Phoenix NL wrote...
Lizardviking wrote...
Hey everyone. I am currently writing a fanfic that includes a slightly rewritten Horizon cameo, however I have currently stopped as I wondered on how Kaidan would react to certain lines. Anyone willing to read a small part of my fanfic and give ideas or comments? 
I'll have a read if you'd like 
Okay. I am only going to post a very small part of it for certain reasons, if you feel like you need more of the fic for better context. Please say so.
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“I wanted to believe that the rumors that you were alive, but I never
expected anything like this.” Kaidan yelled out at Shepard, he was
filled with hurt and anger. A small pause was held before he continued,
before he made his final accusation.
“You betrayed and your back on everything we stood for!” He finally said, his disgust for Cerberus had gotten the better of him
now.
“Betrayal?” Shepard immediately snapped back the split second
Kaidan ended. He had lost most of his composure the moment Kaidan
accused him of betrayal. Shepard continued “If you want to talk about
betrayal then look around you Kaidan, the Alliance has failed these
colonies!” Shepard gestured at the scene surrounding them, what should
have been a thriving colony was now almost turned into a ghost town.
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Now. My problem is that I am not sure how Kaidan exactly would react after Shepard's comeback I had the idea that he would simply shake his head and silence and turn away (this is near the end of the conversation), but I am not sure if it would be in-character for Kaidan to do that.
And if you want to know. Shepard and Kaidan are just good friend in this fanfic.