This one appreciates the Hanar fleet being included
Seriously though, great read. Have a bag full of internets as a reward. Take note BioWare, it's that simple to write a compelling ending to a series
How London Should Have Played Out [Script] + [New] Ending Rewrite
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Posté 20 avril 2012 - 12:30
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CmdrSlander wrote...
What is a hudge?
a nudge by someone with a broken keyboard
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Posté 20 avril 2012 - 01:44
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I still prefer what the devs had originally planned over any other fanfic suggestions. We all know what we got was so far "off" from the style and tenor of the story that we are very aware it is not something they planned despite their claims. We're not stupid.
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Posté 21 avril 2012 - 03:05
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Commencing work on Part V: Endgame [cue epic music]
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Posté 21 avril 2012 - 03:17
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Apart from using the word "destiny" a bit much within the same 4 or so lines of dialogue, I would have to say that this could have been turned into a very, very good "take back earth" portion of the game.
P.S. I was imagining what it would actually look like while reading, and I enjoyed it.
P.S. I was imagining what it would actually look like while reading, and I enjoyed it.
Modifié par Mouseraider, 21 avril 2012 - 03:17 .
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Posté 21 avril 2012 - 06:43
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Part IV: Endgame
Picks up right where part III left off...
Shepard [Paragon] : No one should have this kind of power, this shouldn't be up to me! You're abominations, all of you!
Shepard [Renegade] : What if if don't want to work with you?!
Apotheosis: One must work with the options at hand, you of all beings should know this. There is no other way.
Shepard: Maybe you just don't want me to see it? How do I know Harbinger isn't still controlling you? How do I know he isn't controlling me?
Observer: Even we do not have the luxury of absolute truth... you must do wha...
[A gunshot rings out , the Illusive Man has made his way into the Council Chamber, he has attempted to gun you down but missed, hitting one of the pedestals instead. He appears to be fully indoctrinated, with same facial markings as Indoctrinated Cerberus Troopers and Saren.]
Shepard: Illusive Man?!
Illusive Man: Don't listen to them Shepard! I can control them, the Crucible can control them.
Shepard [Paragon] : What are you doing? Listen to yourself, you're indoctrinated!
Shepard [Renegade] : They own you now...
Illusive Man: No... I took their power! I can control them... you just can't understand... you'll never understand.
Shepard [Neutral] : Just put the gun down...
Shepard [Paragon] : You're better than this! Break their hold!
Shepard [Renegade] : You're pathetic... "humanity's savior", reduced to this... you aren't worth the oxygen you suck down.
Illusive Man: No, I can't let you do this. Listen to me... When humanity discovered the Mass Relays, there were some who thought they should be destroyed... afraid of what we might find, afraid of what we might let in. Despite all this, even the Reapers, our society has advanced more in the last three decades than we advanced in the last three centuries. We now stand at that same precipice... Dark Energy technology, genetic engineering on a galactic scale, the power to shape civilizations, and you would through that all away for what? A hollow victory, principle, the false honor of the dead. Ah yes the dead... there have been so many who died believing in you Shepard... [TIM lists any major deaths thus far, Virmire, Suicide Mission, etc.] if you do this they died believing in a lie.
Shepard: And what would have me do? How would you even control the Reapers?
Illusive Man: I... I... If we could reprogram the Crucible maybe... no... no time...
Shepard: You don't know do you? You could never control them, they already control you!
Illusive Man: You fool! I would never... Harbinger gave his word...
[A Renegade interrupt now appears to shoot TIM in the head, if this is taken, he falls to the floor and no further dialogue from him occurs.]
Shepard: You trusted them...
Illusive Man: I'm sorry, tell them all, I never wanted to do this. Humanity is better than this. Goodbye Shepard, thank you. [He shoots himself in the head]
Observer: We had studied this one. Your Illusive man, yes. He was an excellent prospect for our purposes, but it became obsessed with the dominance of its own race, he failed to realize that organic unity was the key to survival, not only, as you have seen, for organics of this cycle, but for organics of all cycles, we learned this too late in our time.
[Gameplay: Shepard now walks to one of the four pedastals, making his/her choice]
[Control] Observer: Excellent, I knew your rationality would win the day, you see, synthetics are not the only beings capable of cold logic. I have laid in the reprogramming vectors. You have 30 terran coordinated minutes to vacate this station.
[Synthesis] Apotheosis: Superb, all life deserves a chance to flourish, I knew you would see things in a just light. I am prepared to activate the genetic modulation routines. You have 30 of your "minutes" to leave the Citadel.
[Destroy] Vengeance: Yes, yes! At last an organic with the requisite will to do what must be done for the surival of organics everywhere. The Mass Relays are standing by to release a targeted pulse which will end all synthetic's operation. I reccomend you leave this system. The blast will be substantial, to characterize it in the least.
[Conventional Warfare] Harbinger: At last! I have come to respect you as a warrior Shepard. We shall see if this cycle is as worthy as you. This will be our last communication. The true battle for this galaxy begins, starting with you. Run.
[If convential warfare is chosen] : Shepard: All fleets, if you can hear me, the Reaper's command center is the Presidium tower! Assault the presidium tower.
Alliance Commander: Affirmative, sword and shield fleets roll in on Presidium Tower, full broadsides.
[If any option but Convential Warfare is chosen] Harbinger: No! Shepard, I will not allow this! I will destroy you and this station.
[Commander Shepard exits the Council Chamber into the offices and embassies outside. Still wounded and limping.]
Bailey: Shepard! Can you hear me! We've got serious interference but its clearing now.
Shepard: I can hear you, where are you?
Bailey: Diplomatic Panic Room built after Saren's attack, completely off the main grids, if you can get here we've got some medics and gear waiting, but there's several sh** loads of husks in the way. I'm forwarding the Nav Point to your omni-tool.
Shepard: You've got to get out here, Harbinger's is going to tear this place apart!
Bailey: We'd be long gone by now but those damn abominations have us pinned in here. There's a shuttle waiting if you can help us get to it.
Shepard: I don't think so... I'm shot up pretty bad...
Bailey: You've got to try. Don't give up on us now.
Shepard: All right, yeah, I've got the Nav Point, it's no too far.
Bailey: All right, we'll try to hold on.
[Gameplay: Shepard now makes there way through the eerie silence and darkness of a dead Citadel. Familiar and once bustling promenades are now populated only by corpses and the occasional husk. If Shepard has a love interest the may see a ghostly vision of him/her wandering amongst the dead. Shattered advertisment screens flicker, casting freakish patterns on the walls. After about two minutes of walking, with occasional stops to hack up blood, Shepard nears the Diplomatic Panic Room, the entrance to it is disguised as a familiar Citadel bulkhead, but it stands out because it is slightly ajar, light streams out from the gap between it and the other bulkheads. Bailey and a few C-Sec officers are battling with about 25 husks and cannibals outside the entrance, Shepard provides what little assistance they can with their Carnifex.]
[Shepard crouches behind some crates next to Bailey]
Bailey: Good to see you, too bad you missed all the fun. [Bailey peaks over the cover and lets out a burst from his Revenant.] There were about 200 of these things, rushed the Presidium, took out [the following is determined based on the how many points the Citadel Defense Force WA has] [low] most of our guys [medium] half my troops [high] a few of our officers, nothing we couldn't handle though.
Shepard: Looks like you did alright without me. What's the plan?
Bailey: For now, nothing... not until we get you patched up. Your omni-tool said you were in need of serious medical aid, but damn, you really got run through the ringer. Some folks from Huerta memorial are back in there [motions toward panic room], well finish these things off.
Shepard: Are you sure? I can still...
Bailey: Go!
[Shepard enters panic room, random Citadel citizens, as well as some injured C-Sec officers are huddled together or slumped against the walls. What's left of the Citadel Council is talking in hushed, hurried tones off in one corner of the room, guarded by two C-Sec officers with Assault Rifles. The medical team from Huerta is tending to a wounded Turian.]
Medical Team Leader: Commander Shepard. One of my people will have a look at you as soon as we are done here.
Wounded Turian: No, s/he is so much more important, I'm just a office drone ***coughs***
Medical Team Leader: S/he can wait, [Shepard nods] we'll be done with you in a few minutes.
Wounded Turian: We don't have a few minutes. [He reaches for a holstered pistol, and before the doctors can react, shoots himself]
Medical Team Leader: Dammit! Alright Shepard, can you lay down over there [motions to a bloody cot a few feet away.]
[Shepard lies down, the Medics being scanning him/her with their omni-tools.]
Medic 1: This is remarkable, Doctor take a look at this.
Medical Team Leader [looks at Medic 1's omni-tool] : Godess! His/her muscles have already begun regrowth, whole sections of the skeletal structure are knitting themselves back together. The last time I saw self-repair on this level was when I was... never mind.
Shepard: When you were what?
Medical Team Leader: [Hesitantly] When I was on the council science team the analyzed the remains of Sovereign, Commander, the inquiry was cancelled when all our data and backups were stolen, I think I know where they went now... I don't know what Cerberus did to you, but this defies everything I know about human physioligy. All we need to do is stop the bleeding and apply Medi-Gel in the right places.
[The doctors work over Shepard, bandaging him/her and performing other mild procedures. Bailey comes in, sealing the door behind him, the barrel of his Revenant still smoking, a thermal clip clatters to the floor.
Bailey: Shepard, are you ready to go? We've got more of the bastards inboud, lots more.
Shepard: Yeah, [looks at doctor for approval, she nods] yeah, I'm ready.
Bailey: Good, there's a weapon locker on the rear wall. Take what you need.
[Gameplay: The player moves to the weapons locker and can choose any weapon(s) acquired in the game thus far. Though Shepard's armor is still damaged health and shields are restored to 75% and movement is no longer impeded. After visiting the weapon's locker, Shepard moves to Bailey.]
Bailey [addressing assembled crowd of survivors in panic room] : This is the last shuttle off the Citadel, if you know how to use a gun, grab one, otherwise stay behind cover and let the armed folks move up first. The shuttle airlock is about 200 meters away, don't shoot every thing you see, only enough to clear a path, conserve ammo. Commander Shepard and I will be on point. If they get one of us, don't stop and don't break rank. This is it.
[The survivors load weapons, several Asari and a few humans charge biotics, a Salarian fiddles with his omni-tool readying tech powers. Bailey opens the door, revealing a sizable horde of Reaper ground troops massing outside.]
Bailey: Go! Go! Go!
[Gameplay: The player and Bailey rush ahead, mowing down Reaper troops, several survivors fall heroically, they eventually reach the shuttle, as the door opens, Bailey gets shot in the chest.]
Bailey: Go, get inside!
Shepard: No, I'll get you.
[More Reaper ground troops are converging on their position, including a pack of Brutes.]
Bailey: Go now! I'll hold them off. I was never going to abandon the Citadel anyway!
[The survivors board the shuttle, Shepard is the last one on, providing covering fire for the others. Bailey closes the door from the outside. He readies his Revenant and begins tearing into the Reaper forces as the shuttle pulls away. We zoom out to see the whole of the Citadel, in all its majesty, Crucible docked. If the convential warfare option was chosen the Presidium Tower is collapsing under heavy bombardment. With evey option, we see Harbinger dislodge from the tower to give chase to Shepard. We cut back to the interior of the shuttle.]
Shepard [hand to ear]: This is Commander Shepard! Normandy? Anyone?
[Camera cuts to the Normandy's bridge, the ship is now badly damaged, with small fires breaking out inside and pieces of panelling breaking off. Shepard's message is heard over the comms. Joker is intensly focused on controlling the ship.]
Joker: We read you loud and clear. I'm trying to get a fix on your position, and Shepard...
Shepard: Yes
Joker: ...thanks for making it out alive, I was worried that I was going to have to activate the contingency plan.
Shepard: Do I even want to know, Joker?
Joker: It involves fleeing to a habitable planet with as many females as possible on board, but I honestly don't think I have the stamina to repopulate the galaxy...
EDI: Comms triangulation completed, plotting intercept course.
[The Normandy's thrusters kick into maximum burn, the ship hurtles past Mars and flies dramatically over the moon, heading for the Citadel. A Reaper Destroyer moves to intercept. Joker fires the main Thanix Cannon, blasting a hole clean through the already damaged Destroyer, the Normandy flies through the hole and barely makes it, the Normandy's engine pods clip the sides of the hole, shearing the outer most pods off. The Normandy approaches the Citadel, Sword and Shield fleets are unloading shot after shot into Harbinger and the remaining Reaper armada, the line is breaking. The Normandy delivers a coup de grace to a damaged Reaper Capital Ship with her Thanix cannons. The diplomatic shuttle containing Shepard is dodging Oculus lasers and speeds towards the Normandy.]
Joker: Steady as she goes, Shepard. EDI, evacuate the Hangar and open the main doors.
EDI: Affirmative
[The Normandy's main hangar bay doors open, several Alliance/Turian/Quarian/Geth fighters swoop down and elimate the pursuing Oculi. The shuttle flies into the hangar, skidding along the floor and ultimately slamming into the bulkhead at the rear of the hangar. The shuttle door tries to open and the simply collapses outward. Shepard is standing in the doorway, ever the hero. Alliance marines and medics converge on the shuttle to aid the survivors.]
Shepard [over comms] : Joker, did the squad...
Joker: ...Make it. Yes, I was able to get them out when Harbinger broke off and headed to the Citadel.
Shepard: Anderson?
Joker: He was shot up pretty bad, he's out cold in the medbay now, Liara thinks he'll be alright in a few days.
EDI [cutting in, over comms] : I am sorry, Jeff, but the Normandy's overall structural integrity is no longer at spaceworthy levels. You must find a suitable landing zone soon or the stress of spaceflight will cause the ship to break apart.
Joker: Dammit, where should we put down?
EDI: Luna base has suitable expanses of clear ground for an emergency landing and avoids the problems associated with atmoshperic entry.
Joker: Alright, how long does she have.
EDI: 10 minutes, at maximum.
Joker: Shepard, I need you on the bridge, everyone else hang on, this is going to be rough.
[Shepard makes their way to the bridge via the ladders between decks. S/he reaches the bridge, lifting charred beams out of the way to clear a path to joker.]
Shepard: I'm sorry, Joker, but what you did saved us all, the Normandy has been a good ship.
Joker: Has? The Alliance will have her patched up in no time.
Shepard: Well you are be considerate enough to crash land outside a major base.
Joker: I figure we owe them that much. We did get the first one destroyed in some galactic backwater, compared to that, this is curb service.
Shepard: Don't remind me.
[The Normandy approaches the moon, Joker steels himself for the greatest piloting challenge of his career. The Normandy approaches the lunar surface at a perfect angle, touching down almost delicately, however, the remaining engine pods are sheared off, as they hang below the main hull. The ship touches down next to a large Alliance complex. Shepard exits the Normandy via the airlock near the bridge, along with the squad, with Joker bringing up the rear. Suddenly, Harbinger, touches down in the distance, setting the stage for the final boss battle.]
Shepard: Get to cover!
[Harbingers beam scythes through Luna base's substantial fortifications]
Joker: How are we supposed to take that thing out?
Shepard: Luna base has anti-ship batteries. They've been mothballed since the First Contact War though, old Mass Accelerator tech.
EDI: Type 59 Alliance standard Mass accelerators do not have the energy required to penetrate Reaper armor.
Shepard: Check their Kinetic barriers.
EDI: You are correct Shepard. Reaper kinetic barriers are not designed to defend against such antiquated weapons. In theory a combined strike could drop the barriers.
Joker: And then what. Harby needs a new paintjob, but we're still toast.
EDI: Incorrect, Harbinger has been substantially damaged by the Dreadnought strike and combined fire from the assembled fleets. Repeated strikes from a Mass Effect enhanced weapon such as the M920 CAIN could deliver a killing blow.
Shepard: If I remember correctly, Luna base was a testing facility for heavy ordinance, check their stockpiles.
EDI: 14 M920 CAINs are in stock at the base armory.
Shepard: Good. We split into teams, team one gets the cannons online, team two secures the armory.
[Gameplay: choose your squad, they will make up team two, the non-chosen squadmates will comprise team one. The background for this entire battle sequence will be Earth, burning in the sky.]
Shepard [To squadmates] : We've come a long way, and some of you may be losing hope, but once Harbinger is finally gone, [if control/synth/destroy was chosen] the Crucible will fire and this war will be over. Remember what we're fighting for, a chance for peace, for a normal life, for homes and families, for tommorow. [If convential warfare was chosen] The Reapers will be leaderless, the fleets can move in and mop them up. You know what to do, now go!
[Gameplay: Shepard and squad fight their way through Reaper ground troops to the base armory, the other team secures anti-ship gun control.]
Squadmate [team one] : We've got gun control locked down, just say the word.
Shepard [picking up and examining M920 CAIN] : We've got the heavy ordinance.
[Harbinger moves closer to Luna base, destroying large sections with his laser.]
Shepard: All batteries, FIRE!
[The old MA cannons creak into firing position, massive depleted uranium slugs hurtle towards Harbinger, after several salvos, his shields fail.]
Harbinger: What madness takes you? Do you think you can defeat me, your battle shall be forgotten, for no organics shall live to tell of it. [If Shepard has a LI] And what of your pitiful companion... will they remember you... no they shall die, but not before they watch you perish! Bloodied, weak and broken. You would not be alive now if it were not for the fact that I wish to destroy you personally, so that those that fight on will know of your grand defeat, and it will crush them a thousand fold more than any weapon we could bring to battle.
[Shepard climbs onto a rocky outcrop to address Harbinger.]
Shepard: Can you hear me?!
Harbinger: What words could you possibly offer?
Shepard: Good, you can hear me. Listen up! I've killed four Reapers so far, one "lowly" organic has killed four Reapers, and there are billions of organics in this galaxy who will fights just as hard as I have for their homes, for thier lives, for their loved ones, you talk as if your invincible, but you'll die like all the rest. Your time is over, its time for this galaxy to be free.
Harbinger: Are you finished, human?
Shepard: No, you are.
[Fires CAIN, Harbinger shakes off the blast but is severely damaged and moving unsteadily.]
[Gameplay: The player has unlimited CAIN ammo, but there is a charge/recharge time, Harbinger is moving closer, and soon towers over the player, only several meters away. It takes four hits to kill Harbinger on Normal, two more on the next highest difficulty and so on.]
Harbinger [when 3/4 of his health is depleted] : No, this cannot be, our strength is unlimited, you will fall...
Harbinger [when the final blow is dealt] : No, the cycle must continue, this is not how it ends. Shepard, no...
[Harbinger collapses and breaks up, now fully free of Harbinger's influence, the Crucible/Citadel fire as the squad watches from the moon. The Citadel breaks up. If the player chose Conventional Warfare and has an EMS of over 4000 the squad watches as the combined fleets destroy the remaining Reapers in orbit around Earth and the Citadel. The Citadel is not destroyed. In every ending if the player has an LI the two stand to together, arms around each other's waists as charred debris falls like snow around them. Alliance shuttles are seen landing in the background to evacuate Normandy's crew and the squad.
Epilogue:
Text: Eight Months Later
[The camera flies through the solar system toward earth, if the Conventional Warfare ending was chosen we see the Charon Relay in orbit around Pluto, the entire system is littered with space debris but ship traffic is heavy, if control was chosen, heavily guarded Reapers are seen moving about peacefully, carrying large cargo pods, otherwise Alliance and Citadel Species ships are shown. We come to earth, the Citadel is seen in orbit if conventional warfare was chosen, the Earth is presented like the planet at the end of Mass Effect, a repaired Normandy SR2 is seen breaking orbit on outward bound trajectory, the camera cuts to bridge, if Synthesis or conventional warfare is was chosen, EDI is in the copilot's chair, Shepard is standing behind Joker, Shepard and his/her LI look hopefully out the bridge windows and embrace.]
CUE CREDITS:
Project Director: Definetly Not Casey Hudson, we all no what Casey Hudson does to endings...
and so on...
The following clips play after the credits only if the Relays were saved through conventional warfare.
[Tali exits a Quarian shuttle and steps onto Rannoch. If peace was secured between the Quarians and Geth, Geth primes transport building material, while repurposed Geth fighters haul around prefabricated structures.]
[If Genophage was cured and Eve saved: Urdnot Wrex stands triumphantly beside her as new construction commences on a Krogan colony world, squat little creatures which can be assumed to be Krogan children play near them.]
[Primarch Victus and Garrus oversee rebuilding efforts on Palaven.]
[We see London, which is still slowly being rebuilt, at the site of the Citadel Beam a memorial has been contstructed to all those who perished, Anderson walks slowly towards it, lays a wreath and salutes as a Alliance Marines, and representatives from every recruited species, fire a 21 gun salute.]
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And that's it, thank you for your interest and encouraging me to write more. My next challenge, the sub-par intro. I need more post credits slides, especially for Romances, since I haven't done play throughs with every possible LI, definetly post a write up for a post-credits slide like those above if you feel it adds closure.
Picks up right where part III left off...
Shepard [Paragon] : No one should have this kind of power, this shouldn't be up to me! You're abominations, all of you!
Shepard [Renegade] : What if if don't want to work with you?!
Apotheosis: One must work with the options at hand, you of all beings should know this. There is no other way.
Shepard: Maybe you just don't want me to see it? How do I know Harbinger isn't still controlling you? How do I know he isn't controlling me?
Observer: Even we do not have the luxury of absolute truth... you must do wha...
[A gunshot rings out , the Illusive Man has made his way into the Council Chamber, he has attempted to gun you down but missed, hitting one of the pedestals instead. He appears to be fully indoctrinated, with same facial markings as Indoctrinated Cerberus Troopers and Saren.]
Shepard: Illusive Man?!
Illusive Man: Don't listen to them Shepard! I can control them, the Crucible can control them.
Shepard [Paragon] : What are you doing? Listen to yourself, you're indoctrinated!
Shepard [Renegade] : They own you now...
Illusive Man: No... I took their power! I can control them... you just can't understand... you'll never understand.
Shepard [Neutral] : Just put the gun down...
Shepard [Paragon] : You're better than this! Break their hold!
Shepard [Renegade] : You're pathetic... "humanity's savior", reduced to this... you aren't worth the oxygen you suck down.
Illusive Man: No, I can't let you do this. Listen to me... When humanity discovered the Mass Relays, there were some who thought they should be destroyed... afraid of what we might find, afraid of what we might let in. Despite all this, even the Reapers, our society has advanced more in the last three decades than we advanced in the last three centuries. We now stand at that same precipice... Dark Energy technology, genetic engineering on a galactic scale, the power to shape civilizations, and you would through that all away for what? A hollow victory, principle, the false honor of the dead. Ah yes the dead... there have been so many who died believing in you Shepard... [TIM lists any major deaths thus far, Virmire, Suicide Mission, etc.] if you do this they died believing in a lie.
Shepard: And what would have me do? How would you even control the Reapers?
Illusive Man: I... I... If we could reprogram the Crucible maybe... no... no time...
Shepard: You don't know do you? You could never control them, they already control you!
Illusive Man: You fool! I would never... Harbinger gave his word...
[A Renegade interrupt now appears to shoot TIM in the head, if this is taken, he falls to the floor and no further dialogue from him occurs.]
Shepard: You trusted them...
Illusive Man: I'm sorry, tell them all, I never wanted to do this. Humanity is better than this. Goodbye Shepard, thank you. [He shoots himself in the head]
Observer: We had studied this one. Your Illusive man, yes. He was an excellent prospect for our purposes, but it became obsessed with the dominance of its own race, he failed to realize that organic unity was the key to survival, not only, as you have seen, for organics of this cycle, but for organics of all cycles, we learned this too late in our time.
[Gameplay: Shepard now walks to one of the four pedastals, making his/her choice]
[Control] Observer: Excellent, I knew your rationality would win the day, you see, synthetics are not the only beings capable of cold logic. I have laid in the reprogramming vectors. You have 30 terran coordinated minutes to vacate this station.
[Synthesis] Apotheosis: Superb, all life deserves a chance to flourish, I knew you would see things in a just light. I am prepared to activate the genetic modulation routines. You have 30 of your "minutes" to leave the Citadel.
[Destroy] Vengeance: Yes, yes! At last an organic with the requisite will to do what must be done for the surival of organics everywhere. The Mass Relays are standing by to release a targeted pulse which will end all synthetic's operation. I reccomend you leave this system. The blast will be substantial, to characterize it in the least.
[Conventional Warfare] Harbinger: At last! I have come to respect you as a warrior Shepard. We shall see if this cycle is as worthy as you. This will be our last communication. The true battle for this galaxy begins, starting with you. Run.
[If convential warfare is chosen] : Shepard: All fleets, if you can hear me, the Reaper's command center is the Presidium tower! Assault the presidium tower.
Alliance Commander: Affirmative, sword and shield fleets roll in on Presidium Tower, full broadsides.
[If any option but Convential Warfare is chosen] Harbinger: No! Shepard, I will not allow this! I will destroy you and this station.
[Commander Shepard exits the Council Chamber into the offices and embassies outside. Still wounded and limping.]
Bailey: Shepard! Can you hear me! We've got serious interference but its clearing now.
Shepard: I can hear you, where are you?
Bailey: Diplomatic Panic Room built after Saren's attack, completely off the main grids, if you can get here we've got some medics and gear waiting, but there's several sh** loads of husks in the way. I'm forwarding the Nav Point to your omni-tool.
Shepard: You've got to get out here, Harbinger's is going to tear this place apart!
Bailey: We'd be long gone by now but those damn abominations have us pinned in here. There's a shuttle waiting if you can help us get to it.
Shepard: I don't think so... I'm shot up pretty bad...
Bailey: You've got to try. Don't give up on us now.
Shepard: All right, yeah, I've got the Nav Point, it's no too far.
Bailey: All right, we'll try to hold on.
[Gameplay: Shepard now makes there way through the eerie silence and darkness of a dead Citadel. Familiar and once bustling promenades are now populated only by corpses and the occasional husk. If Shepard has a love interest the may see a ghostly vision of him/her wandering amongst the dead. Shattered advertisment screens flicker, casting freakish patterns on the walls. After about two minutes of walking, with occasional stops to hack up blood, Shepard nears the Diplomatic Panic Room, the entrance to it is disguised as a familiar Citadel bulkhead, but it stands out because it is slightly ajar, light streams out from the gap between it and the other bulkheads. Bailey and a few C-Sec officers are battling with about 25 husks and cannibals outside the entrance, Shepard provides what little assistance they can with their Carnifex.]
[Shepard crouches behind some crates next to Bailey]
Bailey: Good to see you, too bad you missed all the fun. [Bailey peaks over the cover and lets out a burst from his Revenant.] There were about 200 of these things, rushed the Presidium, took out [the following is determined based on the how many points the Citadel Defense Force WA has] [low] most of our guys [medium] half my troops [high] a few of our officers, nothing we couldn't handle though.
Shepard: Looks like you did alright without me. What's the plan?
Bailey: For now, nothing... not until we get you patched up. Your omni-tool said you were in need of serious medical aid, but damn, you really got run through the ringer. Some folks from Huerta memorial are back in there [motions toward panic room], well finish these things off.
Shepard: Are you sure? I can still...
Bailey: Go!
[Shepard enters panic room, random Citadel citizens, as well as some injured C-Sec officers are huddled together or slumped against the walls. What's left of the Citadel Council is talking in hushed, hurried tones off in one corner of the room, guarded by two C-Sec officers with Assault Rifles. The medical team from Huerta is tending to a wounded Turian.]
Medical Team Leader: Commander Shepard. One of my people will have a look at you as soon as we are done here.
Wounded Turian: No, s/he is so much more important, I'm just a office drone ***coughs***
Medical Team Leader: S/he can wait, [Shepard nods] we'll be done with you in a few minutes.
Wounded Turian: We don't have a few minutes. [He reaches for a holstered pistol, and before the doctors can react, shoots himself]
Medical Team Leader: Dammit! Alright Shepard, can you lay down over there [motions to a bloody cot a few feet away.]
[Shepard lies down, the Medics being scanning him/her with their omni-tools.]
Medic 1: This is remarkable, Doctor take a look at this.
Medical Team Leader [looks at Medic 1's omni-tool] : Godess! His/her muscles have already begun regrowth, whole sections of the skeletal structure are knitting themselves back together. The last time I saw self-repair on this level was when I was... never mind.
Shepard: When you were what?
Medical Team Leader: [Hesitantly] When I was on the council science team the analyzed the remains of Sovereign, Commander, the inquiry was cancelled when all our data and backups were stolen, I think I know where they went now... I don't know what Cerberus did to you, but this defies everything I know about human physioligy. All we need to do is stop the bleeding and apply Medi-Gel in the right places.
[The doctors work over Shepard, bandaging him/her and performing other mild procedures. Bailey comes in, sealing the door behind him, the barrel of his Revenant still smoking, a thermal clip clatters to the floor.
Bailey: Shepard, are you ready to go? We've got more of the bastards inboud, lots more.
Shepard: Yeah, [looks at doctor for approval, she nods] yeah, I'm ready.
Bailey: Good, there's a weapon locker on the rear wall. Take what you need.
[Gameplay: The player moves to the weapons locker and can choose any weapon(s) acquired in the game thus far. Though Shepard's armor is still damaged health and shields are restored to 75% and movement is no longer impeded. After visiting the weapon's locker, Shepard moves to Bailey.]
Bailey [addressing assembled crowd of survivors in panic room] : This is the last shuttle off the Citadel, if you know how to use a gun, grab one, otherwise stay behind cover and let the armed folks move up first. The shuttle airlock is about 200 meters away, don't shoot every thing you see, only enough to clear a path, conserve ammo. Commander Shepard and I will be on point. If they get one of us, don't stop and don't break rank. This is it.
[The survivors load weapons, several Asari and a few humans charge biotics, a Salarian fiddles with his omni-tool readying tech powers. Bailey opens the door, revealing a sizable horde of Reaper ground troops massing outside.]
Bailey: Go! Go! Go!
[Gameplay: The player and Bailey rush ahead, mowing down Reaper troops, several survivors fall heroically, they eventually reach the shuttle, as the door opens, Bailey gets shot in the chest.]
Bailey: Go, get inside!
Shepard: No, I'll get you.
[More Reaper ground troops are converging on their position, including a pack of Brutes.]
Bailey: Go now! I'll hold them off. I was never going to abandon the Citadel anyway!
[The survivors board the shuttle, Shepard is the last one on, providing covering fire for the others. Bailey closes the door from the outside. He readies his Revenant and begins tearing into the Reaper forces as the shuttle pulls away. We zoom out to see the whole of the Citadel, in all its majesty, Crucible docked. If the convential warfare option was chosen the Presidium Tower is collapsing under heavy bombardment. With evey option, we see Harbinger dislodge from the tower to give chase to Shepard. We cut back to the interior of the shuttle.]
Shepard [hand to ear]: This is Commander Shepard! Normandy? Anyone?
[Camera cuts to the Normandy's bridge, the ship is now badly damaged, with small fires breaking out inside and pieces of panelling breaking off. Shepard's message is heard over the comms. Joker is intensly focused on controlling the ship.]
Joker: We read you loud and clear. I'm trying to get a fix on your position, and Shepard...
Shepard: Yes
Joker: ...thanks for making it out alive, I was worried that I was going to have to activate the contingency plan.
Shepard: Do I even want to know, Joker?
Joker: It involves fleeing to a habitable planet with as many females as possible on board, but I honestly don't think I have the stamina to repopulate the galaxy...
EDI: Comms triangulation completed, plotting intercept course.
[The Normandy's thrusters kick into maximum burn, the ship hurtles past Mars and flies dramatically over the moon, heading for the Citadel. A Reaper Destroyer moves to intercept. Joker fires the main Thanix Cannon, blasting a hole clean through the already damaged Destroyer, the Normandy flies through the hole and barely makes it, the Normandy's engine pods clip the sides of the hole, shearing the outer most pods off. The Normandy approaches the Citadel, Sword and Shield fleets are unloading shot after shot into Harbinger and the remaining Reaper armada, the line is breaking. The Normandy delivers a coup de grace to a damaged Reaper Capital Ship with her Thanix cannons. The diplomatic shuttle containing Shepard is dodging Oculus lasers and speeds towards the Normandy.]
Joker: Steady as she goes, Shepard. EDI, evacuate the Hangar and open the main doors.
EDI: Affirmative
[The Normandy's main hangar bay doors open, several Alliance/Turian/Quarian/Geth fighters swoop down and elimate the pursuing Oculi. The shuttle flies into the hangar, skidding along the floor and ultimately slamming into the bulkhead at the rear of the hangar. The shuttle door tries to open and the simply collapses outward. Shepard is standing in the doorway, ever the hero. Alliance marines and medics converge on the shuttle to aid the survivors.]
Shepard [over comms] : Joker, did the squad...
Joker: ...Make it. Yes, I was able to get them out when Harbinger broke off and headed to the Citadel.
Shepard: Anderson?
Joker: He was shot up pretty bad, he's out cold in the medbay now, Liara thinks he'll be alright in a few days.
EDI [cutting in, over comms] : I am sorry, Jeff, but the Normandy's overall structural integrity is no longer at spaceworthy levels. You must find a suitable landing zone soon or the stress of spaceflight will cause the ship to break apart.
Joker: Dammit, where should we put down?
EDI: Luna base has suitable expanses of clear ground for an emergency landing and avoids the problems associated with atmoshperic entry.
Joker: Alright, how long does she have.
EDI: 10 minutes, at maximum.
Joker: Shepard, I need you on the bridge, everyone else hang on, this is going to be rough.
[Shepard makes their way to the bridge via the ladders between decks. S/he reaches the bridge, lifting charred beams out of the way to clear a path to joker.]
Shepard: I'm sorry, Joker, but what you did saved us all, the Normandy has been a good ship.
Joker: Has? The Alliance will have her patched up in no time.
Shepard: Well you are be considerate enough to crash land outside a major base.
Joker: I figure we owe them that much. We did get the first one destroyed in some galactic backwater, compared to that, this is curb service.
Shepard: Don't remind me.
[The Normandy approaches the moon, Joker steels himself for the greatest piloting challenge of his career. The Normandy approaches the lunar surface at a perfect angle, touching down almost delicately, however, the remaining engine pods are sheared off, as they hang below the main hull. The ship touches down next to a large Alliance complex. Shepard exits the Normandy via the airlock near the bridge, along with the squad, with Joker bringing up the rear. Suddenly, Harbinger, touches down in the distance, setting the stage for the final boss battle.]
Shepard: Get to cover!
[Harbingers beam scythes through Luna base's substantial fortifications]
Joker: How are we supposed to take that thing out?
Shepard: Luna base has anti-ship batteries. They've been mothballed since the First Contact War though, old Mass Accelerator tech.
EDI: Type 59 Alliance standard Mass accelerators do not have the energy required to penetrate Reaper armor.
Shepard: Check their Kinetic barriers.
EDI: You are correct Shepard. Reaper kinetic barriers are not designed to defend against such antiquated weapons. In theory a combined strike could drop the barriers.
Joker: And then what. Harby needs a new paintjob, but we're still toast.
EDI: Incorrect, Harbinger has been substantially damaged by the Dreadnought strike and combined fire from the assembled fleets. Repeated strikes from a Mass Effect enhanced weapon such as the M920 CAIN could deliver a killing blow.
Shepard: If I remember correctly, Luna base was a testing facility for heavy ordinance, check their stockpiles.
EDI: 14 M920 CAINs are in stock at the base armory.
Shepard: Good. We split into teams, team one gets the cannons online, team two secures the armory.
[Gameplay: choose your squad, they will make up team two, the non-chosen squadmates will comprise team one. The background for this entire battle sequence will be Earth, burning in the sky.]
Shepard [To squadmates] : We've come a long way, and some of you may be losing hope, but once Harbinger is finally gone, [if control/synth/destroy was chosen] the Crucible will fire and this war will be over. Remember what we're fighting for, a chance for peace, for a normal life, for homes and families, for tommorow. [If convential warfare was chosen] The Reapers will be leaderless, the fleets can move in and mop them up. You know what to do, now go!
[Gameplay: Shepard and squad fight their way through Reaper ground troops to the base armory, the other team secures anti-ship gun control.]
Squadmate [team one] : We've got gun control locked down, just say the word.
Shepard [picking up and examining M920 CAIN] : We've got the heavy ordinance.
[Harbinger moves closer to Luna base, destroying large sections with his laser.]
Shepard: All batteries, FIRE!
[The old MA cannons creak into firing position, massive depleted uranium slugs hurtle towards Harbinger, after several salvos, his shields fail.]
Harbinger: What madness takes you? Do you think you can defeat me, your battle shall be forgotten, for no organics shall live to tell of it. [If Shepard has a LI] And what of your pitiful companion... will they remember you... no they shall die, but not before they watch you perish! Bloodied, weak and broken. You would not be alive now if it were not for the fact that I wish to destroy you personally, so that those that fight on will know of your grand defeat, and it will crush them a thousand fold more than any weapon we could bring to battle.
[Shepard climbs onto a rocky outcrop to address Harbinger.]
Shepard: Can you hear me?!
Harbinger: What words could you possibly offer?
Shepard: Good, you can hear me. Listen up! I've killed four Reapers so far, one "lowly" organic has killed four Reapers, and there are billions of organics in this galaxy who will fights just as hard as I have for their homes, for thier lives, for their loved ones, you talk as if your invincible, but you'll die like all the rest. Your time is over, its time for this galaxy to be free.
Harbinger: Are you finished, human?
Shepard: No, you are.
[Fires CAIN, Harbinger shakes off the blast but is severely damaged and moving unsteadily.]
[Gameplay: The player has unlimited CAIN ammo, but there is a charge/recharge time, Harbinger is moving closer, and soon towers over the player, only several meters away. It takes four hits to kill Harbinger on Normal, two more on the next highest difficulty and so on.]
Harbinger [when 3/4 of his health is depleted] : No, this cannot be, our strength is unlimited, you will fall...
Harbinger [when the final blow is dealt] : No, the cycle must continue, this is not how it ends. Shepard, no...
[Harbinger collapses and breaks up, now fully free of Harbinger's influence, the Crucible/Citadel fire as the squad watches from the moon. The Citadel breaks up. If the player chose Conventional Warfare and has an EMS of over 4000 the squad watches as the combined fleets destroy the remaining Reapers in orbit around Earth and the Citadel. The Citadel is not destroyed. In every ending if the player has an LI the two stand to together, arms around each other's waists as charred debris falls like snow around them. Alliance shuttles are seen landing in the background to evacuate Normandy's crew and the squad.
Epilogue:
Text: Eight Months Later
[The camera flies through the solar system toward earth, if the Conventional Warfare ending was chosen we see the Charon Relay in orbit around Pluto, the entire system is littered with space debris but ship traffic is heavy, if control was chosen, heavily guarded Reapers are seen moving about peacefully, carrying large cargo pods, otherwise Alliance and Citadel Species ships are shown. We come to earth, the Citadel is seen in orbit if conventional warfare was chosen, the Earth is presented like the planet at the end of Mass Effect, a repaired Normandy SR2 is seen breaking orbit on outward bound trajectory, the camera cuts to bridge, if Synthesis or conventional warfare is was chosen, EDI is in the copilot's chair, Shepard is standing behind Joker, Shepard and his/her LI look hopefully out the bridge windows and embrace.]
CUE CREDITS:
Project Director: Definetly Not Casey Hudson, we all no what Casey Hudson does to endings...
and so on...
The following clips play after the credits only if the Relays were saved through conventional warfare.
[Tali exits a Quarian shuttle and steps onto Rannoch. If peace was secured between the Quarians and Geth, Geth primes transport building material, while repurposed Geth fighters haul around prefabricated structures.]
[If Genophage was cured and Eve saved: Urdnot Wrex stands triumphantly beside her as new construction commences on a Krogan colony world, squat little creatures which can be assumed to be Krogan children play near them.]
[Primarch Victus and Garrus oversee rebuilding efforts on Palaven.]
[We see London, which is still slowly being rebuilt, at the site of the Citadel Beam a memorial has been contstructed to all those who perished, Anderson walks slowly towards it, lays a wreath and salutes as a Alliance Marines, and representatives from every recruited species, fire a 21 gun salute.]
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And that's it, thank you for your interest and encouraging me to write more. My next challenge, the sub-par intro. I need more post credits slides, especially for Romances, since I haven't done play throughs with every possible LI, definetly post a write up for a post-credits slide like those above if you feel it adds closure.
Modifié par CmdrSlander, 22 avril 2012 - 11:40 .
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Posté 21 avril 2012 - 07:08
Veloric Wu
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@CmdrSlander you should've been in charge of the Priority: Earth mission!
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Posté 21 avril 2012 - 08:01
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You should add 'if the reapers win' endings. I.E. low EMS
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Posté 21 avril 2012 - 07:44
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Btt because I more feedback is needed.
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Posté 21 avril 2012 - 10:16
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Yes, another bump, I should be ashamed... but I spent seven hours writing that last bit and have only had two comments on it.
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Posté 22 avril 2012 - 02:11
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This..I don't know what to say..this is epic!! I loved it so much! Thank you for writing this! I was in tears reading through it all..the epicness, the desperation, the fight for survival, the sacrifices..they were awesome!
This is officially the head canon for me.
Too bad it won't ever be something BW will do. There's lots of heavy dialogue going on, and I love them! But unfortunately, many wouldn't be keen with the long "whiny" ( don't think it's whiny myself) dialogues, "zomg when can I finally shoot something? Shut up already! i don't wanna know!". Sad truth. This ending is definitely for the hardcore ME fans like me.
This is officially the head canon for me.
Too bad it won't ever be something BW will do. There's lots of heavy dialogue going on, and I love them! But unfortunately, many wouldn't be keen with the long "whiny" ( don't think it's whiny myself) dialogues, "zomg when can I finally shoot something? Shut up already! i don't wanna know!". Sad truth. This ending is definitely for the hardcore ME fans like me.
Modifié par AshirahTSparkle, 22 avril 2012 - 02:12 .
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Posté 22 avril 2012 - 02:38
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I like the work you put into it.
well done.
However i don't understand why harbinger is so war hungry ?
Why does it care about battle so much ?
As an AI , such a disposition is not very authentic.
He seems to much like a Saturday mourning cartoon villain.
The path to conventional should be more base than that.
Think of Harbinger as more of galactic force, if the galaxy wants to decide for themselves its just something that needs to be overcome. That should be reflected in his Dialog, It does not want to fight , it wants to enforce its order on all things, it sees itself as a force as powerful as evolution.
Putting Ego into the charecter and have it romanticize a battle, just seems wrong.
Instead You can have Shepard deduce that the tower is the Reaper control center.
That destroying it would weaken the reapers and make conventional victory a possibility.
Having Harbinger long for the battle of the ages seemed out of character, especially since it looks down on everything so much, why does it care who remembers the battles.
The battle itself should be a consequence not an effect, if you know what i mean.
If you have ever seen Babylon 5 its very similar to the "Get the hell out of our galaxy moment"
As in similar themes and such
well done.
However i don't understand why harbinger is so war hungry ?
Why does it care about battle so much ?
As an AI , such a disposition is not very authentic.
He seems to much like a Saturday mourning cartoon villain.
The path to conventional should be more base than that.
Think of Harbinger as more of galactic force, if the galaxy wants to decide for themselves its just something that needs to be overcome. That should be reflected in his Dialog, It does not want to fight , it wants to enforce its order on all things, it sees itself as a force as powerful as evolution.
Putting Ego into the charecter and have it romanticize a battle, just seems wrong.
Instead You can have Shepard deduce that the tower is the Reaper control center.
That destroying it would weaken the reapers and make conventional victory a possibility.
Having Harbinger long for the battle of the ages seemed out of character, especially since it looks down on everything so much, why does it care who remembers the battles.
The battle itself should be a consequence not an effect, if you know what i mean.
If you have ever seen Babylon 5 its very similar to the "Get the hell out of our galaxy moment"
As in similar themes and such
Modifié par Gogzilla, 22 avril 2012 - 04:01 .
