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[T huffin and puffin]

DoNotIngest wrote...



Now I don't wanna read it!



Lore. What use is Lore? Lore comes from the same people who took away Merrill's scarf in her new armour! Lore is for those without imagination! 

Double post -.-

Modifié par T huffin and puffin, 11 avril 2011 - 01:20 .

[DoNotIngest]

Fine, fine, I'll read it! But I'm warning you, if Merrill gets amputated, you're not seeing my next fanfic!

[Emperor Iaius I]

DoNotIngest wrote...


Lore. What use is Lore? Lore comes from the same people who took away Merrill's scarf in her new armour! Lore is for those without imagination! 

Lore represents discipline from self-indulgence. Lore represents a challenge to work around. Lore represents material to fill in and a true creative challenge, for it requires great skill to create a story that is meaningful in itself but enhances the quality of that which came before.

I feel bad enough for using original characters. It physically pains me to write something that violates lore--which, by the way, is why I never ended up writing some of my more fanciful ideas for Merrill.

[DoNotIngest]

Emperor Iaius I wrote...

DoNotIngest wrote...


Lore. What use is Lore? Lore comes from the same people who took away Merrill's scarf in her new armour! Lore is for those without imagination! 

Lore represents discipline from self-indulgence. Lore represents a challenge to work around. Lore represents material to fill in and a true creative challenge, for it requires great skill to create a story that is meaningful in itself but enhances the quality of that which came before.

I feel bad enough for using original characters. It physically pains me to write something that violates lore--which, by the way, is why I never ended up writing some of my more fanciful ideas for Merrill.

Well, excuse me for adding to the Lore


That's a very nice pic, by the way. She has a lovely nose.

[Emperor Iaius I]

Thank you. I've been debating between these three: http://img862.images...1978/tempva.png . The third icon, you'll note, is the archdemon I'd been using for a while. I enjoy the pose and the fact that Urthemiel is an Old God, but the Maker's taint is just unbearable. The High Dragon is just so much prettier.

And I'd rather look at a female, anyway.

[Blackout62]

Emperor Iaius I wrote...

DoNotIngest wrote...


Lore. What use is Lore? Lore comes from the same people who took away Merrill's scarf in her new armour! Lore is for those without imagination! 

Lore represents discipline from self-indulgence. Lore represents a challenge to work around. Lore represents material to fill in and a true creative challenge, for it requires great skill to create a story that is meaningful in itself but enhances the quality of that which came before.

I feel bad enough for using original characters. It physically pains me to write something that violates lore--which, by the way, is why I never ended up writing some of my more fanciful ideas for Merrill.

QFFT!

[T huffin and puffin]

DoNotIngest wrote...

Fine, fine, I'll read it! But I'm warning you, if Merrill gets amputated, you're not seeing my next fanfic!

Oh the horror! 

But seriously, you're kidding right? Right? 

[Big_Chief]

I really liked the fic so far! But it was a quick read, so I hope you're fast on the upload, sir!

[XX55XX]

I love Merrill enough not to amputate any part of her, not even her toe.

But I included it for the sake of realism.

Some tenses are a little off in the first chapter - which I apologize for. I need to fix that - eventually, of course.

Modifié par XX55XX, 11 avril 2011 - 01:51 .

[DoNotIngest]

T huffin and puffin wrote...

DoNotIngest wrote...

Fine, fine, I'll read it! But I'm warning you, if Merrill gets amputated, you're not seeing my next fanfic!

Oh the horror! 

But seriously, you're kidding right? Right? 

Of course I am, if you really want to read it  I have a thousand words that I just have to finish recopying, and I swear I'll have it up tomorrow (Gotta stop procrastinating...).


XX55XX: Few, that's great, as I'm just about to read it

[XX55XX]

No problem.

I am pleased by the response to my fanfic so far. I'd say it's the first time I have written a fanfic I am somewhat proud of. It doesn't have many long scenes dragging themselves forever, it's not heavily saturated with dialogue for the sake of including dialogue, there are no lengthy descriptions - I think I have found what most fanfic readers want - something easy on the eyes, easy to read.

Chapter 2 will be up in a few days, I am still fixing the grammar on the first chapter.

Thanks for the feedback so far! I would like to hear some critical feedback, however. If there is anything seemingly wrong writing or plotwise, feel free to voice them. It makes me a better writer.

Modifié par XX55XX, 11 avril 2011 - 01:55 .

[Fieryeel]

Lakhi wrote...

If anyone's interested I just posted a little one shot of merrill's thoughts during the culmination of the rivalmance with M!/Hawke at http://www.fanfictio...94080/1/Save_me,

Tell me what you think!

This fanfic was well done, but if I may say, Merrill's thoughts didn't seem...girly enough.

I am not quite sure as how to go about describing or writing girly thoughts, but it's just there naturally.

Keep it up.

[thesuperdarkone]

Thought you people should take a look at this. Includes some possible cut references:


Looks like the Dalish Warden's death hit her hardest. I wonder why?

[PseudoEthnic]

thesuperdarkone wrote...

Thought you people should take a look at this. Includes some possible cut references:


Looks like the Dalish Warden's death hit her hardest. I wonder why?

Well, from my head!canon, Merrill and Mahariel were pretty intimate before the whole mirror business broke them apart. I can imagine that his death would be crushing to hear. (Luckily, my canon warden is still alive and with Morrigan.)

[Lakhi]

Fieryeel wrote...

Lakhi wrote...

If anyone's interested I just posted a little one shot of merrill's thoughts during the culmination of the rivalmance with M!/Hawke at http://www.fanfictio...94080/1/Save_me,

Tell me what you think!

This fanfic was well done, but if I may say, Merrill's thoughts didn't seem...girly enough.

I am not quite sure as how to go about describing or writing girly thoughts, but it's just there naturally.

Keep it up.

Glad to see that you liked it , If only FFN wasn't completely borked atm with the login system I'd be able to see how it was responded to more evenly. Its a little hard writing a female character from a male perspective but the opposite seems to be done all the time. I try to be carefull not to write in too much because I don't want to pass off as a misyognist if I'm simply touting her as a weak person thats relying on hawke for all her support and I don't want to pass off as a perv if I'm making her a sensually aggressive character.

It's a steep learning curve and one that's helping me flesh out the dialogue and mottives in my larger project.

[thesuperdarkone]

PseudoEthnic wrote...

thesuperdarkone wrote...

Thought you people should take a look at this. Includes some possible cut references:


Looks like the Dalish Warden's death hit her hardest. I wonder why?

Well, from my head!canon, Merrill and Mahariel were pretty intimate before the whole mirror business broke them apart. I can imagine that his death would be crushing to hear. (Luckily, my canon warden is still alive and with Morrigan.)

 

I also assumed the Mahariel and Merrill were in some sort of relationship before based on how she acts with mentions of them and her look when Mahariel leaves. Too bad my Dalish is dead in my Human Noble Canon:( but alive in my Alternate Canon:)

Modifié par thesuperdarkone, 11 avril 2011 - 02:41 .

[mesmerizedish]

PseudoEthnic wrote...

thesuperdarkone wrote...

Thought you people should take a look at this. Includes some possible cut references:


Looks like the Dalish Warden's death hit her hardest. I wonder why?

Well, from my head!canon, Merrill and Mahariel were pretty intimate before the whole mirror business broke them apart. I can imagine that his death would be crushing to hear. (Luckily, my canon warden is still alive and with Morrigan.)

Yeah, same here. My Warden was a mage, so head!canon says that she and Merrill were BFF, because they only had each other for company.

[TMA LIVE]

thesuperdarkone wrote...

Thought you people should take a look at this. Includes some possible cut references:


Looks like the Dalish Warden's death hit her hardest. I wonder why?

That is weird, since she doesn't seem to care in the actual Origin story. That's probably why they took it out.

[_Somebody]

ishmaeltheforsaken wrote...

PseudoEthnic wrote...

thesuperdarkone wrote...

Thought you people should take a look at this. Includes some possible cut references:


Looks like the Dalish Warden's death hit her hardest. I wonder why?

Well, from my head!canon, Merrill and Mahariel were pretty intimate before the whole mirror business broke them apart. I can imagine that his death would be crushing to hear. (Luckily, my canon warden is still alive and with Morrigan.)

Yeah, same here. My Warden was a mage, so head!canon says that she and Merrill were BFF, because they only had each other for company.

So did you play a Dalish elf in Origins, or a Circle mage elf?
e:I didnt fully read that.


If we didnt play the Dalish origin, does that mean Mahariel didnt exist, or that he/she never was with Tamlen when he found the mirror? 

Modifié par Somebody, 11 avril 2011 - 03:08 .

[Lakhi]

Somebody wrote...

ishmaeltheforsaken wrote...

PseudoEthnic wrote...

thesuperdarkone wrote...

Thought you people should take a look at this. Includes some possible cut references:


Looks like the Dalish Warden's death hit her hardest. I wonder why?

Well, from my head!canon, Merrill and Mahariel were pretty intimate before the whole mirror business broke them apart. I can imagine that his death would be crushing to hear. (Luckily, my canon warden is still alive and with Morrigan.)

Yeah, same here. My Warden was a mage, so head!canon says that she and Merrill were BFF, because they only had each other for company.

So did you play a Dalish elf in Origins, or a Circle mage elf?
e:I didnt fully read that.


If we didnt play the Dalish origin, does that mean Mahariel didnt exist, or that he/she never was with Tamlen when he found the mirror? 

I think it's the former as Merrill only references one warden when this is the case.

[Maria Caliban]

Mahariel always exists, whether you play a Dalish origin or not.

In my head canon, he or she died horribly at the hands of darkspawn because I played a human noble.

[bleetman]

Somebody wrote...

If we didnt play the Dalish origin, does that mean Mahariel didnt exist, or that he/she never was with Tamlen when he found the mirror? 

From what I remember of Witch Hunt, Tamlen goes missing and Mahariel dies from the blight. I seem to recall Ariane commenting that two hunters found the eluvian; one died and the other went missing.

Seems pretty similiar as with the other origins - Duncan doesn't show up, they snuff it.

Modifié par bleetman, 11 avril 2011 - 03:20 .

[_Somebody]

bleetman wrote...

Somebody wrote...

If we didnt play the Dalish origin, does that mean Mahariel didnt exist, or that he/she never was with Tamlen when he found the mirror? 

From what I remember of Witch Hunt, Tamlen goes missing and Mahariel dies from the blight. I seem to recall Ariane commenting that two hunters found the eluvian; one died and the other went missing.

Seems pretty similiar as with the other origins - Duncan doesn't show up, they snuff it.

Ah, right. So then all the possible Wardens would have just died in the origins you didnt play.

[bleetman]

Somebody wrote...

Ah, right. So then all the possible Wardens would have just died in the origins you didnt play.

Basically, yeh. I'm not too sure about circle mages or city elves though, neither of which seem to be mentioned.

[Fieryeel]

Somebody wrote...
If we didnt play the Dalish origin, does that mean Mahariel didnt exist, or that he/she never was with Tamlen when he found the mirror? 

Apparently, it simply means Duncan wasn't around to turn Mahariel into a Warden, and thus Mahariel would have died from the taint.

That aside, the last 10 secs of that video had an inconsistency where Merrill was talking to Anders about Mahariel. Anders claimed he knew Mahariel, but Merrill later said Mahariel died to stop the blight. Well if Mahariel died in DA:O, then how did Anders meet him in DA:A?