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[Nightfable]

Hey GothamLord, I love your story! Please keep writing!! <3

Since we're talking about fanfics, mine is on fanfiction.net too if anyone wants to take a look at it. There's lots of sappiness and Emo Shepard is emo. Here's an excerpt from my 2nd chapter:

http://www.fanfictio...Never_Let_Me_Go

In a foul mood, he turned around as his fingers left the computer terminal. His eyes locked on specialist Traynor - he sent her a polite nod and made his way towards the elevator.

His legs automatically knew where to go. He reached the med-bay with minutes to spare. The motion sensors instantly registering his presence and the door swished open to reveal a joyful Salarian doctor singing to himself.

"Hello Doctor," Shepard said with a smile tugging at his lips.

"Commander," he bowed his head slightly and went back to his work, humming.

"Shepard! Make him stop!" came Jack's angry muffled voice.

As he made his way further into the room, it was hard not to notice the large draped form of the krogan sitting quietly on one of the beds.

Parallel to her, on the other side of the room, was Jack tightly covering her face and ears with her white pillow.

The krogan female chuckled, mirth glinting in her eyes, "The Salarian doctor has been singing me songs. I very much enjoy them. But I don't think your friend here feels the same way."

[Udalango]

GothamLord wrote...

I have spoken with victims of it before in my job. Some move on from it much easier than others. Jack strikes me as some that refuses to consider herself a victim anymore. Its a statement said more as humor than a realistic consideration that wouldn't likely be spoken as casually. Of course if there is a majority of opinions that agree with the word usage being inappropriate I have no real issue changing it. I do not consider changing my work to appeal to the entertainment of others to be a question of my artistic integrity.

I know only one girl who has.  She has gotten better but its still one of those tings that just doesnt get talked about.  Maybe thats why I feel this way about it.  It just kinda made me feel like...ehhh in the story.  Once again, minor complaint.  Other than that I love it.  Especially the Vega part

[WRXtacy]

Nightfable please hurry and finish chapter 2!!!

Gotham also really good stuff. I like reading fan fiction and seeing everyone's interpretation of the characters. Both fanfics are really well done so far. 

Modifié par WRXtacy, 27 mars 2012 - 08:20 .

[Nightfable]

WRXtacy wrote...

Nightfable please hurry and finish chapter 2!!!

I've uploaded the 2n chapter, but for some reason I'm getting an error message. Is anyone able to view it?

[Udalango]

Nightfable wrote...

WRXtacy wrote...

Nightfable please hurry and finish chapter 2!!!

I've uploaded the 2n chapter, but for some reason I'm getting an error message. Is anyone able to view it?

I did and it was mucho bueno. 

[istle]

Nightfable wrote...

WRXtacy wrote...

Nightfable please hurry and finish chapter 2!!!

I've uploaded the 2n chapter, but for some reason I'm getting an error message. Is anyone able to view it?

I can't seem to view chapter 2. Says text not found.

[Aver88]

I liked Aftermath and I don't mind that you used "rape". However I prefer fanfics that take place before ending. It's because I still can't accept ending of ME3.

[Udalango]

Ok now chapter 2 is gone. I just read it though. thats freaking weird

[Nightfable]

Udalango wrote...

Ok now chapter 2 is gone. I just read it though. thats freaking weird

I tried replacing the chapter... that's really wierd. Maybe I need to give it 30 minutes or so.

Thanks for the positive feedback, btw guys!!

[WRXtacy]

It tells me to wait like 15 minutes. Text not found.

[GothamLord]

Aver88 wrote...

I liked Aftermath and I don't mind that you used "rape". However I prefer fanfics that take place before ending. It's because I still can't accept ending of ME3.

Well I am partly using the Indoc theory used in my own way.   I dont accept the current endings as they are either. Of course I will refuse to accept ME3 being the end of Shepard/Jack regardless so I'd likely be alterning the ending regardless even if it had made sense.   

[istle]

I managed to load the second chapter, Nightfable. Reading commencing... now.

[WRXtacy]

w00ttt!!! Got it to load!

[istle]

Interesting read so far. Liked the banter for one thing. Though "the" proposal felt out of place... but them settling down feels like a real possibility. Jacks emotional side was pretty well done in my opinion. Looking forward to more

I did notice that you "saved" the Shadow Broker ship from being destroyed. Seems to me that is going to drive the plot later in the story since Cerberus wants the students as well as the ship.

[Aver88]

Daily those of spam: :innocent:

The most important thing:

Go and write few words in official feedback topic. It may be short or long, whatever. Just ask for Jack.
http://social.biowar...ex/10098213/201

If you know an artist ask him to make an fan art that will be sent to BioWare HQ:
http://social.biowar...90/189#10685776

Ask them for it via Twitter:
Official ME twitter
Jessica Merizan Community Manager of BW 
Mac Walters Lead Writter of ME
Casey Hudson Executive Producer of ME

Show your support in this topics:
DLC about Jack 

[Bruddajakka]

So I've come to the conclusion I rather like Jack's new attitude. In me2 it came across like she was trying too hard.

[Nightfable]

istle wrote...

Interesting read so far. Liked the banter for one thing. Though "the" proposal felt out of place... but them settling down feels like a real possibility. Jacks emotional side was pretty well done in my opinion. Looking forward to more

I did notice that you "saved" the Shadow Broker ship from being destroyed. Seems to me that is going to drive the plot later in the story since Cerberus wants the students as well as the ship.

Thanks, I might remove the proposal and keep it for later.

[GothamLord]

Nightfable wrote...

Hey GothamLord, I love your story! Please keep writing!! <3

Thanks  :happy:    Enjoying yours as well though I admit I am of the train of thought that Jack and Shepard getting married is one of those things that would likely never actually happen.   Maybe the tattoos like I've mentioned before but an actual tie the knot kinda ceremony... never happen.  Thats just me though for what its worth.  

Modifié par GothamLord, 27 mars 2012 - 10:08 .

[Aver88]

True reason why there is no good ending:
http://i43.tinypic.com/29wv3i8.png

[WRXtacy]

I could see them getting married...just not formally. Kind of like a marriage whilst taking fire on some far off remote planet. 


Nightfable I finishe your story so far it's really good. I have to agree that the marriage proposal feels a bit out of place that early in the story. Maybe instead of marry me it just says "I love you - Shepard" or something like that. idk your the writer not me. And I feel like a dick for even critiquing you when I can barely write a coherent paragraph. 


But either way really good writing. I'm impressed. 

Modifié par WRXtacy, 27 mars 2012 - 10:52 .

[Nightfable]

GothamLord wrote...

Nightfable wrote...

Hey GothamLord, I love your story! Please keep writing!! <3

Thanks  :happy:    Enjoying yours as well though I admit I am of the train of thought that Jack and Shepard getting married is one of those things that would likely never actually happen.   Maybe the tattoos like I've mentioned before but an actual tie the knot kinda ceremony... never happen.  Thats just me though for what its worth.  

I can't help it, I'm too much of a romantic. My Shepard is realizing that he doesn't want to lose Jack and in the wake of the galaxy's destruction, the thought of marriage is giving him a promise of hope -- even though the odds are against them. This is ME3 jack, so she has grown in some ways. That's why I thought it possible. 

[istle]

When I said that the idea of Jack and Shepard settling down feeling like a real possibility, I didn't necessarily mean marriage btw. I find it a little difficult picturing them married. There are a lot of couples that simply don't feel the need to get married to show commitment to the other. They simply emote trust toward one another. Bearing any kind of accessory perhaps or tattoo which Jack already has

Modifié par istle, 27 mars 2012 - 10:52 .

[Aver88]

Yeah, I don't know if marriage fit Jack. I think it's kinda too formal for her.

[Nightfable]

Aver88 wrote...

Yeah, I don't know if marriage fit Jack. I think it's kinda too formal for her.

Alright, I'm going to fix it. ^^

What should be engraved on the weapon instead? Just, 'I Love you'? Should I just remove that part out?