair concluded.

Ardinal looked down at her glass and wondered when it had been emptied . Ardinal groaned and was placing her glass on a window sill when Alistair grabbed her by the shoulders and forced her into the shadows.

Pressed against the alley wall, Ardinal could feel Alistair’s breathe on her nose. It tickled and she felt as though she was going to sneeze. She finally faced him; nothing could have prepared her for the look of desperation in his eyes. Her chest felt heavy.

“Plea..” Alistair began, but Ardinal hushed him placing her finger to his lips. 

“Never beg Alistair. You deserve better than that.”

The dark alley reminded Ardinal of a street she had often traversed back home in the Alienage. Memories sprung forth in quick concession. It was her wedding day. Ardinal recalled being beaten to the ground. Then there was Ostagar, and memories of Duncan instructing her and Alistair to head to the tower. Finally Morrigan sprung to mind, standing before the fire in Ardinal's private chambers at Castle Redcliffe.

I have no choiceNot then, not now. Ardinal thought solemnly. 

Placing her head gently on Alistair’s shoulder she could no longer deny him the answers he so desperately sought. 

“Yes. I saw her.” She said dryly.

“You have a son.”


  Chapter 4 - Reasoning


"No need to worry your pretty self, Ardinal." Leliana's voice was soothing if not strangely out of place. Ardinal had not seen her for years and could not remember why they now both sat beside Lake Calenhad listening to the chorus of birds and welcoming the waking sun.

"I may have done the same, if it meant that I could save the one I loved."

Ardinal sat quietly beside the bard, both adorned in the armour they had been wearing during the final days of the battle against the Darkspawn. The wind blew softly, shuffling Leliana's red hair to one side. Surely they were here for a reason. Was it to seek council with the First Enchanter? Ardinal strained to make out the Circle Tower but could not see it for a mist that rolled across the lake.

"Wait, what were we talking about?" Ardinal enquired.

Leliana let out a giggle. "We spoke of Alistair, and how much you love him, you silly thing."

Ardinal thought of Alistair and her body felt warm. "Yes I do love him. I couldn't live without him."

"So you doomed us all?" Wynne's voice was shrill and penetrating. Ardinal was no longer beside Lake Calenhad. Instead she found herself deep in a forest, the sounds of running water and the smell of ancient oak filling her senses. Wynne stood before her, a stern look on her face.

"Child, I can't believe you willingly helped Morrigan bring an Old God back into the world. None of us can even begin to imagine what that might mean."

Ardinal did not recall confiding in Wynne about the ritual, nor did she appreciate being reprimanded. What Morrigan offered was perfectly reasonable. Why did Grey Wardens have to die? Had they not sacrificed enough by drinking tainted blood in the first place?

"How dare you judge me? You gave up on your own son. I couldn't just sit there and do nothing when it came to the person I loved." Ardinal jeered.

Wynne gave a wounded look, but was quick to regain her resolve.

"I know in my heart that it was the right thing to do; A sacrifice I had to make."

"Why? Why were you denied your own child? It wasn't fair!"

"Life isn't always fair Ardinal, but it can be full of fine wine, gorgeous women, and a handsome man or two."

There was no mistaking it. Ardinal had to be dreaming. She now found herself beside a camp fire near a mountain spring. Zevran sat happily before her, sharpening his weapon of choice: a dagger of the Crow.

Ardinal noticed her head feeling cloudy, not unlike someone lost in sleep. She was certain that she had experienced something like this before.

"The Fade." Ardinal uttered softly, awareness creeping in.
 
Chapter 5 -Conspiracy


Alistair was not ok. Whatever they had done to him had left him badly bruised and beaten. His left eye was closed, swallowed up by puffy, purple flesh. Ardinal felt her heart sink. 

“So this is Orlesian hospitality, Grey Warden or not.” Ardinal murmured. 

“We are Grey Wardens first and full most Ardinal. We exist to fight the Darkspawn, and you know now that we are the only ones capable of defeating an Archdemon. There is nothing we won’t do to preserve our cause.” Lady Secillia proclaimed.

A smile crept across Ardinal’s lips. 

“I couldn’t agree with you more! In fact, there doesn’t seem to be anything the Grey Warden’s won’t do protect their interests. Alistair is fine example of that.”

Lady Secillia regarded Ardinal, supposedly intrigued.

“What are you babbling about Ardinal? Do explain what you mean.”

Alistair had lifted his head in response to Ardinal mentioning his name. He stared at her hoping to glimpse instructions for their escape.

“It took a while for me to realise, just how easily one could use the right of conscription to help the Grey Wardens gain power in Fereldan. Why Duncan recruited Alistair. Why Alistair was spared at Ostagar and his brother wasn’t. Why it was so important to have Alistair on the throne.”

“Now hang on a minute. No one knew that Cailan was going to die. Duncan died too, trying to protect him remember?” Alistair argued.

“Duncan must have known who you were Alistair. Why else would he recruit a Templar, and a terrible one at that?” 

“He said I had character!” 

“You were next in line to the throne. It was a gamble, I'll admit. However, luckily for them, Cailan was fond of the Grey Wardens. Even after Loghain advised against it, he still followed them into battle.”

“I can’t believe I’m hearing this? In the Makers’ name, are you trying to suggest that my succession was orchestrated by the Grey Wardens’?” 

Ardinal nodded her head wearily, watching the expression of Lady Secillia’s face, musing over her silence, wondering why she hadn’t interjected.

“I think I was recruited to protect you. In the end it was my choice to make you King, but I don’t think they were counting on an elf falling in love with a human. I don’t think they were counting on my survival either. You were going to be my King Alistair, and of course I would have sacrificed myself to kill the Archdemon. I would never have let you do it in my place”. Ardinal explained.

 “But I didn’t make you King, because it’s what you wanted. Well, also, because I kind of wanted to be with you, but in the end I just don’t think you would have been very happy.”

“Probably not.” Alistair added. 

“Ardinal, I think you may have lost a few marbles, if not the whole bag.”

“Why, Ardinal. I swear, you have thought up a conspiracy worthy of the courts of Orlais.” Lady Secillia spoke loudly, applauding as she knelt beside Alistair.

“But you don’t sincerely believe all of that do you? To speak ill of your kinsman in the Anderfels is quite insulting.”
Alistair cried out in pain as a knife slipped through his skin and into his stomach. Lady Secillia had driven a blade into his side. 

“’I’ve had enough of your conspiracies. You know the knowledge that I seek. I care not for your lover, nor for you. You have turned your back on your brethren and must be punished for your disloyalty.”

Further cries of pain erupted from Alistair’s lips as Lady Secillia drove the knife deeper. If she continued, and denied Alistair a healer Ardinal knew he would surely die. 
 
Chapter 6 - Pride

The sounds of battle faded. Ardinal felt a bead of sweat dribble down her brow. Sten was not moving and showed no signs of engaging her in combat. His hesitance would prove fatal if she were to move on him now. Anger began to swell up inside her. 

“What’s the matter? Will you not fight me Sten? Where is your so called honour?” 

Sten ignored Ardinal’s taunts. He was still deciding as to whether it would be wise to kill a Grey Warden. To kill a person he had come to respect. However, he sensed a change in her.

“Walk away Kadan. I do not wish to kill you.” Sten decided he would attempt to get Ardinal to back down. It was not like him, not like him at all to offer a peaceful solution to a foe, but this was different. 

“Walk away?” Ardinal suddenly advanced on Sten, raising her blades and baring down across Sten’s chest. Sten parried each blade, and using all his strength pushed Ardinal back.

“You are asking me to walk away?” Ardinal followed through with more strikes to Sten’s torso and neck. Using her twin blades she struck on opposite sides, and swiftly attempted to delve a finishing blow, swinging both swords in unison and down on across Sten’s body. Asala protected him from every blow, but Ardinal had gained some ground, her agility and speed proving too much for Sten.

Ardinal’s eyes looked as though they were aflame. Her voice grew deeper, louder and menacing as she made her final proclamation.

“I SPLIT THE SKULL OF AN ARCHDEMON! HOW DARE YOU RAISE YOUR BLADE TO MINE!”

Sten would hesitate no longer. His thoughts were filled of prayers from the Qun.

Struggle is an illusion. The tide rises, the tide falls, but the sea is changeless. There is nothing to struggle against. Victory is in the Qun.

Ardinal was not the warrior he once knew. Her pride had consumed her. He could see it now and there was nothing left for him to do but strike her down.

Sten moved on her quickly, wielding Asala with a new found clarity and strength. One of his swings managed to clip Ardinal on the shoulder. Her blood decorated the grass beneath them, but Ardinal continued to strike with quick and concise blows. Ardinal managed to stab Sten in the arm joints of his armour, causing him to loosen his grip. However, Sten was not to be underestimated, countering her blows with a deep cut to her thigh. 

Ardinal growled in defiance, continuing her barrage of swift and concise swings. Sten knew she would tire long before him, and kept parrying, buying his time. Ardinal circled Sten, hoping that her speed would catch him off guard and she would be able to stab him from the side. Sten followed her movements, his defense proving hard to crack. Their blades sung out as they clashed and then parted. They both positioned themselves for the death blow. 

“Ataash qunari!” Sten let out a tremendous battle cry and descended upon Ardinal. Ardinal,using her short blade, parried Asala to one side, evading his attack, but not without breaking her arm. With her other hand, and in one swift movement she swung her long sword down and towards Sten’s neck. 

Ardinal did not look back, but could hear rasping sounds as Sten tried to breathe. A red stream of blood had begun to trickle down his armour. He fell to his knees, dropping Asala by his side. Ardinal wondered if Alistair would have intervened had he been present.

“Vashedan” Sten whispered, as he died.


Chapter 7 - Decisions


“So when exactly, were you planning on telling me?” Alistair enquired.

“If you really want to know, I was planning to after another drink, or two;  then you had to bring me out here and be all demanding.” Ardinal retorted.

“Well forgive me if I was a little demanding. You’re not the one with a baby-god-thing to think about. A baby-god-thing, who also happens to be my son.” Alistair paused for a moment to repeat the word son under his breath.

“Where is she keeping him?” 

“I don’t know Alistair, she wouldn’t tell me. He is safe though.” Ardinal stroke her forehead, feeling the onset of a headache.

“But how do you know if he’s safe or not?” Alistair had begun to pace back and forth,excessive arm movements serving to convey his agitation.

“Alistair, I have told you everything I know.” 

Alistair paused and collected his thoughts.

“Now that I think of it why didn’t you take me with you?”

“Morrigan could have had a, um, post angry mother moment or something. Plus she warned us to stay away.”

“But you took the dog Ardi. The dog!” 

Ardinal became increasingly distressed. The ale loosened her tongue.

“Alistair. It’s done. We’re free to be together. The baby is fine. Morrigan kept her word. Isn’t that enough?” 

“You don’t understand. It’s my son Ardinal. I don’t know, I just feel... I feel like I’ve abandoned him.”

“Oh Maker help me.” Ardinal exclaimed.

Oh no! Can’t abandon him like daddy abandoned me!” Ardinal said mockingly.

“Don’t use your abandonment issues as an excuse Alistair. We were all in agreement. I had to deal with you being inside that **** for one night, so you can just deal with not seeing your son.” The words left a bad taste in her mouth and by the look on Alistair’s face, had hurt him terribly.

“I did it to save us, because neither of us could bear losing the other. Ardinal you wanted me to do it!” Alistair held his ground.

“You’ve been following orders all your life Alistair, of course you were willing to do it. Duncan tells you to be a Grey Warden, oh look, you become a Grey Warden. I give the ok for you to run away from being King, and fancy that, no King Alistair.”

“So I’ve never made one decision on my own?”

“Don’t ask me Alistair! Decide whether you have ever made decisions by yourself.... yourself.” Ardinal slumped to the ground no longer sure of her intent. 

“Well then. How about this for an 'Alistair make your own decisions' decison?” Alistair turned away.

“I’ll find Morrigan and see my son. Even if it is just the one time, I would like to see him.”

Alistair started leaving the dark alley way.

“Wait.” Ardinal cried, following him into the tavern. 

“Hang on.” She pleaded as he packed.

“Please Alistair!” She begged as he left the Golden Mane.

'Don’t follow me.' was the last thing she heard him say. [/b]


Chapter 8 - Revelation


“This is not real. Fade Zevran, you are still just as sexy as real Zevran, but you are not Zevran.” Ardinal had come to realise that she may have ventured into the fade, and that the Zevran she was currently talking to was an illusion conjured up by a demon.

“I don’t believe we are in the fade Ardinal, but if that’s what floats your boat, you are welcome to spirit me away.”

“I’m not spiriting with anyone right now.” Ardinal stood up, and tried to focus on her surroundings. The same mist that covered Lake Calenhad could be seen in the distance on all sides. She returned her attention to Zevran, to find he had disappeared.

“Typical’ Ardinal muttered, as the world around her grew darker.

“Tis not the fade, Ardinal.” Morrigan’s voice sounded behind her.

Ardinal turned to find Morrigan standing before a fireplace, and the darkness had become the chamber Ardinal had stayed in during her last night at Castle Redcliffe. Morrigan had met her there, confessing her real intentions, offering up a plan for a dark ritual which would keep whoever killed the Archdemon from having to die.

“No, it’s the fade. I’m now talking to fade Morrigan. And I bet fade Morrigan is still a-know- it- all ****.” 

Morrigan had sat herself down on the bed, much like the way she had that night. When Morrigan moved she often slinked like a cat, and Ardinal often wondered if Morrigan had spent time as a cat roaming the wilds, stalking her prey.

“I am just as you remember me to be. Although given your thoughts towards me of late, tis unlikely that my visage will be represented kindly”

“I remember your offer. What you did to save Alistair and I. However, if you hadn’t told me.... if only you hadn’t made me...”

“Made you? T’was not I who forced you. You always had the choice.”

“Did I?” Ardinal felt heavy again, and her legs began to give way.

“No! No I didn’t! I had to. It was the right thing to do, for Alistair...”

“For me!” A familiar voice echoed around the darkened chamber. For a moment Ardinal could not bring herself to look. 

“You know it’s true. Your brain wasn’t the only organ you were thinking with that night.”

Ardinal looked up to see a young, city elf, adorned in Grey Warden armour. Fade Ardinal leaned closer, a smirk on her face.

“You had to? Are you kidding me? You wanted him, and nothing else mattered. You didn’t care about the possibility of bringing a being worse than an Archdemon into the world.”

Ardinal steadied herself and met fade Ardinal's gaze. 

“Maybe the old god will be a good thing. I was willing to take that gamble. Yes, I was willing to do it. I did everything I could to save the one I loved.” 

“You believed you were doing the right thing?” 

“Yes. I had to. It was the only way I could save my people from the Orlesians!”

Ardinal froze. It was no longer her voice. Fade Ardinal had been replaced by a great mirror. Inside was a man. He stood, looking frozen and dazed. Ardinal took a step back, and to her horror, the man did so as well. 

A reflection. Ardinal thought. But not mine.

Ardinal peered into the mirror, and the image of Teyrn Loghain did the same. His eyes were as wide and bewildered as hers. The man she had killed shared her reflection, and with it came a sad and terrible revelation.

“Yes. I wanted to. I wanted another chance. To have the life I was denied when my betrothed was murdered.” Ardinal began.
“I forged my way, becoming more than an elf, more than a woman, and then I found Alistair. I wanted to be free of the taint. One of us was going to die. I didn’t want it to end that way.”

Teyren Loghain began to fade until only Ardinal, the mirror and the darkness remained.

 “So I risked the lives of countless thousands. I forced Alistair to lay with another woman, and bear a child he would never meet.”

By the Maker, what have I done? Ardinal sobbed and the darkness threatened to swallow her whole.

Chapter 9 - Confession

“An old god...” Ardinal cried, watching Alistair writhe in pain. 

“I made Alistair have sex with an apostate, in order to conceive a child. This child would take on the soul of the old god that was released when I killed the Archdemon.”

“What?” Lady Secillia eased her grip on the knife embedded in Alistair’s side.

“You heard me. Alistair and I made a deal with an apostate, which ensured our survival when taking down the Archdemon.” 

“Oh I see. So this apostate had magic strong enough to draw the old gods soul to her womb?” Lady Secillia could not believe that such a mage could exist. She turned to the Warden Mage for a sign of reassurance but was met with a look that shared her disbelief.

“So unless there is a way to repeat the ritual, I don’t think future Wardens will have the same luxury.” Ardinal continued to work on loosening the ropes around her wrists.

Lady Secillia looked disappointed. Her cold, blue eyes regarded Ardinal with disdain. She looked up at the Mage, who nodded and a silent message passed between them.

“Well, I believe you Ardinal. Your attempt to throw me off with your outrageous theory regarding Alistair has not worked I’m afraid. It is a common tactic, one in which I am well versed.” Lady Secillia rose, and to Ardinals relief, she left the knife in Alistair’s side. At least his wound would stay closed for the moment.

“Also...” she continued placing her had under Alistair’s chin.

“This silly little thing confided in me, telling me of how he was trying to find his son. I had tracked you both for some time; however, I knew Alistair would be easier to take under my wing. Alistair you are so loyal, so trusting of your fellow Grey Wardens.” Secillia let out a giggle, not unlike Leliana’s. 

Ardinal was reminded of the bard, a former companion, and her tales of intrigue within the Orlesian court. 
Secillia began shedding her robes, revealing the black leather armour she wore tightly around her frame.

“I find it interesting that a Warden would risk using dark magic to summon something so ancient, so evil.”she continued.
“Although, I have always thought the Grey Warden’s to be hypocrites about blood magic. For instance, the blood you drink during your Joining...”

“So what was your purpose, Secillia?” Ardinal interjected. 

Please hang in there Alistair. Ardinal prayed, watching Alistair, his complexion turning pale.

“My employers required information. They wanted what you wanted, a world where Grey Wardens are not relied upon to defeat a Blight.”

“But we’re so dashingly handsome! Well at least I am, can’t really speak for the rest.”

Magical energy fizzled and cracked, a blue aura enveloped her and Alistair, and Ardinal knew Anders had erected a protective shield.

The mage who had accompanied Secillia chanted, a great flame erupting from his hands. The room glowed as magical energies collided, fire meeting ice in an explosion of steam and heat.

“Anders!” Ardinal called out to her fellow Warden, a mage she had personally recruited into the fold.

A familiar form appeared beside her, and Ardinal watched as her Mabari hound set himself upon the mage, his great jaws clamping down on the mages throat. The mage, attempting to let out a shriek could only muster a wet gargle as the hound ripped out a chunk of his wind pipe.

With all her attention on her hound, Ardinal did not notice as Secillia’s form melted into the shadows. 

Where is she? Ardinal strained to detect any signs of movement, but Secillia had concealed herself well.

“Anders! There was a bard. She’s cloaked herself.” Ardinal informed Anders as he entered the cell. 

Anders was a glow from the magical barrier that surrounded him, and was about to focus his attention on Alistair when Secillia appeared beside him, pulling a blade from her belt.

Anders managed to parry her strike with his staff, but a swift kick from Secillia sent him toppling backwards. Recognising the new threat, Ardinal’s Mabari dashed towards Secillia, bearing his teeth and letting out a paralysing howl. 

Secillia dropped a small vile which burst at her feet. A yellow gas spilled out, causing the hound to whimper and withdraw. Anders, still on the ground chanted quickly, conjuring up a wind in order to expel the toxic mist. The room cleared, and Secillia was nowhere to be seen.
 
Chapter 10 - Reminiscing

((WARNING - FAN DRIVEN SEX SCENE APPROACHING. READ AT YOUR OWN PERIL.)

"Your dinner, Ser Warden Commander..." Alistair placed a bowl of hot stew in Ardinal's hand.

"Let me guess. Stew?"

"Of course my lady and a fine Fereldan stew at that." Alistair scoffed, between mouthfuls.

"Of course, your highness..." Ardinal provoked Alistair and was rewarded.

"No King here I'm afraid. Just me, an Alistair... Oh and a dog I suppose, and the moon and some fine Fereldan stew."

The moon was full and everything it touched was bathed in a brilliant blue. The wind blew gently, hinting at rain, although few clouds littered the sky. It was summer in Fereldan, and the night was accompanied by an orchestra of crickets.

"So, they want us at Amaranthine aye? A little paint and less Howe inspired decor and I think the place would do up nicely." Alistair chortled as he scraped his bowl, hoping to dig out any surviving scraps.

"Yes, I guess so. It will be strange for me though, to preside over an estate..." Ardinal said solemnly.

"You'll be fine. Nobles can't be any scarier than Darkspawn, or the Archdemon." Alistair reasoned only to remember the fear he felt when entering the lands meet.

Ardinal watched as her hound slept soundly by their tent. Ardinal was to lend her hound to an Ash Warrior soon, for the purpose of breeding a new generation of pure breed Mabari pups.

Just like Alistair. I practically breed him with Morrigan...
 Ardinal's thoughts tormented her.

"What's wrong?" Alistair sensed her unease. Ardinal sighed. She knew "nothing" would not suffice.

"I'm just tired. So much has happened..."Ardinal felt a comforting hand on her shoulder. It had been sometime since she had felt her lovers touch, and she wanted nothing more than to bury herself in his embrace.

"Um... we don't have to do anything... if you just want to sit..."

Ardinal rolled onto her back, and playfully began to encourage Alistair with her legs, goading him until his hips and shoulders were aligned with hers.

"Don't be coy Alistair."

Removing their armour and garments was still a cumbersome affair and much like their first night together Ardinal would take the lead, assuring Alistair that he could touch her, even in her most intimate places.

Ardinal felt a twinge of guilt when her manoeuvring of Alistair mirrored the more experienced approach by Zevran, the Crow assassin she had spent a night with long before her feelings for Alistair had blossomed.

At least one of us knew what we were doing.
 Ardinal mused.

Her excitement grew when Alistair surprised her, his fingers venturing inside without being prompted. Alistair smiled, enjoying the ensemble of noises from his love.

She's so small
. Alistair thought. He felt as though he were seeing Ardinal for the first time, her delicate elf features more apparent than ever. Her body shook; she squirmed and this amused him to no ends.

For a long while, Alistair and Ardinal discovered the numerous ways one could please their lover. The crickets grew louder, a sense of urgency overwhelmed them, and both welcomed their timely unison.

Ardinal bit down on Alistair's shoulder, but soon lost purchase as his rhythm increased. Their enthusiasm caused a minor slip up (or out being the case) but after the riot of laughter that followed they were united once more.

The sound of crickets, the smell of impending rain and Alistair bathed in blue. Tears fell from Ardinal's eyes, droplets skimming off her cheeks.

"Wait, am I hurting you? Oh gods I'm hurting you!" Alarmed, Alistair stopped moving.

"Huh? Oh no, Alistair, these are happy tears! Happy tears!" Ardinal gasped and urged Alistair to keep going before the feeling rising between her hips began to fade.

Happy tears.
 Ardinal awoke to find she had been crying. Dog stirred, aware of his master's distress.
Ardinal had fallen asleep beside her hound, embers from her camp fire glowing dimly. She had travelled for many months in search of Alistair, following leads that would hopefully reunite them.

Groggily, she stoked the fire. The wounds she had sustained from her confrontation with Sten had finally healed, but stiffness still remained. Dog's ears twitched and something cracked within the underbrush to their right. Ardinal, convinced that someone had been following her, prepared herself to find out whom.

<3CONTINUED BELOW[smilie]http://social.bioware.com/images/forum/emoticons/heart.png[/smilie]

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I don't think I'll ever get the hang of the formatting for this forum. :(

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Now that is one big wall of text there O.O

I can't read it all until I finish DA:O (I recently bought the Ultimate edition) However I did read your first 3 paragraphs to get a sense of your style... they are very well written. When are you going to be writing the next "Dragon Age" book? :P

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I've spent a bit of time trying to space the text a bit. Hopefully that looks a little better. :) Thank you very much for taking the time to read my fanfic and I'm glad you enjoy my style. I've actually read the first book... I also have fondness for Warhammer novels and I'm hoping to draw inspiration from their writing styles. Enjoy your Ultimate Edition. :)

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This is really good. Even if all the jumping around confuses me. ;)

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I'm glad you like it. :) I'm experimenting with the jumping around but I will do my utmost to make sure it all ties together at the end. :D

I'm drawing inspiration from the Space Wolf series of Warhammer 40k novels.

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<3EVER AFTER CONTINUED...<3

Chapter 11 - Reunion

“He’s doing a lot better...” Anders assured Ardinal. They both sat at a table in the Golden Mane, Sir-Pounce-A-Lot sitting contently on Ardinal’s lap.

“Although, I guess now that I’ve met him, I can forgive you for not falling for my alluring charm.” Anders concluded.

“Entrapment via alluring charm...?”

“How else would I pull the ladies? First, I dangle a bright shinny thing in front of her, and then...”

Alistair walked gingerly down the tavern stairs. Dog padded over to him, letting out a concerned whimper.

“Hello boy.” Alistair scratched Dog under his great muzzle, Sir-Pounce-a-Lot offering a meow of greeting before returning to the strenuous task of warming Ardinal’s lap.

Ardinal focused on the buzzing sensation in her hand, as her new found lap companion purred against her skin.

“Nice cat.” Alistair commented.

“Yes he’s Sir-Pounce-a-Lot the brave, fearless hunter of all things squeaky, and a gift courtesy of our Commander.”

“Anders.” Ardinal groaned, trying her best not to meet Alistair’s gaze.

“It was a lovely gesture. The bonus is that he is still very much alive. Some close calls though. Wasn’t there Sir-Pounce-a-Lot? Yes there were! You nearly died...”

“I didn’t get a cat.”

“Alistair, you didn’t get a cat because the only one on hand at the time was possessed by a demon.” 

There was a long pause. Dog licked Alistair’s hand, Sir-Pounce-A-Lot continued to purr. Alistair and Ardinal regarded one another briefly, adverting their eyes in unison.

“So this is how it’s going to be...” Anders commented.

Before either could reply, Anders suggested breakfast before venturing forth.

“Here Alistair, have a top up heal, you still look a little worse for wear.”

Anders casually flicked his wrists, and a golden light enveloped Alistair’s waist.

"Um... right oh...Thank you.” Alistair responded to the  golden glow, his arms lifted nervously.

It occurred to Ardinal that Alistair really did look a little scruffier than she remembered. A five o’clock shadow invaded his neatly trimmed goatee, and his hair had obviously evaded the attentions of a brush. Ardinal resisted the urge to straighten his locks, but months of separation had dulled all sense of familiarity.

Alistair felt alien. Her heart had skipped a beat upon seeing him in her holding cell, but now she felt as though a great, invisible canyon stood between them.

Give it time. Ardinal concluded, though deep inside she wished there was a means to skip the “give it time” ultimatum.

“Oh right. Re-enforcements aren't far away. We should meet up with them just in case there are more of those false Wardens floating about.”

Anders explained how he had ridden on ahead, leaving three Wardens from Amaranthine in his stead at an outpost not far from the Golden Mane.

“That woman is still out there. How many accompany her I don’t know. There was the mage and another associate who kindly told me where Alistair was before I killed him...”

Alistair flinched as Ardinal rose from the table. The invisible canyon grew deeper. Sir-Pounce-a-Lot mewed and stretched having been dropped to the floor.

“Well, I say it’s time we were off.” Anders announced placing his furry companion in his nap sack.

“I guess you assume that I coming with you.” Alistair interjected, still seated at the tavern table.

Ardinal regarded Alistair with a pained expression, one he was not prepared to see and quickly surrendered to.

“That is to say... your assumptions are correct... as I am most definitely walking in a similar direction.”

Ardinal lead the way, ignoring the feelings of de ja vou that leaving the Golden Mane inflicted.

 “Kitty goes meow! Kitty goes meow!” Anders prattled, amusing himself as they marched across an open field.

“Actually, why do cats go meow? Who deemed it meow instead of, say murr or marrow?”

“Marrow sounds stupid.” Alistair sniped.

“You sound stupid.” Anders snapped.

“Boys...” Ardinal had considered whether Anders and Alistair would come to grief if they were ever to meet.

“Let’s just pretend that I’m the alpha male for the moment, to save future posturing.”

“Commander, I could never imagine you as a man, not with those ... ears.”

Despite herself, Ardinal let out a giggle. Laughing at Anders served only to ruin her attempts to negotiate, Alistair resigning from the conversation to glare at Anders who was grinning mercilessly.

Dog’s ears sprung forward, something catching his attention.   A distant glint of light strayed into the corner of Ardinal’s eye.

Ardinal leapt beside Anders. A whistling sound accompanied an arrow as it struck Ardinal in the shoulder.

“Ardi...” Horrified, Alistair drew his sword and pulled his shield from his back.

Despite her injury, the Commander in Ardinal sprung to life.

“Anders, shield your-self then prepare a blizzard. Alistair, defend Anders.” Ardinal barked drawing her short sword.

Alistair deflected a further arrow with his shield, and all three strained to pin point their attacker’s location.

An archer was firing on them from a grove of trees on the far side of the field.

“GET DOWN!” Pulling out the arrow’s stem, Ardinal met the dirt as wave of fire washed over them.

Steam hissed as the fire met a gust of ice and snow. Anders had narrowly conjured up a snow storm.

Ardinal rose, signalling her hound.

“Cover me!” she ordered, grabbing the scruff of her Mabari’s neck and leaping upon his back.

A man adorned in plate mail and wielding a long sword charged towards them. Ardinal held on tightly as her hound picked up speed and raced to meet him.

Anders and Alistair could only watch in awe as Ardinal was flung from her hounds shoulders the moment he made contact with their aggressor.  

The female mage who had reined fire down around them screamed as Ardinal landed in front of her.

Drawing her second sword, Ardinal assaulted the mage in a fury of speed and steal, spilling the contents of her gut whilst removing her head.

Anders sought out the archer while Alistair used his shield to deflect the onslaught of arrows.

“More than one...” Anders another archer, one drawing his bow at Ardinal.

Lifting his staff to the sky, Anders sent a trail of ice towards the archer, hoping to freeze him in place.

The archer was not easily deterred and managed to shoot off an arrow before his body and bow frosted over. Ardinal winced as the arrow sliced through her calf muscle.

“Another arrow...” Ardinal turned her attentions to the archers, watching Alistair knock one to the ground as he haplessly drew a dagger.

Alistair drove his sword between the archer’s ribs, blood showering his armour. Anders took care of the frozen archer, reducing him to a pile of flesh and bone with a lightning spell.

“Keep sharp. Secillia is still...”

Ardinal felt a sharp, burning pain erupt from under her rib cage. Blood seeped through her armour where the arrow had pierced her shoulder, merging with a stream of blood which emptied from her sides. Secillia sunk her
blades in up to their hilts, pockets of pain bursting as metal tore through Ardinal’s flesh.

“Let me leave and you can have her back.” Secillia bargained from behind Ardinal.

“Kill her and your death will not be quick!”

Alistair, filled with rage stepped towards Secillia, Anders reluctantly raising his arm across his path.

“Don’t.” Anders cautioned. Dog growled and arched his shoulders, his muzzle dripping wet with blood.

“I have had to make my escape more than once Ardinal. This will be the last time.” With a nudge from her blades Secillia persuaded Ardinal to move.

Ardinal could feel blood pooling inside her. It was a strange and terrifying sensation. Secillia had requested that she drop her blades, and Ardinal regarded them solemnly at her feet.

The Hero of Fereldan can’t die like this.

“Are you an Archdemon?” Ardinal choked.

“What?” Secillia slowed.

“I said... “Are you an Archdemon?” Ardinal repeated.

Secillia laughed.

“You must be delirious from the pain. No Ardinal, I am not an Archdemon.” she scoffed.

Ardinal lowered her head and steadied her legs.

“Then ****, why did you even bother?”

Bone snapped as the back of Ardinal’s skull met Secillia’s nose. Instinct brought Secillia’s hands to her face, which was enough time for Ardinal to pull a blade from her side, pivot and return Secillia’s dagger via her thigh.

Secillia reached for her belt only to have her chin meet steal, Alistair driving his shield into her jaw.  Secillia was still scrambling for her toxic vials when Alistair’s blade slid through her body, the tip of his blade bursting from
her back. A jet of blood erupted as Alistair retracted his blade and she was dead.

<3MOAR BELOW. <3

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I finished my playthrough of Dragon Age so I could now safely read through your story without the fear of spoilers.

You captured the various character's personalities flawlessly from the game. I can hear them as they speak their parts in your story and never once was there a line that felt the least bit out of character.

The jumping around you are doing reminds me of movies such as "The Prestige" where you are left to piece together the puzzle on your own. I do appreciate this style but wait to see how you tie it all together as the story progresses.

The way you described the combat styles and especially Ander's abilities in your story make the RPG style game combat seem more plausible in a real life situation and just like your use of the characters fits perfectly in line with Dragon Age.

I like the personality of your Grey Warden, she is sophisticated and believable, with passions and flaws that make her accessible while remaining slightly convoluted. I look forward to seeing where you take both her and your story from here on.  

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Thank you ChaobSiroc for taking the time, not only to enjoy my fanfic, but for conveying in such detail the elements you enjoyed and why. I appreciate your comments and you inspire me to keep writing. I have recently flown back to my hometown of Toowoomba in QLD Australia. Will be spending time with my family and looking out for my father who is a Police Officer and is heavily involved in searching for the people missing in the flooding. Will update when I can. :)

I'm so glad that I was able to convey the characters personalities. I listened to each of them on youtube briefly before writing their dialog, hoping that would help. :P I'm also tickled in all the right places for your description of Ardinal, I was hoping she I could convey her as a complex and plausible person (elf in this case :P). <3 Ardinal

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<3MOAR FOR YOUR READING PLEASURE!<3



Chapter 12 - Down


Ardinal grew weary of the fade. At some point it had dressed her in a wedding gown and left her wondering the empty streets of her Alienage.

“I think I’ve done enough soul searching for today. Come on, I get it now!” Ardinal listened for a reply but only her voice returned, bouncing off the empty houses.

Ardinal approached the main gates, flinching when she saw Alistair standing before them. She cursed the fade for conjuring up the image of her love.

Fade Alistair proceeded to walk beyond the gates and Ardinal had no other option but to follow, a feeling of trepidation rising in her throat.

“Alistair?” she called out into the darkness.

Alistair emerged from the blackness.

Suddenly blue flames engulfed them. Ardinal shielded her eyes and was surprised by the lack of heat. She looked up to find Alistair facing her, a smile adorning his face, despite the Archdemon bearing down on him, its eyes aflame, strips of decaying flesh hanging from its sickly hide.

Her throat tightened, catching her scream as the jaws of the Archdemon enclosed around Alistair, swallowing him whole. The fade provided her a sword and Ardinal hacked flesh from the Archdemon’s gullet imploring it to return him.

“Give him back you bastard!” Rotten flesh fell at her feet, the Archdemon’s tainted blood spilling onto her dress. A great wound appeared and Ardinal could see something shinning within. Hoping she had glimpsed Alistair’s armour, she dropped her sword and reached into the mess of blood and innards.

Ardinal’s hands found a solid form and she pulled with all her might. In the blink of an eye the Archdemon was gone. The fade had shuffled Ardinal to the hall of Castle Redcliffe.

“Baby!” Sandal stood above her pointing towards her lap. The baby Ardinal found herself cradling was sleeping soundly, wrapped in a white and gold cloth. His hair the colour of midnight, Ardinal deduced that the child could be none other than Alistair and Morrigans’ baby-god-son.

“Baby!” Sandal repeated.

“Yes Sandal. A baby...” Ardinal leant down and kissed the child on the forehead. Tears fell from her eyes as she regarded his little frame.

I can’t be angry with you. I shouldn’t even be angry with your mother. I’m sorry we have both denied you a father and I hope you’ll be ok.

Sandal wanted to hold the child, gesturing with his arms outstretched. Ardinal headed his request, taking extra care with the baby’s head during the exchange. Sandal was holding the baby when Ardinal heard a man  humming a tune in an adjacent room.

Next stop I guess.


Reluctant to leave, Ardinal rose and headed towards the source of the humming. Ardinal wondered from chamber to chamber, the man’s voice growing louder and more distinct. She didn’t recognise the tune.

She entered a great hall, signs of the Chantry decorating its walls. Candles provided the only light and it was a few seconds before Ardinal registered that the dark masses littering the floor were bodies of dead Chantry men and women.

“Maker! Help us!!” A woman cried out at the end of the hall.

Ardinal ran to her aid looking for the cause of her distress. From afar it looked as though the woman was floating, a man standing beneath her.

“Alistair!” Ardinal cried out, recognising his form.

The Chantry woman howled in agony.  Bones cracked and split, blood poured from the woman’s mouth and eyes, and she dropped to the floor with a resounding thud.


“Hello Ardinal.”  The handsome young man, who shared an odd resemblance to Alistair greeted her. He
playfully stepped over the woman’s body humming his foreign tune.

Ardinal was taken aback by his beauty. His hair was jet black, his eyes shining a brilliant gold. As he moved he conveyed an unearthly splendour.


“Come dance with me.”

Ardinal, wedding gown bathed in blood, waltzed with the dark haired man skipping over and around the bodies on the Chantry floor.

“Is that your song?” Ardinal found herself asking as if being prompted.

“It is. This song has existed from the time before memoriam. I was offered their praises, and in return they heard my song.”

Ardinal grew faint. The man drew her close to him and gestured towards the bodies which appeared to have increased in number.

“Their song landed on deaf ears. It was inevitable that they would perish.” His voice chimed adding to his unearthly qualities.

The man breathed Ardinal in, running his fingers down her cheek.

“I smell the blood of my sibling within you.” His voice hinted malice and Ardinal stepped back in alarm.

“There is only one way for you to go.”

Ardinal fell to her knees, black blood spewing from her mouth. Holes appeared in the floor around her and Darkspawn clambered forth. Some tore away the flesh of those closest to them as they fought to free themselves
from the Earth. Arms appeared beneath her and Ardinal was sucked down into the darkness, choking on the blood that spilled relentlessly from her lips.

<3MOAR BE BELOW YARRGH<3

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Ardinal,

I like your story. I can't wait to read more of it. Thank you for being so brave as to post it. Posted Image

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<3MOAR<3


Chapter 13 - Searching


Alistair felt terrible. Stumbling from one decision to the next, he had somehow ended up at the mercy of the Grey Warden council, and a swift beating followed by some torture had given him the impression that they weren't terribly happy.

The rope that bound him to the chair made his wrists itch. Every time a sound emanated beyond his cell door, he lifted his head in expectation.

For months, he had searched for signs of Morrigan and his son; until luck would have it (or so he had thought) he had met Lady Secillia. In hindsight, the muddy pool that kept her carriage from moving was the only one on the road that day. Alistair in his enthusiasm to help the "damsel in distress" had failed to recall that it had not been raining.

A click from the door and the mage who had aided Lady Secillia in detaining him entered, accompanied by the lady herself.

I'm an idiot. Alistair concluded, self pity sinking in.

"My dear little Alistair, you worry me." The shrill pitch of Lady Secillia's voice demanded Alistair's full attention.

"You need to be, I don't know, more social, more outgoing..."

"Spare me the scenery and take me to the point Secillia."

A cruel smile slithered across her face.

"I have invited a friend of yours to come play with us. It will be such fun Alistair."

For the last few days, Alistair had been pressed for information regarding the Hero of Ferledan and her remarkable survival, given that the Warden who kills the Archdemon is meant to die along with it.

There was only one "friend" she could be referring to. Ardinal had been captured and there was nothing he could do.

"My mistress... she is with your companion..." The elf struggled to speak as Ardinal held her blade to his throat.

"Who is your mistress?" Ardinal pressed.

"She is the Lady Secillia of the Grey Warden Council. They want to speak with you."

Dog had flushed out an elf wearing servant's attire.

"Please Ser... I mean you no harm." The elf shifted uncomfortably wanting nothing more than to be free of her grip.

"How did you know I was looking for Alistair?"

"Lady Secillia needs to speak to the Hero of Fereldan, and the Warden who faced the Archdemon by her side. I was sent to find you, since she has already caught up with Alistair. He is waiting to see you."

Ardinal could not shake her suspicion for the elf, but she considered the possibility that Alistair was waiting for her, using this opportunity to make amends. Traversing Fereldan had its perils, but with the added possibility of stumbling across Qunari invaders, Ardinal thought it prudent to follow up on this lead.

The elf released, Ardinal enquired as to where they were to meet his mistress.

"It's not far Ser."

Ardinal with Dog in tow, followed the elf to an old manor, concealed within a winter worn thicket.

The elf proved tight lipped, promising Ardinal that Lady Secillia alone would answer her questions.

With longing threatening to cloud her judgement, Ardinal focused on her guide's behaviour. Apart from the meekness that accompanied most elves, he gave no sign of deceit. Watching him, Ardinal suddenly became aware of how much contempt she had come to hold for her kin. Did she even still identify with being an elf? Did her time as a Grey Warden serve to shorten her ears, or had her relationship with Alistair altered her perceptions?

Grey Warden, Warden Commander, Hero of Fereldon. So many titles for a little elf to carry, but she had managed to carry them this far and if that meant shedding some of her elfish qualities along the way so be it.

Her guide halted at the manor door.

"I shall let my mistress know that you are here Ser."

Dog let out a bark as the elf clapped his hands. Ardinal reeled as the green mist expelled from his gloves coated her face. Her vision began to fade. Drawing her blades she watched as her hound beared down on the elf, only to fall right through his ghostly form.

Instinct born of battle guided Ardinal's blade, deflecting the elf's dagger as he attempted to stab her from behind. Experience assured her that the elf, obviously an assassin had conjured up a deadly decoy, and her hound would be pressed to discover the real body, as hallucinogens played havoc with his senses.

"Get Anders!" Ardinal ordered her hound to retreat to Amaranthine and seek the aid of a fellow Warden. She could hear him yelp in protest.

"Do it!" she cried as a she failed to avoid the poisoned tip of the assassin's blade. Her muscles began to tense and stiffen, she knew she would soon be completely paralyzed.

Panic set in as her chest constricted, all feeling melting away.

I'm an idiot. Ardinal thought as her world went black.


<3ONCE I CONSUME MORE COFFEE I SHALL FINISH THE NEXT CHAPTER... MOAR ART ON IT'S WAY<3

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<3This next installment is brought to you by my major sponsor...coffee.<3 

Chapter 14 - Fading

Magical energy danced on his tongue as Anders hastily consumed a potion of Lyrium. The encounter with Secillia and her lackeys had left him exhausted and unable to summon the life giving energy he needed to save his injured Commander.

“Hang in there lovely!” Anders caught Ardinal as she slumped to her knees.  Alistair dropped his shield and knelt beside them, begging Ardinal to stay with him, tears welling up in his eyes.

Ardinal could not understand their distress. She was no longer in pain, in fact her body felt as though it were rising, a floating sensation flooding her senses. Ardinal wanted to tell Alistair to calm down but her mouth felt dry and she couldn’t seem to muster the words.

Anders cradled Ardinal in his arms and a golden light began to appear around her wounds. A ribbon of gold embraced them, its glow intensifying as Anders closed his eyes and chanted softly. 

“Ardi! Ardi! Please stay awake!” Alistair squeezed her hand tightly for fear of her losing consciousness
. Briefly, Ardinal was fully aware of her predicament. Terror seized her and she reached out to Alistair in panic. Out of all the things she wanted to tell him, only two words escaped her lips.

“I’m lost!” Ardinal cried and her consciousness was swept away. For a moment she lamented her last words but Leliana assured her that she need not worry. The waking sun warmed her cheeks and Ardinal wondered what had brought her and Lelianna to shores of Lake Calenhad. 

“She’s unconscious, but she’s alive.” Anders muttered between chants.

“Anders what I can do? What can we do? I can’t let her die.” 

Anders looked pale. It was obviously taking all his strength to keep Ardinal alive. 

“I fear she may be in grave danger, and not just from her physical wounds. I sensed something when she lost consciousness...” 

“What do you mean by sensed something? Anders we can’t just sit here we need to...”

“Alistair, I know what she means to you. I get it, I really do. I have often been mistaken for a womanizing smuck, and with good reason. Actually numerous reasons...”

“Point Anders! Point!...”

Anders took a deep breath and continued.

“I give you my word that I am doing everything I can, but she will need more help. She may even need help from the Circle.”

Alistair cradled Ardinal’s head in his lap. He watched her chest rise and fall, assured that she was still breathing. It did little to ease his fears as Anders recalled sensing signs of the Fade. 

<3It's 2:35am.... should I keep writing?<3

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Thank you. :) I'm glad you are enjoying it. I've found posting my work a little daunting. I really have no idea what I'm doing, as I prefer sketching over writing. :P 

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A Despair Demon will be making an appearance in my fanfiction soon. I wanted to create a unique entity from the Fade for my storyline, inspired by the awesome demons and spirits of DA. So here she is, just finished drawing her...



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Can't wait to finish the chapter I will be featuring her in. :)








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<3Ever After Continued<3

(Violence, adult themes and sexual references. References to rape, but no explicit content.)

 
Chapter 15 - Feeding (Cheese)


(Owed to terrible fanfiction. :P I just finished reading the infamous "My Immortal". Simply terrifying.)

 “Good morning my love” Alistair chirped cuddling Ardinal from behind. Ardinal almost dropped the ladle she was holding, and supposedly using to dish up the stew which bubbled and hissed in a large cooking pot on the stove.

“I have just returned from tending the fields... and since our little ones are outside, chasing Dog’s tail again no doubt, I thought it only proper to tend to you.”

Alistair left a trail of kisses down Ardinal’s neck. The ladle fell to the floor and Ardinal wriggled free of his embrace.

“Oh for the love of the Maker! What cheesy, hurl worthy tripe is this?”

“Cheeeeese?” Alistair’s face brightened.

“Nope! No cheese! No tending! I’m not a bloody field!”

Ardinal concluded that of all the experiences she had endured within the Fade, this topped the list for “most horrifying.” She had to escape.

“No time to harvest your crop there lad, me boy and I are waiting.”

“Oh hello Fade Ogrehn, I was wondering when you were going to make an appearance.” Ardinal sneered.

“Nothing like a bit of frost to keep out your plough, aye Alistair?”

“Miracles can happen. In fact we had five, and they are oh so cute... well only when they are asleep, or outside, or not where I am, which is here with my beautiful wife, and, um, one dwarf.

“Enough! No more farming innuendo! No more... FIVE?”

“Those shleets aren’t going to hunt themselves lad. I’ll never wear pants again unless we take care of those little buggers and quickly!”

“Thank you for that sanity reducing image Ogrhen. Let me fetch my sword. We can’t have pants-less dwarves running about, especially drunk and unruly ones.”

Alistair and Ogrhen continued their banter while Ardinal desperately searched for a way out. The Fade normally signed posted the beginning of the next act from Ardinal’s psyche, but to her dismay the room didn’t appear to have a door.

Her head felt fuzzy, hailing the next scene. Ardinal dreaded meeting the actors from the next line up, and wondered whether this parody would ever end.

“Tis not easy being a mother...”

Morrigan stood before Ardinal her staff glowing faintly, illuminating the gloom.

“Well apparently I was capable of having five...” Ardinal immediately regretted her words, realizing that she was back at the mercy of numerous Darkspawn, being dragged down into the depths of the Dead Trenches.
The walls hummed as though they were alive, veins pulsating and puss oozing from its fleshy decor.

The Darkspawn had ripped her gown and scratched her flesh, and no matter how much she struggled, Ardinal could not break free. Whenever she kicked one away, it was soon replaced by one just as crazed and determined
to keep her restrained.

“...but I believe you will do just fine.” Morrigan’s words sent her mind reeling in panic. The fate of Hespith and women destined to become Broodmothers penetrated her thoughts.

“Let go damn you!” Ardinal struggled furiously, determined not to let the creatures have their way. To her horror a Genlock ripped a chunk of flesh from one of his brethren and attempted to stuff the dripping mass into her mouth.

“I won’t eat it!” Ardinal clenched her teeth, keeping the tainted flesh at bay, but the Genlock proved too strong. Tears fell from her eyes as she felt the flesh slip down her throat.

 
Chapter 16 - Bonus

Ardinal was not amused. The elf assassin had just informed her that he will be taking the time to enjoy his captive before bringing her before Lady Secillia.

“She wants you delivered unharmed, and I see no harm in acquiring a bonus.”

His accent and demeanour had changed. There was a definite Orlesian influence to his voice, but his words sometimes carried an unusual tone, another accent Ardinal could not determine.  

“My foes either want to kill me or rape me. Or possibly eat me; I wouldn’t put it past an Ogre to have a nibble.”

“I wouldn’t condemn men for trying to force themselves upon such a beautiful woman.”

“Oh great, I’m so beautiful I’m rape-worthy? You make me sick."

Whilst paralysed, Ardinal had been moved to a small, vacant room within the manor. Her arms and legs were bound, and as she lay on her back the poison’s affects started to wear off. Her arms hung above her, restrained
by an iron clip, her head rested at the base of the wall.

I’m going to kill you. Ardinal looked around the room to find a means for her escape.

“Do you not understand the desire for men to conquer their enemies?”

Perched in a wooden chair, the elf sipped wine from a silver goblet, attentively tapping Ardinal’s foot with his. Ardinal glimpsed tiny dust particles as they danced in front of a small, glazed window to her right, and 
followed the contours of the room in search of an exit. Lifting her head, she spotted a large, bolted door.

“Does conquering constitute as rape?” Ardinal tugged on her restraints.

“In a way I think it does. When men storm the gates of their enemy’s capitol, they take all that is within and make it theirs. But the most sacred place a man can own is not their Chantry, nor their home...” The assassin stood and parted Ardinal’s thighs with his legs as far as the ropes would allow him.

“To defile their women, is to conquer the very doorsteps to their soul. After you have been inside, you have claimed every space your enemy owns or holds dear.”

“Is that an Orlesian philosophy elf?”  Ardinal enquired.

The assassin laughed.

“Oh no Ser Hero, this is a philosophy I think men of all nations share. My first lesson had been courtesy of my Tevinter owners. I owe them for enlightening me. For showing me just how cruel this world really is.”

The elf placed the silver goblet beside Ardinals head, and began loosening his belt.

“Or maybe I just haven’t had the pleasure in a while, and you’re not exactly unattractive.”

Ardinal recoiled from his touch as the assassin lifted her shirt, traversing her torso with his tongue. She looked away in disgust and found herself staring at the silver goblet by her side.  

An idea came to her, and Ardinal reached out and grasped the stem of the goblet with her mouth. She moved her head so that the head of the goblet was facing the assassin’s neck.

The assassin looked up to savour her defiance but found only death when Ardinal gripped him with her thighs, pushing him forward with all her might, crushing his wind pipe as it made contact with the goblet she had
held in place against the wall.

The assassin coughed and choked as his air way collapsed. He wrapped his hands around Ardinal’s neck attempting to take her with him, but his grip soon waned. Ardinal gasped for air as his body slumped in her lap.

It would be hours before Lady Secillia entered the assassin’s quarters, wanting an update on the situation. Instead she found an exhausted Ardinal, still trying to break free of her restraints, and one dead assassin lying by
her side.


Chapter 17 - Despair

Anders loathed the fade. Not as much as he detested the Tower, and almost as much as he hated Templars. It was stupid and misty and full of women who wanted to kill him.

Desire demons were the worst, they tended to tickle all his fancies and he nearly succumbed to one while facing his Harrowing. At the time he had deemed it retribution for flirting with female members of the Circle, but upon escaping the Tower numerous times and discovering the women that lay beyond its walls, any lessons he may have learnt from the encounter had been long forgotten.

“Alistair, you need to stay close. There are lots of nasties lurking about in here.”

“I’ll have you know that I’ve dealt with those nasties before, and I don’t need you to worry about me.”

“Want to have dinner with your lovely sister again do we?” Anders had been privy to some of Ardinal’s stories when a few drinks in Amaranthine had served as inspiration to share tales of her adventures.

“She told you about that?”

“She told me many things.” Anders grinned.

“Oh knock it off. I’m not playing the “who really knows who” game.” Alistair grumbled.

“Speaking of knowing, maybe dinner wouldn’t be such a bad idea. Your sister, she’s an alright sort isn’t she?”

“Speaking of games I just thought of one. It’s called “Stab stupid, sexy Anders in his eye sockets.”

Anders swallowed a giggle and couldn’t keep the smirk from appearing on his face.

“You think I’m sexy?”

“Good one Alistair.” Alistair sighed and berated himself through a series of mumbles as he and Anders ventured deeper into the Fade.

It took a moment for Alistair to recognise his lover, as she sat silently, adorned in a white gown mottled by patches of blood. Her hands cradled a sword across her lap, one that seemed oddly familiar.

Alistair was walking towards her when Anders intervened.

“Hang on, it may not be her.” Anders warned.

Alistair called out to Ardinal. She did not move, her eyes staring blankly and beyond where Alistair stood.

He turned to make out what she was looking at, and found nothing of concern. Alistair wanted nothing more than to look into her eyes and call her back from whatever nightmare she might be experiencing within her mind.

“Don’t despair human, she is in no physical  pain.” A voice riddled with sadness echoed around them.

A black mist began to materialise behind Ardinal, black ooze swelling beneath her. The tops of skulls and numerous weapons emerged, from what appeared to be sticky tar. The tar became a skirt which adorned the sickly body of a female. Arrows lined her arms, penetrating her flesh. Great chains hung from black turrets which spiralled out from her shoulders.

Two chains lead to bolted, iron cuffs on her wrists. Her head was the most terrifying, for it looked as though her face was set in the the mouth of a screaming head, and extra arms reached out from her shoulders to cover the
heads eyes. The face within this head was of a woman’s, her lips sullen, her eyes blindfolded, and tears of blood streamed down her cheeks. Dark, thick blood also dripped from her numerous wounds. Her chains rattled briefly as she laid her hands on Ardinal’s shoulders.

“You keep away from her!” Alistair threatened.

“I hate to admit it, but I have no idea what she is.” Anders confessed he had not seen nor heard of a demon like the one which loomed over Ardinal. He wasn’t even entirely sure if it was a demon, and not some warped spirit.

Anders asked the being to reveal its name and nature.

“I am the soldier crying out to his mother as he dies alone in the mud. I am the woman who refuses to hand over the body of her dead child. I am the apostate who drowns himself in the lake, not able to atone for his
sins.”

“You are a demon then?” Anders pressed the being to reveal its identity.

“I am the cousin who was ravaged while I was spared. I am the deceiver, the false hero, the murderer, a human’s ****.”

“Maker help us, we need to do something.” Alistair looked to Anders who had readied his staff.

“I am Despair.” 

<3So tired... MOAR TO COME!<3

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My goodness you've been busy :P

Took me awhile to get caught up with your story. I like your idea for a "despair" demon, it's surprising no such thing was featured in DA considering their other choices.

The pieces of the puzzle are starting to come together, no doubt I'll have to read it again all at once when it is completed to see exactly how it fits together. I'm beginning to think that it would be better off written in chronological order as typically your method is used to hide big surprises that effect things which were revealed to you ahead of time. But then again your story is not yet at its end so I suppose there could be a twist which I have not forseen.

Nice artwork BTW.

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Drat, double post. :unsure:

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I have to agree with you there. Maybe I should have written my story in chronological order. I've never been very good at creative writing. Writing an essay for Uni I can do, drawing I can sort of do... The jumping around isn't too bad for me, since I know the full story. I fear it may be too confusing. :(

I love films like Memento and The Prestige, things that keep me guessing. I hope I can pull this all together. I loved DA so much, it really inspired me, this story floating around in my head for some time. I'm also an aspiring comic artist, and hope that in doing this fanfic I may learn some valuable lessons about developing a a narrative.

I'm glad you liked my demon. :) I think she's pretty coolies.

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Double that on the Despair" Demon. I think it's awesome. I don't find the jumping around a bit with the story a bad thing. But then I have 2 boys that are very different so my whole life is about jumping around. Oh look there's a butterfly. :D

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Lady Mimzy wrote...
I don't find the jumping around a bit with the story a bad thing.


Don't get me wrong this style is not a bad thing but it only makes the story harder to follow if it isn't used for a specific reason (mostly to hide previous events).  I'm not having much trouble following the story but I just personally feel it would be better written chronologically considering the content. 

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I'm definitely reconsidering the order in which I present this story. I hope to restructure it at a later date, but since I'm nearing the end I may as well keep going. :P I really do appreciate the feedback though.




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<3I'M CURRENTLY MOVING HOUSE. THIS HASN'T STOPPED ME FROM WRITING... I FEAR I MAY BE A LITTLE OBSESSED YO!<3

Chapter 18 - Request 

Wynne was tired. She had returned to the Circle Tower after months spent combing the tomes and ancient texts of Orzammar’s Shaperate. Dagna, the young dwarf who had joined the Circle wishing to study magic, had been cross-referencing magical texts for Wynne, hoping to aid her in finding a way to make Shale, the golem mortal again.Candles flickered briefly as a soft wind visited her chamber, moonlight resting on her window sill.

Wynne reflected on the trouble Shale had met upon returning to Orzammar. A certain faction of dwarves had captured her, hoping to discover a new means of creating her kind. Shale had since been rescued and with the First Enchanters blessing, was offered sanctuary within the Tower. Happy to be free of her captives and given a home devoid of pigeons, Shale spent most of her days sparring with young apprentices and aiding Dagna with her research.

Wynne let out a sigh, reluctant to ready herself for bed. To her surprise a memory of the Archdemon filled her thoughts. She remembered the Grey Warden, Ardinal engulfed in a blinding light, as she sunk her blade into the great beasts head. An explosion of energy had pushed Wynne and Alistair to the ground. Leliana had shielded her eyes as she hid behind a heavy ballista. The light dissipated, and Wynne collected herself.  Her attentions were drawn to the look of serenity on Ardinal’s face, as she stood before the fallen god. With her eyes closed and head held skyward, Wynne had never seen the Warden look so at peace.

A knock on the door brought her back to her chamber, and Wynne invited the visitor to enter. The First Enchanter stroked his beared as he informed Wynne of the urgent request he had just received.

“A Grey Warden has travelled here from Amaranthine. He says they require help from the Circle to help their dying Commander.”

Wynne’s chest tightened. Ardinal was dying?

"The mage Anders has tended to her wounds, but they fear her mind may be lost to the Fade.” The First Enchanter continued.

Wynne rose from her desk.
“Then we must send mages to Amaranthine, and I shall accompany them. I cannot let the woman who delivered the Tower from demons die, lost within the Fade. I cannot let the Hero of Ferelden...”

The First Enchanter placed his hand on Wynne’s shoulder.

“Go to your friend.” He said gently, and Wynne readied herself for the journey to Vigil’s Keep.

Dog let out a solemn whimper. Ardinal, still unconscious lay in a cart they had acquired from a farmer, its wheels creaking as they rolled past the gates to Vigil's Keep. The horse whinnied as Alistair urged it forward and towards the keep’s hall.
Anders recalled how Ardinal’s hound had barked outside his window, alerting him to his presence. The Mabari, being an intelligent breed had gestured for Anders to follow him, and he could only guess that his Commander was in trouble.
The three Wardens Anders had posted on route to Ardinal’s aid, had accompanied them back to the keep. All three were new to the order, recruited shortly after the defeat of the Mother and her children.

The youngest, Jason, was a human from Amaranthine. He had survived the Darkspawn attack on his city, and felt he owed the Commander his life and his sword. He had drunk from the Joining chalice without hesitation, and welcomed his new life as a Grey Warden.
Jason kept pace with the cart, not wanting to stray from his Commanders side. He looked upon her in disbelief, not able to accept that the legend, the Hero of Ferelden had been reduced to her current state.

“Will our Commander be alright?” Jason’s concern was met with silence, as Alistair gathered Ardinal into his arms, Anders leading him to her former quarters. All any of them could do for now, was hope and pray to the Maker that aid from the Circle would come swiftly.  


<3MMMM... COFFEEE...Trivia - Jason is named after one of Ethan's sons in Heavy Rain - PRESS X TO JASON!<3

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ChaobSiroc wrote...

Lady Mimzy wrote...
I don't find the jumping around a bit with the story a bad thing.


Don't get me wrong this style is not a bad thing but it only makes the story harder to follow if it isn't used for a specific reason (mostly to hide previous events).  I'm not having much trouble following the story but I just personally feel it would be better written chronologically considering the content. 


I know by experience that the best way to find a style of writing that fits is to just write. I live in a house of artists where I see far more than my share of raw drafts. I have 2 boys, the oldest is a writer and the other is an artist. What can I say? I tend to adopt and support people. That's my nature to see the good points and encourage the efforts. I see promise of a future writer, I also see that Ardi is just now finding her style on her own and won't be surprised to see this work go through several changes as it's refined. 

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I value the encouragement as much as the objective criticism. :) I've revised some of the chapters. I'm not sure about "Cheese". I thought I would have a little fun with it, delving into some silly banter (the Fade is a perfect playground for silly events that don't actually happen). Thank you so much for your comments. If I can improve Cheese in any way (it is the focus of my concern at the moment) I would appreciate suggestions.