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[Drussius]

I just did a little research. I guess it would be called a "drop piece," because the lack of identifying serial numbers make it harder to trace, so it can be thrown away by the user to get rid of it.

Modifié par Drussius, 16 juillet 2012 - 08:14 .

[hot_heart]

Drussius wrote...
I just did a little research. I guess it would be called a "drop piece," because the lack of identifying serial numbers make it harder to trace, so it can be thrown away by the user to get rid of it.

Perfect! Thank you.

[Drussius]

hot_heart wrote...

Drussius wrote...
I just did a little research. I guess it would be called a "drop piece," because the lack of identifying serial numbers make it harder to trace, so it can be thrown away by the user to get rid of it.

Perfect! Thank you.

Glad to help!

[nitefyre410]

dpMeggers wrote...

Drussius wrote...

Completely different note, but how many people here struggle with bad writing habits?

I think my worst habit is run-on sentences, which is new. Granted I've never really written fiction before so that might have something to do with it.

I also have an unfortunate habit of accidentally leaving out words (eg: If haven't got plans vs. If you haven't got plans) and having my brain fill them in when I edit. 

As for words I overuse: also is probably the biggest offender.

Having said that, (another phrase I seem to be fond of) my struggle is more with writing than with writing badly. I have a bit of a poor visual imagination so I have a hard time describing things. I don't know how much detail people need because I don't visualize things when I'm reading.

To counter this with a slightly more upbeat question, what about your writing comes easiest to you?

For me, dialogue & character interaction. I can't tell you what the room they're in looks like, how their spacecraft functions, or what the layout of their hometown is, but I can tell you exactly what they think of the place and the people they're with, be that good or bad.

 

Fight scenes have always came easy to me, and character dialogue and inaction. I have gotten of description. 

I was always  iffy about how I wrote my female characters  and from the perspective   whether or not I was falling into sterotypes

[Spiritwolf1]

hot_heart wrote...

OK, drawing a blank here. Is there a slang/shorthand name for a gun without a serial number? I figured some of you yanks might know.

Otherwise, feel free to invent some, and if they sound reasonable, I may use them.

Anything that can be discard and untraced is usually called a throw away

[hot_heart]

Thanks. I think the biggest problem is that I am referring to a Cerberus front company that sold weapons to criminals on the side. Meaning It wasn't so much about the weapons not being traced back to individuals but the company itself.

See Haribon Military Industries here. Can't say I don't do my research.

[lillitheris]

I don’t think criminals tend to refer to such guns in a particular manner…it’s a foregone conclusion that it’s got its ID scrubbed! It might merit a note if someone doesn’t do so

“Untraceable” is a simple, non-specific word.

[hot_heart]

Not applicable in this case.

[Icyflare]

dpMeggers wrote...

To counter this with a slightly more upbeat question, what about your writing comes easiest to you?

I do a lot of understated irony and humour in my stories that I enjoy. I found out a while ago that I have a tendency to be a smart-mouth under pressure, and sometimes that leaks out in my characters' observations.

@Drussius: If you're unaware of the term 'hipstering', or if you are aware and I'm just being a insufferable know-it-all, it refers to someone claiming that they liked/did a commodity/event before it became popular with the general public or "mainstream". Considering your assertions of being "old", you may have a legitimite claim to hipstering anime if you''re as ancient as you claim

Sometimes, I have no idea if the slang I use is only known in my geographical area in my socio-economical, age-specific group. On a related topic, have you guys ever considered idioms for the other species? I'd imagine the turians might have some that relate to their military background while the krogans may have ones that relate to their bloody history and way of life. Of course, that begs the question of how idioms come up in the first place...

[Drussius]

Icyflare wrote...


@Drussius: If you're unaware of the term 'hipstering', or if you are aware and I'm just being a insufferable know-it-all, it refers to someone claiming that they liked/did a commodity/event before it became popular with the general public or "mainstream". Considering your assertions of being "old", you may have a legitimite claim to hipstering anime if you''re as ancient as you claim

I'm not sure I'd classify myself quite as "ancient", and I know what hipstering means. I was just taking the opportunity to take a shot at myself. I am one of those people who takes a shot at himself whenever he gets the chance.

Modifié par Drussius, 16 juillet 2012 - 09:51 .

[lillitheris]

Icyflare wrote...

@Drussius: If you're unaware of the term 'hipstering', or if you are aware and I'm just being a insufferable know-it-all, it refers to someone claiming that they liked/did a commodity/event before it became popular with the general public or "mainstream". Considering your assertions of being "old", you may have a legitimite claim to hipstering anime if you''re as ancient as you claim

Drussius was old before it became mainstream?

On a related topic, have you guys ever considered idioms for the other species?

Yes! The problem is introducing them…I’ve had a few from when I was plotting out the asari languages. They either have to be obvious enough to not need an explanation—or then you need to explain them. I don’t like the former too much, and the latter can’t be used too frequently.

[Drussius]

Wierd. When I try to edit my last post my response shows up outside of the quote tags. No idea why it decided to put it inside of the other quote...

[lillitheris]

^ Click on the BBCode button to see the [ quote ] tags, and remove the unnecessary ones (or add needed ones). The quote feature is pretty buggy.

[Drussius]

That worked. There was a wierd extraneous quote tag in there. Thanks!

[dpMeggers]

Icyflare wrote...
Sometimes, I have no idea if the slang I use is only known in my geographical area in my socio-economical, age-specific group. On a related topic, have you guys ever considered idioms for the other species? I'd imagine the turians might have some that relate to their military background while the krogans may have ones that relate to their bloody history and way of life. Of course, that begs the question of how idioms come up in the first place...

Apparently (and I don't remember where I read this), turians have a very literal language, which is why they butcher the hell out of human idioms/metaphors.

Eg: Loriq Qu'in on Noveria - when Shepard says "I'll let you go" to end the conversation, he enquires if humans view conversation as a form of inprisonment.

On the topic of Krogan, both they and humans have a (historically) patricarchal society and the parallel meaning of 'having a quad' and 'having balls'. Never noticed that before. Huh.

[Icyflare]

lillitheris wrote...

Icyflare wrote...

@Drussius: If you're unaware of the term 'hipstering', or if you are aware and I'm just being a insufferable know-it-all, it refers to someone claiming that they liked/did a commodity/event before it became popular with the general public or "mainstream". Considering your assertions of being "old", you may have a legitimite claim to hipstering anime if you''re as ancient as you claim

Drussius was old before it became mainstream?

LOL.

Modifié par Icyflare, 17 juillet 2012 - 04:14 .

[fluffywalrus]

You know, for about a year, I assumed quad meant quadricep. Even though I knew Krogan have four balls, it just didn't register until a friend told me bluntly.

Ugh been away all week and I'm stuck with my parent's horrible laptop. I honestly don't know how people can type on these things. So hard to pump a story out without my baby (read: my desktop, Daedalus). Tomorrow night can't come soon enough.

On the other hand, I might be able to squeeze in reading some new fics if I continue to have trouble typing on this defiled piece of hardware.

Quick question: Does anyone here occasionally get impatient about the progression of their story?

Modifié par fluffywalrus, 17 juillet 2012 - 12:13 .

[Obsidian Gryphon]

fluffywalrus wrote...

You know, for about a year, I assumed quad meant quadricep. Even though I knew Krogan have four balls, it just didn't register until a friend told me bluntly.

Ugh been away all week and I'm stuck with my parent's horrible laptop. I honestly don't know how people can type on these things. So hard to pump a story out without my baby (read: my desktop, Daedalus). Tomorrow night can't come soon enough.

On the other hand, I might be able to squeeze in reading some new fics if I continue to have trouble typing on this defiled piece of hardware.

Quick question: Does anyone here occasionally get impatient about the progression of their story?

Lol. What? Not knowing what's a quad in ME? But but....Garrus explained it all in ME 1.   And Wrex was even worst, he let dropped that Turian balls were as small as nuts.  


Impatient, yes. It's like a crowd trying to exit a tiny doorway. Of course, inevitably, a jam happens and I sometimes get stuck because my images are so far ahead and my words lagging behind.

[fluffywalrus]

Obsidian Gryphon wrote...

fluffywalrus wrote...

You know, for about a year, I assumed quad meant quadricep. Even though I knew Krogan have four balls, it just didn't register until a friend told me bluntly.

Ugh been away all week and I'm stuck with my parent's horrible laptop. I honestly don't know how people can type on these things. So hard to pump a story out without my baby (read: my desktop, Daedalus). Tomorrow night can't come soon enough.

On the other hand, I might be able to squeeze in reading some new fics if I continue to have trouble typing on this defiled piece of hardware.

Quick question: Does anyone here occasionally get impatient about the progression of their story?

Lol. What? Not knowing what's a quad in ME? But but....Garrus explained it all in ME 1.   And Wrex was even worst, he let dropped that Turian balls were as small as nuts.  


Impatient, yes. It's like a crowd trying to exit a tiny doorway. Of course, inevitably, a jam happens and I sometimes get stuck because my images are so far ahead and my words lagging behind.

Was that one of the elevator scenes? Because I swear, that
discussion didn't happen on the Normandy. In my first few plays, I
barely ever had any elevator talks...it frustrated the heck out of me.
Only when Kaidan was around would there be talks, and I generally felt
it was wasted on him.

Yeah, I can understand having a bunch of ideas and not having the words to get them all out on paper(or on the screen) quickly enough to capture them before you get frustrated. It's difficult.
I often get the urge to just skip far ahead. Heck, I plan on doing that in spots going forward, but sometimes I want to skip past important scenes to get to the next plot arc and that's just...frustrating.

[Mr.BlazenGlazen]

So uh, anyone look at my new chapter yet? I saw some mistakes and I'll fix it later, but I hope it's good for the reader's eye.

[Obsidian Gryphon]

fluffywalrus wrote...

Was that one of the elevator scenes? Because I swear, that
discussion didn't happen on the Normandy. In my first few plays, I
barely ever had any elevator talks...it frustrated the heck out of me.
Only when Kaidan was around would there be talks, and I generally felt
it was wasted on him.

Yeah, I can understand having a bunch of ideas and not having the words to get them all out on paper(or on the screen) quickly enough to capture them before you get frustrated. It's difficult.
I often get the urge to just skip far ahead. Heck, I plan on doing that in spots going forward, but sometimes I want to skip past important scenes to get to the next plot arc and that's just...frustrating.

It wasn't elevator talk. Wrex was telling Shep about this Asari commando he was supposed to take. Their chosen battleground was a space station. They went at each other for a week before she enabled self-destruct. He fled the station in time and he said whatever was left of the station was as small as a Turian nut.


I know the feeling but you might end up more frustrated / regret for skipping. Unless somehow, you can weave whatever is skipped into 'future' scenes.

[fluffywalrus]

Obsidian Gryphon wrote...

fluffywalrus wrote...

Was that one of the elevator scenes? Because I swear, that
discussion didn't happen on the Normandy. In my first few plays, I
barely ever had any elevator talks...it frustrated the heck out of me.
Only when Kaidan was around would there be talks, and I generally felt
it was wasted on him.

Yeah, I can understand having a bunch of ideas and not having the words to get them all out on paper(or on the screen) quickly enough to capture them before you get frustrated. It's difficult.
I often get the urge to just skip far ahead. Heck, I plan on doing that in spots going forward, but sometimes I want to skip past important scenes to get to the next plot arc and that's just...frustrating.

It wasn't elevator talk. Wrex was telling Shep about this Asari commando he was supposed to take. Their chosen battleground was a space station. They went at each other for a week before she enabled self-destruct. He fled the station in time and he said whatever was left of the station was as small as a Turian nut.


I know the feeling but you might end up more frustrated / regret for skipping. Unless somehow, you can weave whatever is skipped into 'future' scenes.

Ah, I remember that. I had in mind a scene where Wrex and Garrus were going over how badass they were, and subsequently putting each other down. I do recall the discussion over the asari (Aria, most likely), but I suppose i didn't put two and two together.

And yeah, I kind of feel bad for skipping, but I don't feel that I'd have enough material to cover across her military years. I mean, N7 training and the Akuze/Torfan/Elysium bits are certainly going to be included somewhere, as would be a discussion or two with Anderson, and a little training, but I'm not sure I could do it all justice and pace it well, when I'm trying to get to the Mass Effect timeline. I figure the major scenes can be covered, some flashbacks to other moments in the military, but my Shepard doesn't evolve much through her military career. More hardened and better trained, yeah, but personality-wise, she remains very similar to where she is at the end of her time on Earth.
I mean, part of me is yelling "You're skimping on military stuff and you shouldn't! It's important!". But the other part is nudging me toward including only the important details, and just going from there. I think I could weave it all in. I'm pretty sure, at least.

[Drussius]

fluffywalrus wrote...

Ugh been away all week and I'm stuck with my parent's horrible laptop. I honestly don't know how people can type on these things. So hard to pump a story out without my baby (read: my desktop, Daedalus). Tomorrow night can't come soon enough.

I type exclusively on a laptop. My desktop is for games/internet. My laptop is offline and never will be online, and I use it for anything I'm protective of. Like pictures of my family. And my writing.

fluffywalrus wrote...

Quick question: Does anyone here occasionally get impatient about the progression of their story?

Sometimes, yes. I initially estimated that my story would end up at about fifteen chapters or so. However, since I'm five in and far behind where I expected to be by then, I am starting to get impatient. I refuse to cut out detail that I feel is important to the story for the sake of my impatience, but I hope it doesn't take long to get to where I hoped to be by now.

In my case, however, it's more about the fear that I'll have to cancel my internet before I finish. I am really trying to power through the whole story before that happens. And doing my best not to let my writing suffer for it. But I really do need to stop the revisions and get back to working on new material...

[fluffywalrus]

Mr.BlazenGlazen wrote...

So uh, anyone look at my new chapter yet? I saw some mistakes and I'll fix it later, but I hope it's good for the reader's eye.

I think the last two chapters have been rather solid. Garrus' sense of duty came through well, and this recent chapter's moments with Tali and Shep were done quite well. Tali's remark re: her father's death was spot on.

[Obsidian Gryphon]

Mr.BlazenGlazen wrote...

So uh, anyone look at my new chapter yet? I saw some mistakes and I'll fix it later, but I hope it's good for the reader's eye.

Tentatively... spelling errors abounded. Could use some recontruction for several sentences as they sounded stiff.

Example.  

The apparitions stared back at him with a sorrowful expression. Both of them were victims of this terrible reaper war in their own ways.

The apparitions stared back at him with sorrowful expressions, victims of this terrible reaper war with inflicted horrors no one could posssibly have imagined.

erm... just suggestions.

Modifié par Obsidian Gryphon, 17 juillet 2012 - 01:45 .