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[Graceyn]

I just wanted to drop in a little new art for....

ToP




Original

Modifié par Graceyn, 29 septembre 2011 - 04:14 .

[CptData]

Just a snippet of my WIP-fanfic. Its
setting is based on another fanfic I read once, but that's it.

Shepard wasn't here. In fact, he was
waiting in a prison cell for his trial in two weeks. Ashley stand in
the middle of the cabin of her former lover. The huge double bed took
a large portion of available space and she wondered, if Shepard had
shared it with another woman. Miranda? Jack? Or even one of those
alien women? The longer she thought about it, the more she felt an
awful combination of jealousy and guilt. Guilt, because of the harsh
words she had thrown at him on Horizon. Jealousy, since Shepard could
have seen it as a break up – and got over it already.

Ashley turned her head right. The
commander's computer was still online, Shepard still was logged in.
But it was something different that caught her attention. It was a
picture of herself next to the computer – it was damaged, a crack
went through the display. Unable to guess what could have broken the
digital photo frame, she finally checked Shepard's computer. His
extranet-mailbox was open, several dozens of mails weren't read yet.
There was also a folder for archived mails – it contained just one.
It was the mail she had send him just hours after the end of the
Horizon-crisis.
And Shepard never had written an
answer.
That was something she won't forgive.
She had hoped for a sign of regret and love. The Shepard she loved
was dead. For 2 long years now. And the Shepard working for Cerberus
just had her lover's face, but not his soul, not his love.

Somehow she managed to hold back tears.
Ashley continued browsing through Shepard's mailbox in the hope to
find some evidence the man she loved was still alive. There wasn't
any. With one exception: a single mail in Shepard's draft folder.


Hi Ash,

It's been a long time for you. Two long
years for you and just a couple of weeks for me. Never thought of
that. I can't even imagine how you felt when seeing me again.

A lot of things have changed. You moved
on with your life, I died and was brought back by Cerberus. Saying
we're still the same people is wrong. Neither you nor I are truly the
same.

Everything changes so fast. Now I'm on
a mission for Cerberus. We're searching for the reasons why the
collectors are abducting human colonies. My guess is on something so
horrible you can't imagine. It seems certain it's related to the
Reapers but no one can solve that puzzle. Right now my crew is
preparing the Normandy for a trip through the Omega-4 relay. It's
said no ship ever came back – and I feel as if I'm on another
suicide mission. Most likely it is. Nobody knows what's behind the
relay, so we might run into a trap. Or a waiting fleet of collectors.


Do I still have feelings for you, Ash?
I know the answer, but it seems wrong to tell you, I can't help it.
When you're ready, send me a mail with place and date – and I'll
see if I can make it.


Ash ... I can't promise you we're going
to see each other again. I can't even promise I'll come back from my
mission ... if you don't receive a mail within a month after this
one, don't wait for me ...


---


'scuse for bad grammar ... was typed quite quickly and english isn't my own language *g*

Modifié par CptData, 29 septembre 2011 - 04:31 .

[UrusVerra]

CptData, you made my dream real, I just read Shep's answer to Ash! )) Thanks)

[MegaBadExample]

Wait. Did I miss a dialog war?! Damn!

@CptData Thanks for the tease! Ha, I'd try to write something, but I'm just too lazy D:

[Mr. Brainheart]

@CptData; I think I'm going to enjoy the full fic, very much so.

@Mega; You could always try, I like your dialogs. Just saying, since I also thought I was too lazy, but when I was bored I decided you just start writing something. It's a learing experience for me. (And personally I find it quite rewarding.)

[CptData]

Thanks guys. And sorry for bad formatting ... seems it fails when copying stuff from Word to forum

Anyhow, it's not even halfway done. Hmmm ... so it'll take some time.

[UrusVerra]

Well, I attempted to make my dialogue.

Shep meets Ash first time after Horison.

*Normandy in the Citadel's dock. Anderson and Vega are aboard. Shepard waits his departure to Earth.*
*Debriefing room*
Shep: What are we waiting for?
Anderson: The Council decided to take control over your departure. They are sending a Spectre.
Shep: Wonderful. You know, two last times I met a colleagues I had to kill him and her.
Anderson: Her?.. You mean, it was you who killed Vasir?
Shep: Yeah.
Vega: Who will this Spectre be, actually? One more humans-hating turian?
Anderson: No. She is a human.
Shep: She? I am intrigued.
Anderson: When you died, someone had to fill your place as human Spectre. I made sure that it was someone whom we, and you, could trust.
Shep: Don't tell me she is...
*Door opens, Ash comes in.*
Ash: Hey there.
Shep: ASH?
*Some time later*
Shep *shouting*: …so first you investigate me on Horison, and now you work as my guardian!
Ash *yelling*: I wouldn't had to 'investigate' you, if you weren't working for terrorists!
Shep: I am not a terrorist!
Ash: Yeah? So you didn't blew up and entire system, killing more people than Saren ever did?!.
Vega: Er... Admiral, they started fifth round. Shouldn't we stop them?
Anderson: It's okay, lieutenant. Let 'em off steam.

[CptData]

Kelly: I can feel bad vibrations.
Joker: Yup.
Kelly: And I have a feeling it's related with our commander.
Joker: Yup. EDI, how are they doing?
EDI: Do you really want to know, Jeff?
Joker: No.
EDI: I'll show you anyway.
Joker: *sigh* Okay. Kelly, you might want to see that ...
EDI: Switching to captain's cabin.

Ashley: ... and you NEVER EVER wrote a letter in the last two years!
Shepard: I understand you've got a bad feeling and ...
Ashley: No, no, no, Mister. You do understand nothing. NO!
Shepard: Ash, I was dead. Two long years. You can't ...
Ashley: Dead? You call it dead? Coward! You just couldn't stand the idea of having a relationship!
Shepard: What? What in heaven gives you THAT idea? I was DEAD. KIA. You saw how the Normandy got destroyed! I gave my life to save Joker!
Ashley: And how comes you're still alive?
Shepard: Just read my computer again. You've read that draft mail, am I right?
Ashley: Yes ... I did ...
Shepard: I was dead. Killed by the collectors. Cerberus brought me back. I hadn't to live two years without you, just a couple of weeks. I was dead, Ashley.

EDI: Enough peeping.
Joker: Jeez and I thought my mom could go crazy.
Kelly: Your mom? Wanna talk about it?
Joker: No. And you don't know anything about it. Okay?
EDI: Humans.
Garrus: Some is yelling up there. I can't do my calibrations!
Joker: Show's over, but I'm sure EDI took a record of that little argument our boss has with his former lover.
Garrus: Don't care. Need to calibrate.
Kelly: Sometimes I seriously believe TIM put me here into my very own hell.

Modifié par CptData, 29 septembre 2011 - 06:31 .

[kael_159]

hahah I love you guys! The dialogues are great! Please keep them coming!

[CptData]

Shepard: We won't come back, Ashley. The more I'm thinking of it, the more I understand ...
Ashley: ... that we're going to lose?
Shepard: Yes. I can see them already. Just need to close my eyes - and I see them. Reapers. Thousands. No one can withstand the storm.
Ashley: I'm with you, Skipper. Just don't lose your faith ... we can and we will win this war.
Shepard: You don't understand, you can't see what I am seeing. No one can. No one.
Ashley: Don't give up. You can't. For the galaxy's sake.
Shepard: How? I can keep up my confidence when talking to the crew ...
Ashley: And you're doing a great job. If there's any man in this galaxy who can defeat the Reapers, then it's you, Skipper. You and the team.
Shepard: You're right. Why did I even got those dark thoughts?
Ashley: It is okay. Other would fall, run away, just give up when facing what you saw. It's okay to feel beaten down. But don't let that overwhelm you ... never.
Shepard: Did I ever thanked you for being here, on my side?
Ashley: Just a hundred times since I came on board.
Shepard: Thank you.
Ashley: Now get up and fight. We have to win a war and time is running out. MOVE!
Shepard: You love doing that, don't you?
Ashley: MOVE, MOVE, MOVE!
Shepard: Yes Ma'am!

I should stop listening to 2 Steps From Hell ... those guys are epic. Can't stop writing such stuff

Modifié par CptData, 29 septembre 2011 - 07:20 .

[PMC65]

Graceyn wrote...

I just wanted to drop in a little new art for....

ToP




Original

Really like this! Thanks!!!!!

[MegaBadExample]

CptData wrote...

Shepard: We won't come back, Ashley. The more I'm thinking of it, the more I understand ...
Ashley: ... that we're going to lose?
Shepard: Yes. I can see them already. Just need to close my eyes - and I see them. Reapers. Thousands. No one can withstand the storm.
Ashley: I'm with you, Skipper. Just don't lose your faith ... we can and we will win this war.
Shepard: You don't understand, you can't see what I am seeing. No one can. No one.
Ashley: Don't give up. You can't. For the galaxy's sake.
Shepard: How? I can keep up my confidence when talking to the crew ...
Ashley: And you're doing a great job. If there's any man in this galaxy who can defeat the Reapers, then it's you, Skipper. You and the team.
Shepard: You're right. Why did I even got those dark thoughts?
Ashley: It is okay. Other would fall, run away, just give up when facing what you saw. It's okay to feel beaten down. But don't let that overwhelm you ... never.
Shepard: Did I ever thanked you for being here, on my side?
Ashley: Just a hundred times since I came on board.
Shepard: Thank you.
Ashley: Now get up and fight. We have to win a war and time is running out. MOVE!
Shepard: You love doing that, don't you?
Ashley: MOVE, MOVE, MOVE!
Shepard: Yes Ma'am!

I should stop listening to 2 Steps From Hell ... those guys are epic. Can't stop writing such stuff

 MOVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

God, you're awesome man.

[Graceyn]

PMC65 wrote...

Graceyn wrote...

I just wanted to drop in a little new art for....

ToP

/snip

Original

Really like this! Thanks!!!!!

You bet .  I think she looks just beautiful.

[Mr. Brainheart]

CptData wrote...

Kelly: I can feel bad vibrations.
Joker: Yup.
Kelly: And I have a feeling it's related with our commander.
Joker: Yup. EDI, how are they doing?
EDI: Do you really want to know, Jeff?
Joker: No.
EDI: I'll show you anyway.
Joker: *sigh* Okay. Kelly, you might want to see that ...
EDI: Switching to captain's cabin.

Ashley: ... and you NEVER EVER wrote a letter in the last two years!
Shepard: I understand you've got a bad feeling and ...
Ashley: No, no, no, Mister. You do understand nothing. NO!
Shepard: Ash, I was dead. Two long years. You can't ...
Ashley: Dead? You call it dead? Coward! You just couldn't stand the idea of having a relationship!
Shepard: What? What in heaven gives you THAT idea? I was DEAD. KIA. You saw how the Normandy got destroyed! I gave my life to save Joker!
Ashley: And how comes you're still alive?
Shepard: Just read my computer again. You've read that draft mail, am I right?
Ashley: Yes ... I did ...
Shepard: I was dead. Killed by the collectors. Cerberus brought me back. I hadn't to live two years without you, just a couple of weeks. I was dead, Ashley.

EDI: Enough peeping.
Joker: Jeez and I thought my mom could go crazy.
Kelly: Your mom? Wanna talk about it?
Joker: No. And you don't know anything about it. Okay?
EDI: Humans.
Garrus: Some is yelling up there. I can't do my calibrations!
Joker: Show's over, but I'm sure EDI took a record of that little argument our boss has with his former lover.
Garrus: Don't care. Need to calibrate.
Kelly: Sometimes I seriously believe TIM put me here into my very own hell.

I love the sudden dialogue fest that's going on!

But this one, whilst I like it, I really hope there won't be a scene like this in the game. With all that's going on, a row wouldn't fit. They are mature people with big problems, so for their sake (and mine, I guess) I hope they can put what happened between ME1 and ME3 behind them very quickly.

Modifié par Mr. Brainheart, 29 septembre 2011 - 08:15 .

[CptData]

Ash IS sexy, indeed.

And yeah, I believe we won't see such scenes in ME3. Still I want some real emotions when it comes to Shepard's LI!

Joker: Miranda or Ashley, EDI?
EDI: I have no idea what you're talking about, Jeff.
Joker: Who is more ... errr ... sexy. You know?
EDI: I'm an advanced VI, not Hugh Hefner.
Joker: C'mon. Miranda or Ash?
Miranda: You asked for me, Mr. Moreau?
Ashley: I heard my name?
Joker: Nice. EDI?
EDI: Yes, Jeff?
Joker: You didn't activate intercom, did you?
EDI: No data available.
Joker: EDI!
EDI: Mrs. Lawson, Mrs Wiliams - Mr. Moreau asked me who of you is "sexier".
Joker: E.D.I. !!!

*couple of minutes later*

Shepard: Anything right up here, Jo ... Joker ?!
Joker: Shot me. Those ... witches ... ughh.
EDI: Mr. Moreau, stop exaggerating your injuries
Joker: It hurts! Ashley broke my arm, I know it, I know it! And I don't want to talk about what Miranda did to me.
Shepard: What did happen?
EDI: Jeff wondered who is "sexier". Mrs. Lawson or Mrs. Williams.
Shepard: Ouch. Why not asking "who is deadlier? A reaper or a reaper with a boomstick"?

Modifié par CptData, 29 septembre 2011 - 08:23 .

[StaffSgt. Dignam]

In Normandy cargo hold, where crates have been restacked to from an arena by the crew.  Shepard is standing on a crate and begins to address the crowd.

Shepard: " Alright, ladies and gentlemen!  I thought that since we are going to be facing better trained and better equipped forces now, we should have a simulation paint match in the Cargo hold.  Pistols, rifles, and shotguns have all been modified to fire super-dense ballistic paint rounds for today courtesy of Jacob and Ashley."
Garrus  Examines weapon:"How high did you crank those guns up, Ash?"
Ashley:"Oh you know, the maximum recommended FPS is really an absolute minimum, so I basically double it and go from there."
Garrus:"Aw, crap.  What are the teams?"
Shepard:"Okay Garrus, it'll be you, me, James, Mordin, Thane, Grunt, Legion, Zaeed, and Jacob.  Everyone else is on the other team."
Murmers in the crowd
Shepard:"What?"
Ashley:"You organized the teams by gender, dummy."
Shepard:"Well would you look at that, what a coincidence..."
Jacob:"Let's just get this over with.  We're gonna get whooped, you know that, right?"
Shepard:"We might.  But maybe, just maybe, we will emerge the victors!"
Five minutes and five hundred rounds later
Shepard and the others are pinned down at their base, each already hit several times.
Garrus:"Yeah, maybe we'll emerge the victors?  What a load of crap!"
Shepard:"Well, we won't do that, but we can still escape this room if we sent one person out first to absorb, I mean, draw fire from the other team so taht the rest can escape!  Who's up?"
Everyone looks at Shepard.
Shepard:....

[Mr. Brainheart]

StaffSgt. Dignam wrote...

In Normandy cargo hold, where crates have been restacked to from an arena by the crew.  Shepard is standing on a crate and begins to address the crowd.

Shepard: " Alright, ladies and gentlemen!  I thought that since we are going to be facing better trained and better equipped forces now, we should have a simulation paint match in the Cargo hold.  Pistols, rifles, and shotguns have all been modified to fire super-dense ballistic paint rounds for today courtesy of Jacob and Ashley."
Garrus  Examines weapon:"How high did you crank those guns up, Ash?"
Ashley:"Oh you know, the maximum recommended FPS is really an absolute minimum, so I basically double it and go from there."
Garrus:"Aw, crap.  What are the teams?"
Shepard:"Okay Garrus, it'll be you, me, James, Mordin, Thane, Grunt, Legion, Zaeed, and Jacob.  Everyone else is on the other team."
Murmers in the crowd
Shepard:"What?"
Ashley:"You organized the teams by gender, dummy."
Shepard:"Well would you look at that, what a coincidence..."
Jacob:"Let's just get this over with.  We're gonna get whooped, you know that, right?"
Shepard:"We might.  But maybe, just maybe, we will emerge the victors!"
Five minutes and five hundred rounds later
Shepard and the others are pinned down at their base, each already hit several times.
Garrus:"Yeah, maybe we'll emerge the victors?  What a load of crap!"
Shepard:"Well, we won't do that, but we can still escape this room if we sent one person out first to absorb, I mean, draw fire from the other team so taht the rest can escape!  Who's up?"
Everyone looks at Shepard.
Shepard:....

Note to self: Also need to install a lasergame-esque playground on the Normandy. Uh..I mean ground battle practise zone.

You just added another thing to my list of 'things to do before dealing with the reaperthreat'. It's a long list.

[CptData]

*laughs*
Okay, time for bed. It's past 11 pm and I've to get up early tomorrow. Friday, Friday, fun, fun, fun!

Mordin: Got it. You and Mrs. Williams. Could work. Maybe. After the mission. Will try to find out how human love works. Complicated. Icky. Wonder if male humans got 4 testicles. Maybe less.
Shepard: Actually, I just wanted to know if you have any tips how to date Ashley the first time in 2 years.
Mordin: Have to think about it. But first need to check those fungals spores Grunt had growing on his headplate. Talk to you later. Goodbye.

[Mr. Brainheart]

CptData wrote...

*laughs*
Okay, time for bed. It's past 11 pm and I've to get up early tomorrow. Friday, Friday, fun, fun, fun!

Mordin: Got it. You and Mrs. Williams. Could work. Maybe. After the mission. Will try to find out how human love works. Complicated. Icky. Wonder if male humans got 4 testicles. Maybe less.
Shepard: Actually, I just wanted to know if you have any tips how to date Ashley the first time in 2 years.
Mordin: Have to think about it. But first need to check those fungals spores Grunt had growing on his headplate. Talk to you later. Goodbye.

Asking Mordin for tipsabout romance is always fun ..even if you do it just to amuse yourself

Shepard: How can we sleep in a universe like this, Ash? Don't you just wanna keep fighting day and night?
Ashley: I do shepard, but you can only go so many days without sleep before you accidentally shoot yourself in the foot.
Shepard: You know, I hate saving the galaxy...I could barely stand the pressure at bootcamp.
Ashley: Yeah, yeah, you just keep telling yourself that. Secretly you love it though. Heck, you even came back from the dead for it.
Shepard: That wasn't my choice. I honestly wish someone else could lift the wait from my shoulder for a while.
Ashley: Now don't you act like that, with me Mister! Or I'll have to put the boot into it.
Shepard: That's not gonna make me fall asleep Ma'am!
Ashley: How about a bump on the head with the backend of a boomstick then, mr. smartass. *Slaps Shepard softly on the head.*
Shepard: *Sighs* Alright, alright I'll go and sleep..or try to.
Ashley: That's better, c'mere..*gives him a small nightkiss*
Shepard: That was more..arousing..then...
Ashley:  *walks out of the captains cabin* Night Shepard...

Modifié par Mr. Brainheart, 29 septembre 2011 - 09:39 .

[Dr. Doctor]

I'm going to be interested to see if Ash has any stories about being a Spectre:

Shepard: So how are you liking Spectre-dom?

Ash: It's been a bit dull actually, most dangerous mission we ran into was some Krogan who was tearing up this department store in Bachjret ward.

Bachjret Ward, Citadel

Krogan: (is about to throw a display at a worker only to have it shot out of his hands)

Ash: (shotgun raised) Sir, I'm afraid I'm going to have to ask you to leave the store.

Krogan: Who the hell are you?

Ash: (ejects the thermal clip from her shotgun) Name's Ash. Housewares.

[MegaBadExample]

*Joins dialog war*


Shep: So…Mordin offered me some advice books on…
Ash: *snatches a book and reads the title* ....Really?
Shep: *Shrugs* I was curious.
Ash: *Smirks* I don’t think we need these.
Shep: Maybe so…but open to page 13. I think we should try that.
Ash: You’re joking right? *Opens to page 13, eyes widen slightly*
Shep: *Grins*
Ash: *Throws book back at him* I hate you.

Shep: No, you don't. You only wish you could.
Ash: No, I'm pretty sure I hate you at the moment.
Shep: No, you don't.
Ash: Yes, I- oh, forget it. Listen up, what happened on page 13 ain’t happening anytime soon.
Shep: *Grins* Whatever you say.
　

Modifié par MegaBadExample, 29 septembre 2011 - 10:22 .

[ADLegend21]

Not sur eI can make up a dialog piece off the top of my head, but I can give a little snippet of a future chapter in Guns and Poems

ADLegend21 wrote...


Time to put these stealth upgrades to use, Ashley thought. She activate the tactical cloak Liara provided for her and walked lightly down the hall towards the guards. When she was half way to them she pulled her pistol from her hip, its shredder round setting activated before she entered the building, and the knife from her shoulder into her right hand. She shot the first guard in both of his knees and in the next second she jammed her battle knife into the second guard’s neck and slammed him into the first guard and dragged them both into the wall with the same motion.

[xxSgt_Reed_24xx]

Mr. Brainheart wrote...

xxSgt_Reed_24xx wrote...

PMC65 wrote...

I am hoping that Bioware handles Shepard straying with a mature pen. No cat/dog fights between any of the characters and real emotional discussions. 

lol don't count on it... 

I bet there will be an emotionally engaging....

catfight so that people will be all... "awww yeah, HAWT!!" and it won't hurt their Shepard's fragile egos... lmao

That's what i'm afraid of too..unfortunately that's apparently what a lot of fans want. The fight on Horizon showed how quite some people don't want to put any blame on Shepard. If you cheat they should be angry with Shepard and not fight over him, that´s..that´s just not how it should work in my mind.

I'll withold from judgement as for the writers though, I'm sure they can write it properly, in my mind, it's just a question of will they.
(As for the shower...if you wanna bury it, I believe there is still some room next to the elevator. )

Wow dialog overload! Need more time to read that. The distractions motivational never fails to work though.

I'll always think they are gonna screw it up, until I see otherwise for myself. But imo... it does seem like that's the kind of thing that new!Bioware would do. Catfight, while it has it's time and place and it is hot, is FTL in Mass Effect. 

As for the shower thing...
bury it!?
whatever for!? I lend my full support to the pursuit of a Shepley shower scene in ME3! 

[PMC65]

xxSgt_Reed_24xx wrote...

*snip* As for the shower thing...
bury it!?
whatever for!? I lend my full support to the pursuit of a Shepley shower scene in ME3! 

*sound of feet running in*

Someone mention a shower scene?

*happy dance! happy dance!*

Make it happen Sarge!

*sound of feet running out*

[xxSgt_Reed_24xx]

StaffSgt. Dignam wrote...

In Normandy cargo hold, where crates have been restacked to from an arena by the crew.  Shepard is standing on a crate and begins to address the crowd.

Shepard: " Alright, ladies and gentlemen!  I thought that since we are going to be facing better trained and better equipped forces now, we should have a simulation paint match in the Cargo hold.  Pistols, rifles, and shotguns have all been modified to fire super-dense ballistic paint rounds for today courtesy of Jacob and Ashley."
Garrus  Examines weapon:"How high did you crank those guns up, Ash?"
Ashley:"Oh you know, the maximum recommended FPS is really an absolute minimum, so I basically double it and go from there."
Garrus:"Aw, crap.  What are the teams?"
Shepard:"Okay Garrus, it'll be you, me, James, Mordin, Thane, Grunt, Legion, Zaeed, and Jacob.  Everyone else is on the other team."
Murmers in the crowd
Shepard:"What?"
Ashley:"You organized the teams by gender, dummy."
Shepard:"Well would you look at that, what a coincidence..."
Jacob:"Let's just get this over with.  We're gonna get whooped, you know that, right?"
Shepard:"We might.  But maybe, just maybe, we will emerge the victors!"
Five minutes and five hundred rounds later
Shepard and the others are pinned down at their base, each already hit several times.
Garrus:"Yeah, maybe we'll emerge the victors?  What a load of crap!"
Shepard:"Well, we won't do that, but we can still escape this room if we sent one person out first to absorb, I mean, draw fire from the other team so taht the rest can escape!  Who's up?"
Everyone looks at Shepard.
Shepard:....

This is awesome! XD