Make A Better Ending? Challenge Accepted.

 Original thread here: 
http://social.biowar.../index/10165033 

While there have been many suggestions and outlines for improvements on the ending or complete rewrites that make much more sense I don't think I've seen one quite like mine. They are either very rough outlines that give you the bare bones of the ideas or go into fanfiction territory by just finishing the story off the way the auther would prefer. My gripes with the sometimes mind numbing stupidity of fanfiction aside these are both perfectly valid ways to come up with something, anything better than what a boatload of people are po'd about. 

I've tried to take a somewhat middle ground in between the two. What I'll be posting isn't what I personally would do with the ending of ME; doing the way I'd like would require rewriting entire swaths of the game which other than a few issues (ME2 character's availability and screen time, etc) I don't think needs a drastic overhaul. 

The format is something you might see for a prospective film script. Nothing fancy, just seemed like a good way to get the point across as otherwise I'd be too tempted to add superfluous details. I would like to add that having written these up that I can see the allure of ME3's ending from a business standpoint: it didn't require factoring in the ridiculous number of variables possible, it didn't address long standing questions that could be complex to readily explain and most of all it was cheaper. Giving the illusion of choice with color variations means you don't have to worry about making a customized ending for each player. I've no doubt my endings would have taken much more time and effort which is probably why they would have sucked less.

Anywho,  let me know what you think, if you've spotted any typos, if you liked it, blah blah blah. 

Rushed Ending: https://docs.google....d8VI_WhY5U/edit

Better Ending: https://docs.google....u_Gl15reh8/edit