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[MacNasty]

Also, is it better to call them engineers, or something along the lines of tech specialists?

[Outlawstar15a2]

Seracen wrote...

hot_heart wrote...

OK, for my own purposes, how does everyone view the course of events for Sanctuary? This is assuming Miranda survived ME2, obviously.

It's guaranteed that I've probably missed some detail somewhere, and so multiple perspectives on it would be most useful. Thanks in advance!

I always figured that she'd been embedded, and in hiding, for a while.  I mean, the whole intel gathering thing suggested to me a longer, slower process.  Also, this provides an explanation as to why she's gone the whole darn game (barring those other times she's investigating, of course).

If she DID get there just before the Reaper invasion, I still surmise it's before Kai Leng, and she starts leaving the messages.

I then figure, if you warned Miranda, she's able to fend off Kai Leng reasonably succesfully, which prompts him to leave once he gets the data he needs; also explains Miranda's "scratch," as anything she got from a Reaper would likely look worse.

Orianna being there is a bit wierder for me.  I mean, She replaces Miranda, if Miranda is dead by ME3, so there's that.  I consider her to be locked up in a room somewhere by the father, then brought out when the Reapers arrive, and then we see the standoff at the end.

It's nice to see you to.  if you play multiplayer you can add my Origin ID: Outlawstar15a2 we could do a biotic tag team. I have a Fury, Justicar, and Adept as my primary biotics. And when is Mass Effect 3 gonna give me my Krogan Sentinel? It's the last character I need, lawlz.

[LanceSolous13]

Updated Mass Effect: Aftermath. I would suggest reading the first post as I've updated it with more information. The new chapter can be found at the bottom of the page.

[lillitheris]

MacNasty wrote...

Also, is it better to call them engineers, or something along the lines of tech specialists?

The official term would probably be Engineer, but I don’t doubt that ‘techie’ would be in common use.

[hot_heart]

Didn't really get a response from the Miranda fans (they are quick to derail...), but I've started work on some flashbacks to be included in my next chapter. Problem is, I'm a little unsure of them at the moment.

I've got a rough draft of one here and was looking for feedback. It's under 1k words, if that helps sway you. 

Initially, I was thinking of keeping things a little more vague and dreamlike (ending with present day Miranda waking up at the end) but I figured that makes the whole thing too convenient. Sort of like a very blunt foreshadowing vision. Otherwise, perhaps I could redraft it into past tense since it is a flashback?

My other main concern is that it goes a little over-the-top in the scenario and the characterisation of Lawson Sr.

Any feedback would be most helpful. Thanks in advance!

Modifié par hot_heart, 22 août 2012 - 10:58 .

[lillitheris]

hot_heart wrote...

Didn't really get a response from the Miranda fans (they are quick to derail...),

*cough* Sorry.

Let’s see…

[lillitheris]

OK…yes, I think it’s probably better to keep a proper flashback to have enough detail.

I do think that Henry’s a little overboard, but maybe in a different way…I always kind of saw him deluded enough that he didn’t really realize there was anything particularly strange about his methods. My take would be to reduce his adverserialness. Maybe.

I also think he can hire a higher-quality psycho merc. The ‘even the bad guy feels bad’ is a little on the nose, I think, regardless of whether you change Henry.

Other than that, I don’t see problems, I think it works well if you can tie the flashback in nicely. I don’t think moving it to past tense is necessary, although it would probably not hurt either. It would set it apart a little more, of course (like I use present tense for my flashbacks/dreams).

Modifié par lillitheris, 22 août 2012 - 11:29 .

[hot_heart]

Haha. You weren't involved this time. They are perfectly capable of completely random shifts in discussion all on their own.

And thanks for the input. I was definitely considering making Henry Lawson's portrayal a bit more subtle or restrained. Not too sure about the mercenary guy. I figured that Lawson Sr. wasn't going to hire someone completely ruthless in the first place, and that continually firing at a young teenager would seem a little too cruel and unnecessary.

I think part of the problem is wanting to have Henry snatch the rifle himself. My other thought was to have him grow impatient with the guy's momentary hesitation, and just take the gun for himself, firing almost immediately after. Makes it less like one of the possible Sanctuary scenarios at any rate.

Modifié par hot_heart, 22 août 2012 - 11:34 .

[lillitheris]

Keeping with my ‘oblivious Henry is oblivious’ theme, I don’t think he’d specifically hire a psycho. It’s just that nobody else would stay at his employ, or perform as well.

[hot_heart]

lillitheris wrote...
Keeping with my ‘oblivious Henry is oblivious’ theme, I don’t think he’d specifically hire a psycho. It’s just that nobody else would stay at his employ, or perform as well.

And that's why he'd cave and resign at that moment.

I think we'll just have to disagree on that point, but I have taken the feedback into consideration and have a way to make that particular bit not so 'obvious'.

[lillitheris]

Fair enough! I don’t really think any of it is a problem, should work fine.

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In other news, I should be writing…but am not. The next few chapters will be a lot of reunions with Shepard awake finally and, while I quite enjoy that, I’m trying to work out if I should inject some other scenes in the middle—and if so, which ones.

Modifié par lillitheris, 22 août 2012 - 12:14 .

[hot_heart]

lillitheris wrote...

Fair enough! I don’t really think any of it is a problem, should work fine.

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In other news, I should be writing…but am not. The next few chapters will be a lot of reunions with Shepard awake finally and, while I quite enjoy that, I’m trying to work out if I should inject some other scenes in the middle—and if so, which ones.

Yeah, thanks for the feedback! Has definitely helped improve it.

As for your own story, I'm afraid I'm not too caught up on it but I could see how it might be a bit daunting, and too samey, to have a long series of reunions (another reason why BioWare probably avoided it) or some sort of 'reunion tour'. Is your Shepard getting right back into the action?

Probably want some other stuff going on. Maybe some tension and some "I wish we could have reunited under happier circumstances"-type sitiations.

[Spiritwolf1]

Heh, Im kinda in the same boat. My Shep just realized who she was, but since she thinks Liara is in danger shes about to jump right back into the action. I dont plan on a reunion tour though. Miradna rescued her so that one is over and of course the reunion with Liara, but the other may come as they appear in the story, if they do.

[Spiritwolf1]

I need help from someone about something real important to my story its sceincisy and techy and Im not good at that and I need someone who knows more about science to give me a hand

[Drussius]

I don't have any formal science training, but I love to think about how things work. PM me your issue and maybe I can offer some insight. I can't promise anything, but I will offer any advice I can.

[Spiritwolf1]

Thanks Dru, idea sent

[hot_heart]

I'd post it in here. I may not be able to help, but I know a few people in here (Drussius being one) who are fairly knowledgable and can at least reason things out, if not outright form an explanation.

[lillitheris]

Spiritwolf1 wrote...

I need help from someone about something real important to my story its sceincisy and techy and Im not good at that and I need someone who knows more about science to give me a hand

Too long/secret to just post here, I take it? I can’t promise I’ll have time 'til Friday…but, then again, I’ve still not started writing yet, either.

[Spiritwolf1]

Didn't want to hang it here cause there is one person who actually reads my story that come here.

[lillitheris]

Understandable!

[YurigirlzCrush]

I have a silly little question. would people still wear eyeglasses in the ME universe? or would simple things like bad eyesight probably be corrected with gene therapy or some new surgical tech?

[Spiritwolf1]

I dont recal anyone in the game wearing glasses. I would think that corrective surgery could take care of it.

[Lilivati]

YurigirlzCrush wrote...

I have a silly little question. would people still wear eyeglasses in the ME universe? or would simple things like bad eyesight probably be corrected with gene therapy or some new surgical tech?

I think, technically, that kind of problem would be fixed in this universe and glasses would be obsolete.

That said, I've still seen glasses used plenty of times.  

It's one of those detail inference things that some people are going to care about a lot, and others won't.

[YurigirlzCrush]

I don't remember seeing anyone with glasses either. and they do mention routine gene therapy in utero in one of the games i think. but I was visualizing a character in my head and for some reason thought of her wearing glasses. made me wonder if anyone actually would if gene therapy is routine.

[MacNasty]

 Sorry about all the questions in relation to Quarians, but there's a lot to ask . Just an awkard part I'm having a little trouble getting around. When you mention a Quarian do you usually do the full name (like Tal'Zorah) or the first (Tali) or the last (Reegar). I've heard all three across the games, and I was wondering about that. It just seems to me to fit better for Quarians with one syllable first names to go by their last names, while those with two go by their first. Maybe it's just me