Good News: My wife's discovery of the lack of friction between socks and stairs doesn't seem to have broken anything.
Bad News: She has, however, bruised the bones in her right elbow quite badly. When her arm does eventually recover, she'll also be having to work her butt off to meet deadlines with her current projects.
So the side-project we were working on of a ME3 alternative ending comic is pretty much ruled out (She's the artist, I'm an overimaginative engineer who does stick-figure scribble).
Although it is not precisely in line with the compromise suggested in this thread, it is
essentially working with the existing material as much as I find... palatable. So I thought I'd share the concept I was running with (noting that the basis is Renegade femshep who romanced Liara, with all crew from ME2 alive and Ash as VS).
(Edit for formatting and the odd typo).
(Edit 2: I'll likely still finish putting this together in comic form, however it's a bit on the fugly side with just my lack of drawing ability)
Part 1: EarthPage 1: Get Up, SoldierShepard awakes, wounded, among rubble and broken concrete near the Conduit on Earth (either replacing the post-Harbinger section, or continuing if going with IT), fading in from black as Anderson digs her out of the rubble.
<
Anderson> "
I'm amazed you're still alive - Harbinger is tearing through our forces. Hammer's taken heavy losses and is pinned among the debri."
<
Shepard> "
We've got to keep moving. Everyone's counting on us to get the Citadel arms open."
<
Anderson> "
I know. But Harbinger hit our comm center on the way down - we're cut off from the fleet and he's jamming local comms. Only message those soldiers are going to get is one they can see with their own eyes."
<
Shepard, rising> "
Then we need to give them one.... Where's my damn gun?"
Page 2-3: Harbinger RevealedGarrus & Liara arrive on the scene in a commandeered Mako. Garrus opens the hatch and gestures to the pair.
<
Garrus>
"Yeah. I'm saving your sorry behinds again. Thank me later"<
Liara, blasting husks with cannon>
"Anytime now, people!"<
Anderson>
"I think that's our cue" Battle between Shepard and the other survivors and Harbinger, during which Harbinger gives the Big Reveal: Humans are the first ideal food race in aeons, and the crucible is a reaper failsafe that will destroy the minds of all organics near active relays.
<
Harbinger> YOU WILL NOT ACTIVATE THE CRUCIBLE. OUR HARVEST SHALL NOT BE STOPPED
<
Shepard>
"We've united the entire galaxy against you! Your 'cycle' ends today!"<
Harbinger> THE OTHER ORGANICS ARE IRRELEVANT. YOUR SPECIES IS ALL WE REQUIRE.
<
Harbinger> THEY ARE FLAWED. HOMOGENOUS. USELESS. LIKE THE PROTHEANS AND A THOUSAND CYCLES BEFORE THEM, THEY ARE UNSUITED TO ASCENSION AND WILL PURGED FROM THIS GALAXY.
<
Shepard>
"We will not stand by while you slaughter us! We will stop you!"<
Harbinger> YOU WILL NOT BE PURGED. YOUR SPECIES IS THE FIRST SINCE THE ORIGINAL THAT IS WORTHY OF TRUE ASCENSION. DIVERSE. ADAPTABLE. YOUR KIND WILL FORM A THOUSAND OF MY KINDRED. THE PINNACLE OF EXISTANCE.
<
Shepard>
"To hell with that! You're the pinnacle of nothing, we've proven you can be killed!"<
Harbinger> YOU HAVE PROVEN NOTHING. THOSE YOU HAVE DESTROYED ARE INFERIOR. IMMITATIONS. ONLY SOVEREIGN WAS OUR EQUAL, AND IT SACRIFICED ITS EXISTANCE TO COMPLETE THIS CYCLE. AS WAS ITS FUNCTION.
<
Shepard>
"Bull****! We destroyed it, and we'll destroy you!"<
Harbinger> YOU FUMBLE IN IGNORANCE. WE WILL NOT PERMIT YOU TO ACTIVATE OUR CRUCIBLE.
<
Shepard>
"YOUR Crucible?"<
Harbinger> THE CRUCIBLE IS OUR FAILSAFE AGAINST THE CHAOS OF ORGANIC DEVELOPMENT. DISGUISED AS THEIR ONLY HOPE, ORGANICS SQUANDER THEIR LAST RESOURCES BUILDING WHAT THEY DO NOT COMPREHEND, AND CAUSE THEIR OWN END.
<
Shepard>
"What are you talking about? Why would you use such a deception?"<
Harbinger> YOU ARE NOT THE FIRST CYCLE TO DEVIATE FROM THE PATTERN. THE CRUCIBLE IS A WEAPON. OUR WEAPON. MERGED WITH THE CITADEL IT AMPLIFIES AND BROADCASTS THE INDOCTRINATION SIGNAL THROUGH ALL ACTIVE MASS RELAYS.
<
Shepard>
"If that's true, why are you telling me this? Why are you trying to stop me?"<
Harbinger> INDOCTRINATED ORGANICS CANNOT BE ASCENDED. THEY CAN ONLY BE USED AS TOOLS AND RAW MATERIALS. YOUR SPECIES HAS TOO MUCH POTENTIAL TO PERMIT YOU TO DESTROY IT.
Page 4: Punch It!Citadel starts opening (without anyone reaching it), Harbinger roars and flies up towards it, ending the conversation. Shepard + Co gun the Mako through the conduit.
<
Liara>
"By the Goddess! The arms are opening... but who's doing it?"
Part 2: CitadelPage 5: Getting Better At ThisArriving on the Citadel, the Mako bounces and screeches to a halt.
<
Liara>
"That seemed familiar"<
Garrus>
"Hey, at least he didn't trash it this time" Show vista of reaper-minion army occupying this part of the presidium, with a firefight in the distance near the elevator to the Council chambers (Citadel HQ).
<
Liara>
"Looks like there are survivors"<
Garrus>
"Not for too much longer if the reapers keep sending in more reinforcements"<
Shepard>
"Then we should give them a hand. Liara, take the gun"<
Garrus>
"Shepard... you know I'm better at long-range targeting, right?"<
Shepard>
"Exactly"
Page 6: Bustin' ThroughMako engine revs up and the wheels screech as Shepard puts the accelerator to the floor.
<
Garrus>
"Oh... you have got to be kidding me..." Charge Mako through the horde until it is incapacitated near the front lines - abandoning the vehicle which is quickly destroyed, flipping it over onto the roof.
<
Liara>
"Yep. Real familiar"<
Garrus> "
At least HE didn't trash it this time" Page 7-8: Holding The LineFight to front lines, where C-Sec are desperately holding the reaper-minions back. Matriarch Aethyta and Captain Bailey leading the defense.
<
Shepard>
"Bailey, Aethyta! We need to get the arms closed again!"<
Bailey>
"Tell me about it, Shepard! We got them closed after Indoctrinated Agents somehow used the mass relay in the Citadel to jump us here, but we've had to move everyone who could hold a gun here to keep the reapers at bay. We've lost control of the HQ"<
Shepard>
"Lost control? To the reapers?"<
Aethyta>
"No. Cerberus. Those miserable sons-of-****es must have smuggled in reinforcements just before we jumped. Bastards hit us from the rear and stormed the HQ. Now they're dug in, and we can't spare the troops to dislodge 'em."<
Garrus>
"Damnit! The Illusive Man has a talent for picking the best moments to be a real pain in the ass"<
Anderson>
"We can't leave him in control of the Citadel. There's no telling WHAT he'll do with the Crucible. He's likely to kill us all!"<
Shepard>
"Bailey, Aethyta, the reapers won't be getting many reinforcements from Earth. We need you to hold them here and keep them off our backs. We need to get to Citadel HQ.".
Page 9: Dog PoundMontage of Shepard, Liara, Garrus & Anderson fighting through Cerberus troops as the fleet moves the Crucible into position. On reaching HQ, Garrus and Liara remain behind to guard the rear while Shepard & Anderson go on to shut down the controls and stop the Crucible from firing.
<
Anderson>
"Shepard, we can't fight Cerberus on two fronts."<
Shepard>
"Liara, Garrus, hold this point. Anderson and I need to end this"<
Garrus>
"We've got your back. Give 'em hell, Shepard."Page 10-11: Some Call Him... TIMDiscover Illusive Man in the control room, sporting new cybernetic upgrades. He flexes his newfound power to control Shepard's body (implants in it), paralysing her, while reaper-machinery in the room lashes out and impales Anderson, pinning him to the floor (mortal wound, but not instagib).
Outside, the fleet are holding the Reapers outside of firing range of the Crucible, in a colossal space battle.
Verbal confrontation with The Illusive Man.
<In a similar vein to current dialogue, but less... verbose. Was still working on this bit>
TIM argues that this is the opportunity for humanity to seize its destiny - turning the Crucible against them he control them, and in doing so humanity will ascend on its own terms. Shepard argues against this, appealing to the fact that humanity is not ready for such a move, and the cost is too high - higher than TIM would have paid to the Collectors.
TIM, about to activate the Crucible, falters, losing control of Shepard as he does so. Shepard takes the opportunity to leap forward and punch her omniblade through his chest.
Page 12: Sucker Punch<
Liara, via comms>
"Shepard? Come in Shepard. I've managed to jury-rig a Cerberus comms unit to connect to the Normandy. Patching you through" <
EDI>
"Shepard? We lost communication when..."<
Shepard>
"There isn't time to explain, EDI. I need you and Joker to calculate FTL paths for Shield fleet away from the Citadel and coordinate the ships by tight beam."<
Joker>
"FTL? With THIS much debri in local? I think you've had a few too many hits to the head Comma.."<
EDI>
"FTL coordinates calculated. What are you planning, Commander?"<
Shepard>
"Just trust me. There's going to be a lot of reapers heading this way real soon, and when I say the word, I need the fleet to scatter"<
Joker>
"Scatter? Commander, in case you hadn't noticed, that would leave the Reapers a clear shot at the Crucible...."<
Shepard>
"I'm counting on it." Shepard punches in a series of commands and leaves the console with the alerts flashing of <OVERLOAD IMMENENT> and <DOCKING CLAMPS RELEASED> and turns to rescue Anderson from the Cerberus machinery, with the citadel arms closing in the background. Hauling him over one shoulder, Shepard runs desperately down the corridor.
<
Shepard>
"Joker, EDI, NOW!" Outside the Citadel, the reaper swarm races towards the Citadel at top speed. As they close, the Shield fleet goes to FTL speed to jump clear, and the truth is revealed: The citadel is closing up after having detached the Crucible - which is going critical.
Page 13: BoomAs the reapers try to alter course, the Crucible explodes, destroying the bulk of the reapers with it, and damaging the Citadel itself. Full page spread of boom.
Part 3: Resolution / EpiloguePage 14: Well Earned RestShepard and Anderson lying among/under debri, with both wounded (Anderson far more so)
<
Anderson>
"Most advanced weapon we ever built, and you made a bomb out of it"<
Shepard>
"It was always too complicated for my taste anyway"<
Anderson>
"Heh. That's funny"<
Shepard>
"What?"<
Anderson>
"You just pulled the greatest sucker punch in history"<
Shepard - chuckle cut off by groan>
"You're right. That is pretty funny"<
Anderson>
"You did good. I'm proud of you, kid..."<
Shepard>
"Couldn't have done it without you, sir"Silence
<
Shepard>
"Sir?"Silence
<
Shepard>
"Anderson?" With effort, Shepard pulls herself up to look at Anderson, who has passed away in the interim, a slight smile still on his face. Shaking, Shepard blacks out.
Page 15: Tables TurnedLight pours onto Shepard and Anderson as debri is moved away by Garrus, Liara + others.
<
Liara>
"Shepard? SHEPARD! Oh Goddess, she's a mess! Get a medic!"<
Garrus>
"Hackett, Vakarian here. We've found Shepard - she's alive but barely. What's the ETA on the Evac?"<
Hackett>
"Shepard's little stunt wiped out over 93% of the reaper forces here - including all their major assets. Most of the others are fleeing through the Charon relay. We've regrouped Sword and Shield fleets and are mopping up the handful still fighting. I've sent the Normandy your way - it's small enough to get through some of the holes in the superstructure you caused"<
Liara, trying to staunch Shepard bleeding leg>
"She's bleeding all over and.... her leg is missing. WHERE IS THAT DAMN MEDIC!?" Cut to the scene outside as ships of all races converge and obliterate the handful of reapers still in the Sol system.
Page 16-18: Resolution (More concepts at this point)
Scene of earth, with sun rising over London - reapers falling from the sky throughout the horizon. Human, Turian, Krogan and Geth soldiers standing bloody but victorious over a field of collapsed reaper minions - their will to fight as dead as their masters.
Scene of Wrex, Grunt and Jack yelling in triumph.
Scene of Ash and Vega leaning exhausted on a ruined building.
<
Vega>
"I gotta admit it. You sure know how to handle a weapon"<
Ash>
"Mm-hmm"<
Vega>
"What?"<
Ash>
"Later. I need a shower. " Scene of Javik sitting on a mound of broken rubble. Silently watching the reapers fall from the sky with a relaxed smile on his face.
Scene (3 parts) of Anderson being carried on a stretcher, with Kayleigh Sanders running up, reaching out to him, before stopping herself - her face falling in grief.
Page 19: Epilogue part 1Scene of Shepard in sickbay, missing a leg and most of a hand with Liara at her side. Background has silhouette of Tali and Garrus, one arm around the other, silently watching over their friend.
<
Liara >
"It's... it's going to be okay, Shepard. The blood transfusion is going well, and Dr. Chakwas says there's no residual infection."<
Liara, glancing down at Shepard's missing leg>
"And... and human-compatible prosthetics have come a long way in recent years. Even if one isn't available locally I'm sure if we talk to my people we can adapt..."<
Shepard, quietly>
"Liara... I'll be okay."<
Liara>
"But.."<
Shepard, touching Liara's hand>
"We... I have a future, and the person I want to spend it with. What more could I ask for?"<
Liara, weeping>
"Oh...Love..."<
Shepard, smirking slightly>
"Besides. You should see the other guy" Page 20: Epilogue part 2Normandy sickbay image turns into holoscreen.
<
Hidden>
"You always were a bloody hero" Zooming back to see a suited Miranda sitting in the Illusive Man's chair, with a briefcase computer diplaying a <DOWNLOAD COMPLETE> alert.
<
Unknown>
"Ms Lawson, the charges are set. Are you sure you don't want to bring any of the artefacts with..." <
Miranda>
"Absolutely not. The Illusive Man gambled on being able to control Reaper technology - and lost. I have no intention of repeating his mistake." Closing the briefcase (with computer inside), she stands and walks towards the camera.
<
Miranda>
"No. Now we do things my way." Note 1: The Miranda scene, while not
strictly necessary, I felt was appropriate to end with to add a bit more depth to the ending scenario, and inspire some thought on how the universe will be afterwards.
Note 2: The Resolution scenes would take a couple more pages as written. It would need a balance between showing enough and not being
too gratuitous.
TL/DR:Alternative ending concept, either replacing everything post-Harbinger (no IT), or carrying on from Shepard waking up (IT).
- Shepard dug out of the rubble by Anderson, Liara & Garrus
- Team get into Mako and fight Harbinger alongside their allies
- Harbinger reveal of Reaper motivation and the Crucible being a reaper-made trap, which they don't want you to activate until they've harvested humanity.
- Citadel arms open, Harbinger + almost all the other reapers rush off to try and stop the Crucible docking/firing.
- Shep & Co drive into the Conduit to reach the Citadel.
- Drive/fight through husk-army to reach C-Sec line. Reveal Citadel was moved by indoctrinated agents.
- Reveal cerberus commandos have captured Citadel HQ while C-Sec was fighting husks.
- Fight through Cerberus, leave Liara & Garrus to hold the door while Anderson & Shep confront TIM
- TIM incapacitates and wounds Anderson, and 'controls' Shepard via her implants.
- Shepard & TIM argue about his certainty that controlling the reapers is possible and worth the cost. TIM's resolve falters, Shep breaks free and omniblade's his face.
- Message sent out to Shield fleet to flee, Shep sets the Crucible to detach and explode, and Citadel arms to close.
- Reapers come in too fast to escape Shep's trap by the time the see it. Crucible explodes, most reapers die, Citadel damaged.
- Anderson & Shep share celebratory banter before Anderson dies from his wounds.
- Liara & Garrus dig Shep out of the debri, with Shep badly wounded.
- Garrus gets update from Hackett that 93% reapers died in blast, allied fleet mopping up the remainder who haven't fled.
- Celebratory scenes
- Shepard in hospital missing leg and most of an arm, body shattered but resolve unbroken.
- Final epilogue scene of Miranda taking control and repurposing Cerberus.
Modifié par Raynulf, 27 avril 2012 - 07:41 .