I liked the chapter, SJNKD. I agree with you, your sister gave plenty of details in the last paragraphs...
On a different note, I was wondering how silly the ME3 writers idea of having Allers on the Normandy SR-2 is. The interviews in ME 3 are quite "irrelevant" in the sense that nothing critical is revealed. In reality, this would be the case 100% of the time. The Alliance wouldn't let their personnel on a war vessel go on an interview completely "off the cuff", all questions would have to be listed and approved by someone, no important details like full names, family details or participation in specific past operations would be easily divulged.
Also, one line didn't feel right (constructive criticism, and being nitpicky, I know), I don't think Williams would go on record saying she wanted to punch her commanding officer, not even in an informal, half-joking statement. Which also leads me to a question, Was it common knowledge in the ME universe that Shepard had actually been killed? I know some characters use this fact for shtick comedy lines, but I mean if the Alliance and the Council openly divulged info about the Lazarus project and Shepard's temporary ties to Cerberus.
I do see how Joker could be interviewed and make comments about his own beard, nothing that the enemy can listen to and use against him.
Ok, enough ranting, I don't want to be that guy that complains too much. It was a fun read and I'm making progress with my own chapter as well. Cheers!
Hi, I'm actually the sister. He shouldn't leave himself logged in when falls asleep on the couch lol.
I just thought perhaps two years, no contact. I thought Ashley might want to punch him, horizon sucked and I try to make it the best I can, so I thought I chuck it in and see what people think. Thanks for the advice, I don't get any reviews, except my brothers obviously from the way he talks on this. Being nosy, don't mind me.
Joker has always needed something about the beard, he's the only character who has one I believe other than Shepard's stubble. And well, full names I think can be mentioned. Let's be honest, the crew is pretty famous so anyone on board would be well known i think. I just classified Traynors job because it's security risks.
I've also gone with Shepard stating that he died just because it's easier for the public to understand but he hasn't explained what brought him back. Leave it a mystery I suppose.
And my brother just gets creeped out because he has no sex life anymore lol. I just read what other people write and take their core ideas and use them to help me write a decent sex scene.