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[Dragon_Claw]

mavqt wrote...

Meh, guys and girls, I need a hand.

I can't get this line to sound quite right.

"her eyes were drawn to Jane's hips as they swayed with her walk to the end of the dock."

Just reads abit meh to me. :C

Any help is greatly appreciated

"Liara´s eyes were like tractor beams locked on to Jane´s sweet & tight armoured ass!"

Sorry about that.  

Actually your line isn´t bad. Go for it or skip it for now, maybe something better will come up...

Modifié par Dragon_Claw, 02 septembre 2012 - 12:48 .

[mumba]

mavqt wrote...

Meh, guys and girls, I need a hand.

I can't get this line to sound quite right.

"her eyes were drawn to Jane's hips as they swayed with her walk to the end of the dock."

Just reads abit meh to me. :C

Any help is greatly appreciated

I don't see anything wrong with it, then again my english isn't amazing.

[Mavqt]

GT Zazzerka wrote...

Sorry, topless?

Also you need to be careful posting crying Liara, because you'll set me off too.

Sorry.



Better?

[Arcataye]

mavqt wrote...

What did you think?
I would give it 4.5 / 5.

Koobismo's review, read it. <3

Han Shot First wrote...

One thing I've noticed is that when fans are unhappy about their favorite characters content, they tend to complain that other characters should have gotten less, rather than their favorite characters should have gotten more. I don't know why that is.

Yeah, I'll never understand that.

Modifié par Arcataye, 02 septembre 2012 - 12:59 .

[Zazzerka]

mavqt wrote...

GT Zazzerka wrote...

Sorry, topless?

Also you need to be careful posting crying Liara, because you'll set me off too.

Sorry.

[pic]

Better?

Sure, but I wasn't actually requesting a topless picture.  I was wondering what the "Edit: Topless, how silly of me" part of your post meant.

EDIT: Oh, I think I understand, did you have to edit out a nekkid picture because they're against the rules or something?

Modifié par GT Zazzerka, 02 septembre 2012 - 01:04 .

[Mavqt]

Na, Topless here means that the top post doesn't have a picture.

And since it made you sad, I post a sexy pic.

And yes, no naked pics.

Modifié par mavqt, 02 septembre 2012 - 01:09 .

[Arcataye]

GT Zazzerka wrote...

I was wondering what the "Edit: Topless, how silly of me" part of your post meant.
EDIT: Oh, I think I understand, did you have to edit out a nekkid picture because they're against the rules or something?

The first post of each page needs a Liara picture, some unwritten rule of the thread.
--

Wrex Illusive Man too, ha.

Modifié par Arcataye, 02 septembre 2012 - 01:11 .

[Tyrannosaurus Rex]

GT Zazzerka wrote...
I never had a problem with Kaiden, writing wise. I like his gravelly voice too. But when he comes onto Sheploo on the Citadel, I felt like a dick for having to turn him down (I couldn't say yes, even though I have absolutely no problem with homosexuality) and I felt like that kind of soured the relationship - couldn't take him on missions because I felt like I was 'taunting' him. Although in hindsight, it should've been pretty clear that Shep had something with Liara, and he shouldn't interfere.

If you want to avoid that awkward moment I suggest doing the date scene with Liara first before talking to Kaidan, if you have already locked in with another romance Kaidan won't hit on you and you get a nice friendship alternative during the scene.

[Mavqt]

http://desmond.image...jpg&res=landing






See, edited out.

Modifié par mavqt, 02 septembre 2012 - 01:11 .

[Zazzerka]

mavqt wrote...

Na, Topless here means that the top post doesn't have a picture.

And since it made you sad, I post a sexy pic.

Well, I'll try not to post at the top of any pages, because I don't have any pics saved, and if the people I live with find out what I've been googling for the sake of the rule, they might think less of me.

Anyway, thanks for the pick-me-up.

Modifié par GT Zazzerka, 02 septembre 2012 - 01:20 .

[Yuqi]

@mavqt
Try using another word apart from 'walk'.

@GT Zazzerka

Miranda as a base character is cool! But she is hard to take seriously, because of her unrealistic-appearance which makes her eye-roll teen ****** ****** material. Imean if she's supposed to be hiding from cerberus assasins wouldn't she be wearing something less provocative?Drawing attention when she's supposed to be hiding,really?

Kaidan dosn't survive in any of my mshep play-throughs, so I wouldn't know. I'm not surprised you found it awkward though. (It was the same with Traynor, but she takes the rejection very well.)

[Zazzerka]

Lizardviking wrote...

GT Zazzerka wrote...
I never had a problem with Kaiden, writing wise. I like his gravelly voice too. But when he comes onto Sheploo on the Citadel, I felt like a dick for having to turn him down (I couldn't say yes, even though I have absolutely no problem with homosexuality) and I felt like that kind of soured the relationship - couldn't take him on missions because I felt like I was 'taunting' him. Although in hindsight, it should've been pretty clear that Shep had something with Liara, and he shouldn't interfere.

If you want to avoid that awkward moment I suggest doing the date scene with Liara first before talking to Kaidan, if you have already locked in with another romance Kaidan won't hit on you and you get a nice friendship alternative during the scene.

Sounds like a much better alternative, thanks. Though if his memory was better he'd remember that they were together since ME1.

Anyway, something for the next playthrough, cheers.

[Zazzerka]

@GT Zazzerka
 her unrealistic-appearance which makes her eye-roll teen ****** ****** material

Another thing I wasn't too keen on. The DLC armour for her was good, and in my games she was never without it.
Additionally, surely it would be an idea to put your hair into a ponytail once in a while? Y'know, to prevent being blinded by it during firefights.

mavqt wrote...

[pic]

See, edited out.

Good lord.

Modifié par GT Zazzerka, 02 septembre 2012 - 01:17 .

[Yuqi]

GT Zazzerka wrote...

Lizardviking wrote...

GT Zazzerka wrote...
I never had a problem with Kaiden, writing wise. I like his gravelly voice too. But when he comes onto Sheploo on the Citadel, I felt like a dick for having to turn him down (I couldn't say yes, even though I have absolutely no problem with homosexuality) and I felt like that kind of soured the relationship - couldn't take him on missions because I felt like I was 'taunting' him. Although in hindsight, it should've been pretty clear that Shep had something with Liara, and he shouldn't interfere.

If you want to avoid that awkward moment I suggest doing the date scene with Liara first before talking to Kaidan, if you have already locked in with another romance Kaidan won't hit on you and you get a nice friendship alternative during the scene.

Sounds like a much better alternative, thanks. Though if his memory was better he'd remember that they were together since ME1.

Anyway, something for the next playthrough, cheers.

They should've just locked in loyal romances, in all honestly.

[Mavqt]

Yuqi wrote...

@mavqt
Try using another word apart from 'walk'.

@GT Zazzerka

Miranda as a base character is cool! But she is hard to take seriously, because of her unrealistic-appearance which makes her eye-roll teen ****** ****** material. Imean if she's supposed to be hiding from cerberus assasins wouldn't she be wearing something less provocative?Drawing attention when she's supposed to be hiding,really?

Kaidan dosn't survive in any of my mshep play-throughs, so I wouldn't know. I'm not surprised you found it awkward though. (It was the same with Traynor, but she takes the rejection very well.)

Yeah, I'm trying different words, but it still sounds wierd. :C

EDIT.

Hmm, what about sauntered?

Modifié par mavqt, 02 septembre 2012 - 01:23 .

[Mavqt]

Yuqi wrote...

GT Zazzerka wrote...

Lizardviking wrote...

GT Zazzerka wrote...
I never had a problem with Kaiden, writing wise. I like his gravelly voice too. But when he comes onto Sheploo on the Citadel, I felt like a dick for having to turn him down (I couldn't say yes, even though I have absolutely no problem with homosexuality) and I felt like that kind of soured the relationship - couldn't take him on missions because I felt like I was 'taunting' him. Although in hindsight, it should've been pretty clear that Shep had something with Liara, and he shouldn't interfere.

If you want to avoid that awkward moment I suggest doing the date scene with Liara first before talking to Kaidan, if you have already locked in with another romance Kaidan won't hit on you and you get a nice friendship alternative during the scene.

Sounds like a much better alternative, thanks. Though if his memory was better he'd remember that they were together since ME1.

Anyway, something for the next playthrough, cheers.

They should've just locked in loyal romances, in all honestly.

Yeah, when they recognize the previous relationship there should've been 3 options.

Yes, lets continue.
Let me think about it.
No.

Or something.

Modifié par mavqt, 02 septembre 2012 - 01:21 .

[Tyrannosaurus Rex]

mavqt wrote...

Yuqi wrote...

GT Zazzerka wrote...

Lizardviking wrote...

GT Zazzerka wrote...
I never had a problem with Kaiden, writing wise. I like his gravelly voice too. But when he comes onto Sheploo on the Citadel, I felt like a dick for having to turn him down (I couldn't say yes, even though I have absolutely no problem with homosexuality) and I felt like that kind of soured the relationship - couldn't take him on missions because I felt like I was 'taunting' him. Although in hindsight, it should've been pretty clear that Shep had something with Liara, and he shouldn't interfere.

If you want to avoid that awkward moment I suggest doing the date scene with Liara first before talking to Kaidan, if you have already locked in with another romance Kaidan won't hit on you and you get a nice friendship alternative during the scene.

Sounds like a much better alternative, thanks. Though if his memory was better he'd remember that they were together since ME1.

Anyway, something for the next playthrough, cheers.

They should've just locked in loyal romances, in all honestly.

Yeah, when they recognize the previous relationship there should've been 3 options.

Yes, lets continue.
Let me think about it.
No.

Or something.

I still don't get Bioware's decision to make two lock-on scenes for Liara.

[lillitheris]

@mavqt: Yuqi is right, 'her walk' doesn't sound right. 'As she walked' would be a better way to say it. 'Her saunter' or something, too, but you may be better changing it altogether if it doesn't work.

[Zazzerka]

lillitheris wrote...

@mavqt: Yuqi is right, 'her walk' doesn't sound right. 'As she walked' would be a better way to say it. 'Her saunter' or something, too, but you may be better changing it altogether if it doesn't work.

Flow? If the Shepard is a Soldier flow won't fit. But maybe an Infiltrator or Biotic could 'flow.'

Dunno. Not my strongest area.

[Mavqt]

"Her eyes were drawn to Jane's swaying hips as she sauntered to the end of the dock."

Better?

@ GT Zazzerka.
This takes place before Shepard joins the alliance.

Modifié par mavqt, 02 septembre 2012 - 01:46 .

[Zazzerka]

mavqt wrote...

"Her eyes were drawn to Jane's swaying hips as she sauntered to the end of the dock."

Better?

@ GT Zazzerka.
This takes place before Shepard joins the alliance.

Fair enough, sorry.

I like 'sauntered'.

[Mavqt]

GT Zazzerka wrote...

mavqt wrote...

"Her eyes were drawn to Jane's swaying hips as she sauntered to the end of the dock."

Better?

@ GT Zazzerka.
This takes place before Shepard joins the alliance.

Fair enough, sorry.

I like 'sauntered'.

No need to be sorry dude.

Edit.

Or dudette, if you're female.

Modifié par mavqt, 02 septembre 2012 - 01:57 .

[Zazzerka]

Dude.
Does the thread die off a bit at this time?

[Mavqt]

^Pretty much. It tends to liven up later in the day.

Edit.

Top... Again. One second.

Edit 2.

Fixed



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Modifié par mavqt, 02 septembre 2012 - 02:33 .

[Zazzerka]

Bummer. Guess it's bedtime.

I was thinking about saying "I should go" but I'm guessing this forum has done that joke enough.
Anyway, I like this thread. I might stay here for a while.

Modifié par GT Zazzerka, 02 septembre 2012 - 02:39 .