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[Mr. Tanner]

Thanks guys, I'll write more as ideas come to me.

@spiros9110

LOL!  I can honestly see her fighting it at first.  Trying to deal with the kids as they slowly drive her up the wall.  Fear would be her main tool for keeping order.  As time goes on though I can honestly see here finding if far to hard not to care for them.

Modifié par Mr. Tanner, 05 février 2012 - 01:48 .

[SlottsMachine]

 So bored. With all this talk of whether or not Jack's character developments are all that realistic, I thought it could be fun if we came up with some crazy story arcs for her. I'll start.

Jack joins the Council.

Shep: "Councillors, the Reapers are coming and I need your help..... What the **** are you doing up there, Jack?"
Jack: "The Council has been giving you a hard time, figured I'd do something about it." 
Shep: ?????????
Jack: "Oh, there glad to have me. They were getting tired of Udina's and Anderson's constant bickering, always trying to show the other who's was bigger. Silly boys."
Jack glances towards the Turian Councillor
Turian Councillor: "Commander, I need to get something of my chest. I've given you a hard time of it and I want to apologies. I'm sorry Commander."
Shepard passes out
Jack: "Wake up Shepard, you've got a galaxy to save. We'll hold down the fort here."
Shepard still a little groggy
Shep: "I can't say I was expecting this. But ah, good work you really came through for me."
Jack: "It was nothing"
Shep: "This is actually happening right?"
Jack smiles "What? You think your dreaming. Think I'm not Council material, well they thought otherwise"
Jack looks towards the Council while repeatedly shoving her fist into her palm
Shep: "Uh. Keep up the good work, I think"
Jack "Will do, you come back you hear"
Shepard looks toward the other Councillors, the three of them are all nodding there heads profusely
Shep: "Oh, I'll definitely be back"

Modifié par GeneralSlotts193, 05 février 2012 - 04:14 .

[What a Succulent Ass]

GeneralSlotts193 wrote...

Jack joins the Council.

[spirosz]

GeneralSlotts193 wrote...

Shepard passes out

I died when you wrote that, lol.  I just pictured Shepard falling over, lmao.  

[Mr. Tanner]

So, after promising to make another attempt at writting, I thought that I would take a shot at writting the scene where Jack and Shepard meet.  The idea came to me while listening to Born This Way, by a female artist that I had never heard of before.  I think her name was GoGo?  Anyway, just a warning, I have not read the spoilers so I have no idea if this scene is in them and everything I am writing is crap.

(Onboard the Normandy, en rout to the Ascension school.  Shepard is in his cabin speaking with the captain of the Orizaba.)

Shepard: "I just wanted to thank you again, mom, for helping us evacuate the Ascension project to a safer area."

Hanna: "It's nothing dear, we have to head out that way in order to meet up with the fifth fleet anyway.  The rest of the survivors of the thrid and second fleet are waiting for us when we arrive at the Citadel."

Shepard: "Still, it's a bit of a risk you are taking.  Afterall, dreadnoughts have a hard time against smaller frigates, and your escort is only one cruiser."

Hanna: (Smiles and waves dismissively on the viewscreen.)  "The Perugia may be old, but she can still hold her own in a fight.  Don't worry, there has been no reports of Reaper activity in the area.  Besides, I can't wait to meet the woman that the ANN has been going on and on about.  You know, the convict and pirate Queen that seems to have stolen your heart."

Shepard: (Blushing red, he starts to get nervous.)  "I wouldn't call her a pirate... I won't deny that she has strayed from the straight and narrow in the past, but she has been getting better since they accepted her as a teacher at the project."

Hanna: (Chuckles at her son.) "Well, if she can make you speak of her like that then she must have something going for her.  I can't wait to see what makes her tick."

(Several light years away, a certain tatooed human biotic shudders for no apparent reason.)

Jack: "Wow, that was weird, I felt like someone just walked on my grave."

Sara: (Turns to Jack and smiles to her friend.  Sara is the mathematics intructor for grades 4 though 6 at the academy.  Though not a biotic herself, she has long since grown accustomed to the displays both the students and the staff were capable of.  She and Jack became friends shortly after Jack's arrival, Jack being the only instructor who was willing to use her biotics to entertain herself and others.  There were many times Sara would find herself lifted more than twenty feet off the ground, much to her shock, before being set gently back down.)  "Maybe that squeeze of yours is off risking his life to save some Asari princess.  You know, the kind that would do anything to express her gratitude." (She giggles, knowing Jack's reaction.)

Jack: (Frowns at the mental image and makes a fist) "She had better keep her fuu.... I mean fricking hands off of him."

Sara: (Laughs even harder.  Her long flowing brown hair slips foreward, partially covering her face.  Her purple irises glow with mirth.  Brushing her hair out of the way she looks back at Jack.) "Oh Jacqueline, you are too predictable."

Jack: (Snorts her disaproval of the use of her name. She straightens the white lab coat that she picked up from the science labs.  Ever since she had agreed to dress more apropriately - for her students - she had taken to wearing light coloured jeans and a croped vest that sat over top and even more revealing shirt.  In order to cover up, she added the white coat to the ensemble.  The whole outfit had the effect of making her female students take a more active intrest in attending science lab.  True, it was so they could dress like the Crazy Bald Lady, but the faculty would take what they could get.) "You laugh now, but you haven't seen how he draws the asari to him like moths to a fuu... I mean fricking flame.  First it was that damn scientist Liara, at least she covered her ******... (Jack glares at Sara who seems to suddenly have pain in her stomach.  In reality, Sara was in pain from trying to stop herself from laughing.)  "Yea, yea. Teaspoon, and stove and black and all, I know it.  Are you going to listen or not?"

Sara: (Nods and straightens up.  She is still having a hard time maintianing a serious expression.)

Jack: "Then there was that emotionless stripper Samara.  So damn proper and upstanding, and yet she let her ****** hang out like bi.... I mean a dog in heat.  ****!  It's so damn hard to watch what I am saying.

Sara: (Giggles slightly at her friend's distress.  She knew that Jack was doing far better than when she first arrived.  The anger management classes were also helping.  Still, she would never forget when Jack had told the administration to **** off.  That earned her a legendary status among the staff at the facility.)

Jack: "Samara was all over him while he was helping her solve her daughter issues.  Then the ****** backed off when she snapped her little girl's neck.  Then there was that green one.... Shiala.  Shepard had saved her from some tentacled alien that was having it's way with her... Why are you laughing?"

Sara: (Now leaning against Jack's desk for support.) "You make it sound like some dirty hannar and asari porn vid!"

Jack: "How the **** should I know!  I only heard this from that wanker of a pilot they had on the Normandy.  Anyway, the second they meet up she was all over him!  She even hit on him!  Right infront of me!  I was this close to throwing her off the balcony!"

Sara: (Interrupting Jack.) "But Shepard swooped in and kissed you so passionately your mind went blank and you forgot about the evil green seductress!"

Jack: (Looks away and does not reply.)

Sara: (Peers closer at Jack to see she is blushing.)  "Oh my god!  He did! That is so romantic!

Jack: (Rolls her eyes, once again annoyed by her friends gluttonus appetite for all things romantic.)

(As the two are about to continue their conversation one of Jack's students runs into the room.)

Tabitha: "Ms. Nought!  Ms. Nought!  The principal is calling everyone to assembly!  The evacuation ships are on their way!  And guess what!  The Normandy is with them!"

Jack: (Her eyes widen as the thought of reuniting with Shepard races through her mind.) "That's good news Tabby, go get the others and we will meet outside the gym door." (Jack watches in amusement as Tabitha salutes her and runs off.  She notices that the young girl's skirt is a bit on the short side and frowns.)  "And lengthen out your skirt young lady!"

Sara: (Snickers.) "Well I had better be going... Got to have my class ready once they get back from lunch. And, of course, I have to look my best when that hunk of yours shows up." (She quickly makes a dash for the door, only to be on the receiving end of a gentle biotic thow that sends her sprawling out of the room.) "Ohh... Got to stop tempting fate like that..."

________________________________________________________________________________________

Well, that's it for this evening, I'll post the next part tomorrow if I can get my programming assignment done at a reasonable hour.

Modifié par Mr. Tanner, 05 février 2012 - 06:41 .

[rockstyle6]

Mr. Tanner wrote...

So, after promising to make another attempt at writting, I thought that I would take a shot at writting the scene where Jack and Shepard meet.  The idea came to me while listening to Born This Way, by a female artist that I had never heard of before.  I think her name was GoGo?  Anyway, just a warning, I have not read the spoilers so I have no idea if this scene is in them and everything I am writing is crap.

(Onboard the Normandy, en rout to the Ascension school.  Shepard is in his cabin speaking with the captain of the Orizaba.)

Shepard: "I just wanted to thank you again, mom, for helping us evacuate the Ascension project to a safer area."

Hanna: "It's nothing dear, we have to head out that way in order to meet up with the fifth fleet anyway.  The rest of the survivors of the thrid and second fleet are waiting for us when we arrive at the Citadel."

Shepard: "Still, it's a bit of a risk you are taking.  Afterall, dreadnoughts have a hard time against smaller frigates, and your escort is only one cruiser."

Hanna: (Smiles and waves dismissively on the viewscreen.)  "The Perugia may be old, but she can still hold her own in a fight.  Don't worry, there has been no reports of Reaper activity in the area.  Besides, I can't wait to meet the woman that the ANN has been going on and on about.  You know, the convict and pirate Queen that seems to have stolen your heart."

Shepard: (Blushing red, he starts to get nervous.)  "I wouldn't call her a pirate... I won't deny that she has strayed from the straight and narrow in the past, but she has been getting better since they accepted her as a teacher at the project."

Hanna: (Chuckles at her son.) "Well, if she can make you speak of her like that then she must have something going for her.  I can't wait to see what makes her tick."

(Several light years away, a certain tatooed human biotic shudders for no apparent reason.)

Jack: "Wow, that was weird, I felt like someone just walked on my grave."

Sara: (Turns to Jack and smiles to her friend.  Sara is the mathematics intructor for grades 4 though 6 at the academy.  Though not a biotic herself, she has long since grown accustomed to the displays both the students and the staff were capable of.  She and Jack became friends shortly after Jack's arrival, Jack being the only instructor who was willing to use her biotics to entertain herself and others.  There were many times Sara would find herself lifted more than twenty feet off the ground, much to her shock, before being set gently back down.)  "Maybe that squeeze of yours is off risking his life to save some Asari princess.  You know, the kind that would do anything to express her gratitude." (She giggles, knowing Jack's reaction.)

Jack: (Frowns at the mental image and makes a fist) "She had better keep her fuu.... I mean fricking hands off of him."

Sara: (Laughs even harder.  Her long flowing brown hair slips foreward, partially covering her face.  Her purple irises glow with mirth.  Brushing her hair out of the way she looks back at Jack.) "Oh Jacqueline, you are too predictable."

Jack: (Snorts her disaproval of the use of her name. She straightens the white lab coat that she picked up from the science labs.  Ever since she had agreed to dress more apropriately - for her students - she had taken to wearing light coloured jeans and a croped vest that sat over top and even more revealing shirt.  In order to cover up, she added the white coat to the ensemble.  The whole outfit had the effect of making her female students take a more active intrest in attending science lab.  True, it was so they could dress like the Crazy Bald Lady, but the faculty would take what they could get.) "You laugh now, but you haven't seen how he draws the asari to him like moths to a fuu... I mean fricking flame.  First it was that damn scientist Liara, at least she covered her ******... (Jack glares at Sara who seems to suddenly have pain in her stomach.  In reality, Sara was in pain from trying to stop herself from laughing.)  "Yea, yea. Teaspoon, and stove and black and all, I know it.  Are you going to listen or not?"

Sara: (Nods and straightens up.  She is still having a hard time maintianing a serious expression.)

Jack: "Then there was that emotionless stripper Samara.  So damn proper and upstanding, and yet she let her ****** hang out like bi.... I mean a dog in heat.  ****!  It's so damn hard to watch what I am saying.

Sara: (Giggles slightly at her friend's distress.  She knew that Jack was doing far better than when she first arrived.  The anger management classes were also helping.  Still, she would never forget when Jack had told the administration to **** off.  That earned her a legendary status among the staff at the facility.)

Jack: "Samara was all over him while he was helping her solve her daughter issues.  Then the ****** backed off when she snapped her little girl's neck.  Then there was that green one.... Shiala.  Shepard had saved her from some tentacled alien that was having it's way with her... Why are you laughing?"

Sara: (Now leaning against Jack's desk for support.) "You make it sound like some dirty hannar and asari porn vid!"

Jack: "How the **** should I know!  I only heard this from that wanker of a pilot they had on the Normandy.  Anyway, the second they meet up she was all over him!  She even hit on him!  Right infront of me!  I was this close to throwing her off the balcony!"

Sara: (Interrupting Jack.) "But Shepard swooped in and kissed you so passionately your mind went blank and you forgot about the evil green seductress!"

Jack: (Looks away and does not reply.)

Sara: (Peers closer at Jack to see she is blushing.)  "Oh my god!  He did! That is so romantic!

Jack: (Rolls her eyes, once again annoyed by her friends gluttonus appetite for all things romantic.)

(As the two are about to continue their conversation one of Jack's students runs into the room.)

Tabitha: "Ms. Nought!  Ms. Nought!  The principal is calling everyone to assembly!  The evacuation ships are on their way!  And guess what!  The Normandy is with them!"

Jack: (Her eyes widen as the thought of reuniting with Shepard races through her mind.) "That's good news Tabby, go get the others and we will meet outside the gym door." (Jack watches in amusement as Tabitha salutes her and runs off.  She notices that the young girl's skirt is a bit on the short side and frowns.)  "And lengthen out your skirt young lady!"

Sara: (Snickers.) "Well I had better be going... Got to have my class ready once they get back from lunch. And, of course, I have to look my best when that hunk of yours shows up." (She quickly makes a dash for the door, only to be on the receiving end of a gentle biotic thow that sends her sprawling out of the room.) "Ohh... Got to stop tempting fate like that..."

________________________________________________________________________________________

Well, that's it for this evening, I'll post the next part tomorrow if I can get my programming assignment done at a reasonable hour.

[android654]

I'm not liking this whole teacher angle they're giving her. I hope I'm proven wrong, but I can't see how they'll make it work.

[Mr. Tanner]

Continuing on from my last post.

(Later, Shepard stands in the hangar bay of the Normandy, checking over the shuttle before launch.  Unnoticed by him, Ashley walk up behind him.)

Ash: "Hey skipper, don't you think that you should leave that to the techs?"

Shepard: (Turns to Ash, placing the data pad on a rolling cart along with the tools.)  "I have to do something to keep busy.  With EDI now in control of most of the ships systems, I don't have much that needs doing.  This is a simple pick up and drop off assignment."

Ash: "Tell me about it, I'm as bored as a pacifist's pistol.  Honestly skipper, when are we going to start fighting back aginst these Reapers?"

Shepard: (Rolls his eys at his fellow SPECTRE.)  "And I heard such good things about you too... Anderson told me that you had gotten over this rash streak of yours."
 
Ash: (Grinning wickedly as she places a hand on her hip.)  "Old habbits Shepard.  Now that you're the highest ranking SPECTRE onboard, I have someone to **** and whine to again."

Shepard: (Groaning, he places his head in his hands.)  "Oh lucky me...."

(Suddenly the two are interupted by the intercom.)

Joker's Voice: "Comander, you need to get up to the bridge right away."

Shepard: (Glances at Ash, a worried expression clear upon his face.)

Ash: (Nodding to Shepard.) "Get up there skipper, I'll finish these checks.  It's probably nothing."

Shepard: (Nods to his team mate and quickly makes his way to the bridge.  Upon arriving, he exits the lift and quickly makes his way to Joker's station.  He can hear the pilot arguing with EDI.)

Joker: "Are you sure about these reading EDI?"

EDI: (Sounding somewhat miffed.) "My sensors are working at full capacity Jeff, there is a Reaper ship on a course to the academy.  It will arrive thirty minutes before us."

Shepard: "Can you tell what type of Reaper it is?"

EDI: "It is difficult to tell from this distance.  Estimates would place the ship as either a scout or a frigate."

Shepard: (Visibly stiffens.  Even a Reaper frigate was a formidable enemy.  Even if their three warships could dispatch the Reaper quickly, there was a chance that it could destroy some of the freighters that would be used to evacuate the colony.  And even if they decided to engage the enemy, the Reaper would still have half an hour to bombard the settlement from orbit.  They would also try to land assault units as well to take as many humans hostage as possible.) "Joker, push the Normandy to maximum FTL.  We need to get there as soon as possible."

Joker: (Flashes his commander a predatory grin.  It may not be much, but they were going to take the fight to the Reapers.)  "Aye Sir!"

(As Joker co-ordinates with engineering, the cries of protest from Gabriella Daniells can be heard over the intercom.)

Shepard: (Quickly turning to the weapons stations aft of the pilot's seat.) I want a firing solution on the Reaper BEFORE we drop out of FTL.  Let's send the Reapers a taste of their own medicine!"

(A corus of confirmations drift to Shepard's ears as he walks towards the galaxy map. He turns to his communications specialist.) "Send a message to the fleet, inform them of the situation and request that the freighters hang back untill they receive that all clear."

(The young woman nods and imediately goes to work.)

Shepard: (Activates the ship wide intercom.)  "Attention crew, the Reapers have sent a ship to 'Process' the Ascension colony.  With their limited defences, they won't stand a chance.  I want all ground teams prepped and ready in ten minutes.  Report to the shuttle and the Hammerhead for drop once we are in range.  Shepard out."

(On the bridge of the Orizaba the communications officer turns to Hannah Shepard as she receives the message from the Normandy.)

Comm Officer: "Captain, the Normandy has detected a Reaper frigate en route to the colony."

Hannah: (Sits up straighter in her chair and uncrosses her legs.  Her features narrow as she looks to her data pad, displaying the most recent updatas from the sensors and communications.) "All hands to battle stations.  Charge the Thanix cannon and be prepaired to fire on my mark.  Make sure we co-ordinate fire with the Normandy and the Perugia.  Have all the fire teams report to the shuttles for ground assault.  Heads up people, the Reapers are going to make us work for this one!"

(Meanwhile, with Jack at the academy, the students and the teachers had just been let out of the assembly.)

Sara: "Alright children!  Everyone form a line and make your way to the shuttles!  From there we will go to the space port to await evecuation."

Jack: (Motioning to her own students she quickly walks up behind her friend.) "****, it's going to be hard to leave this all behind."

Sara: (Nods.  She can't help but glance wistfully around as they slowly make their way towards the shuttle.) "I've spent the last eight years of my life this school teaching.  I can't believe I'm leaving it to be destroyed by the Reapers."

Jack: **** Sara, don't sound so depressed, it doesn't suit you.  Once Shepard gets everyone together, he is going to win this war and tear the Reapers a new ass.  It won't be long before you're back here teaching again."

Sara: (Despite Jack's comforting words, she still frowns.)  "Maybe, but what will be the cost?  You know some of the older students show great biotic potiential.  How many of them will be called to fight for the galaxy?  How many of them will be asked to kill?  Will Shepard ask for us to join as well?"

Jack: (Begins to answer in the negative, only to stop before she can start.  She knew, possibly better than anyone in the colony, how powerful even young untrained biotics could be.  Some of the older students had shown suprising potential to become Alliance adepts, or vanguards.  Would Shepard ask her to encourage the older students to fight with the Alliance soldiers?  Could she even do that?  A year ago she would have said yes.. But now, she wasn't so sure.  There was no way in hell she would let her own class be forced to go to war.  She wanted to believe that Shepard would find another way...)

Sara: (Interupting Jack's thoughts.) "Hey, we are almost at the shuttle."

(As the two women board the shuttle with their charges, Jack can't help but take one last look out the door at the place that had been her home.  Looking back to her students, she can't repress the chill slowly making its way up her spine.)

________________________________________________________________________________________
So, another section written.  What do you guys think?  I'm going to be honest and say that I have no idea how good this is.  I am trying to portray a Jack that has grown and matured somewhat as a result of the responsibility of teaching young biotics just like her.  There are times I feel like I have nailed the character, and there are others that I feel like I might have gone a bit far.  Let me know what you think, and if you want me to continue.  Suggestions are always welcome.  I may not include you idea directly, but know that it will have gone a long way to stirring my creative juices.  Take it easy, and have a good one.  I'll try to get the next part up by tomorrow evening.

 

Modifié par Mr. Tanner, 06 février 2012 - 05:14 .

[Tazzmission]

Amieera wrote...

Nightfable wrote...

Oh my god! I soooo ship them now. No matter how impossible it may be.


Also, any good fanart of new ME3 Jack other then that We Can Do Itish one?

oh god please let it be riddick in me3 as secret squadmate and yall know that would kick so much ***

[spirosz]

Mr. Tanner wrote...

________________________________________________________________________________________
So, another section written.  What do you guys think?  I'm going to be honest and say that I have no idea how good this is.  I am trying to portray a Jack that has grown and matured somewhat as a result of the responsibility of teaching young biotics just like her.  There are times I feel like I have nailed the character, and there are others that I feel like I might have gone a bit far.  Let me know what you think, and if you want me to continue.  Suggestions are always welcome.  I may not include you idea directly, but know that it will have gone a long way to stirring my creative juices.  Take it easy, and have a good one.  I'll try to get the next part up by tomorrow evening.

I really liked it, it's neat seeing it from two different perspectives; Shepard and Jack's.  I'm not too good at writing so I can't really come up with any encouraging ideas except for keep going! 

[Tenauri]

yorkj86 wrote...

At first, I didn't like it, either.  However, I do think that Jack would want to make sure no biotic children are mistreated and neglected just for being biotic.  Teachers have an impact on our lives, and the great ones can affect the type of person we become.  Jack as a teacher of biotics seems like a fair combination.

Anyway, I know it's been stated many times how Jack has big, deep, soulful eyes, and this song, Eyes, by Kaskade, reminds me of Jack.

RE: Your signature. Are there any full sized pictures/fan-art of Jack wearing glasses like that? I'm a sucker for that kind of thing.

[SlottsMachine]

^

Its just a screenshot with hipster glasses added in via photoshop.

Here's the one that I had stored away.

Modifié par GeneralSlotts193, 06 février 2012 - 04:21 .

[Tenauri]

It's beautiful.

[What a Succulent Ass]

GeneralSlotts193 wrote...

^

Its just a screenshot with hipster glasses added in via photoshop.

Here's the one that I had stored away.
-snip-

"I hated Cerberus before it was cool."

[BillsVengenace]

ME2 TIP: By not talking to Jacob or Subject Zero you can kill both birds with one stone.

[spirosz]

BillsVengenace wrote...

ME2 TIP: By not talking to Jacob or Subject Zero you can kill both birds with one stone.

I see what you did there, clever. 



See what I did there ^, clever!

I've never seen this photo before, might as well post it. 

[Mr. Tanner]

I'm sorry! I'm sorry! I know I said I would get the next part up! I have assignments comming out my ears! And a FemShepxLiara fic that just won't shut up! I swear! It's running arround my head like a screaming 5 year old! I'll try to get the next section up for tomorrow.

[android654]

spiros9110 wrote...
I've never seen this photo before, might as well post it. 

I love crazy skinny hands:wub:

[SlottsMachine]

I love the Waterboy, some of Sandler's best work. Another part that reminds me of Jack is during the big game, Vicki tells Lynn Swann what the score will be and he just laughs it off thinking silly girl. When her prediction starts coming true Swann looks over at her, and she gives him this stare and I could see her thinking 'I ****ing told you', while a rattled Swann looks away.

[shaneofthedead]

Random Jerkface wrote...

GeneralSlotts193 wrote...

Jack joins the Council.

what is that from!?!??!?!

[android654]

Sundown Native wrote...

GeneralSlotts193 wrote...

I love the Waterboy, some of Sandler's best work. Another part that reminds me of Jack is during the big game, Vicki tells Lynn Swann what the score will be and he just laughs it off thinking silly girl. When her prediction starts coming true Swann looks over at her, and she gives him this stare and I could see her thinking 'I ****ing told you', while a rattled Swann looks away.

Heh. Even the words she said sounds like something Jack would say.



"And what made you come up with that guess?"

"Guess? That ain't no guess. That's what it's gonna be."

You both forgot the most Jackesque thing about Fairuza Balk. She's got an evil face.

Modifié par android654, 07 février 2012 - 12:26 .

[Mr_DeMille]

shaneofthedead wrote...

Random Jerkface wrote...

GeneralSlotts193 wrote...

Jack joins the Council.

what is that from!?!??!?!

www.youtube.com/watch