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[PlumtheHunter]

Hello everyone.  

I've written a very short fan fiction where I take a deeper look into the ending of the Mass Effect trilogy, where I add substaintally more expository dialog (all educated by real game canon), and attempt to give some sense of
closure. I'd appreciate if you would take a look at it, and give me feed back. 

www.fanfiction.net/s/8143487/1/bSentimental_b_bEnd_b

[PlumtheHunter]

Sorry for the shameless bump. I really don't want my work to go to waste.

[LombaxWarrior]

Holy s**t that was AWESOME that's how it should have ended the catalyst explained everything to Shepard damn fine job damn fine.

[PlumtheHunter]

Thank you so much. I'm glad that you enjoyed it. I really did put a lot of thought into this, and I'm glad that my work is evident in the dialog.

[Arathyl]

hey just finished reading it. i liked it alot! good job on the catalyst explaining everything. i wish there was more o read!!! seriously, nicely done!

[PlumtheHunter]

I will be adding some sort of closure related chapter after a little time has passed. Thanks for the feed back, and I'm glad you liked it.

[JShepppp]

Very impressive. On a personal, note, this is how I took the endings (after some thought) to be and stuff and it helps bring the entire thing full circle for my campaign. I also liked how you discussed a lot of common objections to some of the endings.

On a purely objective note, your writing skills are flawless. Some may say you didn't write a lot of the dialogue (I noticed parts of the leaked+current script in there), but there is indeed a relatively significant amount of exposition that you added, and imo it fits (again, probably personal bias, but still). Your description of Shepard's physical and mental fatigue gave a very visceral feel to the scene that I liked, especially when it was contrasted with the idealistic symbolism of synthesis.

Thank you kind sir.

[PlumtheHunter]

Thank you so very much for the positive feed back. It means the world to me that people are getting to see my work, and giving me so much praise.

[Wordweaver2010]

@PlumtheHunter: That was a beautifully rendered ending. You have written exactly why I chose and would always choose again the synthesis ending. We have both understood the catalyst's message in the same way. I had been thinking of writing an afterstory for the synthesis ending, but you have put all of this so beautifully that I don't feel the need as much any more. I laud your writing skill.

[Zimek]

I'm leaving this for later, Plum; adding you to my alert

[PlumtheHunter]

@Wordweaver2010, thank you so much for the compliments and I am so glad that you enjoyed it. And again, thank you for the feedback. It means the world to me.

@Zimek, thank you for giving this a chance. I hope you decide to read it later.

[Wordweaver2010]

@PlumtheHunter: BTW, you called this a "sentimental end" in this thread's title, and I think that sentimentality is exactly the mood of ME3 - it is the end of many things, after all. And I cried a lot when playing that game, at many different places (Mordin's death, the end of the genophage, Legion's "death," and, of course, Shepard's sacrifice). I'd say the volume of the uproar that is still raging about ME3 shows how powerful it was.

[PlumtheHunter]

Extremely true. Mass Effect 3 was a very moving tale of loss, but also of everything gained. The word 'sentimental' fits perfectly. Very sad, somber, and nostalgic.

[PlumtheHunter]

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[Wordweaver2010]

PlumtheHunter wrote...

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Gesundheit, possibly?

[PlumtheHunter]

Wordweaver2010 wrote...

PlumtheHunter wrote...

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Gesundheit, possibly?

Thanks.

[Wazehaze]

that was very well written. This just shows how much more they could have done with the ending, not necessarily change much, but actually explaining the reasons behind motives and so on. And I really liked how you wrote the last moments; with the people you gathered along the way. Thats the way it should ALWAYS be in a game like ME

And I apologize for possible horrible spelling (english not being my main languge)

Modifié par Wazehaze, 14 juin 2012 - 07:25 .

[Wordweaver2010]

Wazehaze wrote...

that was very well written. This just shows how much more they could have done with the ending, not necessarily change much, but actually explaining the reasons behind motives and so on. And I really liked how you wrote the last moments; with the people you gathered along the way. Thats the way it should ALWAYS be in a game like ME

And I apologize for possible horrible spelling (english not being my main languge)

Your spelling is fine (and I'm not a native speaker either, though I am a teacher of the language).

As for the many things that could have been done with the ending by Bioware ... I'm currently replaying the game with my Shepard #2, and I've been following the dialogues of Normandy crewmen and crew members a lot more thoroughly... and I must say the dialogue is thick and dripping with foreshadowings of the ending, though I can only really appreciate them in the second playthrough (and this is actually a great thing - they're subtle enough to stick with you subconsciously if you see them the first time round, but they don't give too much away).

I agree that the ending could have built more on these foreshadowings, possibly in the way suggested by PlumtheHunter. After all, a lot of the relevant dialogue has already happened in-game, if the appropriate flags were checked, it could be replayed in a manner similar to Anderson's and the Illusive Man's faces appearing at the end (my favourite quotes at the moment, probably misquoted a little, are Javik's "Don't listen to what others want you to do, but do what you must," Garrus' "You've made peace between the Quarians and the Geth. If you can make peace with the Reapers too, they'll make you a saint" and Shepard's "I'll sleep when I'm dead." And let's not forget Kolyat and Thane reading Shepard his last rites at Huerta).

[Armass81]

And what if this is what they will do with EC when they will "explain" the endings? Fans turn around to praise BW?

[Wordweaver2010]

Armass81 wrote...

And what if this is what they will do with EC when they will "explain" the endings? Fans turn around to praise BW?

I wouldn't count on it, neither would I expect it. But in my humble opinion, fumbling the end, storytelling-wise, does not wreck irreparably what has come before, storytelling-wise. I do definitely praise Bioware for ME1, ME2, and, yes, ME3. For the ending of ME3, not so much, I agree. It could have needed a little more work, especially in the way of comforting the players a little more about Shepard's passing (the storyteller at the end of the credits isn't a bad touch, but it's a bit too impersonal; having had someone like Shepard's love interest say good-bye before the credits would have been more personal, but that's just my opinion here).

But then again I am aware that it is possible to become so absorbed in your own work that you stop noticing things that may not be so clear-cut to others who have not been involved as intimately as yourself (in Germany we call this "Betriebsblindheit," the blindness of the workers working on a project because they are too familiar with their own material and make the unconscious assumption that others are that familiar with it as well).