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[tmp7704]

Mary Kirby wrote...

If it's not handled well, putting a story in present tense can sap all the feeling out of it and make it seem as though all actions are being taken underwater or possibly on the moon.

This is because the present tense necessarily slows everything down. Which is fine if the effect you're going for is the slow-motion replay of a brief moment in time.

Interesting, i have exactly opposite impression -- the past sense feels detached and lacking impact. Present tense is like click-click-click of the shutter catching life as it happens into a time-lapse sequence of images, giving higher sense of dynamic and speed.

Modifié par tmp7704, 13 avril 2011 - 05:50 .

[Fieryeel]

Somebody wrote...

This video has part of the conversation with Varric about Merrill if you're romancing her. (Its towards the end.)

Nice find!

Pity the person only shows a few seconds of Merrill conversation though.

Anyone happen to have a video to Merrill's full scene?

Or any amazing modders have already cracked the problem?

[Zjarcal]

Ahem... here's my latest commission... blood rainbows!



By YamiSnuffles

Modifié par Zjarcal, 13 avril 2011 - 06:04 .

[Lenimph]

It's so adorable 

[_Somebody]

Call the Templars!

I mean nice art. Your Hawke reminds me of that Tevinter mage you see in that quest to get the qunari book with Isabela, right before she takes it and runs off.

Modifié par Somebody, 13 avril 2011 - 05:58 .

[Fieryeel]

Mary Kirby wrote...

If it's not handled well, putting a story in present tense can sap all the feeling out of it and make it seem as though all actions are being taken underwater or possibly on the moon.

"She walks across the room. She opens the drawer. She slices the peanut butter sandwich in half."

This is because the present tense necessarily slows everything down. Which is fine if the effect you're going for is the slow-motion replay of a brief moment in time. I like it better for stream-of-consciousness first-person writing. (And I put both Varric and Merrill's stories in it.) But it is a highly problematic tense to write in. And it drives some people nuts. (See Phillip Pullman's complaints about novels in present tense.)

On a side note: Maybe don't read books by Cormac McCarthy. He writes without commas or quotation marks. You get used to it after a while, but it's very distracting at first.

Ooh the writer of Merrill is here!

May I say what an incredible job you did writing Merrill? She's practically my favorite Dragon Age character now, so much so I probably have an unhealthy obsession with her. And it's your fault...in a good way!

:wizard:

[Esbatty]

Blood rainbows LMAO, nice one Z.

...

Hawke: Whee!
Merrill: Yay!
Varric: Thats... kind of gross.
Merrill: We're making rainbows, Varric!
Varric: I couldn't tell.
Merrill: Really? See all the different colors.
Varric: Hawkes lookin' kinda pale.
Merrill: No no, the blood. See there is red, and crimson, and scarlet, and rouge.
Varric: What about purple. That kind of looks like purple.
Merrill: Oh, that - Hawke may have cut a bit too far.
*Hawke passes out*
Merrill: That happens, alot.
Varric: Check to see if she has any change.

...

PseudoEthnic wrote...

Esbatty wrote...

Chapter 4 its short and its my damn day off.

Very nice! I hope the next chapter is longer, though.

EDIT: okay that sounded way more harsh than funny so, in summary apparently my muse gets paid by the hour so I kind of write fast and then kinda stop at the end of a scene. So my installments tend to be kinda short. But I promise to try to try to go for longer. Also, glad you liked it. 

Modifié par Esbatty, 13 avril 2011 - 06:22 .

[tmp7704]

Zjarcal wrote...

Ahem... here's my latest commission... blood rainbows!

That's clearly modded DA2. The screen isn't entirely filled with red.

[Master Shiori]

Zjarcal wrote...

Ahem... here's my latest commission... blood rainbows!



By YamiSnuffles

Nice one Zjar. 

[Blackout62]

Zjarcal wrote...

Ahem... here's my latest commission... blood rainbows!

*snip*

By YamiSnuffles

Yeah that's pretty much dead on the relationship my Manic Pixie Dream Girl Blood Mage Lady Hawke had with Merrill. Cute.

[Zjarcal]

Esbatty wrote...

Blood rainbows LMAO, nice one Z.

...

Hawke: Whee!
Merrill: Yay!
Varric: Thats... kind of gross.
Merrill: We're making rainbows, Varric!
Varric: I couldn't tell.
Merrill: Really? See all the different colors.
Varric: Hawkes lookin' kinda pale.
Merrill: No no, the blood. See there is red, and crimson, and scarlet, and rouge.
Varric: What about purple. That kind of looks like purple.
Merrill: Oh, that - Hawke may have cut a bit too far.
*Hawke passes out*
Merrill: That happens, alot.
Varric: Check to see if she has any change.

I am bookmarking this post!

Thanks for the laugh Esbatty! 

[Esbatty]

@Z: Your welcome, I'll be here all week. Literally.

[Maria Caliban]

I'd forgotten that the Merrill story was written in present-tense and probably look like a bit of an ass for complaining about it on this thread.

Sorry.

[Torax]

Maria Caliban wrote...

I'd forgotten that the Merrill story was written in present-tense and probably look like a bit of an ass for complaining about it on this thread.

Sorry.

I doubt she took it personally. She was just responding about how it's very hard to do it right. My favorite kind of writing is Past-Tense Introspectives. Like anything though that is probably extremely hard to do well as a Writer.

[Mary Kirby]

Maria Caliban wrote...

I'd forgotten that the Merrill story was written in present-tense and probably look like a bit of an ass for complaining about it on this thread.

Sorry.

No offense taken. It's just a discussion I find interesting. I'll avoid further derailing the thread to talk about evolving literary styles.

Also, that blood rainbows picture nearly made me choke on my coffee.

[Torax]

Mary Kirby wrote...

Maria Caliban wrote...

I'd forgotten that the Merrill story was written in present-tense and probably look like a bit of an ass for complaining about it on this thread.

Sorry.

No offense taken. It's just a discussion I find interesting. I'll avoid further derailing the thread to talk about evolving literary styles.

Also, that blood rainbows picture nearly made me choke on my coffee.

Woh that's a full rainbow all the way. Double Rainbow. Oh my god. It's a Double Rainbow all the way. Woh that's so intense. Woh man, woh, woh. Woohoho OH MY GOOOOOD. WOOOH...

Okay I'll stop there. I couldn't resist.

[raziel1980]

Zjarcal wrote...

Ahem... here's my latest commission... blood rainbows!



By YamiSnuffles

Awesome Pic! Reminds me of what was going on with my mage( Marina - who is my current avatar) and Merrill during my last playthrough n their blood mage-romance which led Marina to becoming the new Viscount(ess) of Kirkwall with her gorgeous wife at her side. 

[mesmerizedish]

Mary Kirby wrote...



If it's not handled well, putting a story in present tense can sap all the feeling out of it and make it seem as though all actions are being taken underwater or possibly on the moon.

"She walks across the room. She opens the drawer. She slices the peanut butter sandwich in half."

This is because the present tense necessarily slows everything down. Which is fine if the effect you're going for is the slow-motion replay of a brief moment in time. I like it better for stream-of-consciousness first-person writing. (And I put both Varric and Merrill's stories in it.) But it is a highly problematic tense to write in. And it drives some people nuts. (See Phillip Pullman's complaints about novels in present tense.)

On a side note: Maybe don't read books by Cormac McCarthy. He writes without commas or quotation marks. You get used to it after a while, but it's very distracting at first.

Varric's story was actually the one I was thinking about when I mentioned how it made me think of noir narration [smilie]../../../images/forum/emoticons/joyful.png[/smilie] I had forgotten Merrill's story was in present-tense. But you understand exactly what I'm saying about creating an effect [smilie]../../../images/forum/emoticons/grin.png[/smilie]

Zjarcal wrote...

Ahem... here's my latest commission... blood rainbows!

*snipped*

By YamiSnuffles

That's quite possibly the most adorable synchronized blood spurt ever.

Maria Caliban wrote...

I'd forgotten that the Merrill story was written in present-tense and probably look like a bit of an ass for complaining about it on this thread.

Sorry.

You're much too hard on yourself *hugs*

Modifié par ishmaeltheforsaken, 13 avril 2011 - 08:06 .

[Mr.House]

Zjarcal wrote...

Ahem... here's my latest commission... blood rainbows!



By YamiSnuffles

[DoNotIngest]

I wish there was fanart of Merrill spraying Fenris in the face with blood.

[mesmerizedish]

DoNotIngest wrote...

I wish there was fanart of Merrill spraying Fenris in the face with blood.

Do. Want.

[Mr.House]

DoNotIngest wrote...

I wish there was fanart of Merrill spraying Fenris in the face with blood.

Someone needs to do this!

[Blackout62]

We're doing fanart suggestions? Cause half an hour ago I had the idea of Isabela consoling Merrill due to the latter being in pain after having her ears pierced by the former. Someone get Psuedo on that. Seems like something she'd draw.