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[lillitheris]

^ I think ‘not being qualified’ probably scares a lot of people off… the thing is, you don’t need to be.

If you’re a reader, your experience is exactly as valid as anyone else’s. Someone might be able to articulate the problems better—and possibly predict them better—but they can’t really detect them any better.

Consider an analogy: just because you’re not a chef, are you unqualified to complain about food at a restaurant?

If you, as a reader, don’t feel there is a problem, then there isn’t one for you. Conversely, if you do feel there is something wrong, then there is. For you, at least. So, say so. The author will (should) figure out what to do about it, if anything.

[noxiuniversitas1]

Hello guys,

Just dropping in to apologise for not being able to read and review your work recently - Meggers, fluffy and Drussius, especially - and respond to reviews. Life's been a bit manic (moving out of the country in a week or so), and... my PC crashed. I promise I will get to unread PMs/stories/reviews asap... even if it's only in August! Ah... thought I'd better pop in and say that as the promised waffle cones and pitchforks have started appearing in my inbox... especially after the latest chapter of Uncommon Bonds.

Best wishes,
Jen

[fluffywalrus]

noxiuniversitas1 wrote...

Hello guys,

Just dropping in to apologise for not being able to read and review your work recently - Meggers, fluffy and Drussius, especially - and respond to reviews. Life's been a bit manic (moving out of the country in a week or so), and... my PC crashed. I promise I will get to unread PMs/stories/reviews asap... even if it's only in August! Ah... thought I'd better pop in and say that as the promised waffle cones and pitchforks have started appearing in my inbox... especially after the latest chapter of Uncommon Bonds.

Best wishes,
Jen

Oh don't even worry about it, you've got a lot on your hands at the moment. Moving out of the country! That's exciting (and probably more than a little stressful)! Your computer crashing doesn't help there, either, so certainly take your time, and I hope some TLC finds its way to your PC

And that tayg does like to rile up the viewership Luckily I've eaten all my waffle cones, they're much better for eating with ice cream after a good run than protesting with.

[lillitheris]

Here’s hoping it’s an intracontinental move! Intercontinental is pretty terrible in my experience, no matter how much you pay people to handle all the details that can be handled for you

[Drussius]

noxiuniversitas1 wrote...

Hello guys,

Just dropping in to apologise for not being able to read and review your work recently - Meggers, fluffy and Drussius, especially - and respond to reviews. Life's been a bit manic (moving out of the country in a week or so), and... my PC crashed. I promise I will get to unread PMs/stories/reviews asap... even if it's only in August! Ah... thought I'd better pop in and say that as the promised waffle cones and pitchforks have started appearing in my inbox... especially after the latest chapter of Uncommon Bonds.

Best wishes,
Jen

Take your time and concentrate on the move. I hope that it's relatively hassle-free. Fluffy convinced me to put my pitchfork away pages ago, and luckily for you, my attempts at using waffle-cones as part of a revolt are woefully inept. I tend to eat it (and the ice cream) before I can threaten anyone with it. I think you're safe


For the topic of reviews: I point out grammatical errors that stand out to me in an extraordinary way, but if there are only minor ones that I spot and forget about by the time I'm done reading, I'll just mention that I spotted a few grammatical errors. I would point out things that I felt were out of character for an established persona if I spotted them (if someone had Liara start using profanity, for example), but it hasn't happened so far in the stories I've read. However, the one thing I would never do is criticize someone's overall plot. I freely compliment the plot if I like it, but I just could never bring myself to attack someone's plot. I would point out a plot hole that might benefit from closing, but I'd only do that in PM.

[hot_heart]

Icyflare wrote...
Anyways, back on thread. Are you guys ever hesitant about what to comment on when leaving a review? I mean, I'm not a writing expert or even a lit teacher, so I can't feel justified when I go through a fellow writer's work and start tearing it apart like I want to sometimes. I can spot what doesn't work for me and what wouldn't work as a submission to a writing class, but at times, I don't know if I want to change something because I don't like the writing style or if it actually needs to be change.

The way I see it, no one is another's teacher or a lit professor (unless they are, but then why are they reading fanfic...). I have no real background in prose, only screenwriting, and I wouldn't pretend to be an expert so I will just offer up any suggestions or my opinion.

I'm fully aware that I may be wrong or a certain change does not feel natural for the writer, but at least you've made them aware of the possibility of an issue. For example, I spent a long time going through Drussius' first chapter, pointing out things here and there, suggesting changes. In the end, he took notice of certain ones and improved on them in his own style, and probably quite rightfully ignored others. Though I still think a prototype engine project needs a name.

[Drussius]

hot_heart wrote...

Icyflare wrote...
Anyways, back on thread. Are you guys ever hesitant about what to comment on when leaving a review? I mean, I'm not a writing expert or even a lit teacher, so I can't feel justified when I go through a fellow writer's work and start tearing it apart like I want to sometimes. I can spot what doesn't work for me and what wouldn't work as a submission to a writing class, but at times, I don't know if I want to change something because I don't like the writing style or if it actually needs to be change.

The way I see it, no one is another's teacher or a lit professor (unless they are, but then why are they reading fanfic...). I have no real background in prose, only screenwriting, and I wouldn't pretend to be an expert so I will just offer up any suggestions or my opinion.

I'm fully aware that I may be wrong or a certain change does not feel natural for the writer, but at least you've made them aware of the possibility of an issue. For example, I spent a long time going through Drussius' first chapter, pointing out things here and there, suggesting changes. In the end, he took notice of certain ones and improved on them in his own style, and probably quite rightfully ignored others. Though I still think a prototype engine project needs a name.

It has one! But saying "prototype engine project" is easier than "Project X1871152 Delta!"

[Drussius]

Actually, it was just one of those things I didn't think was necessary to name, since the name would probably never be mentioned again.


Edit: Different subject, but I just saw another post in a separate thread that mentioned someone asked for advice here and was ignored. He seems (rightfully) put off by the fact. But I don't even remember seeing that post. Did I miss it somewhere?

I would never tell another writer what to write (or even suggest what I wanted them to write), but I would have at least said welcome if I had seen it. Did someone else see this? If so, how many pages back? So I can go find out why I missed it...

Modifié par Drussius, 17 juillet 2012 - 03:56 .

[hot_heart]

Surely they'd have a shorthand name when referring to it in speech though! It just sounded odd to my ears.

[Drussius]

hot_heart wrote...

Surely they'd have a shorthand name when referring to it in speech though! It just sounded odd to my ears.

No, no. You're absolutely right, there probably should have been some sort of shorthand name for it. Instead of specifically naming it, I should have probably shortened it to something more generic, like "the prototype" or "the project". Might sound a little more natural that way.

[hot_heart]

See, folks? In other cases, you just harass the author until they give in.

[lillitheris]

Drussius wrote...

I would never tell another writer what to write (or even suggest what I wanted them to write), but I would have at least said welcome if I had seen it. Did someone else see this? If so, how many pages back? So I can go find out why I missed it...

Previous page. Asynchronous just doesn’t work for some.

…

Project Magnificient Wings of Furious Fire is a go.

[lillitheris]

…And to answer:

Rick Lewis wrote...

Writing my own Fanfiction about the adventures of Krogan Battlemaster and his N7 Spec Ops squadmates during the Reaper War and aftermath. My question is simple. What would you (The Fan) like to see in the story? Please quote this post during a reply and I'll take some notes on what we seem to be lacking in the fan service department. Thanks in advance!

I’d like to see a good story. And an explanation why the N7 would team up with a krogan.

[Spiritwolf1]

Drussius wrote...

Edit: Different subject, but I just saw another post in a separate thread that mentioned someone asked for advice here and was ignored. He seems (rightfully) put off by the fact. But I don't even remember seeing that post. Did I miss it somewhere?

I would never tell another writer what to write (or even suggest what I wanted them to write), but I would have at least said welcome if I had seen it. Did someone else see this? If so, how many pages back? So I can go find out why I missed it...

Your a tough bunch to break in with. I mean advise is mostly offered when asked but I think that guy wanted us to write the story for him.

[Drussius]

Ah. I see why I missed it now. Still, epic fail on my part. I had greeted every new writer posting here since I joined the thread. Now my record is tarnished. If Rick ever happens to return to the thread, I apologize, man. Good luck on the story. Krogan are always fun to read about. And like lill, I look forward to seeing how one falls in with an N7 squad.

[dpMeggers]

lillitheris wrote...

…And to answer:

Rick Lewis wrote...

Writing my own Fanfiction about the adventures of Krogan Battlemaster and his N7 Spec Ops squadmates during the Reaper War and aftermath. My question is simple. What would you (The Fan) like to see in the story? Please quote this post during a reply and I'll take some notes on what we seem to be lacking in the fan service department. Thanks in advance!

I’d like to see a good story. And an explanation why the N7 would team up with a krogan.

I think it's like the multiplayer N7 Spec Ops, all multispecies and what not. 

I think I'm going to go apologize in his thread. Don't have any advice to offer, but there we are.

[Obsidian Gryphon]

Tis 13 hours since his post, not even a day or a mth. He could have simple said; hey guys, really need some input here or something like that.

I did overlook his post, however.

*prop eyes open with matchsticks*

[Icyflare]

hot_heart wrote...

See, folks? In other cases, you just harass the author until they give in.

*scribbles madly* Harrass....author....

Regarding Rick's post, I had seen it but couldn't offer anything to the idea of a krogan with his N7 team mates =/ I just thought others could offer better answers than "No clue. Good luck".

[Drussius]

Icyflare wrote...

hot_heart wrote...

See, folks? In other cases, you just harass the author until they give in.

*scribbles madly* Harrass....author....

Regarding Rick's post, I had seen it but couldn't offer anything to the idea of a krogan with his N7 team mates =/ I just thought others could offer better answers than "No clue. Good luck".

I missed his post, but unfortunately even if I had seen it, that would have been my response too. I make it a point not to try to influence the story other people are writing. Besides, maybe I'm selfish, but if I had a great plot idea, I'd write it myself. I could offer opinions on a plot that other people ask for my opinion on, but I'd keep my story ideas for myself. And it was an oddly-worded request, as was pointed out previously.

Modifié par Drussius, 17 juillet 2012 - 05:49 .

[Mr.BlazenGlazen]

So does anyone else like to comment on my new chapter? Outward movement

[Drussius]

Mr.BlazenGlazen wrote...

So does anyone else like to comment on my new chapter? Outward movement

I will definitely comment when I read it, but I haven't gotten to your story yet. There are a lot of great writers in this thread and a lot of great stories. It's taking time to get through them all as a relative newcomer.

[Drussius]

I have a question for people familiar with FF.net...

When I published my first chapter, I never saw any option to give my chapter a name in the dropdown box (come to think of it, there ISN'T a dropdown box). Is this an option that only shows up once there are at least two chapters published? If not, where would I find it?

[dpMeggers]

Drussius wrote...

I have a question for people familiar with FF.net...

When I published my first chapter, I never saw any option to give my chapter a name in the dropdown box (come to think of it, there ISN'T a dropdown box). Is this an option that only shows up once there are at least two chapters published? If not, where would I find it?

From the page that shows up when you click on your name in the top right hand corner.

Left Sidebar: 2nd option is Publish
Under Publish: Manage Stories -> Click on the title of the story, that'll take you to an "Editing Story" page
Top of page will be 4 options: option 2 is Content/Chapters you want that
Under Content/Chapters you'll see all the chapters in the story, click edit and the chapter title will be editable.

Hope those instructions make sense... 

Modifié par dpMeggers, 17 juillet 2012 - 06:01 .

[Drussius]

dpMeggers wrote...

Drussius wrote...

I have a question for people familiar with FF.net...

When I published my first chapter, I never saw any option to give my chapter a name in the dropdown box (come to think of it, there ISN'T a dropdown box). Is this an option that only shows up once there are at least two chapters published? If not, where would I find it?

From the page that shows up when you click on your name in the top right hand corner.

Left Sidebar: 2nd option is Publish
Under Publish: Manage Stories -> Click on the title of the story, that'll take you to an "Editing Story" page
Top of page will be 4 options: option 2 is Content/Chapters you want that
Under Content/Chapters you'll see all the chapters in the story, click edit and the chapter title will be editable.

Hope those instructions make sense... 

Got it. Thank you. I saw that edit option, but I assumed that was for editing the content of the chapter, not the title itself. That's what I get for assuming anything without trying it. Much appreciated!

[Drussius]

And now, a question of characterization that I'd like some opinions on:

I have a scene involving a conversation with a volus. It starts with a line currently written like this:

"Greetings, Thessia-clan. You... must be Miss Nisaria," the volus greeted her, his statement broken by the hiss of his suit's breathing apparatus when he paused for breath.

After that, I keep inserting the "..." for the pauses in his speech, because it was the only way I could come up with to illustrate the way the volus always spoke in the game. But I'm not sure it conveys the right image or not. Does it work like that? Should I even bother? Is there a clearer way to highlight volus speech mannerisms? Thoughts?

Edited: Because for some reason it removed all my line breaks! Now they're back...

Modifié par Drussius, 17 juillet 2012 - 06:11 .