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[BigglesFlysAgain]

darthrevaninlight wrote...
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Tali, yes, Liara was in my room. But I swear, nothing happened!!!

We were just building a legacy for the future...

No! not like that....

Modifié par BigglesFlysAgain, 26 avril 2012 - 09:02 .

[Fenrisfil]

darthrevaninlight wrote...

Fenrisfil wrote...
Dig it! :happy: It may not actually need the last line. "In our hearts, always" is a fine finish.

I actually wrote some more (hence the delayed reply). Note sure of it though.

We thank our ancestors for watching over us
For guiding our path through the night

The vessel we live inside of
Keeping us safe from savage tides

The Kin we hold dear to us
giving us strength to carry on

And to all I do promise
to return to Rannochs shore

ur good at poetry... >__>

We thank our ancestors for watching over us
For guiding our path through the stars alight

For the vessel we live inside of
Keeping us safe from savage tides

For the Kin we hold dear to us
that give us strength to endure
and to carry on

Until at last we return
safe and unharmed
to Rannochs shore
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edittingggggggg :unsure:

Thank you! I like the edit. I had the direction I wanted the poem to go, but knew it wasn't quite there. It was starting to frustrate me, but I think you've got it right there.

I found it hard avoiding rythmes (I wasn't struggling against an urge to rythme, I just kept writting things that ended up rythming by chance and didn't want to do that). But anyway, I think I need to rest my brain now.

[darthrevaninlight]

^
I like the style you chose. It definitely feels like it echoes Tali's poem. Thanks for the help, FenFen!

But I do also feel like one more line should be added after "Rannoch's shore"...hmmmm like unblemished or something

Modifié par darthrevaninlight, 26 avril 2012 - 09:06 .

[ichi9181]

fenris and ravin that's pretty good

Modifié par ichi9181, 26 avril 2012 - 09:10 .

[Fenrisfil]

^Thanks!

darthrevaninlight wrote...

^
I like the style you chose. It definitely feels like it echoes Tali's poem. Thanks for the help, FenFen!

But I do also feel like one more line should be added after "Rannoch's shore"...hmmmm like unblemished or something

Anytime. Thank you for the opportunity.

Maybe  it just needs a "Keelah Se'lai" on the end? Hmmm. (thinking cap partially back on).

Modifié par Fenrisfil, 26 avril 2012 - 09:15 .

[Thorgod88]

I was watching a ME3 playthrough series from one of my favorite youtubers. sadly they chose Geth over Quarians... I don't know if I can continue watching their videos . lol

[Gen Petitt]

BigglesFlysAgain wrote...

darthrevaninlight wrote...
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Tali, yes, Liara was in my room. But I swear, nothing happened!!!

We were just building a legacy for the future...

No! not like that....

Quit while your ahead.

[Shajar]

Gust4v wrote...

Tali aiming at you.


Full body...


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Nice poetry, btw.

Nice thx, just saw this yesterday in game (again )

[Gen Petitt]

Thorgod88 wrote...

I was watching a ME3 playthrough series from one of my favorite youtubers. sadly they chose Geth over Quarians... I don't know if I can continue watching their videos . lol

I would not. no one kills Tali:wub: on my watch!

[darthrevaninlight]

@ichi
ya thx ichi!! 

@gust4v
thanks

Fenrisfil wrote...

Anytime. Thank you for the opportunity.

Maybe  it just needs a "Keelah Se'lai" on the end? Hmmm. (thinking cap partially back on).

:O:O
that's it!

you win everything.

Modifié par darthrevaninlight, 26 avril 2012 - 09:20 .

[Fenrisfil]

^B)B)

Thorgod88 wrote...

I was watching a ME3 playthrough series from one of my favorite youtubers. sadly they chose Geth over Quarians... I don't know if I can continue watching their videos . lol

I think you know the answer Thor.

That's right. Start trolling his comments!

Modifié par Fenrisfil, 26 avril 2012 - 09:17 .

[Gen Petitt]

Fenrisfil wrote...

Thorgod88 wrote...

I was watching a ME3 playthrough series from one of my favorite youtubers. sadly they chose Geth over Quarians... I don't know if I can continue watching their videos . lol

I think you know the answer Thor.

That's right. Start trolling his comments!

Here is one for you to use since I can't post "Choke on a **** and die" not ment towards you people the poster of the video.

Modifié par Gen Petitt, 26 avril 2012 - 09:19 .

[darthrevaninlight]

"To Rannoch's divine Shore"
"To Rannoch's fair Shore"
"To Rannoch's open Shore"
"To Rannoch's open embrace"


...I'm nitpicking, arent I? .__.

[Terrorize69]

Chater 14 is up! Both in blog and on Fanfiction.net




Now I can go eat dinner, it only got cold 3hours ago Be back soon

[Gen Petitt]

Terrorize69 wrote...

Chater 14 is up! Both in blog and on Fanfiction.net




Now I can go eat dinner, it only got cold 3hours ago Be back soon

No rest for the weary

[Thorgod88]

 @Gen Petitt lol
I new something like this would of happened when I started watching it. I had a feeling that they wouldn't understand Tali and the Quarians. WHY DIDN'T I JUST SKIP THAT LETS PLAY ME3 SERIES! 

[darthrevaninlight]

Gen Petitt wrote...

Quit while your ahead.

Shepard is waiting for his wife Tali to give birth. The doctor comes in and informs the dad that his quman son was born without torso, arms or legs. The quman is just a head!

But Shepard loves his son and raises him as well as he can, with love and compassion. After 21 years, the quman son is old enough for his first drink. Shepard takes him to the bar and tearfully tells the quman child he is proud of him.

Shepard orders up the biggest, strongest drink for his boy. With all the bar patrons looking on curiously and the bartender shaking his head in disbelief, the quman takes his first sip of alcohol. Swoooop! A torso pops out!

The bar is dead silent; then bursts into a whoop of joy. Shepard, shocked, begs his son to drink again. The patrons chant "Take another drink!"

The bartender still shakes his head in dismay. Swoooop! Two arms pops out.

The bar goes wild, but the bartender is clearly disapproving.

Shepard, crying and wailing, begs his son to drink again. The patrons chant "Take another drink!" The bartender ignores the whole affair.

By now the quman boy is getting tipsy, and with his new hands he reaches down, grabs his drink and guzzles the last of it. Swoooop! Two legs pop out. The bar is in chaos. Shepard falls to his knees, tearfully joyful.

The quman stands up on his new legs and stumbles to the left... then to the right... right through the front door, into the street, where a truck runs over him and kills him instantly. The bar falls silent. Shepard moans in grief. The bartender sighs and says, "That boy should have quit while he was a head."

Modifié par darthrevaninlight, 26 avril 2012 - 09:26 .

[Fenrisfil]

^That just melted my brain.But I think it died happy. :o:unsure:

darthrevaninlight wrote...

"To Rannoch's divine Shore"
"To Rannoch's fair Shore"
"To Rannoch's open Shore"
"To Rannoch's open embrace"


...I'm nitpicking, arent I? .__.

My first draft actually had "fair shore". But it didn't seem to play right in my head. It works better with your edited version however. Hmm, could be warm shore, or even warm embrace, though I liked the boat reference.

Modifié par Fenrisfil, 26 avril 2012 - 09:34 .

[Fattness132]

darthrevaninlight wrote...

Gen Petitt wrote...

Quit while your ahead.

Shepard is waiting for his wife Tali to give birth. The doctor comes in and informs the dad that his quman son was born without torso, arms or legs. The quman is just a head!

But Shepard loves his son and raises him as well as he can, with love and compassion. After 21 years, the quman son is old enough for his first drink. Shepard takes him to the bar and tearfully tells the quman child he is proud of him.

Shepard orders up the biggest, strongest drink for his boy. With all the bar patrons looking on curiously and the bartender shaking his head in disbelief, the quman takes his first sip of alcohol. Swoooop! A torso pops out!

The bar is dead silent; then bursts into a whoop of joy. Shepard, shocked, begs his son to drink again. The patrons chant "Take another drink!"

The bartender still shakes his head in dismay. Swoooop! Two arms pops out.

The bar goes wild, but the bartender is clearly disapproving.

Shepard, crying and wailing, begs his son to drink again. The patrons chant "Take another drink!" The bartender ignores the whole affair.

By now the quman boy is getting tipsy, and with his new hands he reaches down, grabs his drink and guzzles the last of it. Swoooop! Two legs pop out. The bar is in chaos. Shepard falls to his knees, tearfully joyful.

The quman stands up on his new legs and stumbles to the left... then to the right... right through the front door, into the street, where a truck runs over him and kills him instantly. The bar falls silent. Shepard moans in grief. The bartender sighs and says, "That boy should have quit while he was a head."

Why...?

[TheWerdna]

Well, my thoughts on chapter 14 are summed up in my review, but... *squees with joy*

Modifié par TheWerdna, 26 avril 2012 - 09:29 .

[Fenrisfil]

Thorgod88 wrote...

 @Gen Petitt lol
I new something like this would of happened when I started watching it. I had a feeling that they wouldn't understand Tali and the Quarians. WHY DIDN'T I JUST SKIP THAT LETS PLAY ME3 SERIES! 

Maybe they were going for maximum genocide. Wipe out the Quarians, then pick destroy and wipe out the Geth too. I'm assuming they weren't romancing Tali? If they started the final Rannoch mission without locking in the romance via Sheps room chat, that should have given you warning signs.

Anyway, if your going to troll their comments, don't forget to bring up some completely unrelated politics and conspiracy theories and say something totally retarded and outrageous. Everyone loves those in their youtube comments.

[darthrevaninlight]

Fattness132 wrote...

Why...
harrypotter?

Sometimes I gotta balance out my brainwaves with stupidity.

[Gen Petitt]

darthrevaninlight wrote...

**cruelstorysnip**

Hahaha a little funny:lol: yet cruel:crying: at the same time

Modifié par Gen Petitt, 26 avril 2012 - 09:36 .

[darthrevaninlight]

Fenrisfil wrote...
My first draft actually had "fair shore". But it didn't seem to play right in my head. It works better with your edited version however. Hmm, could be warm shore, or even warm embrace, though I liked the boat reference.

I think I will go with fair shore
yep

[Darman]

Did some Tali art. First one yay! And I think its not too bad:



How do you like it?

Modifié par Darman, 26 avril 2012 - 09:38 .