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This is a Dragon Age 2 novelisation (MHawke/Isabela). Reviews and criticism would be much appreciated.


Prologue extract:

For the first time in almost a decade, the soft yet always menacing clink of armour could be heard beneath the Hawke Estate. Light flickered feebly from the tunnels' hurriedly lit rows of torches. They illuminated only jagged, wet stone of labyrinthine walls. A shadow was then cast asthe makers of that soft, menacing noise neared the end of their journey. Two Seekers marched down the passageway, each clinging to the arm of a semi-conscious dwarf. His head was covered by a black sack.

Their movements were methodical and regimental but hurried, for their mission was urgent and time scarce. So scarce they weren't too bothered about the dwarf's well-being, as long as he arrived in once piece. A few minutes ago the dwarf had come to, struggling, kicking and choking against his covering before returning to his state of placid submission. He was alive and somewhat aware of what was going on. That was good: he'd need that sharp mind if he was going to prove himself useful. He'd need it to live.

Few in Kirkwall would have guessed it, but this small, sack cloth-faced figure was Varric Tethras himself. It was quite a spectacular fall from grace for such a flamboyant man. Varric had come to Kirkwall as a silverite-tongued swindler, drinker, fighter and story teller; a distinctive figure to be sure, but never quite able to move out of his brother's shadow. That changed when he met Hawke. Years of gathering riches and siding with Kirkwall's most powerful man had made Varric the most outspoken and ostentatiously dressed dwarf outside of Orzammar. But now his head was hung low in exhausted trepidation, his thick leather finery was torn and ruffled and his expensive boots scraped against the tunnel floor.

Then the Seekers reached the corridor's end, kicking two thick doors open uncaringly. They entered total darkness with only teasing torchlight from the corridor to guide them. The doors slammed shut again, leaving them all in blackness. A third Seeker emerged from a corner, lighting up a low-hanging lamp that cast its light on a tall throne, fashioned of stone and wood and painted with entwined Amell and Hawke crest alike. Feathers of red and gold
glimmered.

The Seeker removed her helmet. Cassandra Pentaghast was her name, and her mission hinged on what this lone dwarf could tell  them. She was very beautiful, bearing many marks of the Nevarran royalty in her blood; tall and olive-skinned, slender as the knives she could wield so well. Her heavy-lidded eyes were bright and  honey-coloured, her black hair was cut short and kept neat, just like all  other children of the affluent Pentaghast Clan. But blood and beauty weren't going to help her today. There were more effective ways of being persuasive. Cassandra hoped her mind would suffice, but wouldn't shed any tears if her well-trained fists or trusty blade needed to enter their discussion. She motioned toward the throne and the other two Seekers threw Varric into it with far more vigour than was necessary.

Varric let out his first cry of pain as his ponytailed head smacked the wood. His small body and nervous posture seemed to magnify the seat further. "I've…had gentler invitations," he grumbled, voice slightly muffled by the cloth.

Cassandra could barely contain her distaste. Dwarves – how she hated them. There was always an air of smug superiority about a dwarf. Surface dwellers were always deceitful, always ripping you off with shoddy, ill-gotten goods and getting back on the move before law enforcement could catch up. And then there were the 'pure' dwarves, wasting away underground in mounds of nug filth and darkspawn corpses, obsessing over their backwards caste system, deteriorating riches and blasphemous doctrines of ancestral worship. They could at least have the decency to stay in their holes where they belonged.

Varric Tethras was the worst kind of surface dwarf, never short of a lewd quip or handy bribe. She smelled him; detecting overstated cologne, Orzammar-brewed whiskey and more Antivan leather than many dwarves, surface or not, would be caught  dead wearing. A black-armoured guard pulled off his head covering, revealing the unshaven, toad-like face beneath. Sure enough, it soon adjusted to the glare and widened into that trademark smirk.

Varric ran a gloved hand over his fleshy features. "Not one bruise," he said airily. "I think I like you already."

Cassandra said nothing. Varric looked around, smirking, and squeezed the throne's armrest beneath him. "Underground treasure den, huh?"

He sounded infuriatingly conversational, as if describing the weather instead of bartering for his life, for the world's future. "You know Hawke only had the decency to show me this room once? Once! I knew the guy for nine years and he only let met into the den once."

"I am Cassandra Pentaghast, Seeker of the Chantry," she stated, moving into the light so he could get a good look at her. With one nod she dismissed the other two.

Varric made an awed, if rather patronising noise and feigned a sudden fascination with the lining of his gloves. "Seeker eh? I guess this means you are a real group. Looks like I owe that conspiracy nut in the Hanged Man a drink. And um…" he said, looking around at the nothingness "…just what were you seeking?"

"The Champion," she said straight away.

He shrugged and chuckled, trying and failing to sound confident. He'd seen and survived everything from the Deep Roads to Sundermount's undead, why was this woman making him feel so uneasy?

"Champion? Pretty generic term there, especially in Kirkwall. Which one are you interested in? I know a guy who won the annual Lowtown drink-a-thon four years in a ro-"

"YOU KNOW EXACTLY WHY I'M HERE!" she roared. A new rage seized Cassandra. In a single effortless motion she produced two items of use; her dagger and the hand-written tome produced by Hawke  himself, slamming the latter into Varric's overexposed chest and sticking the former against his throat. "Time to start talking dwarf." She lowered her voice and leaned in with narrow, threatening eyes. "They tell me you're good at it."

Varric opened the diary at its prologue and lightly touched the yellowing pages as if caressing a lover. "Okay," he said with deliberate calm. "What do you want to know?"

"Everything. Start at the beginning."

Varric yelped as she twirled the blade and thrust it through all four hundred pages of 'Act One.' Its point just missed his heart. The now ruined diary fell to his knees and then the floor. He looked down at it.Cassandra's dagger had gone right through Bethany's hand-drawing of the now ubiquitous Hawke family crest. It shone gold, black and proud on the page, uniting her drawings of all nine of them.

"If I talk, will you let me go?"

"Yes," she muttered with a terse nod. "If you prove your worth and lead us to Bradon Hawke, we may even pardon your companions. With the obvious exception of-"

"I know," said Varric sadly. "I know."

"I suggest you take this offer Varric. We'll be forgiving a lot. She began counting off the offences and offenders on armoured fingers. "The permissive attitude towards apostasy by a corrupt and biased Guard Captain, a Tevinter fugitive taking the law into his own hands, that wicked elven mage-"

"Who has done absolutely nothing wrong!" Varric snapped, pointing an accusatory finger, anger making him suddenly brave.

"Explain that to Ser Yoren," she hissed. They had come for the mage in question shortly before apprehending Varric. The results were not as pleasing. "See if that will cure the burns covering his body."

Varric held back another amused noise. "Yeah, Daisy'll do that if you make her mad enough." He frowned. "It's always the really cute ones for some reason."

Cassandra cleared her throat.

"Alright," he said as if there was any choice in the matter. He leaned back into the throne. "It began with the destruction of Lothering during the Fifth Blight, ten years ago…"

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Chapter One extract

Until just over three decades ago, they had been considered extinct; hell-spawned relics confined solely to history pages chronicling a darker time, and present only in the dreams of children and fancies of
madmen. But their re-emergence marked out an age for them in the calendar.

A high dragon was perched on the uppermost gnarled peak. Even on a mountain, beyond the average mortal's reach it exuded age greater than stone, size beyond the combative efforts of the finite and cruelty beyond any hurlock. Its colour was that of blood where only the killing cut could reach – a deep crimson, a red given off by crawling lava, a red that maddened watchers of the skies when wrapped around a comet trailing through the heavens. A gargantuan wing obscured its most evil features, but only for a saving moment.

The dragon unfurled, stretching out into its full form and revealing a many-horned head mounted on a neck as spiked as it was long. It was a colossal, scaly being made all the more nightmarish against the backdrop of sun and infinite sky. Every inch was sinewy and sharp-tipped yet without a discernible weak point.

The dragon roared, and filled the world with a sound billowing from the most cursed reaches of the Black City that carried itself over each peak and through each valley of the wastes; the unified cry of all tormented souls. The ground quivered as if afraid. The Fade thinned further, and something malevolent and immaterial that did not belong in the world of love and life seemed to enter it.

Leandra drew in and gasped out shuddering breaths, Aveline's sword tumbled from her limp hand, Wesley's legs failed him and the Hawke siblings froze in an embrace. All of them looked upon a beast of titanic proportions seemingly able to manipulate the seismic sway of the very foundations of the earth with little more than its carrion roar. Despite their reputation as the Maker's manifested wrath, the darkspawn shivered and tried to flee. Their own cries were more enfeebled than ever against the dragon's.

The dragon dived, rending the air with its huge form and inflamed outpouring of breath. A dozen rows of darkspawn were immolated beyond anything Bethany could have conjured. The rest would meet far more gruesome ends.

It may as well have had half a hundred appendages, for in the full fury of its attack, nobody could tell. Limbs longer and thicker than every Ferelden tree became blurs whipping like the wind. An uncontrolled savagery entered its eyes; yellow eyes swimming with knowledge and power. There may have been no method to its gleeful, violent madness, but that just made it all the more frightening. No matter how much or how little control the dragon had over its actions, there was still a demonic malignancy woven into every one. It cracked bone as if breaking a spider's web, bypassed armour as if poking through wet paper. The mightiest hurlock stood no chance.

When the slaughter was over and the ground blanketed by blood, light – white and gold – erupted all around the dragon in a swirling cage. All watching averted their already tired eyes with grunts of pain. This was beyond gazing into the sun.

And then it faded. A peculiar sight remained.

Standing with light washing over the body like liquid gold was not the high beast in shrunken form, but a woman. The light vanished, and the fighters saw an old woman with smooth white hair and a heart-shaped face that hinted at remarkable former beauty in years passed. She wore garments unseen in any part of the modern world: a studded gorget and jerkin of unknown material that appeared halfway between dragon skin and leather. It had the dragon's colour. Her bone-white hair was pulled back; coiled and sharpened by an iron headdress into an almost perfect imitation of a high dragon's crown. Black feathers too large to have belonged to any raven were clustered over the woman's thin shoulders. Needless iron armour covered her arms and legs.

They may have been the vestments of the Chasind in a time long since lost. A time soon to return.

And then the Hawkes and Vallens noticed her eyes. She had the dragon's eyes: yellow and knowing; seeing every secret of their hearts. A cape, also sharing the colour of the dragon's coat, flowed behind her in thewind, never catching fire for all the residual flames it touched.

Bradon and Bethany stepped forward to greet her while the others tended to Wesley who was now slumped against an outcropping.

"Well, well…what have we here?" she said. Her voice was one of many sounds and suggestions. It was a gentle rasp: the sigh of a venomous snake embracing mesmerised pray. It seemed to promise things that were not
known, as if it were a bastardisation of the Siren Song. But the embrace of love was not promised here. Instead she voiced the enticing promise of power, of gnostic enrichment.

She silently approached them. "It used to be we never got visitors to the Wilds, but now it seems they arrive in hordes!"

A fear unlike anything Bradon had ever felt claimed him. It was subtle and confused. He had no idea what to make of this. This…woman had saved all of them, but for what? And she seemed a woman of such curious opposites – a voice both worn by age and devoid of weakness – shapeshifting magic both archaic and refreshingly alive.

He stiffened and tried to throw some authority into his voice."I don't know what you are, but-"

"But what?" she challenged, clearly amused. "How foolish to enter a fight so unprepared! You don't even know what it is you face." She sighed. "Foolish boy, you'll learn. You know so much less about my motivations, my goals."

More silence. Bradon sheathed Carver's sword onto his back. The witch took it for permission to continue. "If you wish to flee the darkspawn, you should know you are heading in the wrong direction."

She turned away and examined the unforgiving deserts and highlands as if beholding a great painting.

To Bethany, this woman seemed to be no more than an extremely powerful apostate. "Wait! You can't just leave use here!" the young mage cried.

The woman turned very slowly. "Can I not?" she let out a dry, almost inhuman laugh. "Of course I can't…for I came across a most peculiar sight." She moved closer to Bradon and threw up armoured arms. "A mighty ogre, vanquished! Who could perform such a feat?"

"All of us," said Bradon tersely.

"Oh, humble heroes do bore me so," said the witch. "I've met far too many. It never ends well for them. But now my curiosity is sated, and you are safe for the moment. Is that not enough?"

Bradon's confusion returned; equal parts gratitude and terror. The witch spoke for him.

"They are everywhere or soon will be, well…" she chuckled to herself, "that's for those boys to decide." She looked up at him. "Where is it you plan to run to, hmmm?"

Bradon could not shake the feeling this woman knew already.

Bethany's credulity remained. "We need to get to Kirkwall – in the Free Marches?" she inquired.

"Kirkwall?" the crone laughed with fire in those esoteric eyes. "My, my; that is quite the voyage you plan. Your king will not miss you, hmm?"

"King Cailan was betrayed," said Bradon, not wanting to know how she had figured out their profession. "There's nothing left for any of us here but more death."

She turned away again, beholding the cruel Wilds."If you only knew," she whispered. "I see…hurtled into the chaos you fight…and the world will shake before you."

Bradon's hand returned to the hilt of Carver's sword.

"Is it fate or chance? I can never decide," the witch muttered to herself. She then straightened and turned. "It appears fortune smiles on us both today. I may be able to help you yet."

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Chapter Two extract

A cobbled pathway sloped down between two cliffs jutting from the beach below, which was grainy and dull like an unwashed cloth. At the pathway's end they spotted a small, flat-bottomed fishing cog alone at the end of a long line of ship-less quays which were under constant attack from thrashing grey waves. A dense crowd had gathered at the foot of the cog's only ramp.

Walkways of splintery wooden planks creaking in the wind ran from the quays off into the far distance, where
the vague outline of Gwaren's outer city limits was visible among immense trees. None in the weary group could see far enough to determine whether any damage had been done to the Terynir by the Blight, but no
smoke stroked the sky, and no flame flickered. Seeing the Terynir, even so little of it, brought Aveline's accusation of betrayal back into the forefront of Bradon's mind.

The words had been uttered an eon ago: when there were three Hawke children and two Vallens in their party.

Bradon touched Aveline's arm. She knew why.

"Not now Hawke. I'll tell you the details when we're safe. There may be others on board who know more than I; they share his hometown after all, and we'll be out of his grip if the indictment gets turned on us as it did for the Wardens."

Another wind roared, this one over the murky sea. The Hawkes and lone Vallen crossed the beach in great discomfort,  feeling the sting of disturbed sand whip over their residual wounds. Bethany tried another arcane shield in the hope of providing a temporary but nonetheless relieving shelter from the storm, but faltered when the
noises of the crowd before them entered earshot.

Bradon stepped to the front of the group again, fighting to subdue the aches, pains and shakes surging through him. He knew the importance of the group's cooperation, having been saved by it many times during their battle with the darkspawn. But there was something else deep inside him now – something new, like a curled-up, sleeping dragon – something that did not endear him to the idea of being led, or more specifically; not being his family's protector. His father was gone. Carver was gone, and he owed his mother and sister a better life, one where they could grieve these losses but look to a hopeful future, knowing nothing could be counted a total waste.

He already felt an admirable and  strongly-rooted comradeship with Aveline; perhaps thrown in with an intriguing and unspoken one-upmanship. He liked Aveline. He liked her fighting skills, her intolerance of nonsense, and the fact that her militarisation had not diminished any of her humanity.

As the weary troupe reached their fellow stranded Fereldens at the crowded quay, they discovered something far worse than first feared. The cries of the stranded had been distressing from afar, but up close their stench claimed dominion over even sea salt, fish and rotten wood. They were a jumble of dead, dying, wounded and woeful; struck down in youth or old age; highborn and lowborn. Rudimentary bandages had yellowed and greyed over wounds gushing blood and thick pus. Many people were convulsing, bringing up black vomit and screaming their throats raw. The last of Gwaren's scarce, overworked and underfunded healers and herbalists were scattered among them, applying inadequate doses of potion and casting largely ineffectual spells.

A bald, hunchbacked man with a twisted face clambered awkwardly down the ship's only ramp. "Five more for the boat?" he wheezed, examining each of them with lopsided eyes. He then pointed a stubby finger at Bethany. "Or does this healer need a bloody entourage?"

"We came here hoping you'd be shipping out to Kirkwall soon," said Bradon stiffly. "Aren't you taking any more civilians?"

The man groaned, showing teeth rotted into various shades of black and yellow. His breath smelled as bad as he looked. "Civilians? With a mabari hound, two magic staffs and three blades? I think you'd be more use here."

Aveline frowned and opened her mouth.

"And you two look like military!" he added to her and Bradon. "Don't think we ought to be runnin' the risk o' takin' on a coupla deserters!"

"There's no army left to desert from," said Aveline, stepping forward with the already familiar sharpness in her eyes again. "There hasn't been for a long time."

"The Teyrn begs to differ!" the disfigured sailor countered. "And you can try tellin' that to my nephews, gallopin' off to a civil war, knee-deep in guts right now I bet." He spat on the sand. "Idiots! Sodding civil war it is now. And for what?"

"Even if you were taking on deserters," said Bradon, "what risk would it be? Do the Marchers have any authority over us Fereldans?"

"No, but this thing's a fishing vessel, son. I intend to use it when the refugees don't need it no more; so we can't take on anybody with that Blight disease. Everyone else in the hold is clean, but being military, you people 'ave prob'ly faced darkspawn already."

He glanced at some of the less fortunate victims sprawled behind them on the beach. "Thedas don't really care about the spreadin' o' refugees, but plague's a no-no."

"Noddy!" yelled an unseen man from somewhere on the deck. "They look and sound alright to me."

The man called Noddy turned his shiny bald head partway towards the ship. "We've got a mage here!" he shouted back. "Pretty capable one by the looks of it," he added with a wary frown.

Hating himself, Bradon put on his best artificial smile and adopted an enthusiastic voice not unlike those that had belonged to the snake-oil merchants foolish enough to set up temporary shop in Lothering with his father around.

"Surely you'd rather see a mage taken to somewhere like Kirkwall, one of the most pious states in Thedas? They don't tolerate apostasy there now, do they?"

He was prepared for the reaction: Bethany grabbed his wristand squeezed painfully, Aveline and Leandra made partly-stifled noises of disgust, Occie growled. Bradon kept his eyes on Noddy, who after half a minute of contemplation looked convinced enough.

"Alright then, get on," the fisherman mumbled. " 'Ang on," he added with another glance at Bethany, "the girl didn't volunteer to be a healer, did she? We could always use another back he-"

"No," said Bethany, turning pink and feeling like the most disgustingly selfish person alive. A trembling old man with flecks of blood in his wispy hair caught her eye for half a second. She stared at her blood-stained shoes.

"Hmm," said the fisherman. He clambered up again and opened a grate on the deck. " 'S'down there. Nuffin' I can do about the smell, and I ain't referring to no fish."

"Beth," Bradon whispered as they walked up the creaking wooden ramp. Leandra and Aveline listened. "You know I'd never sell you to the templars. We'll think of something when we get there. I promise."

They went into the dark, stench-filled hold, entering another dense crowd of refugees – coughing, crying and consoling one another with unsure words and fervent prayers; old and young, strong and weak. Most had obtained patched grey blankets from the more generous crew members. Others had taken off clothing to wrap up small children. The Hawkes and lone Vallen squeezed themselves into a damp alcove between a large family and frail old couple, who gifted them with brave smiles. A creak of wood, clatter of chains and assortment of sailor shouts told everyone that the newest arrivals would be the last on board.

Leandra took the hands of her surviving children. "I'm so proud of you two," she breathed. "And Aveline; there's nothing I can do to repay you."

Aveline nodded and leaned back against the wood. "I'm every bit as indebted to your family, Mistress Hawke."

Occie seemed to notice the younger widow's sense of detachment and gave her  cheek a quick, grateful lick as somebody on the deck above covered the grating with cloth, darkening the hold further. She responded with a rather embarrassed stroke of the dog's muzzle, glad the darkness had kept this exchange between the two of them.

With a final shout from the captain – this one loud enough to rise over the vocalising wounded – the ship lurched and was on the waves, onwards to the uncertain world beyond.

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Chapter Three extract

For two weeks, Ferelden’s last free fishing vessel cascaded over the infamous Waking Sea, forced to endure a thrashing from its many ferocious storms; tossed here and there by white-capped waves of such mountainous size and unstoppable power they could have been mistaken for the death throes of nature herself. Above, dense clouds of smoky grey swelled and spread until the sky was blotted out, as though a great fire had covered the world beneath. With the grim cloud came the low, brutal growl of thunder and whip crack of lightning. The rain came down in unceasing icy torrents. To all aboard, it felt like the Blight’s black, death-dealing hand had reached out, clawing at the fleeing boat tauntingly, telling them that it would come after them should their homeland fail.

Day and night traded places as time trundled on in that ship’s stinking hold. The nauseating bombardment of
waves above, around and beneath kept every refugee awake at night, meaning they could only steal sleep for brief, unsatisfying periods during daylight hours. Vomit spewed from the mouths of the unprepared, adding to the array of evil stenches. One hour into the voyage, the thick blanket of dark green wool draped over the grate above was swollen with rain and dripping with maddening consistency. Three hours later it was peeled back and scarce food supplies were dropped in: stale bread slices, hard cheese wedges and poorly-sealed canteens. First sight of these helpings of manna reduced most recipients to near savagery. Man, woman and child scrambled towards the sustenance in momentary rays of light before attacking one another; tugging at slices of bread, scratching hands that clasped cheese pieces, almost biting canteens open and hitting anybody they considered encumbered with too much of all three. It worsened when the heavy shadow returned. Those in the hold protesting their countrymen’s divisive behaviour found themselves outnumbered, drowned out by the yelping and snarling and the hurried slurping of water.

But none of the opportunists had anticipated Aveline, who soon put an effortless stop to their greed. Under her unflinching supervision, food and water was carefully partitioned, passed around and stored in the likely event of further shortage.

When the redheaded woman returned to her spot against the curved wood and hissed a demand of “Why didn’t you help me?” to Bradon she was given only a vague, faraway noise in return.

The young warrior was immersed in another plan. This one centred on getting Bethany into Kirkwall unnoticed.
Well, she isn’t the problem really, he thought. His sister’s knack for befriending templars and Chantry Sisters alike (often in a genuine manner – she was far from manipulative) had aided the family a great deal, acting as a healthy counterbalance to her father’s occasional bluntness and cheek with professional Andrastians, until any suspicious sighting in or around Lothering that could have passed as magic never resulted in her even being considered a suspect.

Bradon shifted onto his side until he was facing Bethany’s silhouette. She was curled up beside Leandra, head resting on her shoulder.

Not Bethany then. No heavy risk, but the staves…He sighed and felt his lids drooping heavily over stinging eyes.

“Hey,” he whispered, nudging his sister softly, “Beth?”

“I don’t know!” she moaned in a muffled voice, sounding like a restless dreamer caught between the Fade and the waking world.

“What?”

“I don’t know how we’re going to sneak me into Kirkwall,” Bethany’s eyes opened and she smiled in the gloom, “or my conspicuous equipment for that matter.”

“It’s not you I’m worried about,” Bradon said. “Well I am, but – you know what I mean. You’ve had a lifetime to practice blending in and evading capture. Inanimate objects, on the other hand…”

He ran one over each staff; one smooth, one rough and worn; one embodying youthful energy, the other exemplifying aged wisdom; both powerful and irreplaceable.

Bethany’s head jerked up when she noticed what he was doing. Her whole body found a temporary boon of vitality. Bradon caught an unmistakeable glimmer of worry in her eyes, despite the sparse light.

“Bradon you know I can’t afford to get rid of-”

“I’m not enforcing it,” he said evenly, caught once more between two unfavourable courses of action. Throwing the staves overboard into the roiling peaks of water seemed the lesser of two evils right now, but no amount of reasoning would stop it from being an evil. “I’m just reminding you that we don’t currently have any loose floorboards in which to hide these things.”

She regarded him with curious eyes and snickered. “Well, this isn’t exactly a top-notch vessel; pulling the floor out from under us shouldn’t prove too hard.”

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What, no takers?  :(

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Ugh, I can't get this next one finished!

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I check in on this one from time to time. I like it. And Gabby and Ken. :)

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Notho wrote...

I check in on this one from time to time. I like it. And Gabby and Ken. :)


Do you think I should write the boat trip or just scrap it?

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If you're having trouble with it, sure, but I'm kind of a path of least resistance guy. Maybe you could use it in a flashback later if it became relevant?

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Success! :wizard:


Writer's block broken, I have returned!

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:ph34r:

Edited.

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Chapter 5 rewritten, I've cut out Varric and Cassandra completely.

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...and I may scrap this thing completely. Writer's block is not agreeing with my study schedule.