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Mass Effect: Abduction - My attempt at fanfic, looking for criticism.


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IrishSpectre257

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I've always wanted to write for fun, so I decided to start by dabbling in some fanfiction. I began writing a short story in the Mass Effect universe, and I'm ultimately looking for criticism to help improve my skills.

I'm sure you will know where I'm going with this story, so here is the very beginning of Mass Effect: Abduction. Hope you enjoy it, and please don't hold back on harsh criticism.

http://social.biowar...492/blog/17067/

It takes place shortly after news of Shepard's disappearance is announced to the general public.

Modifié par IrishSpectre257, 30 mars 2011 - 01:30 .


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GuardianAngel470

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One thing to keep in mind, Shep's disappearance is downplayed and in some cases denied, at least according to Jacob and a few others.

I don't think the General public knew he had disappeared, but I think the characters in your story would so you're all good.

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Katamariguy

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“Aw, I’ll miss the Vowus.”

That






was priceless.

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IrishSpectre257

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Bump. I added another short chapter. Still looking for more opinions. I'll probably stop mentioning it until it's finished from now on.