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MissOuJ wrote...
In all seriousness, he broke into the apartment to bug it/install surveilance.
... and then he decided to top it off by eating Anderson's cereal. It's apparently his way of establishing Cerberus dominance.
Because he's an adrenaline junkie like that.
LPPrince wrote...
My toothbrush isn't sharp. Its the soft bristle kind.
Although my gums did bleed when I brushed this morning.
OH MY GOD, THATS IT.
LPPrince wrote...
CG50 wrote...
I want to know what Dietz was thinking when choosing the toothbrush as a weapon of choice....
Oh, maybe he hurt himself with a toothbrush (as you do) and thought, "damn that sharp that can kill someone", then BOOM, it was Kai Leng with the toothbrush in the library. Mass Effect cluedo ftw
My toothbrush isn't sharp. Its the soft bristle kind.
Although my gums did bleed when I brushed this morning.
OH MY GOD, THATS IT.
AshiraShepard wrote...
Chewin3 wrote...
Yes, and he didn't suddenly get the urge to urinate in the middle of trying to snipe somebody....
There was a sniper gone rogue in CSI.
He pissed himself rather than lose the shot.
Modifié par LPPrince, 01 février 2012 - 09:40 .
thoththeblack wrote...
Xaero_Dumort wrote...
I was serious. I'm re-writing the book. Here is a re-write of the prologue. I'm hoping to try and get a chapter done a day. With today being just the prologue to gauge people's interest and support. This isn't being done as a back handed malicious slap to Dietz or BioWare. I'm doing this because I'm a fan.
http://www.mediafire...v6gflhwbv1h6931
Take the time to read if you can, I need to know if this is a futile effort, what I should change, what people would like to see and the like.
Cool idea. You might want to consider putting this into a Google documents account like the 'Errors' file and the 'Features of Mass Effect 3' file so it is easier for us all to share in your worthy efforts.
Might I suggest you also remove Dietz habit of calling him just Leng?Yuoaman wrote...
Xaero_Dumort wrote...
I was serious. I'm re-writing the book. Here is a re-write of the prologue. I'm hoping to try and get a chapter done a day. With today being just the prologue to gauge people's interest and support. This isn't being done as a back handed malicious slap to Dietz or BioWare. I'm doing this because I'm a fan.
http://www.mediafire...v6gflhwbv1h6931
Take the time to read if you can, I need to know if this is a futile effort, what I should change, what people would like to see and the like.
I just read the prologue and it is better - the actions taken are for more in line with Kai Leng's character, and the auction makes far more sense, though I would maybe have done something else with the turian saint's tears - have Kai Leng know that there are no turian saints and consider that perhaps it's a codename for something else - otherwise it's fairly good. The pacing is a little jittery, and it could use some rewording and tweaking in places, but all in all it is a definite improvement.
nitefyre410 wrote...
CG50 wrote...
*snip*
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I think i added the picture right... kind of new at this
Good Job and since I happen to be a proud and long time fan of Bleach its even better.
Modifié par Random Jerkface, 01 février 2012 - 09:42 .
LPPrince wrote...
Relix28 wrote...
Dietz for president of BSN.
Dietz 2012
For bringing us together like this hating on Deception, I'd vote for him.
MissOuJ wrote...
In all seriousness, he broke into the apartment to bug it/install surveilance.
... and then he decided to top it off by eating Anderson's cereal. It's apparently his way of establishing Cerberus dominance.
Because he's an adrenaline junkie like that.
LPPrince wrote...
I wonder if the sharpened toothbrush he used was soft, medium, or hard bristled.
AshiraShepard wrote...
MissOuJ wrote...
In all seriousness, he broke into the apartment to bug it/install surveilance.
... and then he decided to top it off by eating Anderson's cereal. It's apparently his way of establishing Cerberus dominance.
Because he's an adrenaline junkie like that.
Unless he cleaned the bowl, the spoon and put everything back EXACTLY the way it was before, that is f*cking retarded. It's a surefire way of letting someone know that SOMEONE was in their place.
And Anderson should be smart enough to realize that someone wouldn't break into his place just to eat some cereal and start searching for bugs/bombs/cameras.
Or at least I hope that's what he did.
LPPrince wrote...
AshiraShepard wrote...
Chewin3 wrote...
Yes, and he didn't suddenly get the urge to urinate in the middle of trying to snipe somebody....
There was a sniper gone rogue in CSI.
He pissed himself rather than lose the shot.
In reality, if a sniper has to ****** him/herself to take the shot, they would.
Although, that would make escape difficult, so they usually have a way set up already for them to relieve themselves and urinate.
Not PEE, Dietz. Urinate.
CG50 wrote...
LPPrince wrote...
I wonder if the sharpened toothbrush he used was soft, medium, or hard bristled.
Maybe it was one of those electric vibrating toothbrushes?
AshiraShepard wrote...
MissOuJ wrote...
In all seriousness, he broke into the apartment to bug it/install surveilance.
... and then he decided to top it off by eating Anderson's cereal. It's apparently his way of establishing Cerberus dominance.
Because he's an adrenaline junkie like that.
Unless he cleaned the bowl, the spoon and put everything back EXACTLY the way it was before, that is f*cking retarded. It's a surefire way of letting someone know that SOMEONE was in their place.
And Anderson should be smart enough to realize that someone wouldn't break into his place just to eat some cereal and start searching for bugs/bombs/cameras.
Or at least I hope that's what he did.
Yuoaman wrote...
LPPrince wrote...
AshiraShepard wrote...
Chewin3 wrote...
Yes, and he didn't suddenly get the urge to urinate in the middle of trying to snipe somebody....
There was a sniper gone rogue in CSI.
He pissed himself rather than lose the shot.
In reality, if a sniper has to ****** him/herself to take the shot, they would.
Although, that would make escape difficult, so they usually have a way set up already for them to relieve themselves and urinate.
Not PEE, Dietz. Urinate.
Tinkle?
AshiraShepard wrote...
MissOuJ wrote...
In all seriousness, he broke into the apartment to bug it/install surveilance.
... and then he decided to top it off by eating Anderson's cereal. It's apparently his way of establishing Cerberus dominance.
Because he's an adrenaline junkie like that.
Unless he cleaned the bowl, the spoon and put everything back EXACTLY the way it was before, that is f*cking retarded. It's a surefire way of letting someone know that SOMEONE was in their place.
And Anderson should be smart enough to realize that someone wouldn't break into his place just to eat some cereal and start searching for bugs/bombs/cameras.
Or at least I hope that's what he did.
'd
Modifié par AresXX7, 01 février 2012 - 09:45 .
LPPrince wrote...
CG50 wrote...
LPPrince wrote...
I wonder if the sharpened toothbrush he used was soft, medium, or hard bristled.
Maybe it was one of those electric vibrating toothbrushes?
My mind is just sick and twisted, now.
Lord Aesir wrote...
Might I suggest you also remove Dietz habit of calling him just Leng?Yuoaman wrote...
Xaero_Dumort wrote...
I was serious. I'm re-writing the book. Here is a re-write of the prologue. I'm hoping to try and get a chapter done a day. With today being just the prologue to gauge people's interest and support. This isn't being done as a back handed malicious slap to Dietz or BioWare. I'm doing this because I'm a fan.
http://www.mediafire...v6gflhwbv1h6931
Take the time to read if you can, I need to know if this is a futile effort, what I should change, what people would like to see and the like.
I just read the prologue and it is better - the actions taken are for more in line with Kai Leng's character, and the auction makes far more sense, though I would maybe have done something else with the turian saint's tears - have Kai Leng know that there are no turian saints and consider that perhaps it's a codename for something else - otherwise it's fairly good. The pacing is a little jittery, and it could use some rewording and tweaking in places, but all in all it is a definite improvement.
felipejiraya wrote...
It's really amazing, BSN was severely divided in issues like MP and Origin but here it's close to a roman triumph against Deception.
This brings tears of joy to my eyes.
CG50 wrote...
Maybe it was one of those electric vibrating toothbrushes?
I'm sure washing someone's dishes makes you an adrenaline junkie.AshiraShepard wrote...
MissOuJ wrote...
In all seriousness, he broke into the apartment to bug it/install surveilance.
... and then he decided to top it off by eating Anderson's cereal. It's apparently his way of establishing Cerberus dominance.
Because he's an adrenaline junkie like that.
Unless he cleaned the bowl, the spoon and put everything back EXACTLY the way it was before, that is f*cking retarded. It's a surefire way of letting someone know that SOMEONE was in their place.
And Anderson should be smart enough to realize that someone wouldn't break into his place just to eat some cereal and start searching for bugs/bombs/cameras.
Or at least I hope that's what he did.
isn't quite enough.
AshiraShepard wrote...
Unless he cleaned the bowl, the spoon and put everything back EXACTLY the way it was before, that is f*cking retarded. It's a surefire way of letting someone know that SOMEONE was in their place.
And Anderson should be smart enough to realize that someone wouldn't break into his place just to eat some cereal and start searching for bugs/bombs/cameras.
Or at least I hope that's what he did.
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