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[Mr.BlazenGlazen]

MacNasty wrote...

Mr.BlazenGlazen wrote...

So, any thoughts on my new chapter? It took me a few days to write that. Was having time trying to figure out what other characters like Wrex and Grunt would say, so I kind of winged it.

I'll check it out. Might wait until tomorrow (technically today) though. Hope you don't mind.

No problems man. I kind of suggest that you start in the earlier chapters so you kind of know what's going on.

[fluffywalrus]

Mr.BlazenGlazen wrote...

So, any thoughts on my new chapter? It took me a few days to write that. Was having time trying to figure out what other characters like Wrex and Grunt would say, so I kind of winged it.

R&R'ed on FFnet

The Wrex and Grunt dialogue was pretty good, but Wrex seemed just a tad bit off. And Grunt  is normally VERY concise with his words. I think his dialogue was fine, but it could have been a bit more gruff and concise. Either way, the dialogue worked, it just didn't always line up. It's hard writing Krogan sometimes.

[Mavqt]

Hey, first time on this thread. *waves* I was wondering if I could get some constructive criticism on my fic, In example, inconsistencies, spelling errors, etc etc.

Note; it's not 100% following the canon. So some things mite appear off. Then again it can't exactly be following the canon, since it takes place before ME1.

My sig for the link.

[lillitheris]

Thanks for the thoughts on dreams!

…

Summer vacations definitely seem to be in full swing, based on recent trends.

…

Noticed a silly error I’d made…I accidentally flipped my day lengths in the last chapter, had to change them around.

That got me thinking, though…All the planets have a day as long or longer than Earth’s, but the Citadel—and by extension, the Council—operates in a 20-hour cycle. Each species may or may not adhere to this on their own ships, but perhaps not for co-ordination.

I don’t recall much discussion about the time issue. I have a vague recollection that the Citadel time acted as the galactic standard…but I don’t remember where that is stated, if anywhere.

Now, additionally, the ‘20 hours’ of the Citadel need not be hours, it could be units of time. So it could, for example, be 20 units of 180 Earth minutes. I’d prefer to handle it that way, but I wonder if it’d get confusing. The absolute times aren’t that important, after all, only the relative ones. Bleh.

Modifié par lillitheris, 23 juillet 2012 - 08:54 .

[LanceSolous13]

I thought the Citadel worked in 18 Hour days with 6 hours of night? I could have sworn this came up several pages ago.

[Drussius]

lillitheris wrote...

Thanks for the thoughts on dreams!

…

Summer vacations definitely seem to be in full swing, based on recent trends.

…

Noticed a silly error I’d made…I accidentally flipped my day lengths in the last chapter, had to change them around.

That got me thinking, though…All the planets have a day as long or longer than Earth’s, but the Citadel—and by extension, the Council—operates in a 20-hour cycle. Each species may or may not adhere to this on their own ships, but perhaps not for co-ordination.

I don’t recall much discussion about the time issue. I have a vague recollection that the Citadel time acted as the galactic standard…but I don’t remember where that is stated, if anywhere.

Now, additionally, the ‘20 hours’ of the Citadel need not be hours, it could be units of time. So it could, for example, be 20 units of 180 Earth minutes. I’d prefer to handle it that way, but I wonder if it’d get confusing. The absolute times aren’t that important, after all, only the relative ones. Bleh.

I believe the Codex said that the galactic standard time was 20 hour days, but 100 minute hours. I'll see if I can find the exact quote to confirm, but I am 99% positive of that one.

[lillitheris]

LanceSolous13 wrote...

I thought the Citadel worked in 18 Hour days with 6 hours of night? I could have sworn this came up several pages ago.

No, unfortunately not…

“The Presidium is monitored by a Virtual Intelligence named Avina,
and, unlike the Wards, incorporates an artificial 20-hour day schedule:
lights are dimmed, and the holographic "sky" darkened, for 6 of the 20
hours, imitating the familiar day-night cycle.”

…

Aha, here: “Galactic Standard Time strongly resembles Decimal Time,
a representation of time of day briefly utilised in Revolutionary
France. The only major difference between the two is that one GSD
(Galactic Standard Day) includes twenty hours, whilst one day in Decimal
Time only has ten. Thus a second in Decimal Time is only approximately
1.16 times as long as a Terran Coordinated Universal second”

Which, in essence, means that it’s a pointless distinction

It does simplify things a little, though.

Modifié par lillitheris, 23 juillet 2012 - 09:07 .

[Drussius]

From the Mass Effect wiki:

According to Mass Effect: Revelation, the common time used in Citadel Space is different to human Coordinated Universal Time in that:
■A Galactic Standard Day comprises 20 hours.
■Each Hour comprises 100 minutes.
■Each Minute comprises 100 seconds.
■Each second is half as long as a human second.

As a result, a twenty-hour Galactic Standard Day is 15.7% longer than a standard twenty-four hour Terran Coordinated Universal day.

[lillitheris]

^ Yes, excellent. So, while extremely convenient for humans, it doesn’t really cause any changes; I’ll simply ‘translate’ everything into Earth reckoning.

I do have to redo a bit of conversation, though.

[Drussius]

It came up when I was looking into time in relation to various races. Off the top of my head, I think the standard day on Thessia is like 37.5 hours (or around there), so I was forced to assume that if asari spend roughly equivalent percentages of their day awake and asleep as humans do, then the average asari is active for around 25 hours and sleeps for 12.5...

[xIxDarkWolfxIx]

I've decided to re-do my story to a degree. I think I should use the system of One Chapter, per story. That means I currently have 1 1/2 chapters. I was thinking of spending the next week writing, then editing the chapters I currently have. Or should I delete a few and add them as I go?

Chapter 1: Normandy
Chapter 2: Omega
Chapter 3: "It's a surprise"
Chapter 4: "It's a surprise"
Chapter 5: "Unknown"

[lillitheris]

Drussius wrote...

It came up when I was looking into time in relation to various races. Off the top of my head, I think the standard day on Thessia is like 37.5 hours (or around there), so I was forced to assume that if asari spend roughly equivalent percentages of their day awake and asleep as humans do, then the average asari is active for around 25 hours and sleeps for 12.5...

Thessia is 27.6 hours, I just looked it up a while ago—the remark about Liara needing more sleep than humans

A tiny edit later, I think this’ll do.

"It's strange to be on a planet that actually lives very close to the Galactic Time cycle," the turian grumbled as the pair had exhausted the business at hand and approached the terminus of the street, a small square or park expanding into a walkway along the river that went through the city. "It should be easier, but somehow the lack of time drift just gets me constantly."

[LanceSolous13]

So....

1 GSD Second = 1.5 Human Seconds
1 GSD Min (100 GSD Seconds) = 1.6 Human Mins
1 GSD Hour (100 GSD Mins) = 1.6 Human Hours
1 GSD Day (20 GSD Hours) = .8 Human Days?

...I think I'm doing this wrong. *facepalm* Math was never my strong suit.

[Drussius]

lillitheris wrote...

Drussius wrote...

It came up when I was looking into time in relation to various races. Off the top of my head, I think the standard day on Thessia is like 37.5 hours (or around there), so I was forced to assume that if asari spend roughly equivalent percentages of their day awake and asleep as humans do, then the average asari is active for around 25 hours and sleeps for 12.5...

Thessia is 27.6 hours, I just looked it up a while ago—the remark about Liara needing more sleep than humans

A tiny edit later, I think this’ll do.

"It's strange to be on a planet that actually lives very close to the Galactic Time cycle," the turian grumbled as the pair had exhausted the business at hand and approached the terminus of the street, a small square or park expanding into a walkway along the river that went through the city. "It should be easier, but somehow the lack of time drift just gets me constantly."

Yup. I was mixing it up with Terra Nova, which I needed to know for my story. 37.3 hours. That's gotta be weird for humans to live with. Sort of like working swing shift in real life. You'd be active at different times of day from week to week.

[lillitheris]

LanceSolous13 wrote...

So....

1 GSD Second = 1.5 Human Seconds
1 GSD Min (100 GSD Seconds) = 1.6 Human Mins
1 GSD Hour (100 GSD Mins) = 1.6 Human Hours
1 GSD Day (20 GSD Hours) = .8 Human Days?

...I think I'm doing this wrong. *facepalm* Math was never my strong suit.

They forgot to make it sensible.

1 GST Day = 1 day = 86,400 seconds.
1 GST Hour = 1/20 day = 4320 seconds = 72 minutes
1 GST Minute = GSTH/100 = 43.2 seconds
1 GST Second = GSTM/100 = 0.432 seconds.

[LanceSolous13]

Oy vey. *rubs temples*

[lillitheris]

^ And this is why it’s better to translate it to regular time—as good an idea as decimal time and Swatch time are, they’re not used enough for the trouble.

[zapphoman24]

lillitheris wrote...

LanceSolous13 wrote...

I thought the Citadel worked in 18 Hour days with 6 hours of night? I could have sworn this came up several pages ago.

No, unfortunately not…

“The Presidium is monitored by a Virtual Intelligence named Avina,
and, unlike the Wards, incorporates an artificial 20-hour day schedule:
lights are dimmed, and the holographic "sky" darkened, for 6 of the 20
hours, imitating the familiar day-night cycle.”

…

Aha, here: “Galactic Standard Time strongly resembles Decimal Time,
a representation of time of day briefly utilised in Revolutionary
France. The only major difference between the two is that one GSD
(Galactic Standard Day) includes twenty hours, whilst one day in Decimal
Time only has ten. Thus a second in Decimal Time is only approximately
1.16 times as long as a Terran Coordinated Universal second”

Which, in essence, means that it’s a pointless distinction

It does simplify things a little, though.

Makes one wonder what the Citadel looks like at night. I don't think they've ever shown it.

[lillitheris]

So many missed opportunities…

[Obsidian Gryphon]

xIxDarkWolfxIx wrote...

I've decided to re-do my story to a degree. I think I should use the system of One Chapter, per story. That means I currently have 1 1/2 chapters. I was thinking of spending the next week writing, then editing the chapters I currently have. Or should I delete a few and add them as I go?

Chapter 1: Normandy
Chapter 2: Omega
Chapter 3: "It's a surprise"
Chapter 4: "It's a surprise"
Chapter 5: "Unknown"

Delete what? The chapters? Better to keep and worked at them again.

[xIxDarkWolfxIx]

Obsidian Gryphon wrote...

xIxDarkWolfxIx wrote...

I've decided to re-do my story to a degree. I think I should use the system of One Chapter, per story. That means I currently have 1 1/2 chapters. I was thinking of spending the next week writing, then editing the chapters I currently have. Or should I delete a few and add them as I go?

Chapter 1: Normandy
Chapter 2: Omega
Chapter 3: "It's a surprise"
Chapter 4: "It's a surprise"
Chapter 5: "Unknown"

Delete what? The chapters? Better to keep and worked at them again.

I'm not deleting them, don't worry. 
I have put Chapters 1, 2 and 3 together into a single chapter. This not only increases the length of the chapter but also keeps the chapter following the same "mini" story arc aboard the Normandy. The following chapter, is made up of Chapter 4, 5 and 6, which take place predominatly on Omega. 
Basically I've put them together to form a Chapter per mission. 

[LanceSolous13]

Well, I certainly question what the Wards/Arms Cities look like at night considering they don't have a computer running the cycles and, since the Citadel isn't a planet, is probably day all the time. The Precidium is probably easily imaginable in what it looks like but I wonder if they have a "Transition" Sunset Phase or if it goes straight into night. I wonder if the fountains light up too.

[Obsidian Gryphon]

LanceSolous13 wrote...

Well, I certainly question what the Wards/Arms Cities look like at night considering they don't have a computer running the cycles and, since the Citadel isn't a planet, is probably day all the time. The Precidium is probably easily imaginable in what it looks like but I wonder if they have a "Transition" Sunset Phase or if it goes straight into night. I wonder if the fountains light up too.

Night, space, bright lights, water ... sounds dreamy and romantic.   Actually, why not? It would make the Presidium that much more unqiue from the other wards. Exclusive!

Maybe they even hold festivals, etc at some special square for such occasions.

Modifié par Obsidian Gryphon, 23 juillet 2012 - 12:12 .

[Obsidian Gryphon]

xIxDarkWolfxIx wrote...
I'm not deleting them, don't worry. 
I have put Chapters 1, 2 and 3 together into a single chapter. This not only increases the length of the chapter but also keeps the chapter following the same "mini" story arc aboard the Normandy. The following chapter, is made up of Chapter 4, 5 and 6, which take place predominatly on Omega. 
Basically I've put them together to form a Chapter per mission. 

Yep, it sounds better.  

[xIxDarkWolfxIx]

Well I've just finished Chapter 2. Please read and enjoy. Any feedback will be appreciated. =)

If you are wondering how it can be Chapter 2, when I have completed 5 chapters previously, it is because I have merged them together. The system now follows a chapter, per story. If that makes sence.

Link in my signature. 

Modifié par xIxDarkWolfxIx, 23 juillet 2012 - 02:09 .