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[noxiuniversitas1]

Drussius wrote...

noxiuniversitas1 wrote...

Oh, lol.. Wait - you're not fatcat013, are you?

Sigh - getting dragged out of the comfort of the hotel :/

Nope. Drussius. Always Drussius. Thankfully it's a name I've only found taken once in all the times I've signed up anywhere. And still no idea who the heck would have taken my name or why.

Since I can't reply to guest reviews - thank you for your kind words and picking up on my silly error! The chapter was far too crappy for the praise you gave, but I appreciate the time you took to say such nice things

Genuinely looking forward to the story you have up your sleeve!

Edit: *GASP* 100! :wizard::wizard:

Crack open the vino!

Modifié par noxiuniversitas1, 09 juillet 2012 - 10:47 .

[Icyflare]

Yay, I was waiting for the 100 page mark, so I could share this. You know, in celebration of all the writing we're doing

How to Seduce a Writer

Modifié par Icyflare, 09 juillet 2012 - 11:09 .

[LanceSolous13]

PAGE NUMBER 100!

*cracks open a bottle of M-88 Peruvian Whiskey*

[IliyaMoroumetz]

Spiritwolf1 wrote...

Who do you listen to when you write.
.

Nothing.  I can't write when I'm listening to music.  I need to concentrate and as such, I listen to nothing.

Edit:
Happy 100. I don't drink, so, I'll be the designated driver.  I'm also bringing my video camera for blackmail material! 

Modifié par IliyaMoroumetz, 09 juillet 2012 - 11:03 .

[LanceSolous13]

When it comes to sound while writing, it has to be either silence or instrumental music. I get too distracted by lyrics, usually because I end up singing my heart out.

[hot_heart]

Icyflare wrote...
Yay, I was waiting for the 100 page mark, so I could share this. You know, in celebration of all the writing we're doing

How to Seduce a Writer

Heh, I remember reading that. Love it.

Happy 100!

[LanceSolous13]

hot_heart wrote...

Icyflare wrote...
Yay, I was waiting for the 100 page mark, so I could share this. You know, in celebration of all the writing we're doing

How to Seduce a Writer

Heh, I remember reading that. Love it.

Happy 100!

*le gasp*

O  .  O

HE HAS A TUMBLR!

[Spiritwolf1]

Congrats on 100

[Caligno]

Yay 100 pages

All right back to critiques.

[fluffywalrus]

100 Pages! Hurray!

As for music I listen to, I had a discussion earlier, but basically ambient, calm, instrumental stuff, generally. Some classical, but not often. I tend to lean heavily on Eluvium, Clint Mansell, Max Richter, and other similar stuff.

[Obsidian Gryphon]

Made it to the 100.

[dpMeggers]

I feel like I should be offering fireworks, or a new chapter or something in celebration of the 100. Sadly fireworks were unavailable and Chapter 13 is going about as quickly as molasses in mid-winter. I don't know what it is about this chapter, but it's damn near killing me to get out. If I'm lucky (or stubborn) I may be able to finish the first draft tonight. If I'm very lucky, I might actually be able to publish this week.

[LanceSolous13]

So, I'm considering having a breather chapter later with Miranda and some of the Mass Effect girls going to Purgatory for a drink, and I do want to feature Aria as she's one of my absolute favorite characters.

But, the pretty much all but confirmed Omega DLC has me slightly worried about the details of the scene being incorrect once the DLC is released.

Should I just go with the idea anyways and retcon things later or should I just wait till things get confirmed later?

[dpMeggers]

LanceSolous13 wrote...

So, I'm considering having a breather chapter later with Miranda and some of the Mass Effect girls going to Purgatory for a drink, and I do want to feature Aria as she's one of my absolute favorite characters.

But, the pretty much all but confirmed Omega DLC has me slightly worried about the details of the scene being incorrect once the DLC is released.

Should I just go with the idea anyways and retcon things later or should I just wait till things get confirmed later?

If it's something that would really bother you, I would suggest waiting (but we don't know how long the wait is so that one's up to your patience). If it's not, run with the idea anyway and retcon if you feel you have to (or don't).

[Spartanburger]

Yay, 100.

I just had a thought.

I was tossing the idea of the codex back and fourth in my head when I drifted back to the trilogy I am reading right now. The Foundation trilogy by Issac Asimov.
I then had a thought. Who writes the codec entries (in universe)?
So now I think that there might be an institution, similar to the first foundation, that works on the codex, constantly updating it with new information. The galactic codex in Mass Effect is the equivalent of the foundation's Encyclopedia Galactica.
Some classified codex entries would remain in respective archives of those who hold them, like Cerberus, STG, and Spectres.
Might be interesting to have a fic from the perspective of one of the writers/editors/investigators for the Galactic Codex.

[LanceSolous13]

Is the Codex actually canon to the series?

I always thought it was one of those Gameplay-Story Segregation things and really existed so that new and current players know what the heck their talking about in a game where Shepard should logically know what Medi-gel or Omni-tools are.

[Spartanburger]

From what I've gathered, the codex is written with perspective from the universe itself.

For example, ME2's codex entry for sovereign still labels it as a Geth ship.

In other words, an alliance codex entry that is read at a time just before ME1 would not refer to any new knowledge or data gained after the fact.

[PMC65]

Happy page 100!!!!!!

I also prefer no music unless it is specific to the scene.

[Mad-Hamlet]

This seems rather ideal.

Blue: Cerulean
I would appreciate most thought, comments and criticisms regarding my own work.
Except grammatical ones. I know they're there. A clean-up operation is underway.
Characterization, plot, description, writing style would be most excellent though.

[fluffywalrus]

Mad-Hamlet wrote...

This seems rather ideal.

Blue: Cerulean
I would appreciate most thought, comments and criticisms regarding my own work.
Except grammatical ones. I know they're there. A clean-up operation is underway.
Characterization, plot, description, writing style would be most excellent though.

I've enjoyed your story, so far From what I can tell(and it's obviously my sole opinion here), your characterization is quite solid, and in the most recent chapter, I felt you wrote Garrus particularly well. Miranda as well, though I'll admit I've taken only moderate interest in her character in the past.

The pacing of your plot has been solid enough. Can't  find any noticeable lulls, and the escape through the relay was well done.
Your concept of Shepard in your fic is particularly interesting, and I'm looking forward to seeing how that progresses. The new Cerberus-esque enemy is...well, not unbelievable, considering you've only given out a tiny fleck of info, but I'm wondering how they came to be and who's organizing them. It's had me thinking over the past weeks.

I wish I could offer constructive criticism, but I didn't really find much aside from spelling and grammatical errors in your fic so far. I'm sure some who are more critical of style and sentence structure could offer more on that end...I tend to just accept and adapt to other writing styles.

[Icyflare]

Mad-Hamlet wrote...

This seems rather ideal.

Blue: Cerulean
I would appreciate most thought, comments and criticisms regarding my own work.
Except grammatical ones. I know they're there. A clean-up operation is underway.
Characterization, plot, description, writing style would be most excellent though.

If you give me a day, I can take a look through, and give you detailed notes about what I found works and what doesn't. As long as you don't mind me dissecting it in a meticulous but not unfriendly manner, I can do a decent literary evaluation of it.

[lillitheris]

Yay 100! At 2495 messages. *Confused*

Well, whatever.

…

The Codex is interesting…I felt it to be external to the world in that it’s not an actual site on an intranet somewhere, but decidedly written from the in-world perspective, reflecting the information that is known, or could be found on the Extrawikipedia.

…

I’ve got some work to do with the first couple chapters in Unity…I went through chapters 1 and 2 (well, not done with it yet) and copyedited things so that it reads reasonably well now. I did notice, however, that I could add quite a bit of descriptive text and such to it, the Citadel parts in particular — the Normandy works mostly well enough as it is.

No actual story changes, just improving the scene building. It might be because I relied heavily on familiarity with the ending game sequence and cinematics, so I only concentrated on the action…I still don’t think it’s particularly hard to follow if you’ve played the game — and I think I’ll continue to rely on those implicit cues rather than retell the whole thing — but it would just read better with a little more fleshing out to space out the actions the characters are taking.

Modifié par lillitheris, 10 juillet 2012 - 09:47 .

[fainmaca]

Yay 100. I'll pass on the wine, though. There's only one drink we hardy northerners enjoy!

In other news, kind of hit a rough patch in my story.

Before I continue, ****SPOILERS****. Okay, so any of you who know my writing know that dialogue is by far the weakest part of my writing arsenal. Well I've hit a very important piece of dialogue, and I'm struggling to get the tone right. I'm introducing a new character who won't be around for long, but needs to feel important and intriguing. How does one go about writing dialogue for a Reaper? Do you guys have any systems or tricks that you like to use?

[lillitheris]

CAPITAL LETTERS. I KNOW YOU FEEL THIS. IN YOUR EYES. IT BURNS TO SEE SO MANY CAPITALS.

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How about using some Lovecraft passages as inspiration?

[fluffywalrus]

lillitheris wrote...

CAPITAL LETTERS. I KNOW YOU FEEL THIS. IN YOUR EYES. IT BURNS TO SEE SO MANY CAPITALS.

…

How about using some Lovecraft passages as inspiration?

THIS HURTS ME.

Anywho, I agree, Lovecraft is an incredible resource. If not him, the universe of works inspired by him, or related to him. You won't find much dialogue FROM his Ancient Ones, or any of his gods...they're rather silent and speak incomprehensible languages. However, you might have luck with Nyarlathotep, as he was a bit of an interesting thing. Check into the script for "Call of Cthulhu: Dark Corners of the Earth". It's made by bethesda, and it's buggy, but good. A fair amount of Lovecraftian stories have dialogue from rather insane cultists that can help provide the kind of material to inspire dialogue. I personally prefer to think of the Reapers as akin to Lovecraftian gods like Cthulhu and Hastur...incomprehensible and mind-warping beings that transcend humanity's understanding of reality. I mean, yeah, after ME3, their purpose is obvious and easy to wrap your mind around, but I like to think of them as a bit less purposeful. They just are.

Were I more motivated, I would scour my compilation of his works for fitting inspiration, but alas, I don't have that kind of time on my hands.

Writing dialogue for reapers...well, there isn't much to go on aside from Harbinger and Sovereign, within he Mass Effect games. Stick with vague assertions and potentially discuss the impossible scope of their existence, in comparison to the insignificance of modern spacefaring life, and so forth. Use Harbinger and Soverign's dialogue as a guide and work from there, perhaps filtering in flavour from Lovecraft