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[drwells123]

jtav wrote...

Some friendly advice:

The time to get
anxious about what you're readers think about a story is after you've
written it. I'd tell you to write for yourself entirely, but that would
be hypocritical. Write because you have a story that simply must be
told. There are stories I do that are popular, and there are stories
that are barely a blip on the radar. I have no way to know which is
which until after I've posted. Readers are fickle masters that owe you
absolutely nothing. The only person you're guaranteed to please is you.
Do that first. I've tried focus testing plots in an attempt to get more
comments. It didn't work. Portrait, I write for myself. I really had no
idea that there would be any interest in a story where Miranda was
effectively disabled and Shepard wasn't badass. It's one of my more
popular stories, but it wasn't written to be popular.

100% truth. One thing I have noticed - the stories/chapters I've written that get the most hits are the ones I had the most fun writing. If I'm writing something that feels like work, I figure it's going to be work to read too, and I'll back up and look for another direction.

[drwells123]

Rdubs wrote...

Also, part of the reason I wanted to do a kept-the-base fan fic was because it didn't seem like there were any written where the base was kept. Then I just remembered jtav's excellent one - Shadow War - captured much better than anything I could create. So I think I'm going to switch back to blowing the base and re-write it. It should also allow a lead-in to their first adventure, which the current Chapter 1 doesn't do. Curious to hear thoughts, especially from jtav, of the current piece though.

This is more general than specific, but I'll post it anyway in case it helps. It's very intimidating putting up fanfic for the first time, and easy for doubt to set it if you don't hear feedback right away. Don't worry about that at all. As jtav says, readers are totally unpredictable. If a month goes by and you haven't gotten any feedback, that still doesn't mean your writing isn't good - it just means you haven't posted it to enough places. BSN is slow because of the holidays, people step away from their computers at the wrong moment, all kinds of things happen. For my part I'm buried in work and am criminally behind on stories that I want to read and review (jtav's included), let alone write. At some  point tonight I'll try to write something helpful rather than a generic "this is good".

Also, thinking that author X does better with idea Y than you could is never a reason to not go ahead and write about idea Y. The idea is maybe 10% of the story and what you bring to it is the other 90%, so by definition there isn't going to be that much overlap between your take on it and author X's (unless you plagiarize him/her). If I see another story with the same idea I'm planning to write, I just avoid reading it until after I'm finished with my story, so I don't borrow from it (subconsciously or otherwise).

Modifié par drwells123, 31 décembre 2011 - 02:06 .

[alikey00]

Rdubs wrote...

Well judging by the lack of responses I'd say this attempt at starting a Shepard/Miranda fan fic wasn't very well received.
www.fanfiction.net/s/7688555/1/Mass_Effect_Aftermath

I'm thinking about re-doing it to have the setting be blowing up the collector base.  But part of the reason I wanted to keep it was because I think it would  be more likely that Cerberus would be willing to "write off" the Normandy and not try to take it back (because the collector base would be a much bigger asset) as opposed to if he blew up the collector base, in which case they'd certainly want the Normandy back.

I really like what you have written.

[Dr. Doctor]

@Rdubs

What you have is good, the key thing is to keep writing. As with any other skill the more you practice the better you get.

[jtav]

And, if it's any consolation, I'm having problems with Portrait. I wish they'd hurry up romantically.

[drwells123]

jtav wrote...

And, if it's any consolation, I'm having problems with Portrait. I wish they'd hurry up romantically.

Eh, romantic tension is a good thing. My characters tend to let nature take its course a little faster than it should

[Skullheart]

@jtav
It must be hard having a 20 year Miranda being interested in a 16 years Shepard. She is a full grown adult (more mentally than physically) and Shepard is a traumatized teenager.

What I liked from your last chap is that the idea crossed her head, but she is convincing herself to not do it, not taking advantage from him.

What I'm looking forward of your fic is when Shep discovers that Miranda is Claire.

[jtav]

Well, I think we're about 5-6 more chapters away from the first kiss, much more for sex and even more with Claire. And she's four years older. Enough to worry her, but he can and will meaningfully consent.

[Dr. Doctor]

@Jtav

I'm willing to bet that Matt gets quite a shock when he wakes up on Lazarus Station only to see Miranda's face.

[alikey00]

Speaking of the most beautiful face


Miranda is beautiful.

Modifié par alikey00, 31 décembre 2011 - 06:09 .

[AgitatedLemon]

Miranda is beautiful.

That she is.

[viserion]

jtav wrote...

Well, I think we're about 5-6 more chapters away from the first kiss, much more for sex and even more with Claire. And she's four years older. Enough to worry her, but he can and will meaningfully consent.

I'm totally okay with this. :happy: I honestly like tension more than romance, but that's because a lot of the fanfics I've read tend to turn relationships into fields of rainbows and bunnies (or in other cases, it's like the couple does nothing but have sex). Which makes me really sad because the tension between Miranda and Shepard doesn't have to die just because they're in a relationship; things can still be interesting if they're in one!

On a different note, I've got a little under seven hours left in 2011. Have a Miranda screen, everyone!

Modifié par Wintersect, 31 décembre 2011 - 09:17 .

[AgitatedLemon]

Dr. Doctor wrote...

I'm not really disappointed with the fact that Miranda isn't going to be on the squad. I'd much rather have all of the really good interaction, character development, romance advancement, etc in one big chunk rather than having hours of "I'm busy right now Shepard, I'll come by when it's quiet okay?" 

They could have just done what they did to Mordin and gave her an ass ton of idle chat dialogue.

[Skullheart]

This might be off-topic. I just watched the last episode of Chuck. Their writers are lacking imagination. All the plot is like a copy of Miranda story.

[alikey00]

@Wintersect you have saved us the life. when you published that nice image . I wanted publish one but i couldn't 

Modifié par alikey00, 31 décembre 2011 - 04:04 .

[AgitatedLemon]

alikey00 wrote...

@Wintersect you have saved us the life. when you published that nice image. I wanted publish one but i couldn't.

The more images, the better!

[trynell]

AgitatedLemon wrote...

alikey00 wrote...

@Wintersect you have saved us the life. when you published that nice image. I wanted publish one but i couldn't.

The more images, the better!

We want more images 

[AgitatedLemon]

trynell wrote...

AgitatedLemon wrote...

alikey00 wrote...

@Wintersect you have saved us the life. when you published that nice image. I wanted publish one but i couldn't.

The more images, the better!

We want more images 

Agreed. To be honest though, the image up above is kinda bad (imo). The lighting on it is just horrid. It isn't the screenshot taker's fault, but it's still a bad shot.

[alikey00]

AgitatedLemon wrote...

trynell wrote...

AgitatedLemon wrote...

alikey00 wrote...

@Wintersect you have saved us the life. when you published that nice image. I wanted publish one but i couldn't.

The more images, the better!

We want more images 

Agreed. To be honest though, the image up above is kinda bad (imo). The lighting on it is just horrid. It isn't the screenshot taker's fault, but it's still a bad shot.

the fault is of bioware because it didn't give us new images <_<

[AgitatedLemon]

alikey00 wrote...

AgitatedLemon wrote...

trynell wrote...

AgitatedLemon wrote...

alikey00 wrote...

@Wintersect you have saved us the life. when you published that nice image. I wanted publish one but i couldn't.

The more images, the better!

We want more images 

Agreed. To be honest though, the image up above is kinda bad (imo). The lighting on it is just horrid. It isn't the screenshot taker's fault, but it's still a bad shot.

the fault is of bioware because it didn't give us new images <_<

No, but Google images can!

[alikey00]

AgitatedLemon wrote...

alikey00 wrote...

AgitatedLemon wrote...

trynell wrote...

AgitatedLemon wrote...

alikey00 wrote...

@Wintersect you have saved us the life. when you published that nice image. I wanted publish one but i couldn't.

The more images, the better!

We want more images 

Agreed. To be honest though, the image up above is kinda bad (imo). The lighting on it is just horrid. It isn't the screenshot taker's fault, but it's still a bad shot.

the fault is of bioware because it didn't give us new images <_<

No, but Google images can!

I am talking about the her image of your redesign like the character of ME3  
is sad not to have pictures.

Modifié par alikey00, 31 décembre 2011 - 05:40 .

[who would know]

These are pretty cool:



Images by Spi-ritual-ity.

Modifié par who would know, 31 décembre 2011 - 05:57 .

[alikey00]

 Oh My God! this picture is really amazing 

Modifié par alikey00, 31 décembre 2011 - 06:10 .

[android654]

The 2nd is more true to form, but I'm not fond of the 50's hairstyle she's using there. She looks more like what you'd expect her mother to look like.

[flemm]

I like them both as concepts. I think Spirituality is the same artist who did the XO Lawson piece that I like a lot.