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[Joroelcapo]

Hello! i want to share this happy ending that i made.
I tried to solve all the problems that the real had for me:

- the lack of closure for the characters
- I try to reward those players who save all the characters and races showing what they achieve
- no closure for your love interest
- The only menace for the starchild is synthetics when there a lot of problems in the galaxy beside that
(Mass effect never was terminator or  matrix)
- I try to make possible the survive of Shepard wih a sacrifrice of another character
(trying to respect the originals themes for the game
- and try to left some questions unanswered for a sequel

*** It´s very cheap and i made it as a fan. I love mass effect 3 but yeah for me the ending had problems ( The thing that bother me more was the flashback which didnt show my love interest)

Well hope you like it

***AND SORRY FOR MY ENGLISH HERE AND IN THE VIDEOS****





http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MXiS2hE1UTA&context=C4ea3a2aADvjVQa1PpcFN1COEWzluQmy0GH1JFNOB_pZ3Yuz-JD4I=

[moater boat]

Just finished part one. So far I like it. I will update once I have watched the rest.

Edit

Well you have more talent than I do, that's for sure. I like the fact that TIM was able to redeem himself. I also like the idea of teamwork being needed at the end. I'm not so sure I like Shepard somehow survived that explosion. It doesn't seem likely. Also I think the idea of renaming London is kinda, well, weird. Still, all things considered I think you did a great job. If the ending was something like that I would have enjoyed it more.

Modifié par moater boat, 10 avril 2012 - 04:21 .

[Joroelcapo]

thanks for watch it

[MatronAdena]

swap it out to femshep and liara, and I'll take it, beautifully done

[Joroelcapo]

thanks! I woul love to do it but it take a lot of time ha!

[Joroelcapo]

moater boat wrote...

Edit

Well you have more talent than I do, that's for sure. I like the fact that TIM was able to redeem himself. I also like the idea of teamwork being needed at the end. I'm not so sure I like Shepard somehow survived that explosion. It doesn't seem likely. Also I think the idea of renaming London is kinda, well, weird. Still, all things considered I think you did a great job. If the ending was something like that I would have enjoyed it more.

Thanks! the renaming of London were something like a joke.  It is impossible for Shepard to survive in my ending and in the real one. So i didnt explain how he escape
I only put that the starchild help him. I really appreciate your feedback thanks a lot!

[Wightling]

Very well done. TIM surviving somehow seemed kind of odd and there were a few minor typos, but compared to what we got your version was so much better, and not just because it was happier. Though I'm still waiting for a fan ending that doesn't include space magic. As for Shepard surviving, I guess he could have crawled back to the transporter beam before everything exploded.

[cutegigi]

I will watch this when I get home.
just want to say thanks for your hard work

[Joroelcapo]

thanks for watching it! and i glad that you like it

[Mad-Hamlet]

I used to edit open published short stories so I'd like to offer some criticisms.
Please note- Criticism does not mean 'Things One Has Done Wrong' though it does include those.

Plot

You know for someone with English problems your story telling skills are really good. The premise was believable for the most part. There was some stretching here and there but the overall quality glossed over them nicely.
There were moments where the script seemed a bit weak.

Hacket: Great job, you've done the impossible.

I think there'd be a little bit more than that for him to say but as you've mentioned, English is not your native language so no harm, no foul. As stated there were a few parts that stretched the Suspension of Disbelief but nothing that broke it. I was caught up enough in the events to not mind even a little.

One high, HIGH point was my empathic response to Miranda's "You promised!". The music, story-boarding and dialogue was really good. I am doubly impressed by this because I don't care for either Male-Shepard or Miranda all that much but I was worried if you'd killed him off or not. (Happy is such a relative term) so props to you for that.

Script

It was fast moving enough and though some parts seemed a bit dry I think my favorite bit overall was actually EDI and Joker's bit. You had EDI's voice perfect and Joker's response. At least for their conversation. I could really hear them in my mind saying just those lines. The example of EDI becoming more than just a program with her inability to express things that even humans, after generations, cannot express well but always long for, is fine, fine writing indeed. More congratulations on that.

Suggestions

If you have the script in DOC format or written anywhere else type it up and send it to someone for proofreading and revision. There are a few grammar issues and sentence structure problems that yank hard on immersion in the story.
As for the artwork I can say nothing other than it told the story you had in mind in a compelling manner and helped you achieve what you set out to do: Namely tell an ending to ME3 that was satisfying to your audience (Or at least me).

I hope you found this helpful; again my congratulations and gratitude for your work. I'm also hoping you understood everything I had to say. I'd also like to offer to assist if I can in any future improvements.

Closing Thoughts

You made The Starchild actually a character? A LIKEABLE character? Holy crap! That's ... that's got to be like one of the most impossible things in the history of ever!

Modifié par Mad-Hamlet, 10 avril 2012 - 12:26 .

[DarkShadow]

For the ressources you had, this is really good. I really love the way TIM was implemented. For me, this still doesn't feel right, but the reason is simply that you had to work with that deus ex machina Bioware gave you. If this was the official ending from Bioware, I wouldn't be perfectly satisfied, but I surely wouldn't be protesting in the forums.

And Shepards eyelashes look a little bit weird in part 3. Nice work nonetheless, especially in the music choice for part 3.

Modifié par DarkShadow, 10 avril 2012 - 12:46 .

[LePetitRobot]

Good effort. I did laugh at the "we all know this part" fast-forward. Also I like the idea of TIM's redemption.

My favourite bits:
a) Shepard showing the Star Child that every species is fighting together.
 Squadmates looking up to the sky and saying "Shepard did it" etc. Wrex's line(s) really moved me.

Dare we dream that the EC will feature something similar?

Modifié par LePetitRobo, 10 avril 2012 - 01:02 .

[Joroelcapo]

thanks everybody!
Yes the thing that bother me more for the real ending was not see my buddies in battle and their reaction to my choice. The wrex or Jack scene try to compensate that. That and not see my LI in the flashback
The happy part was only an experiment i´m sure that i will be satisfied with the new ending from bioware. Though i´still believe that a happy ending will not damage the game at all. The player who saves everybody and has a very high readiness deserves it

[MPSai]

The Illusive Man showing back up is a bit cheesy, but with the right staging, writing and Sheen's acting it could work well enough. And it does give him redemption. And if we have to work in the crucible nonsense this is a decent solution.

[Joroelcapo]

ha! yes Mr Sheen sell anything. With this ending i should rework also the TIM Anderson Shepard scene but it was too much work and the result will be pretty similar

[cg8900]

your ending is really awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I got the impression Miranda was pregnant there in the end.....would love the idea

[The Protheans]

Very good but why is the citadel in closed but then blows up open.....lol.

[Iceyonline]

Interesting. I like it how you actually made starbrat likeable.
You also seemed to capture the Illusive Man's personality spot on when he gains control of the Reapers.

[Mad-Hamlet]

[Joroelcapo]

Thanks! this would sound egocentric
But i would love that more people see it
If it´s work as a reflection of what the fans wants bioware maybe will see it and it can help them
I´dont want a happy ending exactly but i would love to see all the character reaction and consequences ( I am truly think that DLC will deliver)

[Khajiit Jzargo]

Awesome, especially part 3.

[LightweightJustice]

This...is...actually great.
I mean some minor tweaks here and there and it would be perfect.
My dear friend, could you please name the programs you used?

[Joroelcapo]

yes photoshop and xnalara. I didn´t have all the ME 3 model so that is the reason that some of them look like ME 2 and that Shepard look with that weir eyes

[DragonEffect1710]

I loved it! Definitely better than the ending we got. Well done!

[Quietness]

actually like the kid, kinda... it was very good