dtrain24 wrote...
Welcome! Nice to meet you!
And if you're looking for a really good artist, Asakawa is your go-to girl.
Good to meet you all too!
Since I'm not sure exactly how to get ahold of her, I'll post the idea here for posterity's sake, and y'all can critique it for me (since it's kinda also a creative writing exercise).
Alright, so keep in mind that it's a comic:
[Setting: Shepard sits at a table with a blonde-haired girl, maybe seven years old, there's a big pile of candy on the table and they each have two cards in front of them]-
*Girl looks at her cards with a furrowed brow* "Hit me" she says.
-"But you already have 18, Eve, you should probably stay" says Shepard
-"I
said 'hit me'" says Eve
-Panel Break-
[Shepard reluctantly flips one more card, and, with a surprised look on his face, reveals a 3]
-Panel Break-
[The two look at each other, Shepard giving Eve "the look," Eve returning it with a beeming smile]
-Panel Break-
-"Mom's been teaching you to count cards, hasn't she?" says Shepard
-"Eyup!" says Eve
-Panel Break--"Don't act so surpised Hon," says Miranda, coming from behind Shepard and placing her head on top of his, wrapping her arms aroud his shoulders, "you know we don't gamble..."
-"...We win!" Eve shouts, completing the phrase.
-Panel Break-
[Eve and Miranda smile at each other, Shepard looks dejected]-Panel Break-
-"But Miri, that takes the fun out of black jack!" shouts Shepard, as Miranda walks away
-"Who said anything about having fun?" Miranda calls back
-Panel Break-
[Shepard puts his head on the table as Eve begins raking in her candy winnings]-"Don't worry dad, I'm having fun!" Eve whispers
-"That's good, sweetheart," replies Shepard
***
Man, it's been a while since I've written for fun, refreshing really, haha
Modifié par CEO Fun Buttons, 15 juillet 2012 - 05:26 .