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[Izana]

Maker, once I re-read my story I noticed that I forgot to remove a "the" and made the existence of "the him". Oh, the regret.

Oh well, it happens. Even the best of the best can make the same mistake.

[BrennaCeDria]

W.O.Poetry wrote...

I don't have much faith in my story, but it seems like it'll stand out in the judging since I've found so few other attempts in the humoristic department.

Has there been any anouncements with info about the estimated time to select the top five?

By the way TehVGG: There could be another Owain. If the world is suposed to contain a decent amount of people then it's only logical that the names will be reused

Just that they're working as quickly as they can, based on Twitter yesterday.

[blackwolf_majik]

It sucks, no sooner did I send mine in and I thought of half a dozen changes I wanted to make,
Then, after re-reading my submission, I realized that I wrote a story centered on a mage that you never actually see cast any magic...
My hopes are dimmed.

[Achkas]

They've said we can post ours online, also, in response to a tweet directed at Jessica Merizan; so I've put mine up here, if anyone wants to read. If anyone wants to send me a link to their story by private message or just in reply, I'm excited to read other people's entries -- http://gregbuchanan....17/abomination/

My synopsis was:
An abomination stalks from fallen Lothering to corrupted Calenhad in search of dreams. As he drinks the secret waters of the lake, he remembers his childhood, how the Templar Cairn examined him for signs of magic and found him wanting. He remembers his godmother, the woman of the Wilds, and how she turned him away. He remembers many things, standing before a demon of desire, wondering if he is sane or perfect.
His fate is in your hands. Choose life or death, Warden.

Modifié par Achkas, 17 janvier 2012 - 04:07 .

[BrennaCeDria]

blackwolf_majik wrote...

It sucks, no sooner did I send mine in and I thought of half a dozen changes I wanted to make,
Then, after re-reading my submission, I realized that I wrote a story centered on a mage that you never actually see cast any magic...
My hopes are dimmed.

Technically, my mage doesn't cast any spells either, but then again mine's sneaking into a very anti-mage post-game Kirkwall. Using magic in her situation could equal very bad times.

Achkas wrote...

They've said we can post ours online, also, in response to a tweet directed at Jessica Merizan; so I've put mine up here, if anyone wants to read. If anyone wants to send me a link to their story by private message or just in reply, I'm excited to read other people's entries -- http://gregbuchanan....17/abomination/

My synopsis was:
An abomination stalks from fallen Lothering to corrupted Calenhad in search of dreams. As he drinks the secret waters of the lake, he remembers his childhood, how the Templar Cairn examined him for signs of magic and found him wanting. He remembers his godmother, the woman of the Wilds, and how she turned him away. He remembers many things, standing before a demon of desire, wondering if he is sane or perfect. 
His fate is in your hands. Choose life or death, Warden.

Is your Cairn the same from Redemption? If so, very much looking forward to this, cause he was about the only character I liked, even when he annoyed me.

...No, that's not true. I *loved* Nyree, or whatever her name was.

Modifié par BrennaCeDria, 17 janvier 2012 - 04:14 .

[Maria13]

Uh, you guys are being too hard on yourselves. Once you've sent in your submission, like an exam, DO NOT LOOK AT IT AGAIN or even think about it. The die has been cast, just hold your breath...

KEEP CALM AND CARRY ON...

And good luck!!!  

Modifié par Maria13, 17 janvier 2012 - 04:32 .

[ColorMeSuprised]

Achkas wrote...

They've said we can post ours online, also, in response to a tweet directed at Jessica Merizan; so I've put mine up here, if anyone wants to read. If anyone wants to send me a link to their story by private message or just in reply, I'm excited to read other people's entries -- http://gregbuchanan....17/abomination/

I'll take your word and will now officially post mine. :innocent:

Penitence

Maria13 wrote...
Uh, you guys are being too hard on yourselves. Once you've sent in your submission, like an exam, DO NOT LOOK AT IT AGAIN or even think about it. The die has been cast, just hold your breath...

/This :happy:

Modifié par ColorMeSuprised, 17 janvier 2012 - 04:36 .

[tklivory]

 Shadow of Light Dragon, please post this to the Dragon Age: Asunder Competition Entries thread because I am unable to post it myself on that thread.  Thanks!

No Regrets
Author: tklivory
Constructive Criticism Requested: Yes, via comment or PM
Synopsis: He has served the Templar Order with faith and dedication his entire life, content to serve in the Tower of the Circle of Magi in Fereldan.  Yet, in one long night of chaos, destruction, and pain, one templar is forced to come face to face with the demons of his past, present, and future.  Only time will tell if he will be able to conquer them, or succumb to their poisonous whispers...

[RagingCyclone]

Maria13 wrote...

Uh, you guys are being too hard on yourselves. Once you've sent in your submission, like an exam, DO NOT LOOK AT IT AGAIN or even think about it. The die has been cast, just hold your breath...

KEEP CALM AND CARRY ON...

And good luck!!!  

Very much THIS! Plus I (and I am sure several others) did this for the fun of it. Win-Lose-or Draw...it was fun to write it and read other author's stories. The contest is just icing on the cake.

[Ellestor]

How did I miss this for 28 days? Unbelievable. Regrettable.

[Achkas]

BrennaCeDria wrote...

Is your Cairn the same from Redemption? If so, very much looking forward to this, cause he was about the only character I liked, even when he annoyed me.

...No, that's not true. I *loved* Nyree, or whatever her name was.

It is the same Cairn from Redemption, but it's probably quite unsatisfying as an appearance as it's mostly a cameo in brief. There are more substantial appearances from Flemeth and certain people who may or may not have travelled to Lake Calenhad during the time of Dragon Age: Origins. And I agree re: Cairn, even Felicia annoyed me a bit which is an unusual thing for Felicia to do, especially as I really liked Mark of the Assassin's version of her. Cairn felt, more so than the others, like an actual proper Dragon Age character who might conceivably be found as a companion in one of the games.

I read your story also, enjoyed the ending, its abruptness reminded me a lot of some of the stories you get in Skyrim's or DA's codices. Was the righteous spirit who looked like Anders in fact Justice? As I don't read a lot of fanfiction and haven't gotten to Asunder yet (halfway through The Calling right now, enjoying seeing the Architect again), it's the first post-DA2 campaign thing I've read in the DA setting, and I thought you handled following the campaign very well.

[Shadow of Light Dragon]

We can put them online? Yay! I'll update the story thread during my lunch break (ETA 5-6 hours).

[BrennaCeDria]

Achkas wrote...

BrennaCeDria wrote...

Is your Cairn the same from Redemption? If so, very much looking forward to this, cause he was about the only character I liked, even when he annoyed me.

...No, that's not true. I *loved* Nyree, or whatever her name was.

It is the same Cairn from Redemption, but it's probably quite unsatisfying as an appearance as it's mostly a cameo in brief. There are more substantial appearances from Flemeth and certain people who may or may not have travelled to Lake Calenhad during the time of Dragon Age: Origins. And I agree re: Cairn, even Felicia annoyed me a bit which is an unusual thing for Felicia to do, especially as I really liked Mark of the Assassin's version of her. Cairn felt, more so than the others, like an actual proper Dragon Age character who might conceivably be found as a companion in one of the games.

I read your story also, enjoyed the ending, its abruptness reminded me a lot of some of the stories you get in Skyrim's or DA's codices. Was the righteous spirit who looked like Anders in fact Justice? As I don't read a lot of fanfiction and haven't gotten to Asunder yet (halfway through The Calling right now, enjoying seeing the Architect again), it's the first post-DA2 campaign thing I've read in the DA setting, and I thought you handled following the campaign very well.

It was in fact Justice; can't get into too much other detail without potentially spoiling for others, but I saw your request on Twitter so I'll add you there and you can ask any other ?s you have.

[My Name Does Not Matter]

Izana wrote...

Maker, once I re-read my story I noticed that I forgot to remove a "the" and made the existence of "the him". Oh, the regret.

Oh well, it happens. Even the best of the best can make the same mistake.

Ahaha, no hard feelings mate. I did something similar and made a very obnoxious redundant sentence and misused a word.

I am ridiculously excited for this, though. I know I'm not going to take first place, but I'm crossing my fingers for spot number five. x)

[The Sarendoctrinator]

BrennaCeDria wrote...

blackwolf_majik wrote...

It sucks, no sooner did I send mine in and I thought of half a dozen changes I wanted to make,
Then, after re-reading my submission, I realized that I wrote a story centered on a mage that you never actually see cast any magic...
My hopes are dimmed.

Technically, my mage doesn't cast any spells either, but then again mine's sneaking into a very anti-mage post-game Kirkwall. Using magic in her situation could equal very bad times.

If it makes sense in your stories, then it's probably better if they don't cast any spells. My story included a long fight/chase scene, and there was a lot of magic going around, but it's all about the context - everyone knows my guy is a mage, so he had nothing to hide.

[TehVGG]

Shadow of Light Dragon wrote...

We can put them online? Yay! I'll update the story thread during my lunch break (ETA 5-6 hours).

I can't post in that thread so as per instruction, I posted here.

(The Fall of Kinloch Hold  (
http://social.biowar...79/blog/211077/  )
Author: TehVGG
Constructive Criticism Requested: Yes, please.

Synopsis: This tells my perspective on the final events of Uldred's takeover of the Fereldan Circle, just before the                            timeline of DA:O. It follows Eltha (in third person), a female elf who unwillingly witnesses horrible things.

Modifié par TehVGG, 18 janvier 2012 - 12:35 .

[Shadow of Light Dragon]

Synopsis thread has been updated.

[tklivory]

Thanks, SoLD! Very much appreciated!

[The Sarendoctrinator]

TehVGG wrote...

(The Fall of Kinloch Hold  (
http://social.biowar...79/blog/211077/  )
Author: TehVGG
Constructive Criticism Requested: Yes, please.

Synopsis: This tells my perspective on the final events of Uldred's takeover of the Fereldan Circle, just before the                            timeline of DA:O. It follows Eltha (in third person), a female elf who unwillingly witnesses horrible things.

This is one of the stories I was waiting to read. Uldred's takeover was a part of the game that I always wanted to know more about. I like your writing style too.

[BrennaCeDria]

So many fics to read, but I can't let myself get into any other characters' heads until I get through the Deep Roads on my own main fic!

/writes like mad to finish this section

[CuriousArtemis]

 I saw Jessica's tweet, too!  So I finally uploaded mine to FFN and added a link and info to the sharing thread

Summary: 
Ren is a 17 year old elf who lives in the alienage.  He is also a mage whose parents have forbidden him from leaving the alienage and exposing himself to the templars.  Ren and his friend Rissa, whose mother has a penchant for human men, try to find excitement and adventure outside the confines of their small world.  But just how far will Ren go to escape who and what he is?  

[Thargorichiban]

Added mine to the list. Wish I had more time to edit it before I had submitted it, but those are the breaks.

Title: The Last Meal
social.bioware.com/871096/blog/211081/
Synopsis: Grinon is a chef that just happens to be an apostate mage. For years he
has used his magical abilities in secret to create fantastic dishes and
recipes the likes none have seen in Kirkwall. Now he has been roped last
minute into cooking a meal for the local Templars and a friend from his
past will soon reveal his secret. He must decide what is important:
remaining true to his dreams or staying free.


Added mine to the list. Wish I had more time to edit it before I had submitted it, but those are the breaks.

Modifié par Thargorichiban, 19 janvier 2012 - 09:39 .

[Queenychi]

I just finished reading all of the abstracts. I'm getting really excited to see who actually wins this thing. All of the stories look like they're entertaining reads, but there are definitely a few that stood out to me.

[Shadow of Light Dragon]

Added. Although I changed the Author name to your BSN alias, for ease of forum reference. Readers can get your FF.Net name from the story link.