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[AnimaTempli101]

 

I've been thinking of writing a fan-fiction story and I was just wondering if anybody would find the following plot-line interesting.

"When the MSV VALIANT crash lands onto a small planet in the Remus system in the far reaches of the Terminus Systems all the crew and passengers are lost. All, that is, for Ethan Farrows. Orphaned by the crash at the tender age of six Ethan is found by the planet's sole sentient inhabitant, Xanthian, an elderly Hanar sage. For the next twenty years Xanthian trains Ethan in various forms of armed and unarmed combat until one day Ethan is forced by fate to re-enter the galaxy, where he meets the one man who he will follow against the greatest threat to the galaxy. To the death if need be.

Modifié par AnimaTempli101, 09 avril 2011 - 01:56 .

[AnimaTempli101]

On the face of it, protection. Similar to how the Drell serve the Hanar's needs. However the real reason is a plot twist.

Modifié par AnimaTempli101, 09 avril 2011 - 03:42 .

[AnimaTempli101]

Seriously, nothing? Not even any negative comments?

[gwanko vera]

i'm not to sure, it could be an interesting story. it depends on how you portray the characters, as far as the idea behind it, it could work. again the big thing is you need to be able to write it effectively. I know i am working on a mass effect fan-fiction myself. i had what i think is a really good idea, and i am trying to map and expand it into a nice story that fits into the mass effect universe and doesn't cause any plot holes. I would say if you are going to do this, make sure you can link to the background data on mass effect. I would say have a mass effect wiki up and look at what you have in your head and compare them. but i would say go ahead and write it. a few questions, would Ethan be following Shepherd, or would you be making this more of a off shoot of the universe and have this going on during the mass effect games but not directly related, or is this going to be taking place between the games, or before and or after the game? each of these option can cause a big change in how you write and who would look at your story.
oh and sorry for the block of text, just trying to help.

[AnimaTempli101]

Thanks, I had already started and I soon found that keeping the wiki open was a must. After Ethan leaves his home planet he travels for two years or so whilst Shep is being rebuilt until eventually he joins up with Shep during the events of ME2.

As I was using the timeline I found out a few interesting things:

Miranda is 9 years Ethan's senior
Kaidan is 8 years his senior
Shep is 5 years his senior
He's three years younger than Joker
Jacob is 2 years older than him
Ash is one year older than him
He's a year older than Kasumi and two years older than Jack and Tali.


He was born two years after the First Contact War

In the year he was born Saren was inducted as a Spectre

The year he disappeared was the year L1 Biotic Implants were created.

Modifié par AnimaTempli101, 10 avril 2011 - 07:34 .

[gwanko vera]

that is a good start, are you going start your story before or after the ship crash's? what is his motivation? what are his specialties and interests, and what are his flaws and faults?
i know for my fanfiction, other then getting the basic outline of the story arcs, i am having trouble coming up with idea of things to happen during the arcs.
then you need to find a way to provide a motivation for the actions of your character.
oh just for you info, my fanfiction is a what if off shoot. we know that Anderson believes shepherd so wouldn't he try to do something to try and provide the best chance for survival for humanity and the galactic society? Well i figure why not have him set up a secret colony. that is the basis for my fanfiction. I am working on the second chapter right now, and trying to make some good characters for the first arc, finding a suitable planet and or system for the colony.
anyways, while i am not the most critical reader, if you want, i could help with your fanfiction as a beta reader. just let me know.

[AnimaTempli101]

Just before.

Specialities: Combat
Interests: Philosophy and history
Flaws: Well after being stuck on an isolated planet for twenty years with only an elderly Hanar for company he's not that very socially developed. He's likely to see a handshake as an attack rather than a greeting.

Thanks, I'll send you chapter one when it's done, if that is agreeable to you.

[AnimaTempli101]

That and he hates Batarians. For reasons yet undisclosed.

Modifié par AnimaTempli101, 10 avril 2011 - 08:45 .

[gwanko vera]

sure no problem, i just put my first chapter in my blog here, couldn't post it on Fanfiction.net, can't log on at the moment.

[AnimaTempli101]

I was thinking of using DeviantArt myself.

[gwanko vera]

hey posting in multiple area allows more people to read your story.

[AnimaTempli101]

Well I'll consider that. Thanks for all your tips.

[gwanko vera]

No problem, glad I could help a little. and once you message me the link or the chapter I'll read it and let you know what I think.

[madjaydoyle]

has any one thougth of a story line were you are raiesd up as a free lancer and when you are older you join one of the major gangs Blue suns,eclipse mercs and blood pack you can be any race you want that would be good...maybe your hired to take shepard down and he recruits you like what happend with zeveran on DA.

[AnimaTempli101]

Not to my knowledge.

Anyway...back to the topic at hand?

[Turneyvore]

... Execution matters more than plot, in my opinion. Even a simple story, which I'm not saying your's will be, can be very good if told properly. Not trying to give you writing tips in thie format/without ever having read your work but just something that is good to be aware of. Anyway some things to think about.
1) The hanar obviously knows how to teach bipeds with two arms how to fight. Where did he learn how to do that? Was he previously a drell instructor? If so, who did he train?
2) Why did the hanar go into seclusion?
3) How does Ethan speak? Has he adopted the extremely proper speaking methods of the hanar or did he learn how humans talk from some other means?
4) Will Jack be in the story? (I love Jack so I have to ask)
5) Is the plot twist that he is training someone who will be able to defeat one of his previous students who turned evil/amoral?