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[MrStoob]

dpMeggers wrote...

MrStoob wrote...

Opinions please!

Would it be unbelievable for post-ME (pre-ME2) Liara to be able to fly a personal shuttle of some kind? Dunno if this has been covered in Redemption or something, still need to get that. I've already broken some of it in my FF re: Aria. lol

Oddly enough, it was covered in Redemption. *Spoilers* She knocks out some idiots and docks the ship at Omega herself. (source)

Presumably if she can dock a vessel, it wouldn't be too unbelieveable for her to pilot one.

Good show.  ta.

[MrStoob]

And on another matter... sry, questions, questions, eh?

I want to use the word 'gay' in it's proper sense, such as 'whistling a gay tune'. Any problems anyone think, does it translate well internationally? I personally think that in context it would be fine, but obviously it has taken on other connotations, neutral and negative.

[flippedeclipse]

MrStoob wrote...

And on another matter... sry, questions, questions, eh?

I want to use the word 'gay' in it's proper sense, such as 'whistling a gay tune'. Any problems anyone think, does it translate well internationally? I personally think that in context it would be fine, but obviously it has taken on other connotations, neutral and negative.

I'd avoid it if I could and use a synonym instead 

[Icyflare]

MrStoob wrote...

And on another matter... sry, questions, questions, eh?

I want to use the word 'gay' in it's proper sense, such as 'whistling a gay tune'. Any problems anyone think, does it translate well internationally? I personally think that in context it would be fine, but obviously it has taken on other connotations, neutral and negative.

In context maybe, but as you mentioned, there's a lot connotations associated with the word that I'm not sure you want in your sentence. My other comment is that the original meaning is reminiscent of writing from the early 20th century. It brings about an old-fashioned feel that you may not want in your writing and that may not match the rest of your writing, making it seem slightly jarring. However, if you've writing in an older style then it's probably fine.

[fainmaca]

dpMeggers wrote...

MrStoob wrote...

Opinions please!

Would it be unbelievable for post-ME (pre-ME2) Liara to be able to fly a personal shuttle of some kind? Dunno if this has been covered in Redemption or something, still need to get that. I've already broken some of it in my FF re: Aria. lol

Oddly enough, it was covered in Redemption. *Spoilers* She knocks out some idiots and docks the ship at Omega herself. (source)

Presumably if she can dock a vessel, it wouldn't be too unbelieveable for her to pilot one.

Now I'm stuck with an image in my head of Liara flying the ship in a way that'd put Shepard's Mako skillz to shame while some poor Omega flight control guy screams himself hoarse trying to talk her through it while Liara giggles in an 'Oopsie! teeheehee...' kind of way.

My head's at a strange place today.

In other news I am just... so... damn... close! I'm in the final 'Boss Battle' segment of the mission, having written out two and a half stages out of three. After that, a quick scene jump to Joker, then set up a moral choice for the end of chapter vote, and I'm good.

[MrStoob]

fainmaca wrote...

Now I'm stuck with an image in my head of Liara flying the ship in a way that'd put Shepard's Mako skillz to shame while some poor Omega flight control guy screams himself hoarse trying to talk her through it while Liara giggles in an 'Oopsie! teeheehee...' kind of way.

Hehe.  Nice.  "No!  No!  The other left!"

Oh and as it seems a potential problem, I've changed it to 'light hearted tune', but that sounds more whimsical than gay.

Modifié par MrStoob, 10 juillet 2012 - 09:33 .

[fainmaca]

MrStoob wrote...

fainmaca wrote...

Now I'm stuck with an image in my head of Liara flying the ship in a way that'd put Shepard's Mako skillz to shame while some poor Omega flight control guy screams himself hoarse trying to talk her through it while Liara giggles in an 'Oopsie! teeheehee...' kind of way.

Hehe.  Nice.  "No!  No!  The other left!"

*CRASH!*
Oh god... that was Aria's private yacht!

*CRUNCH!*
Aaaaaaand there goes her vintage skycar.

[MrStoob]

"Weeeeeeee!"

[fainmaca]

*Sigh*

You ever get an idea for your fics that you know is incredible in every way, but you can't include it because it either breaks canon, is OOC or it is just too ridiculous? I've just had one of the ones that belongs in the third category. Its awesome, but I reckon it'd take the action up to a level that would require too much of the audience's long-johns of disbelief.

Alas, the scene where Shepard kills a Reaper then surfs it down onto a planet out of orbit must never be...

[Drussius]

MrStoob wrote...

fainmaca wrote...

Now I'm stuck with an image in my head of Liara flying the ship in a way that'd put Shepard's Mako skillz to shame while some poor Omega flight control guy screams himself hoarse trying to talk her through it while Liara giggles in an 'Oopsie! teeheehee...' kind of way.

Hehe.  Nice.  "No!  No!  The other left!"

Oh and as it seems a potential problem, I've changed it to 'light hearted tune', but that sounds more whimsical than gay.

What about "merry tune"? That's a pretty good match for your original intent.

[Drussius]

And completely off-topic for both the thread and anything on this board, but I am simply so amazed I must tell someone and there is no-one here....

I have just discovered that if you freeze a bottle of pepsi solid, then let it thaw out before ever opening it, it somehow retains its carbonation! I had assumed when I found it in the freezer this morning and realized I'd forgotten about it last night that it would be completely flat. (I was only trying to chill it quickly). Color me surprised!

[dpMeggers]

fainmaca wrote...

*Sigh*

You ever get an idea for your fics that you know is incredible in every way, but you can't include it because it either breaks canon, is OOC or it is just too ridiculous? I've just had one of the ones that belongs in the third category. Its awesome, but I reckon it'd take the action up to a level that would require too much of the audience's long-johns of disbelief.

Alas, the scene where Shepard kills a Reaper then surfs it down onto a planet out of orbit must never be...

Eh, that's what side-along & one-shots are for. I have a ton of conversations/random things in my head that will probably never make it into fic for reasons of pacing or out and out silliness but I'll write them anyway and point to them as "things which happened but you didn't see because it would make everything else slightly boring."

[lillitheris]

hot_heart wrote...

Was watching YouTube videos (research!) with the transcriptions on (because of Party Temple lols) and I remembered lilli's Starkid Olympics idea and, well, this was perfect...

IT’S CANON.

[MrStoob]

Drussius wrote...

MrStoob wrote...

fainmaca wrote...

Now I'm stuck with an image in my head of Liara flying the ship in a way that'd put Shepard's Mako skillz to shame while some poor Omega flight control guy screams himself hoarse trying to talk her through it while Liara giggles in an 'Oopsie! teeheehee...' kind of way.

Hehe.  Nice.  "No!  No!  The other left!"

Oh and as it seems a potential problem, I've changed it to 'light hearted tune', but that sounds more whimsical than gay.

What about "merry tune"? That's a pretty good match for your original intent.

Aha, sir, that's just the roight hoight!

But I do like gay lol.  Brought up on the likes of AA Milne so it still retains its original charm for me.

[lillitheris]

MrStoob wrote...


But I do like gay lol.  Brought up on the likes of AA Milne so it still retains its original charm for me.

I used ‘merry tune’, but it was Joker…

[hot_heart]

If I wrote Joker, he would do everything jocularly.

[Drussius]

Reality check question:

If a ship were destroyed in space, is it believable that the crew could survive if they were already in environmental suits? I had no problem with what I was writing in previous scenes before now, but as I write the scene I am currently working on, I find myself wondering if I am pushing the bounds of believability too much. So I have to ask:

Assuming that all of the crew aboard a vessel were wearing environmental suits, and they were all in small, enclosed areas of the ship when the vessel was shattered by an incoming attack which did not breach the drive core (I'm picturing something more along the lines of a blast striking the center of the ship and essentially breaking it in two) is it believable that they might survive the destruction of the ship?

[fainmaca]

@Drussius: I reckon so. As long as you aren't vaporising the ship, it should be fine. I mean, in ME2 if Shep's suit hadn't ruptured then theoretically he would have been fine, as long as he was picked up before doing the whole orbital drop thingy.

[dpMeggers]

fainmaca wrote...

@Drussius: I reckon so. As long as you aren't vaporising the ship, it should be fine. I mean, in ME2 if Shep's suit hadn't ruptured then theoretically he would have been fine, as long as he was picked up before doing the whole orbital drop thingy.

This. Especially because of the spacewalk section of the geth dreadnaught. Shep's just wearing their hardsuit/armor there.

[Drussius]

Thank you for the quick response. I had this sudden moment of doubt while I was writing. I mean I don't think explosive decompression is an issue when there's a massive hull breach and you're wearing magnetic boots. The air would dissipate so quickly it would barely register. And if you're in an outlying area that basically breaks off from the main body of the ship... you might survive (with environmental gear). You'd be in dire need of rescue, but you could survive. However, for a minute there I was thinking I might be pushing it a bit. Back to writing I go!

[fainmaca]

Well, chapter 46 is finished. Now I just need FF.net to stop mucking me about so that I can upload it.

[LanceSolous13]

Hmmm....In Shepard's dialogue for the next chapter, I want to focus on Thane a bit, but I'm not sure if I want to retcon some things related to his death.

On one hand, I can explore the idea of Thane being cured and ready for action on the Normandy and being killed before doing so.

On the other hand, I stick with what's canon to the game series.

I hate being so unsure of myself on these, but hearing other's imput on stuff always makes me feel more confident.

[fainmaca]

Well... uploaded the new chapter, came back to these boards, only to find them flooded with rumours pertaining to a certain DLC... which totally negates what I just published. Figures.

I still think my Thresher Maw is bigger than theirs, so let's see if they can write a better Leviathan than me....

[Mad-Hamlet]

fluffywalrus wrote...

Mad-Hamlet wrote...

This seems rather ideal.

Blue: Cerulean

I've enjoyed your story, so far From what I can tell(and it's obviously my sole opinion here), your characterization is quite solid, and in the most recent chapter, I felt you wrote Garrus particularly well. Miranda as well, though I'll admit I've taken only moderate interest in her character in the past.

The pacing of your plot has been solid enough. Can't  find any noticeable lulls, and the escape through the relay was well done.
Your concept of Shepard in your fic is particularly interesting, and I'm looking forward to seeing how that progresses. The new Cerberus-esque enemy is...well, not unbelievable, considering you've only given out a tiny fleck of info, but I'm wondering how they came to be and who's organizing them. It's had me thinking over the past weeks.

I wish I could offer constructive criticism, but I didn't really find much aside from spelling and grammatical errors in your fic so far. I'm sure some who are more critical of style and sentence structure could offer more on that end...I tend to just accept and adapt to other writing styles.

Thanks. I've been wondering how 'this' Shepard has been recieved as I have deliberetly been avoiding physical  descriptions and first names. I always found that jarring as 'my' Shepard conflicts in mind's eye with another's.
If the characterization works then I'll stick with it.
The new organization's seeming appearence and powere base will be explained, well enough, is the goal.

IcyFlare wrote

If you give me a day, I can take a look through, and give you detailed
notes about what I found works and what doesn't. As long as you don't
mind me dissecting it in a meticulous but not unfriendly manner, I can
do a decent literary evaluation of it.

That would be fine. I've a big believer in C&C and have been tossed out of more than lots of fanfic communities because of slack-jawed mouth-breathers believing that critical commentary somehow automatically equals personal attack.

[LanceSolous13]

Nevermind. I've changed my mind. I am going to retcon Thane's death and some parts of Sanctuary and Cronos Station.