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[Lucir]

  I, like so many others, felt heartache and disappointment at the conclusion of this game.  This series was a remarkable one at that, and although the first 29 hours and 55 minutes of this game was the best I have ever played, the last five minutes ruined it for me completely.       I have found such comfort from others who share in my disappointment and I thank you for your words of encouragement and your desire to let our feelings known to Bioware.  
     I refuse to let this incredible universe end on a sour note.  Our Shepards deserve the endings we truly deserve.  This pigeon-holed-deux-ex-sorry-excuse-for-an-ending will not cut it.  WE DESERVE BETTER!
     In the short amount of time since beating the game, I have written out endings for each of the characters in a screenplay to satisfy those of us who felt cheated in the last five minutes.  The first one I will write out is the paragon route involving a male Shepard who fell in love with Tali and united the entire galaxy (without losing a species) against the Reaper invasion.  
     Each segment will start when Shepard is offered the three choices by the catalyst- Control, Synthesis, or Synthetic Destruction. 



(Shepard stands at a crossroads with the visage of the catalyst before him.  He wavers between the three choices and casts a weary glance at the child's face.)


Shepard:  None of them.  I will not sacrifice one race for the benefit of another.  We've come too far and fought for too long to have it end like this.  


Catalyst:  The destruction is the chaos which organics have brought to these worlds.  For millennia, I have seen those who have proceeded you speak words of peace only to be followed by acts of war.  Your kind breeds only  the destruction of your children.  It is in the Reapers, that this chaos that you call life, may find order and in that order the promise for ascension.  


Shepard:  And at what cost?  The eradication of an entire species?  I refuse to believe life can be preserved under genocide.  


Catalyst:  It is something which is beyond your comprehension-


Shepard:  No, it is you who are out of touch with the world.  Look around you, (Camera pans around the battlefield to show Salarian and Krogans helping one other, Turians and Humans pulling each other out of the wreckage, and Quarians back to back with Geth star ships against Harbinger sized reapers) for the first time in the universe, we fight as one.  Organics and Synthetics have united together not only for this world, but for the lives of millions to come...to ensure a life without oppression or fear.  (Shepard smiles to himself) But you wouldn't understand that, it's nothing but chaos to you, isn't it? 


(The Catalyst looks around and for the first time understands Shepard's words.  It pauses as if in brief contemplation, before casting a threaten glance at Shepard)


Catalyst:  Perhaps you are right, human, but without such safeguards (The Reapers), would you risk the destruction of not only your species, but of all sentient life in the universe? Is this the risk you are willing to take?


Shepard:  (stares resolutely at the child)  Yes.  


Catalyst:  Very well, but consider yourself warned, for the peace that will come will only be fleeting.  


Shepard:  That is a risk we are willing to take.  


(The Catalyst's body becomes pure energy which merges itself with the citadel/crucible.  A small pylon-esc device rises from the ground and unfurls itself before Shepard.  A glowing orb appears before shepard, and he cautiously places his hands over it.  A sudden wave of light over comes him, and in a scene similar to when you chose to destroy the synthetics, a wave of red light engulfs the reapers and send them hurdling towards the world lifeless.  The humane/ alliance coalition raise their arms in triumph as a huge reaper collides into a nearby building in its death throes.)


(Tali doges a blast and returns fire near Garrus, a Cannibal falls down to the ground dead as others are immolated before their eyes.)


Garrus:  I don't believe it. 


Tali:  He did it!  Shepard did it!


(Suddenly the crucible explodes in a plume of smoke and flame.  Tali shakes her head as if in disbelief)


Tali:  SHEPARD!!!!


(She reaches towards the citadel which is hundreds of miles above her.  She collapses on the ground and Garrus holds her, while sad music begins to play.)


Shepard (narration):  Hope...


(The next scene shows the wreckage of the citadel with the N7 chest plate with dog tags sticking out of the rubble.)


Shepard (narration continued):  That was one thing they never understood. Regardless of how dark things got...there was always hope. 


(Suddenly there is a gasp for air, and the chest starts rising in sudden spasms for air)


Shepard:  And as long as we had that, we knew we could endure. 


(A normandy rescue team surveys the wreckage of the citadel, all is silent except for the music playing in the background.  Jack and Liara use their powers to move wreckage, Garrus digs through rubble, and Tali uses her omni tool to look for life signs.  As the screen zooms in on her omni tool, there are the faint, rhythmic movements of a heart beating.)


Shepard:  And endure we did...but that is not to say that victory is without its price.  For where there is joy there is also sorrow... and with every life saved there are lives which are lost...


(There is a military funeral for Anderson and hundreds of others who fought and died in this war.  Miranda's sister is there with a bouquet of flowers as she places them beside the grave of her sister.)


Shepard:  But we find ways to rebuild, to regroup...


(Scene shows the different alien civilizations working together to rebuild their world.


Shepard:  And to work together...


(Scene shows Eve (the female Krogan) joining the council at the citadel.)


Shepard:  Because slowly...


(Scene shows Liara with her people in her homeworld)


Shepard:  We learn to live, 


(EDI is helping Joker walk out of the ship and onto the war torn earth)


Shepard:  laugh


(James is losing at a game of poker and he slams down the cards playfully and shakes his head)


Shepard: and love again.  


(Scene Shows Garrus embracing his family)


Shepard:  For in those moments...


(Scene shows a woman in a white albeit loose fitting dress standing before a canyon.  The viewer sees only the back of the woman and the screen slowly fades to black.)


Shepard:  We make life meaningful.  


(Credits roll)




(At the end of the credits, you seen the woman looking at the canyon before her.  As the camera pans around you see it is Tali, but without her faceplate or armor.  Her beautiful, black hair blows in the breeze as she closes her eyes and savors the feeling of it.  Across her neck are the neck bracelets of her suit, but her outfit is the one the player sees in her photograph given to Shepard.)


Shepard:  And here I thought you wanted beach front property?


(She turns around, and Shepard, walking with a slight limp moves up beside her.  He smiles and she holds his hand while resting her head on his shoulder.)


Tali:  (Laughs)  Why can't we have both (she makes her fingers into a rectangle)  I still want the window looking out over here. And the kitchen will be here, and our room can look out over... 


(Shepard kisses her forehead)


Shepard:  One thing at a time Tali'Zora Vas Normandy, fighting a Reaper invasion was one thing, but building a house...(Tilts his head from one side to another as if uncertain) that's something else entirely. 


Tali:  Well, at least you're used to working under pressure.  She places her hand over her stomach to reveal she is  pregnant. 


(Shepard places his hand over her own that is covering her stomach)


Shepard:  I love you


Tali:  I love you too


(They kiss)


(Shepard bends down and kisses her stomach, as he whispers the phrase is her own language that means "a want for all time.")


-END OF STORY-


    


 

[Apocsapel91]

I'm not a Talimancer, but I still like it. That choice fits perfectly with Shepard's style.

[Lucir]

Thanks. I appreciate that.

[idunhavaname]

Apocsapel91 wrote...

I'm not a Talimancer, but I still like it. That choice fits perfectly with Shepard's style.

This.I say well done. I'll pretend this is my ending and just replace Tali with Ashley.

[Lucir]

I have stories for Liara and Ashley as well. I'll post those when I clean them up. I normally don't do this, but I was so bothered by how it ended that I couldn't let it stay that way.

[HellzMonkes]

much better job than what has been written in stone minus the Miranda dieing part lol, my Shepard would be so sad. that was really good though i cant overstate how disappointed i am with bioware

[Xephyr829]

I would have been happy with ending. Just switch out who ever your LI is.

[warrior256]

Wow... this is how the series should have ended! Only difference of course being the final scene with the LI. Still though, this is a million times better then what Bioware gave us. Nice job!

[eye basher]

Op i wouldn't quit my day job if i were you.

[Stalker]

Someone, hire this man as a writer!

I'm not so interested in Tali, but I could imagine fitting romance-difference for each and every character at that point.
I would have loved to see the "look around you" part in the actual game. That would have closed the huge plot-hole that is currently glancing at the real ending and would have brought a Paragon ending we could all agree on.

Modifié par Mr Massakka, 11 mars 2012 - 12:54 .

[Foulpancake]

Same, not a Talimancer, Liara's my girl, but i thought that was very well done and would have LOVED to see that instead of what we got

[Korhiann]

Well written. I would have liked to see an ending which actually focused on the themes of the series. Hope, victory against all odds, free will, fighting against ones destiny (being reaped) etc. Instead of conforming to the will of a "diety".

[BellPeppers&Beef023]

Lucir wrote...

I have stories for Liara and Ashley as well. I'll post those when I clean them up. I normally don't do this, but I was so bothered by how it ended that I couldn't let it stay that way.

Oh yes, please do. Please do. :wub:

[Iztiak]

Tali pregnant is not possible. Dextro DNA and Shepard levo DNA.

From the mass effect wiki.

"The way the DNA amino acid chain is set up. The DNA chain is made up of amino acids that form proteins that create the DNA strand. Levo and Dextro are certain types of amino acids used in the creation of DNA chains.

However the two cannot mix. It causes a reaction that may break down the DNA of one or the other tissue. To prevent this, white blood cells will attack the area and pretty much target everything and anything resulting in an allergic reaction. The breakdown of the tissue by the two fighting could also result in a similar reaction."

[Falkenlore]

I'd love to read your Liara one. The game ending really showed me how attached I've become to that particular LI.

[Lucir]

I thought someone would say that. This is my solution: If the geth can increase immuno competency within a quarian, why not facilitate cross species fertilization to optimize similar genetic frequencies (that are found in Shepard) to be assimilated by genes whose alleles, when expressed, would resemble Shepard's traits but would be entirely Quarian. Still it is a loop hole I know. But a gamer can dream can't he?

[DoNuTwInGs]

This ending is absolutely perfect. I wouldn't change a thing about it. BIOWARE MAKE THIS HAPPEN.

[Lucir]

and by loop hole I mean plot hole...sorry.

[Patriota125]

That has to be one of the worst fanfictions ever. That's why ME Fanbase is the worst in history. I'm glad Bioware pull that off, that way ME series stays clear of kids who wanted sunshine and rainbows like all the ****gots that are ranting.

[BellPeppers&Beef023]

Falkenlore wrote...

I'd love to read your Liara one. The game ending really showed me how attached I've become to that particular LI.

Have you tried the earth goodbye conversation with Liara if she's not a LI? It is very very touching, and highlights what a strong bond of friendship these 2 have.


(Or does romanced Liara get the same conversation? If so, then ignore post)

[Alamar2078]

For fans of Babylon 5 I would submit the Renegade version of events would be to tell the Reapers & God Child to get the h3ll out of "our" galaxy. I'm sure there are other possible endings that would be appropriate too.

BTW: I liked your story but disagree about the pregnancy thing. Not a big deal but not needed IMHO.

[HellzMonkes]

Patriota125 wrote...

That has to be one of the worst fanfictions ever. That's why ME Fanbase is the worst in history. I'm glad Bioware pull that off, that way ME series stays clear of kids who wanted sunshine and rainbows like all the ****gots that are ranting.

try not to troll so hard kid the endings were garbage end of story there doesnt need to be a disney ending jus tone without a machine-god child and one that makes oyu feel satisfied for putting huge chunks of your life into.

[Lucir]

ithurtz wrote...

Falkenlore wrote...

I'd love to read your Liara one. The game ending really showed me how attached I've become to that particular LI.

Have you tried the earth goodbye conversation with Liara if she's not a LI? It is very very touching, and highlights what a strong bond of friendship these 2 have.


I did.  It was very touching.  


(Or does romanced Liara get the same conversation? If so, then ignore post)

[Lucir]

Sorry...Messed up that reply.

I did it was very touching. And her ending is completely different from the one with Tali.

[Falkenlore]

Lucir wrote...

ithurtz wrote...

Falkenlore wrote...

I'd love to read your Liara one. The game ending really showed me how attached I've become to that particular LI.

Have you tried the earth goodbye conversation with Liara if she's not a LI? It is very very touching, and highlights what a strong bond of friendship these 2 have.


I did.  It was very touching.  


(Or does romanced Liara get the same conversation? If so, then ignore post)

Yeah, the earth good-bye made it worse! It was incredibly touching which only made the ending all the more painful..

Gosh I sound like a lunatic O.o