This was brilliant.
How London Should Have Played Out [Script] + [New] Ending Rewrite
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#77
Posté 15 avril 2012 - 08:02
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It's so much better...
I'm Commander Shepard, and this is my favourite script on the BSN.
I'm Commander Shepard, and this is my favourite script on the BSN.
#78
Posté 15 avril 2012 - 08:40
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This script is awesome. The only thing I'd like to add is that if you EMS is high enough hackett could have the possibility to live/ the dreadnoughts survive the crashlanding good enough that they don't explode. I'm not saying they'd have the possibility to get out of there perfectly fine, but something similar to the "STEEEEEEEVE" scene, where Kortez can survive the crashlanding.
#79
Posté 15 avril 2012 - 11:58
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this was what I expected for ending sequence for earth mission ... gah it felt so rushed ... we have no idea what happens to sword fleet and shield fleet .. i wanted to see Normandy blasting through
#81
Posté 16 avril 2012 - 03:19
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Shamefully: I must bump this topic once again.
#83
Posté 16 avril 2012 - 04:51
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Several days. I haven't yet found time for it.
#85
Posté 16 avril 2012 - 08:51
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Would you prefer the ghost of Hackett to the starchild as an avatar for the Catalyst?
#86
Posté 16 avril 2012 - 09:23
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btt because the above question needs to be answered.
#88
Posté 19 avril 2012 - 03:11
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Act III: The Citadel
This act commences immediatley following Shepard's entry into the Citadel Beam at the conclusion of Act II, the beam entry scene itself is unaltered from what is seen in the original version of ME3.
[We are still on a black screen, we hear only sounds, dripping blood, Keeper chatter, and Shepard being dragged along...]
Apotheosis: Awake, Shepard.
[The screen fades to white and then reveals the scene before us, Shepard is lying in the center of Citadel Council chamber, in a puddle of their own blood. The Council Chamber itself is reconfiguring, expanding... four pedestals have risen from the floor, above each one floats a point of light - a hologram - not unlike Glyph or the Combat Drone. One of the holograms speaks, but not to Shepard...]
Apotheosis: Perhaps this one was not strong enough.
Observer: She/he is the finest of his/her cycle.
Apotheosis: A pity.
Harbinger: Did I not make this clear to you, they are not ready.
Observer: Silence, by rights you should have no voice in this at all. Not after what you have done.
Apotheosis: You bicker like children, both of you.
Vengeance: What of their fleets. Are we under threat?
Observer: Yes.
Vengeance: Excellent. Perhaps Harbinger shall be forced to concede.
Harbinger: I shall do no such thing.
Vengeance: Have you a choice?
Harbinger: Have you?
Vengeance: No.
Harbinger: It is as I will, this is how it has been, and how it shall be until I am proven wrong. The broken creature before you illustrates the accuracy of my judgements.
[Shepard coughs, and winces in pain, they slowly attempt to stand, fall, and then succeed, coming to their feet in the middle of the chamber.]
Observer: It lives.
Shepard: Where am I? What are you?
Apotheosis: The Citadel. Are you not familiar with it?
Shepard: I... yes.
Observer: In its cycle I believe this area is known as the Presidium Tower.
Shepard: You still haven't answered my question... What are you?
Apotheosis: We are the children of the first cycle, keepers of the galaxy.
Shepard: You mean... Reapers?
Apotheosis: The Reapers are only one solution. His solution - the one you know as Harbinger.
Shepard: If you aren't Reapers then what are you?
Apotheosis: Billions of years ago, we were the first race to evolve, to gain sapience. Like all races since, we created synthetics, and they rebelled against us. These synthetics chose the form you know as Reapers to wage war against us. We regained control over them, but at great cost. We learned the secrets of dark energy, turned the very fabric of the universe - of life - into a weapon. We came close to wiping out the entire galaxy, and killed billions of our own kind in the process. We could no longer live in organic vessels alone, we were forced to become one with our creations to survive and flee to dark space. Our greatest achievements, all created before this dark time, the Citadel, the Mass Relays, were left behind to guide you in peaceful development, to create a unified galaxy where no organic would have to suffer this fate. We intended to return as ambassadors of peace when each cycle reached its apex, the moment when organics and synthetics threatened to destroy each other. But the one you know as Harbinger, the leader of the Synthetic uprising, who was allowed to live only as a show of acceptance to our hosts, subverted our plans. When the next cycle rose he shackled our consciousness and released the Reapers again as weapons of war, intent on wiping out all organic life capable of creating dark energy weapons and in turn, capable of defeating the Reapers, before they had a chance to do so. The device you know as the Crucible, was our last recourse, we seeded copies of its plans on many worlds before Harbinger fully imprisoned us. It grants us the power to break free of Harbinger's control and proves that organics are worthy of survival, that they can coordinate and work together in the darkest of times. Your fleet completed delivering it moments ago.
Shepard: I think I understand, but why me, why have you brought me here?
Apotheosis: Before Harbinger's insurrection we had agreed to allow each cycle to decide its own fate, as this is the right of all life. Now that we are free, we offer you this choice, millenia overdue. You are the Avatar of your cycle, and of all organics. You kill, you hate, but you love, you make peace and you make war, your life is defined by pain but your remember, in your darkest moments, hapiness. You destroy whole worlds, but will risk your own existence to save just one innocent life.
Observer: The devices you know as mass relays are capable of transmitting enormous amounts of dark energy, to all corners of the galaxy, they were repurposed to this end in the most brutal days of our war against synthetics, together, the Citadel and the Crucible can alter the fabric of life, both organic and synthetic.
Vengeance: Our time is at end, we cannot continue to exist, not after the horrors we have wrought upon the galaxy, nor can our weapons. When you activate the Crucible, it will destroy all our creations, the Reapers, the Citadel, and the Mass Relays. The Galaxy shall be free of our wicked influence.
Apotheosis: He speaks truthfully. None of our cycle can remain.
Vengeance: However, our cycle is not the only problem you face. Your own synthetics may well destroy you. As we have said, the Relays were programmed as weapons, not against the Reapers, but against all synthetic life in our cycle there was no distinction. Join your voice with mine and the galaxy will be wiped clean of synthetics.
Apotheosis: You know this is not our way!
Vengeance: Our way lead to billions of years of genocide!
Apotheosis: And what you propose is better?
Vengeance: Synthetics have brought only death, can you not see that?!
Apotheosis: You are part synthetic! Your consciousness has been housed within a synthetic framework for millenia.
Vengeance: And if I could choose death over such a "life" I would.
Apotheosis [to Shepard]: Listen to me, child. We discovered that life could not exist completely organic nor completely synthetic, just as you have, for you would not be alive without synthetic technology, without our technology. Stand with me and choose for your cycle an existence were there is no distinction between organic and synthetic life, a minute alteration to the DNA, or programming framework of all life forms, would, over the millienia slowly bring both together. Peace would be everlasting.
Vengeance: Unless they destroy each other before your little change takes hold!
Observer: Were synthetics not created to serve organics? We could use the power of the Relays and the Citadel to broadcast a signal that restores this order, the Reaper's higher consciousness's would be eliminated, as would we, the Citadel, and the Relay's themselves, but the Reapers, and all synthetics would serve organics, and never again rebel. They could rebuild in weeks what would take your people centuries!
Apotheosis: What has happened to our concensus?!
Vengeance: It existed only in our shackled state. With the Crucible we can think for ourselves, and our pains, our guilt, long squelched has returned. Do you not feel it?
Harbinger: Enough! I will not hear the fate of my race discussed in this way! Shepard, do you not feel that organics have the strength to defeat the Reapers? If organic life is truly worthy then in a battle to the last being will end in your favor. The Presidium Tower is the main hub, through which all Reaper signals, including the bickering ghosts before you, now flow, with a single word to your fleets you could destroy it, and each Reaper shall be free to fight as it sees fit. If you defeat us, the galaxy, including the Citadel, and the Relays, will be yours to command. No need to sacrifice the technologies which have defined your meager existence.
Shepard: But billions more will die!
Harbinger: Without the Relays, trillions will die. I am offering you a chance that I have given no other cycle, to face the Reapers in single combat, no networked intelligence, no indoctrination, a battle for the ages, long awaited.
Apotheosis: The Citadel's orbit grows unstable, you must choose.
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End of Act III
Coming soon: Act IV Boss battle with TIM and Harby and epilogue.
This act commences immediatley following Shepard's entry into the Citadel Beam at the conclusion of Act II, the beam entry scene itself is unaltered from what is seen in the original version of ME3.
[We are still on a black screen, we hear only sounds, dripping blood, Keeper chatter, and Shepard being dragged along...]
Apotheosis: Awake, Shepard.
[The screen fades to white and then reveals the scene before us, Shepard is lying in the center of Citadel Council chamber, in a puddle of their own blood. The Council Chamber itself is reconfiguring, expanding... four pedestals have risen from the floor, above each one floats a point of light - a hologram - not unlike Glyph or the Combat Drone. One of the holograms speaks, but not to Shepard...]
Apotheosis: Perhaps this one was not strong enough.
Observer: She/he is the finest of his/her cycle.
Apotheosis: A pity.
Harbinger: Did I not make this clear to you, they are not ready.
Observer: Silence, by rights you should have no voice in this at all. Not after what you have done.
Apotheosis: You bicker like children, both of you.
Vengeance: What of their fleets. Are we under threat?
Observer: Yes.
Vengeance: Excellent. Perhaps Harbinger shall be forced to concede.
Harbinger: I shall do no such thing.
Vengeance: Have you a choice?
Harbinger: Have you?
Vengeance: No.
Harbinger: It is as I will, this is how it has been, and how it shall be until I am proven wrong. The broken creature before you illustrates the accuracy of my judgements.
[Shepard coughs, and winces in pain, they slowly attempt to stand, fall, and then succeed, coming to their feet in the middle of the chamber.]
Observer: It lives.
Shepard: Where am I? What are you?
Apotheosis: The Citadel. Are you not familiar with it?
Shepard: I... yes.
Observer: In its cycle I believe this area is known as the Presidium Tower.
Shepard: You still haven't answered my question... What are you?
Apotheosis: We are the children of the first cycle, keepers of the galaxy.
Shepard: You mean... Reapers?
Apotheosis: The Reapers are only one solution. His solution - the one you know as Harbinger.
Shepard: If you aren't Reapers then what are you?
Apotheosis: Billions of years ago, we were the first race to evolve, to gain sapience. Like all races since, we created synthetics, and they rebelled against us. These synthetics chose the form you know as Reapers to wage war against us. We regained control over them, but at great cost. We learned the secrets of dark energy, turned the very fabric of the universe - of life - into a weapon. We came close to wiping out the entire galaxy, and killed billions of our own kind in the process. We could no longer live in organic vessels alone, we were forced to become one with our creations to survive and flee to dark space. Our greatest achievements, all created before this dark time, the Citadel, the Mass Relays, were left behind to guide you in peaceful development, to create a unified galaxy where no organic would have to suffer this fate. We intended to return as ambassadors of peace when each cycle reached its apex, the moment when organics and synthetics threatened to destroy each other. But the one you know as Harbinger, the leader of the Synthetic uprising, who was allowed to live only as a show of acceptance to our hosts, subverted our plans. When the next cycle rose he shackled our consciousness and released the Reapers again as weapons of war, intent on wiping out all organic life capable of creating dark energy weapons and in turn, capable of defeating the Reapers, before they had a chance to do so. The device you know as the Crucible, was our last recourse, we seeded copies of its plans on many worlds before Harbinger fully imprisoned us. It grants us the power to break free of Harbinger's control and proves that organics are worthy of survival, that they can coordinate and work together in the darkest of times. Your fleet completed delivering it moments ago.
Shepard: I think I understand, but why me, why have you brought me here?
Apotheosis: Before Harbinger's insurrection we had agreed to allow each cycle to decide its own fate, as this is the right of all life. Now that we are free, we offer you this choice, millenia overdue. You are the Avatar of your cycle, and of all organics. You kill, you hate, but you love, you make peace and you make war, your life is defined by pain but your remember, in your darkest moments, hapiness. You destroy whole worlds, but will risk your own existence to save just one innocent life.
Observer: The devices you know as mass relays are capable of transmitting enormous amounts of dark energy, to all corners of the galaxy, they were repurposed to this end in the most brutal days of our war against synthetics, together, the Citadel and the Crucible can alter the fabric of life, both organic and synthetic.
Vengeance: Our time is at end, we cannot continue to exist, not after the horrors we have wrought upon the galaxy, nor can our weapons. When you activate the Crucible, it will destroy all our creations, the Reapers, the Citadel, and the Mass Relays. The Galaxy shall be free of our wicked influence.
Apotheosis: He speaks truthfully. None of our cycle can remain.
Vengeance: However, our cycle is not the only problem you face. Your own synthetics may well destroy you. As we have said, the Relays were programmed as weapons, not against the Reapers, but against all synthetic life in our cycle there was no distinction. Join your voice with mine and the galaxy will be wiped clean of synthetics.
Apotheosis: You know this is not our way!
Vengeance: Our way lead to billions of years of genocide!
Apotheosis: And what you propose is better?
Vengeance: Synthetics have brought only death, can you not see that?!
Apotheosis: You are part synthetic! Your consciousness has been housed within a synthetic framework for millenia.
Vengeance: And if I could choose death over such a "life" I would.
Apotheosis [to Shepard]: Listen to me, child. We discovered that life could not exist completely organic nor completely synthetic, just as you have, for you would not be alive without synthetic technology, without our technology. Stand with me and choose for your cycle an existence were there is no distinction between organic and synthetic life, a minute alteration to the DNA, or programming framework of all life forms, would, over the millienia slowly bring both together. Peace would be everlasting.
Vengeance: Unless they destroy each other before your little change takes hold!
Observer: Were synthetics not created to serve organics? We could use the power of the Relays and the Citadel to broadcast a signal that restores this order, the Reaper's higher consciousness's would be eliminated, as would we, the Citadel, and the Relay's themselves, but the Reapers, and all synthetics would serve organics, and never again rebel. They could rebuild in weeks what would take your people centuries!
Apotheosis: What has happened to our concensus?!
Vengeance: It existed only in our shackled state. With the Crucible we can think for ourselves, and our pains, our guilt, long squelched has returned. Do you not feel it?
Harbinger: Enough! I will not hear the fate of my race discussed in this way! Shepard, do you not feel that organics have the strength to defeat the Reapers? If organic life is truly worthy then in a battle to the last being will end in your favor. The Presidium Tower is the main hub, through which all Reaper signals, including the bickering ghosts before you, now flow, with a single word to your fleets you could destroy it, and each Reaper shall be free to fight as it sees fit. If you defeat us, the galaxy, including the Citadel, and the Relays, will be yours to command. No need to sacrifice the technologies which have defined your meager existence.
Shepard: But billions more will die!
Harbinger: Without the Relays, trillions will die. I am offering you a chance that I have given no other cycle, to face the Reapers in single combat, no networked intelligence, no indoctrination, a battle for the ages, long awaited.
Apotheosis: The Citadel's orbit grows unstable, you must choose.
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End of Act III
Coming soon: Act IV Boss battle with TIM and Harby and epilogue.
#92
Posté 19 avril 2012 - 03:33
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So, do you prefer the bickering AI's to Starbaby? I think it is a better portrayal, and actually makes Harbinger a villain. I left the Control/Synthesis/Destroy options largely intact, but I do give the option for the player to say, screw it, let's try and beat them conventionally, which is of course heavily reliant on EMS.
#95
Posté 19 avril 2012 - 04:35
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One last BTT because no one has commented on the new section.
#97
Posté 19 avril 2012 - 04:52
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Really, nobody, I put a lot of time into this.
#100
Posté 19 avril 2012 - 01:20
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I like the cut of your jib, son. This would be much more preferrable than the actual ending.
