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[MrStoob]

I'll do a new post... (when do you damn Canadians come online anyway? Too busy playing 'hockey in the winter'? hehe)

Anyhoo, I'm just posting to express my joy at completing (it's done! No, Misery, no do overs!) my main FF. It was a long last chapter and I was quite happy with the way I wrote it. Yay! and so on.

Edit: 6000 posts.  Another yay!   <3

Modifié par MrStoob, 17 janvier 2013 - 06:16 .

[AustereLemur799]

Busting through writer's block - do you fancy sharing your good fortune?

Thanks by the way to everyone who replied to my questions last week (and whenever); I know that I'm not around, and I also tend to run away from stuff on here and in my own life. All I can say is thanks for putting up with my weekly bouts of crap interrupting the peace of the thread.

I have a couple of questions, if you guys would be so kind. I know that Saren displays biotics in ME1 - does anyone know if he was born with biotics, and therefore served in turian cabals, or if his biotics werere a result of Reaper intervention during his relationship with Sovereign?

Also, I could be completely wrong here. When I first joined FFN, I was really nervous and edgy about a lot of their rules. I think that I read that you can't publish author's notes in a separate chapter, as it were. Is this true?

On my work, I include the foreword with the prologue (first chapter). Is there a rule against this?

It's just that I'm about to put up a new story, but I have a lot of author's notes that maybe shouldn't be included in the prologue. A03 is different because it allows you notes apart from your main story.

I would be grateful for any thoughts on this. Thanks also for putting up with me. Good to see that everyone is getting on well.

Modifié par AustereLemur799, 17 janvier 2013 - 09:58 .

[Tyrannosaurus Rex]

So I have pretty much finally completed my first complete draft of my new story. It is divided into 5 chapters and is roughly 15000 words in total. I would be happy if anybody would like to give it a test-read.

--

Chapter 1:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/211152/

Chapter 2:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/210350/

Chapter 3:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/218312/

Chapter 4:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/225927/

Chapter 5:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/228153/

--

Be warned though, it is a Liara/Maleshep story where I give my own take on the Illium cameo in the ME2-maingame, so it is most likely not for everbody.

Modifié par Lizardviking, 17 janvier 2013 - 10:13 .

[MrStoob]

Lizardviking wrote...

So I have pretty much finally completed my first complete draft of my new story. It is divided into 5 chapters and is roughly 15000 words in total. I would be happy if anybody would like to give it a test-read.

--

Chapter 1:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/211152/

Chapter 2:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/210350/

Chapter 3:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/218312/

Chapter 4:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/225927/

Chapter 5:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/228153/

--

Be warned though, it is a Liara/Maleshep story where I give my own take on the Illium cameo in the ME2-maingame, so it is most likely not for everbody.

Nice.  Posted a comment on the page.

[Obsidian Gryphon]

AustereLemur799 wrote...

I have a couple of questions, if you guys would be so kind. I know that Saren displays biotics in ME1 - does anyone know if he was born with biotics, and therefore served in turian cabals, or if his biotics werere a result of Reaper intervention during his relationship with Sovereign?

 

There's no mention of either but he might be born with it and displayed such potential that he was kicked into service after one year of training. His cybernetic implants from Sovereign could have enhanced his biotics. But then, it can go either way.

[Tyrannosaurus Rex]

MrStoob wrote...

Lizardviking wrote...

So I have pretty much finally completed my first complete draft of my new story. It is divided into 5 chapters and is roughly 15000 words in total. I would be happy if anybody would like to give it a test-read.

--

Chapter 1:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/211152/

Chapter 2:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/210350/

Chapter 3:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/218312/

Chapter 4:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/225927/

Chapter 5:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/228153/

--

Be warned though, it is a Liara/Maleshep story where I give my own take on the Illium cameo in the ME2-maingame, so it is most likely not for everbody.

Nice.  Posted a comment on the page.

Thanks, do you have any further comments. Anything that coulld have been done better?

[Ignis Mors]

AustereLemur799 wrote...

Busting through writer's block - do you fancy sharing your good fortune?

Thanks by the way to everyone who replied to my questions last week (and whenever); I know that I'm not around, and I also tend to run away from stuff on here and in my own life. All I can say is thanks for putting up with my weekly bouts of crap interrupting the peace of the thread.

I have a couple of questions, if you guys would be so kind. I know that Saren displays biotics in ME1 - does anyone know if he was born with biotics, and therefore served in turian cabals, or if his biotics werere a result of Reaper intervention during his relationship with Sovereign?

Also, I could be completely wrong here. When I first joined FFN, I was really nervous and edgy about a lot of their rules. I think that I read that you can't publish author's notes in a separate chapter, as it were. Is this true?

On my work, I include the foreword with the prologue (first chapter). Is there a rule against this?

It's just that I'm about to put up a new story, but I have a lot of author's notes that maybe shouldn't be included in the prologue. A03 is different because it allows you notes apart from your main story.

I would be grateful for any thoughts on this. Thanks also for putting up with me. Good to see that everyone is getting on well.

On the subject of Saren's biotics, I think they were naturally his, because Sovereign only implanted him after Virmire, and he uses them during that fight.

[Mr.BlazenGlazen]

Well, for anyone that cares....I have a new chapter up on my story.

Chapter 18: Revelations

As the title implies, I revealed a new and interesting twist into the story. My last chapter ended with a cliffhanger which supposedly implies that everyone aboard Admiral Hackett's ship have all perished in a fiery explosion. This chapter shows you what really happened.

Would be greatly appreciated if I got some comments from some of you guys.

[MrStoob]

Lizardviking wrote...

MrStoob wrote...

Lizardviking wrote...

So I have pretty much finally completed my first complete draft of my new story. It is divided into 5 chapters and is roughly 15000 words in total. I would be happy if anybody would like to give it a test-read.

--

Chapter 1:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/211152/

Chapter 2:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/210350/

Chapter 3:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/218312/

Chapter 4:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/225927/

Chapter 5:
http://social.biowar...57/blog/228153/

--

Be warned though, it is a Liara/Maleshep story where I give my own take on the Illium cameo in the ME2-maingame, so it is most likely not for everbody.

Nice.  Posted a comment on the page.

Thanks, do you have any further comments. Anything that coulld have been done better?

I've only read it TBH, without critique in mind hehe.  It's difficult reading on BSN but our old favourite 'quote formatting' needs a little attention in places but that's just picky stuff really.  Not much to criticize from me.

[Houzi77]

Hi. I'm fairly new to fanfiction but have three humourous and romantic  Mass Effect stories online, writing under the handle 'Xeno Sapian':

A Tali and Shepard oneshot called: "A Private Moment"

The sequel to 'A Private Moment' which is a Joker and EDI centric story: "Sphere Of Influence"

And, an ongoing Gabby and Ken story, set in 2183 (before the Battle of the Citadel), where Kenneth falls for a turian woman: "A Matter Of Race And Character"

I hope you enjoy them all. I would greatly appreciate any feedback from the writing support group, either positive or negative (though I'd prefer positive, obviously!). Thank you.

Modifié par Houzi77, 18 janvier 2013 - 09:03 .

[Drussius]

^ I will certainly add them to my list to read, but there are a bunch I promised to read first, so it may take some time.

[MrStoob]

Okay, one of THOSE questions please.  :innocent:

How long would it take at FTL to get from the Exodus Cluster to the Horsehead Nebula?  I'm hoping someone has already done the 'math' on this stuff lol.

[gisle]

The game is very vague about distances, but the Ascension book had 40 hours for a small personal shuttle. Can't recall the from and to, but I think it was between Terminus and Council space.

The game also simplifies the Relay network a lot. The bulk of the travel will be between stars in-cluster, assume 10-20 hours with a fast ~10 LY/day FTL drive between two stars depending on length -- no exact distances, so guess (Sol-Alpha Centuri is 4.2 LYs). Between Relays and planet in the system, it would likely not be more than half an hour or an hour with subluminal speeds.

If it's in two relay systems, it shouldn't be long, but a lot of the distances seen in the path displayed on the galaxy map seems to be primary relay lenghts (1000+ LYs), so there is some travel between two relays now and then.

To sum it up, there's little to go on and you'll just have to guess.

EDIT:
Looked at a galaxy map on Google images. There's one relay jump and if it's between the two systems the relays link, assume an hour or two, if there's FTL travel between stars, assume several hours, or even a day.

Modifié par Gisle-Aune, 19 janvier 2013 - 03:11 .

[MrStoob]

I was under the impression that FTL between systems would be in the years not hours/days.

[fainmaca]

I seem to recall somewhere saying that a starship in the ME universe can travel up to 12 times the speed of light?

What i'd say is that travel between systems in the same group (Horsehead Nebula, Omega Nebula etc) would be a day or two, but this is the equivalent of a group being the size of a penny and the Galaxy being the size of a large table. Travel across the Galaxy or even across a small portion of it would be in the realm of years or even decades. Any travel between Relays would be instantaneous or pretty close to it (Omega Four is what, five seconds?).

Generally when i write travel between missions in different parts of the Galaxy, I either gloss over the time taken, or make it a week or two with Relays to go anywhere far away. If the ship is going into an area you know to be remote and unsettled, you could extend this to months.

[MrStoob]

It's not so much in the sense of between mission or anything, but that a group are travelling by FTL that distance so I need to know how long it's going to take them.

For eg: the Horsehead Nebula is (in reality) 1500 LY from our solar system. So it would be my understanding that travelling at light speed ©, that journey would take you 1500 years. So if travelling at 10 x c, it would take 150 years, etc. Please correct me if my understanding of the mathematics and concepts is way off lol.

Modifié par MrStoob, 19 janvier 2013 - 04:52 .

[gisle]

Relays account for the bulk of the distance traveled.

MrStoob wrote...

I was under the impression that FTL between systems would be in the years not hours/days.

Had it been that, ME3 would have been in maybe 2500-3000-something. Are you mixing it up with clusters?

Modifié par Gisle-Aune, 19 janvier 2013 - 04:55 .

[MrStoob]

Gisle-Aune wrote...

Relays account for the bulk of the distance traveled.

MrStoob wrote...

I was under the impression that FTL between systems would be in the years not hours/days.

Had it been that, ME3 would have been in maybe 2500-3000-something. Are you mixing it up with clusters?

mebbe... :innocent:

Sorry if my terminology is off.  

Edit:
Though the original question was: How long would it take at FTL to get from the Exodus Cluster to the Horsehead Nebula?

So by my own maths and a judgement call on the distance, about 50 years if at 20 x c?  Less with space magic geth enhancements?  lol

Modifié par MrStoob, 19 janvier 2013 - 05:21 .

[gisle]

You mean, without the Relay?

The Galaxy's radius is 50k-60k light years. With my judge of distance and a galaxy map, it's 5k-6k light years between the two clusters in question. Say with 12 LY/day, it's ~400 days. However, due to the need for discharging the eezo core, it'll not be a straight path ad they'll need to pass a suitable discharge site every 50 hour, those are in a system. Two years would be a reasonable assumption if they're careful.

If it's post ME3 and they'd adapted salvaged Reaper tech, you could say that they've found a way to get increased speed and duration it can go without needing to discharge the eezo-core.

You don't need to be sorry for mixing up terms. I asked to help clear up misunderstanding.

Hope this helps.

Edit: 12 LY/day speed assumption is from one of Ashley's dialogue I believe, though I can't find the exact one.

Modifié par Gisle-Aune, 19 janvier 2013 - 10:54 .

[MrStoob]

Ah thanks for the clear up, I think a bit of space magic and vagueness will do this. Thanks for the help. I'd already stated a time period for something and needed to know is that one journey? A few? Lots? etc. But I've been vague enough so far to get away with it. Ha!

[gisle]

The duration I mentioned in the post an hour ago is one FTL trip between these two clusters.

[MrStoob]

Gisle-Aune wrote...

The duration I mentioned in the post an hour ago is one FTL trip between these two clusters.

Aye.  I gathered that, sorry, I was being rhetorical .  And thankfully, it doesn't interfere with my premises (phew!).  

Ah well Operation Geronimo is up, let's have at it eh?

Modifié par MrStoob, 20 janvier 2013 - 12:25 .

[enayasoul]

Here's a question I've been wrestling with...

Do you worry about being a credible writer? Do you stick to what is true in real life situations or do you do whatever... For example, in my newest chapter I'm working on I had written a fight scene where my maleShep get's stab in the thigh with a knife... and after doing a bit of research... It's been said by medical staff and so forth that you'd never remove a knife because they can bleed out and die if the knife hits an artery or something.

So, what I've come up with is that it might not be that deep of a stab wound because I've put him in a situation where the building is on fire and staying put is not an option. So removing it and having him struggle to get out...

I've read on some writer forums that a lot of movies have the characters removing the knives if they get stabbed anywhere really. Even in comedy... Jim Carrey in Pet Detective movies he jokes about the knives being in the bone then removes them. I know that in that scene it's suppose to be funny.

How true to real life should writers be when writing these kinds of stories?

[Ignis Mors]

enayasoul wrote...

Here's a question I've been wrestling with...

Do you worry about being a credible writer? Do you stick to what is true in real life situations or do you do whatever... For example, in my newest chapter I'm working on I had written a fight scene where my maleShep get's stab in the thigh with a knife... and after doing a bit of research... It's been said by medical staff and so forth that you'd never remove a knife because they can bleed out and die if the knife hits an artery or something.

So, what I've come up with is that it might not be that deep of a stab wound because I've put him in a situation where the building is on fire and staying put is not an option. So removing it and having him struggle to get out...

I've read on some writer forums that a lot of movies have the characters removing the knives if they get stabbed anywhere really. Even in comedy... Jim Carrey in Pet Detective movies he jokes about the knives being in the bone then removes them. I know that in that scene it's suppose to be funny.

How true to real life should writers be when writing these kinds of stories?

Well, in the Mass Effect universe they have medigel. And, at least how I see how medigel is applied on wounds for people who are wearing armor is that the armor has medigel dispensers that will close up serious wounds. So I'd have it say that he pulled it out, and then medigel was applied by the dispeners, causing the wound to be closed until he could get proper medical attention.

[Drussius]

Gisle-Aune wrote...

You mean, without the Relay?

The Galaxy's radius is 50k-60k light years. With my judge of distance and a galaxy map, it's 5k-6k light years between the two clusters in question. Say with 12 LY/day, it's ~400 days. However, due to the need for discharging the eezo core, it'll not be a straight path ad they'll need to pass a suitable discharge site every 50 hour, those are in a system. Two years would be a reasonable assumption if they're careful.

If it's post ME3 and they'd adapted salvaged Reaper tech, you could say that they've found a way to get increased speed and duration it can go without needing to discharge the eezo-core.

You don't need to be sorry for mixing up terms. I asked to help clear up misunderstanding.

Hope this helps.

Edit: 12 LY/day speed assumption is from one of Ashley's dialogue I believe, though I can't find the exact one.

This is all pretty accurate suggestions. However, one of the codex entries on Reapers says that they can travel over 30 light years in a day at FTL, and adds that this is approximately twice the speed of Alliance vessels. So I've always found 15 light years/day an easy and lore-friendly estimate.

This was actually something I looked up for my own reasons, and did a small amount of the math on it. With the diameter of the galaxy being estimated at 100,000 to 120,000 light years, I used 110,000 as a happy medium. At 15 light years/day, without needing to stop for fuel or drive discharge, which would naturally add delays, the galaxy could be crossed from one end to the other in 7,333.33333 days. Which boils down to just over 20 years. But using that as a reference, you may be able to make a reasonable guess by eyeballing it.