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[lillitheris]

This isn’t really an issue yet, but I want to make sure it won’t become one: I don’t want to see advertisements for everyone’s every chapter here.

Occasionally is fine, and of course if you’re starting/finishing a story, coming back from a longer hiatus, things like that. Input on excerpts and so on is fine.

My recommendation is to start a thread (which you can also mention, though I suspect most of us view the forum often anyway), and post updates there for the most part.

[Mr.BlazenGlazen]

fluffywalrus wrote...

Mr.BlazenGlazen wrote...

So, any thoughts on my new chapter? It took me a few days to write that. Was having time trying to figure out what other characters like Wrex and Grunt would say, so I kind of winged it.

R&R'ed on FFnet

The Wrex and Grunt dialogue was pretty good, but Wrex seemed just a tad bit off. And Grunt  is normally VERY concise with his words. I think his dialogue was fine, but it could have been a bit more gruff and concise. Either way, the dialogue worked, it just didn't always line up. It's hard writing Krogan sometimes.

Yeah, I need to watch and reread the character's dialogue in the game. I just wasn't really sure what exactly they'd say. I'm sort of having trouble on how to write Joker, Ashley, Zaeed, Kasumi, Samara, Raan and whatnot. One of the reasons why they haven't been introduced into the story yet...

[Mr.BlazenGlazen]

lillitheris wrote...

This isn’t really an issue yet, but I want to make sure it won’t become one: I don’t want to see advertisements for everyone’s every chapter here.

Occasionally is fine, and of course if you’re starting/finishing a story, coming back from a longer hiatus, things like that. Input on excerpts and so on is fine.

My recommendation is to start a thread (which you can also mention, though I suspect most of us view the forum often anyway), and post updates there for the most part.

Well...yeah. I admit that I'm guilty for advertising here. Though I link my chapters because I simply want feedback. And I do get feedback here, which is why I like linking my chapters here. I mean it is good to have your own thread for your story. But I'm kind of tooting my own horn there with no answer .

[fluffywalrus]

mavqt wrote...

Hey, first time on this thread. *waves* I was wondering if I could get some constructive criticism on my fic, In example, inconsistencies, spelling errors, etc etc.

Note; it's not 100% following the canon. So some things mite appear off. Then again it can't exactly be following the canon, since it takes place before ME1.

My sig for the link.

Oh hello!
I'm always up for a femshep origins story!
But I have a busy day. I'll check it out soon (I'll review on ffnet as Thedeadflag, fyi)

[xIxDarkWolfxIx]

lillitheris wrote...

This isn’t really an issue yet, but I want to make sure it won’t become one: I don’t want to see advertisements for everyone’s every chapter here.

Occasionally is fine, and of course if you’re starting/finishing a story, coming back from a longer hiatus, things like that. Input on excerpts and so on is fine.

My recommendation is to start a thread (which you can also mention, though I suspect most of us view the forum often anyway), and post updates there for the most part.

I'll settle it down now. Now I've got into the rhythm of things and understand how to accomplish what I want. I won't be so reliant on this thread. Maybe it is time to make my own. =)

[Mavqt]

fluffywalrus wrote...

mavqt wrote...

Hey, first time on this thread. *waves* I was wondering if I could get some constructive criticism on my fic, In example, inconsistencies, spelling errors, etc etc.

Note; it's not 100% following the canon. So some things mite appear off. Then again it can't exactly be following the canon, since it takes place before ME1.

My sig for the link.

Oh hello!
I'm always up for a femshep origins story!
But I have a busy day. I'll check it out soon (I'll review on ffnet as Thedeadflag, fyi)

Thank you in advanced.

[lillitheris]

^ It’s not a problem now, but it would be if 50 people were doing it

The summer vacation time does seem to be a bit bad for reviews—especially new ones—from what I can see from mine and a few of the ones I read regularly.

(Phone-typing, pardon brevity.)

[Seracen]

mavqt wrote...

Hey, first time on this thread. *waves* I was wondering if I could get some constructive criticism on my fic, In example, inconsistencies, spelling errors, etc etc.

Note; it's not 100% following the canon. So some things mite appear off. Then again it can't exactly be following the canon, since it takes place before ME1.

My sig for the link.

Welcome!  I play loose with canon myself, so as long as you make it your own, and it works for you, I figure "go nuts!"

As for what the Citadel looks like at night, I figure much the same as Illium would, considering the neon lights and brushed metal structures.  Consider the upper and lower wards in ME2, minus the backlighting from the "horizon" and increase the ambient...

[Spiritwolf1]

Gawd, finally Chapter 7 I swear I felt like I had Adhd writing that one. Write a line check out a song, write a paragraph, get some food, write a paragraph go out for a little while. White a sentence play a stupid Iphone game Etc. It took me forever. Anyone else have chapters like that

[MacNasty]

Spiritwolf1 wrote...

Gawd, finally Chapter 7 I swear I felt like I had Adhd writing that one. Write a line check out a song, write a paragraph, get some food, write a paragraph go out for a little while. White a sentence play a stupid Iphone game Etc. It took me forever. Anyone else have chapters like that

Yeah... I write a sentence, play a game. Write another one, play Guitar. Write another one, play another game. It's rather distracting. I'm still on the prologue too >.<

[Mr.BlazenGlazen]

Spiritwolf1 wrote...

Gawd, finally Chapter 7 I swear I felt like I had Adhd writing that one. Write a line check out a song, write a paragraph, get some food, write a paragraph go out for a little while. White a sentence play a stupid Iphone game Etc. It took me forever. Anyone else have chapters like that

This is pretty much me every time I write a chapter.

[lillitheris]

I have to say, having had a rather bad day—and just complaining about the lack of interaction recently—a gushy review really made me happy

Writing is its own reward…but I do love it when others like it too.

[Bahoogasmif]

amazing what an injection of awesome a good review can be isn't it?

[Mr.BlazenGlazen]

lillitheris wrote...

I have to say, having had a rather bad day—and just complaining about the lack of interaction recently—a gushy review really made me happy

Writing is its own reward…but I do love it when others like it too.

I always have moody days, so whenever I recieve /any/ type of feedback for my story it brightens up my mood. Whether that feedback comes from a review, a pm, or a post here on BSN. Which is why I always ask people here what they think of my story every time I write a chapter.

[lillitheris]

xIxDarkWolfxIx wrote...

I won't be so reliant on this thread.

Reliance isn’t bad!

…

@Bahoogasmif: Indeed.

[Mr.BlazenGlazen]

lillitheris wrote...

xIxDarkWolfxIx wrote...

I won't be so reliant on this thread.

Reliance isn’t bad!

…

@Bahoogasmif: Indeed.

The thread title says "Fanfic Writer's Support Group". I'd kind of assume that fanfic authors here would be somewhat reliant to get help and feedback from this thread.

[Seracen]

lillitheris wrote...

I have to say, having had a rather bad day—and just complaining about the lack of interaction recently—a gushy review really made me happy

Writing is its own reward…but I do love it when others like it too.

Hope you day gets better! 

Currently grappling with the romance aspect of my ME4 fic...admittedly a weak point for me.

Also, I find it difficult to kill off characters, as I don't want to do it cheaply for shock value, I want there to be meaning.  On the other hand, it's hard to kill someone I've spent so much work on developing.  It's like intentionally crashing a car I've been saving up to buy.

On the subject of romance in my fic:  if qualified, is it ridiculous to simply have 2 LI's for Shep that are okay with it? My reasoning being that they are traumatized from post-ME3, and with Shepard's borderline insanity, didn't really feel like losing what they'd gained.

My justification being that Liara seems okay with such a proposition in ME1, Jack's done these before, and that BW set up such potential relationships before in Jade Empire.

Also, I just couldn't decide between Jack and Liara for Male Shep.  (Or, when I get around to Fem Shep's fic, Thane and Liara...Thane getting the "Marauder Shields" treatment...)

PS: I think it's totally okay to rely on peers!  The more members in a support group (here or elsewhere) you have, the better! :happy:

Modifié par Seracen, 23 juillet 2012 - 09:14 .

[hot_heart]

Ha, this is going to sound weird (all my questions probably do) but can anyone identify any of the flora on the Presidium Commons? (Not 'dialogue trees'!)

It's all stuff native to Earth. Some look like birch trees, but I'm not too sure. You guys are always good for that sort of stuff.

Reference.

Modifié par hot_heart, 23 juillet 2012 - 09:22 .

[Mr.BlazenGlazen]

Well, this is just my own opinion. Even if you are able to write a "proper" 2 LI relationship, it's really hard for it not to look silly. I mean, if you are intending your story to be a little silly with some drama in it then I guess you can try to pull it off. But if you try to make it look serious, then you may run into some problems.

Again, just my opinion.

[TheMarshal]

I fell into a trap when I started writing the other day. I've managed about 1300 words on my new fic, but when I went back to it a few days later I started going through what I had already written and began padding things, fleshing out certain parts, flowering up the language, etc. The chapter is less than halfway complete, and already I'm working on polish rather than finishing up the content! ::sigh::

I think I need to start a new playthrough to reinvigorate my love for the game, which I feel has been waning since I finished the EC.

[hot_heart]

Mr.BlazenGlazen wrote...
Again, just my opinion. There's really no need to go spreading it around.

I always have to append that part.

[Tyrannosaurus Rex]

So I am writing my own fanfic right now I am finally done with chapter 1.

Usually I have a test reader to go through my unedited story, but he is currently offline.

So. Anybody willing to dare risk reading the first chapter of my fanfic? And provide feedback to it?

[Mr.BlazenGlazen]

Heh.

Anyways, I'm looking for someone to beta-read Mass Effect 3: Perspective for me. I can't catch all of my grammar and spelling mistakes by myself, so it would be great if there was someone that can help me out with that stuff.

Whenever I finish writing my chapter I'm always like "uggggh, I'm just going to submit it as is" and then I usually end up regretting it as I look over my writing.

[TheMarshal]

Mr.BlazenGlazen wrote...

Well, this is just my own opinion. Even if you are able to write a "proper" 2 LI relationship, it's really hard for it not to look silly. I mean, if you are intending your story to be a little silly with some drama in it then I guess you can try to pull it off. But if you try to make it look serious, then you may run into some problems.

Again, just my opinion.

I'm not going to disagree, since polyamorous relationships are terribly difficult to convey without it coming across as fantasy.  However, I've read precisely two so-called "harem" fics and one of them actually managed to pull it off well (Vie, by the.subverter), where everyone was well characterized and not everything worked perfectly right off the bat.

Modifié par TheMarshal, 23 juillet 2012 - 09:50 .

[Seracen]

Lizardviking wrote...

So I am writing my own fanfic right now I am finally done with chapter 1.

Usually I have a test reader to go through my unedited story, but he is currently offline.

So. Anybody willing to dare risk reading the first chapter of my fanfic? And provide feedback to it?

I head a read, and enjoyed it very much.  Barring a few grammatical errors, I only have one suggestion:

The sequence where TIM tells Shepard that he was lying, I personally might rephrase it, as TIM wouldn't really admit that he had completely lied to Shepard, especially if Shep were having doubts.

"Perhaps it was, but simply a lie of omission...we simply don't know what Dr. Tsoni's full involvement IS with the Shadow Broker.  Without that knowledge, I didn't want to send you into what may possibly be a trap.  However, it seems now that we don't have a choice..."

Sorry if I'm being too forward, I just wanted to tell you how I'd approcah it.  Take or leave the suggestion as you wish!

My favorite part of the chapter is how it explains the emotions behind what the characters are saying.  I'd not considered that Shep may be putting forth a facade to TIM, hiding what he was truly thinking.

EDIT: also, thanks guys for the feedback on my idea so far.  I think I'll just continue to write the chapters as they come, as I don't really deal with the romance aspect that often.  If my beta reader's aren't feeling it, I'll probably turn the polyamorous relationship into a love triangle instead...maybe I'll actually have them face off...then just different endings for the LI's...

@ TheMarshall: thanks for the reference!  Yeah, upon reading it, I see what you mean.  There was a bit of a hurdle before my mind was able to accept the scenario, although I enjoyed the story overall.

Modifié par Seracen, 23 juillet 2012 - 10:07 .