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[DarkPrinceRevan]

fainmaca wrote...

Currently writing here:

And getting so much done! Anyone else have a special place they like to go to write?

heh looks fun up there, i havent written anything with a real story structure in years so i cant recall off hand any particular place i had. now i just jot down random story ideas i find interesting on phone but thats about it lol

[fainmaca]

A sort of writing haven is crucial, especially for me. Every time I try to write at home, I end up idly browsing the internet (TvTropes is of the devil, I say!) and then have no time to write. I go here, I can't get any internet, and the words just flow. In addition, you can't see it in the pic but there's a tower just behind me, looking out over the surroundings. Its kind of cool to be around something like that, as you can easily find yourself imaging all kinds of crazy things.

[DarkPrinceRevan]

ah yes tvtropes it is a thing of evil beauty. i have some of the best and worse inspiring moments wondering the internet, i have some pretty ambitious ideas but i lack any real motivation to pursue them at the moment. and for taking a break from the evils of the internet i have got a nice playlist on my phone with some rock and random game soundtracks (including ME) i just zone out and have i blast visualizing a scene to some music

[fainmaca]

so... yeah. I was pondering the Revenant today and a thought came to me.... he has wings.... and magic biotic powers... He's kinda like Shepard's own personal fairy, isn't he?

[DarkPrinceRevan]

fainmaca wrote...

so... yeah. I was pondering the Revenant today and a thought came to me.... he has wings.... and magic biotic powers... He's kinda like Shepard's own personal fairy, isn't he?

lol a sci-fi space bug fairy thats over 50,000 years old....who cant actually fly anymore and has prophetic visions instead of wishes.....i can dig it.

heck Delexia is like a turian version of "Hot Ice" Hilda from Outlaw Star

[fainmaca]

Chapter 46 has been updated with another quarter! Please read and enjoy!

Link: www.fanfiction.net/s/6601801/46/Mass_Effect_3_Into_the_Unknown

[Meteo63]

Okay, so I haven't posted anywhere on the BSN for months, but this was the first thing I've seen for awhile that made me want to actually say something... I've been sort of half following this story, not fully reading the whole thing but only the most interesting parts, and I gotta say, the story makes hell of a lot more sense than the real ME3. I didn't even realize you started this in 2010 at first, until I noticed the total absence of the new ME3 characters like Eve or Javik. The story seems really good, lots of great ideas, like the Revenant, how Falere took down the Reaper, the Kepral's syndrome decision, the Illusive Man sparing/killing decision, and using the Shadow Broker network for missions (which Bioware totally ignored, making Liara into a terrible information broker; she almost never brokered any decent bit of information). My only dislike is the huge amount of descriptive prose of combat scenes; I actually tend to ignore them for some reason and instinctively look for dialogue sequences or plot advancement or the decisions instead. The length of the chapters and descriptions is a bit of a deterrent to reading the entire thing.

Also, I wanted to ask you: my male Shepard romanced Liara; how would you envision your story going with the other romances in mind? What about Thane and his early death? See, I have a hard time with putting that choice in for my FemShep, since she would have to give up a potential future with her LI to save the drell race.

Finally, I've been thinking, after being disappointed with ME3's story, to do my own redesign of it, not a big fully written thing, but just a short thing on these forums for fun. Do you mind if I borrowed some stuff from your story? Not much, just a few particularly cool decision aspects is all.

[fainmaca]

Hey! Thanks for your comments. I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far. As for the plot points you brought up, I honestly felt that those were the only logical ways that Bioware could go to continue the story without fouling up (That was my ultimate downfall- assuming logic would play a part in ME3). As for the combat... I do tend to get a little... flowery. I think I'm mostly afraid of ending up writing 'Shepard goes down a linear corridor, Shepard kills dudes with his violence skills, rinse and repeat', so I end up going too far the other way. I also have a problem keeping my chapters short (Shepard's Seventeen, anyone?).

I've kept every romance in mind while writing this, and even plotted more than a few new ones. I have envisioned that every romance would have a place of importance to the story, meaning that those Shepard who choose to participate in such a relationship get a radically different feel to their experience. You can only have a romance with an ME1 or 2 romance if you start it in the respective game. No turning Liara down in ME1 then picking her up in 3. Also, every LI has a conflict/issue with Shepard that needs to be overcome (Jack's fight with Shepard over sparing TIM, Miranda's revelation over her kids, the VS and the loss of Earth). Some of these can be avoided by making a correct choice, like killing TIM would have avoided the conflict with Jack, and only giving Thane the cure causes conflict in his relationship.

All LIs will become a part of the squad, out of necessity and fairness to each section of the fanbase (plus I reckon the Talimancers would eat my liver with a sprinkling of synthesised Quarian sweat for seasoning if I left her out of things). So Liara would become more prominent later on for a Liaramancer Shepard, but even now there'd be moments where Shepard went to visit her on her hub ship (one of the hub worlds I'd have established in the game) to build on the relationship.

as i said above, there's an opportunity for conflict with the Thanemance because of the cure. if you give it to Thane, he'd carry terrible guilt over the damage done to his people to extend his own life. Shep would have to overcome that. if you give the cure to his people, then you've seriously numbered the days you have together. I imagine some Thanemancers would pick one choice, others would go the other way, but its a good way to define a unique Shepard.

PM me with what you would like to borrow, and I'll get back to you ASAP.

[DarkPrinceRevan]

man Shepard curbstomped that three-eyed bastard good once he saw him putting his hands on Jack. i feel bad from Etarn having to put his crazy wife down but atleast Gorm got Bruce Lee kicked off the platform. and im glad you made a mention to the fact that tech skills used to be able to disable biotic implants back in ME1, its always annoyed me that they took that ability out.

also i like the combat scenarios being in full detail, otherwise theres very little tension in the story and you'd just be skipping from plot point A to plot point B.

[fainmaca]

@DarkPrince: Thanks! It was very satisfying to write, even if it did take me ages to complete. of course, the real showdown with Gorm is yet to come...

I guess you're right about the combat. I just need to keep it balanced so it still feels actiony while not being confusing.

In other news, MrStoob made an awesome picture using the photo I took of my writing spot. Here!

[DarkPrinceRevan]

fainmaca wrote...

@DarkPrince: Thanks! It was very satisfying to write, even if it did take me ages to complete. of course, the real showdown with Gorm is yet to come...

I guess you're right about the combat. I just need to keep it balanced so it still feels actiony while not being confusing.

In other news, MrStoob made an awesome picture using the photo I took of my writing spot. Here!

uh oh it looks like Bioware sent the Reapers after you for upstaging ME3 with "Into The Unknown" lol

[fainmaca]

@DarkPrinceRevan: Luckily I was able to borrow Athame's Shroud off the Asari. We had roast Calamari for dinner!

In other news, I'd like to post this here:

Okay. After some thought and deliberation, I've finally decided to try and get this idea of mine in motion. Time to find out if it works or not.

First off, HEAVY SPOILERS for Into The Unknown. You have been warned.

As some of you may or may not know, I've been busily creating a new, separate continuity to tell my version of the Reaper War for just under a year and a half now, writing my own version of events in order to show how to avoid certain traps that I felt Bioware might (and sadly did) fall for, and to get the ideas bouncing around in my skull out and on the page. Currently I'm sitting above the rough halfway mark, with the return of the main Reaper armada a looming threat while a very real and very present Reaper force of over a hundred Reapers, Harbinger among them, occupy the Sol system, striving to turn our rare Sun into a new Citadel capable of bringing back the rest of their force.

One thing i wanted to achieve with this fanfic was to get people involved in it as much as possible. I can do that with the main fic through presenting the 'in-game' choices as votes they can contribute to. However, I have hoped for some time now to expand this outside involvement with additional material, such as artwork, audio recordings, and eventually, additional fiction, once the main plot and all characters have been dealt with.

I'd like to give the additional fiction angle a go with a small trial, to see if it works. So I feel the bast way to do this is to pick a moment which can be expanded upon without needing to worry about what i might have planned for later on in the main plot (I.E. No need to fret about the death of an NPC that has a larger destiny further down the line). The Battle of the Draktarra Plains gives me a perfect opportunity for this, as it ties up plenty of plot threads without leaving any I'll need later on.

What I'd like to do is get the involvement of fanfiction authors like yourselves to help expand on the events told in Chapter 39 of my fic, specifically the final battle for Tuchanka, by accumulating a series of fics dealing with characters outside of the squad Shepard used for the mission (Shepard, Grunt, Mordin, Thane, Delexia and Wrex).

So consider this a formal invitation to come play around a bit in the sandbox I've been creating for the past 18 months. You can try a one-shot about just one of the members of the squad who Shepard didn't take with him, a little something about what Joker was doing above the battlefield, maybe build on one of the many Krogan NPCs we meet through the first two games or I've introduced in the main fic. Maybe you'd even like to try a few chapters about a Krogan squad completely unconnected to Shepard and his team. As long as the plot of the battle isn't changed from 'canon' (as much as it can be called that when the whole continuity is AU anyway), you can go wild.

Would any of you be interested in this? At the moment, its purely an experiment, but later on once more of the main plot is wrapped up I would be interested to see if people would like to write DLC missions, deal with any NPCs I might have missed, even perhaps scenes on the Normandy that they'd have liked to see written, but I never thought of (obviously that might have to wait till I really finish the fic in case I have them planned for closer to the end of the story). Heck, maybe some of you would even like to try writing the alternate paths to the story (be it based on choices in the fic, or in the previous games).

if you want any further info, don't be shy! i'd be all to happy to answer.

[fainmaca]

Just had a little revelation. You remember how ME3 had it's little 'STEEEEVE!' Moment? Well I just realised I kinda did it before them with the chapter 'I Am Krogan!', where I had the Normandy crew forced to bail out of a crashing shuttle, with the character piloting it still inside when it went down.

I still think my version's better.

[Prizzma]

Yes your was definitely better, because I think people actually care what happens to Delexia. And they had rocket boots! That just automaticly makes it better

[DarkPrinceRevan]

yea rocket boots are an automatic win plus ME3's moment kinda made it abit narmy especially when Shepard acts normal right he screams cortez's name and they find out hes ok like it was nothing lol

Modifié par DarkPrinceRevan, 21 juin 2012 - 03:25 .

[fainmaca]

Not 'rocket boots'. Oversimplification. Typical of Human linguistics to apply shorter but ultimately incorrect moniker to complex concepts. *sniff* Jet propulsion avoided in development. Actually uses small-scale element zero generators to create mass-altering fields around feet. Negatively-charged Mass Effect fields counteract garvitational pull to simulate upward thrust. Wearer effectively 'falls upwards'. To introduce combustible materials into machinery would cause explosion with similar effect to Javelin missile from Alliance frigate. Consequences... unfortunate.

[Prizzma]

Hush Mordin Rocket Boots just sounds cool   

[DarkPrinceRevan]

meh i agree with Jack leave it to the salarians to have mastered talking you to death better then Shepard lol

Modifié par DarkPrinceRevan, 21 juin 2012 - 03:45 .

[fainmaca]

*sigh*
Still do not understand Human fascination with affixing temperature values to concepts. In addition, increased and decreased values are given an equally positive connotation! Makes no sense.
*sniff*
Will be in lab. Have tests to run on latest Husk intestine samples. May be close to breakthrough in enhancing Human liver function. Although... improvement to liver function could lead to increased ingestion of alcohol, possible increase in reckless behaviour. Scale itch already a concern, further reckless behaviour may introduce far more serious consequences. Implications... unpleasant.

[Prizzma]

fainmaca wrote...

*sigh*
Still do not understand Human fascination with affixing temperature values to concepts. In addition, increased and decreased values are given an equally positive connotation! Makes no sense.
*sniff*
Will be in lab. Have tests to run on latest Husk intestine samples. May be close to breakthrough in enhancing Human liver function. Although... improvement to liver function could lead to increased ingestion of alcohol, possible increase in reckless behaviour. Scale itch already a concern, further reckless behaviour may introduce far more serious consequences. Implications... unpleasant.

That put a smile on my face, thank you.     I will now go have a beer since my liver may last a bit longer.

[DarkPrinceRevan]

heh good thing i dont drink then, i get to reap all the benefits with no consequences

[fainmaca]

Anyway, I'm going to try and really promote ITU here, so to help do that, we need some discussion over the fic in general. What is your favourite part of the fic? Who do you want to see more of in future chapters? Is there anything you hate about the direction I'm taking? What do you wish I would change?

Feedback, people! I thrive on it.

Modifié par fainmaca, 22 juin 2012 - 10:48 .

[DarkPrinceRevan]

hmm well i did notice you call Shepard she when he went to go help Jack up in the latest part of the chapter lol

ive been keeping an eye out for all things related to Jack lol like more background history between Jano and Jack, and i vaguely recall something about one of Jack's forearm that had some interest about it a few chapters ago that hasnt come up yet.

im pretty sure ill think of a bunch more related to other characters besides Jack once im actually awake and really think about it

Modifié par DarkPrinceRevan, 22 juin 2012 - 01:34 .

[Prizzma]

fainmaca wrote...

Anyway, I'm going to try and really promote ITU here, so to help do that, we need some discussion over the fic in general. What is your favourite part of the fic? Who do you want to see more of in future chapters? Is there anything you hate about the direction I'm taking? What do you wish I would change?

Feedback, people! I thrive on it.

Hmm so actually talk about the topic of thread we are posting in huh….well I will give it a shot. Oh I rant a lot so bear with me.

 Well the thing I like about your fic the most?   That would definitely have to be the chance to choose what big decisions are made! I was very late to the party and I have not had a chance to cast any votes yet but I am really looking forward to making my voice heard! But than again this is a double edge sword. Because I have not always agreed with some of the decisions that the other readers have made and it scare me of the possible consequences in the future.
 
Next would have to be all the OC’s. They are the reason I started to read your fic in the first place. You had posted on the forums the chapter after Jack got hit with the flash bang so as I am reading it you kept talking about all these random people and I am like wait who the heck are the guys what is going on? Miri, Shepard, and some mention of kids!?! WTF!   So I just had to start reading from the beginning and started to learn and then connect with all the new characters. I have already mentioned this before but Delexia is definitely my favorite OC so far. So I would love to see a lot more of her in the future…..and maybe even for her to make a move for Shepard. The chaos that would ensue would be glorious. I mean I love Jack and all but love triangles are always fun. Hell she has already “kissed” Shepard already.    Of course that is all depending on how you describe the touching of foreheads in your story. Been reading so many fic’s after the end of ME3 it all starts to mix together.
 
I think the direction you are taking is great. These side missions are a freaking great idea. I mean it just makes sense, why would Shepard go on all these little errands when he has a whole crew more than capable of going in his place while he takes care of the bigger threats. 
 
And well my favorite part of the fic would be a tie with Biotic air drop and Shepard and Jack having their “argument”. The biotic air drop was just a fun scene to read. Trying to visualize her flying down this blue missile out of the blackness of space and breaking through he glass and the last sec “Oh Sh!t” moment when Shepard realized what was about to happen. Just plain fun!  And the Shapard and Jack running around the cargo hold beating the crap out of each other was just perfect! The entire crew running there just to watch even Miri! (even if she wanted to stop it) That scene I think really brought them together even closer. Makes be wonder what would have happened if they decided to kill the big man instead. (which I think should have happened btw) But if that happen I wouldn’t get that great scene.
 
Well there was my random typing of stuff I enjoyed from the fic so to all those debating “should I read this or not?” Go read it so you can make sense of what I just said…or well try to make sense
 
/rant

[Prizzma]

DarkPrinceRevan wrote...

ive been keeping an eye out for all things related to Jack lol like more background history between Jano and Jack, and i vaguely recall something about one of Jack's forearm that had some interest about it a few chapters ago that hasnt come up yet.

Yes!  i really want to know more about what happend with them, because Jack is really avoiding the situation so it just makes me more curious.  I am all for the dramas!

Modifié par Prizzma, 22 juin 2012 - 02:26 .