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[MrStoob]

fluffywalrus wrote...

Uh, Kerrigan was... a good, nice infiltrator. Then she was captured by the zerg and started to be a nasty, big bad girl.
I'm saying this as someone who's played Starcraft 1 extensively, and Starcraft 2 a time or two through the campaign. There's honestly not a heck of a lot about the character. Blizzard aren't known for memorable characters outside of their visual design and one-liners.

So i have no clue what that's supposed to mean. I haven't been able to get around to your fic, I've been a bit busy and have some writing to focus on first.

No probs, when you can.  Though as someone who read Blue, I am waiting for your opinion with baited-breath. 

Hmm, Kerrigan, I can see where he's coming from and that's all I'm saying.  

Edit: hm, don't seem to have anything lying around for a 'top-post tableau', ah well.

Modifié par MrStoob, 23 janvier 2013 - 04:02 .

[Ignis Mors]

 I've been working on a new chapter of Meus Mundus, and in it Shepard has a point where she just breaks down and starts crying. She's generally a tough,  not very cry-ey person, so this is new. Normally she handles grief by just putting on a mask of anger and cold separation. So, this is very different, and I was wandering what you guys think of it.
And, to put it into context for you, she is doing something to help her handle an indoctrination attempt. And, to take care of it, for various reasons, she has to see everyone she knew who has died. Including her father and sisters. So, it's a very emotional moment for her. I was wondering if you guys think I should have her still fall apart, which would be something new, or to handle it the same way she always does. Thanks in advance. 
Edit. Also, what do you guys think would be a good name for a reaper? (Other than Harbinger or Sovereign)

Modifié par Ignis Mors, 23 janvier 2013 - 06:02 .

[Drussius]

Ignis Mors wrote...

 I've been working on a new chapter of Meus Mundus, and in it Shepard has a point where she just breaks down and starts crying. She's generally a tough,  not very cry-ey person, so this is new. Normally she handles grief by just putting on a mask of anger and cold separation. So, this is very different, and I was wandering what you guys think of it.
And, to put it into context for you, she is doing something to help her handle an indoctrination attempt. And, to take care of it, for various reasons, she has to see everyone she knew who has died. Including her father and sisters. So, it's a very emotional moment for her. I was wondering if you guys think I should have her still fall apart, which would be something new, or to handle it the same way she always does. Thanks in advance. 
Edit. Also, what do you guys think would be a good name for a reaper? (Other than Harbinger or Sovereign)

I don't have a lot to say about the Shepard issue other than that everyone has their breaking point, and crying happens to everyone now and then no matter how tough they are. So in the right context, I doubt anyone would complain. As for Reaper names, try looking here: http://social.biowar.../index/14299552. There were some decent suggestions.

You might want to credit the original suggestor in an author's note, however. Credit where credit is due and all...

[Prime24601]

I have an idea for a mass effect crossover but I'm not sure if it's a good idea or not.

[Spiritwolf1]

MrStoob wrote...

Oh, it seems it's me again...
Someone reviewed 'Can't help but think of Starcraft's Kerrigan' on my fic, should I be happy? I don't know what that is. 

Edit: I looked her up and well... I still don't know if it's a good thing or not.  Any wiser, younger people who can give me the 'gen'?  Tsk... to be old and out of touch,  Last year, I even had to look up 'arrow to the knee' coz I had no idea what it was.  Then it intrigued me, I bought the game, and have about 1500 hours clocked ha!  But I digress.

PS  It must be spreading.  Get away with your diseases! 

PPS  The reviewer was anon, or I'd ask them myself.    *puff of smoke*

I was going to do a fanfic about Kerrigan from Starcraft once, but then I took an arrow to the knee

[Obsidian Gryphon]

Prime24601 wrote...

I have an idea for a mass effect crossover but I'm not sure if it's a good idea or not.

Throw it out here if you're not sure. Everyone can have a go at it with the bats.   But seriously, you wouldn't know till you try it.

@Spiritwolf1, :lol::lol:

Someone should do a story on the serial chicken murderer that had the entire kingdom up in arms.

Modifié par Obsidian Gryphon, 23 janvier 2013 - 12:09 .

[MrStoob]

Spiritwolf1 wrote...

MrStoob wrote...

Oh, it seems it's me again...
Someone reviewed 'Can't help but think of Starcraft's Kerrigan' on my fic, should I be happy? I don't know what that is. 

Edit: I looked her up and well... I still don't know if it's a good thing or not.  Any wiser, younger people who can give me the 'gen'?  Tsk... to be old and out of touch,  Last year, I even had to look up 'arrow to the knee' coz I had no idea what it was.  Then it intrigued me, I bought the game, and have about 1500 hours clocked ha!  But I digress.

PS  It must be spreading.  Get away with your diseases! 

PPS  The reviewer was anon, or I'd ask them myself.    *puff of smoke*

I was going to do a fanfic about Kerrigan from Starcraft once, but then I took an arrow to the knee

Where's my longer hook...?

[MrStoob]

Obsidian Gryphon wrote...

Prime24601 wrote...

I have an idea for a mass effect crossover but I'm not sure if it's a good idea or not.

Throw it out here if you're not sure. Everyone can have a go at it with the bats.   But seriously, you wouldn't know till you try it.

@Spiritwolf1, :lol::lol:

Someone should do a story on the serial chicken murderer that had the entire kingdom up in arms.

Agh!  Now you've got me considering an ES/Skyrim fic... I don't have the time!  

[Prime24601]

I had the idea of a mass effect crossover with the dark knight
If Shepard survived the surprise attack by the collectors, the alliance rescue them only to explain to Shepard that the mass murderer known as the Joker has escaped custody and is causing chaos across the galaxy giving the collectors two years free time of abductions
Obviously I was think of the Heath Ledger Version because I found he had the best charisma to make you feel inadequate.

[MrStoob]

Prime24601 wrote...

I had the idea of a mass effect crossover with the dark knight
If Shepard survived the surprise attack by the collectors, the alliance rescue them only to explain to Shepard that the mass murderer known as the Joker has escaped custody and is causing chaos across the galaxy giving the collectors two years free time of abductions
Obviously I was think of the Heath Ledger Version because I found he had the best charisma to make you feel inadequate.

Sorry, you'll have to explain that a bit better, which when it comes to writing literature, initially 'worries' me. 

[Prime24601]

MrStoob wrote...

Prime24601 wrote...

I had the idea of a mass effect crossover with the dark knight
If Shepard survived the surprise attack by the collectors, the alliance rescue them only to explain to Shepard that the mass murderer known as the Joker has escaped custody and is causing chaos across the galaxy giving the collectors two years free time of abductions
Obviously I was think of the Heath Ledger Version because I found he had the best charisma to make you feel inadequate.

Sorry, you'll have to explain that a bit better, which when it comes to writing literature, initially 'worries' me. 

The Joker escaped from the biggest prison in the galaxy and Shepard must stop him before he sets the galaxy on fire with war and death
Heath ledger version

[MrStoob]

Prime24601 wrote...

MrStoob wrote...

Prime24601 wrote...

I had the idea of a mass effect crossover with the dark knight
If Shepard survived the surprise attack by the collectors, the alliance rescue them only to explain to Shepard that the mass murderer known as the Joker has escaped custody and is causing chaos across the galaxy giving the collectors two years free time of abductions
Obviously I was think of the Heath Ledger Version because I found he had the best charisma to make you feel inadequate.

Sorry, you'll have to explain that a bit better, which when it comes to writing literature, initially 'worries' me. 

The Joker escaped from the biggest prison in the galaxy and Shepard must stop him before he sets the galaxy on fire with war and death
Heath ledger version

Sorry if I sound doubting, I'm just getting it straight.  :innocent:

Why/How is The Joker in the ME universe/time?

Modifié par MrStoob, 23 janvier 2013 - 07:46 .

[fainmaca]

Hmm. About to write something I'm very uncertain of. You know how sometimes you can go too far with an idea? I mean, like sometimes 'Rule of Cool' can be pushed too far? Yeah, I might be about to dive off that particular cliff top here. anybody willing to have a look at the idea if I PM them and tell me bluntly if its good or ridiculous?

[hot_heart]

MrStoob wrote...
Why/How is The Joker in the ME universe/time?

Crossovers don't tend to pay much attention to lore.

The only thing I can say is to either think about how you'd pull that story off or how seriously you want to take it. The Joker has always been a villain to Batman for a specific reason, and TDK made good use of that. Why is it set during that moment of the timeline? Do you plan to have him around for two years? Is he working with the Collectors? Do you just want a villain who will push Shepard to his limits and expose his vulnerabilities?

I would consider either making it a more contained story. Perhaps Shepard is trapped in a mega-prison run by The Joker. Not the most original idea (Arkham Asylum meets Die Hard?), but I think it's an easier concept to grasp. Failing that, why not come up with an original character? Some crazed warlord or former N7 marine (or Toombs?). I think the new Star Trek film is working with this concept actually.

Anyway, best thing is to just write. Get your ideas and things written somewhere. It's the best way to get useful feedback and improve.

fainmaca wrote...
Hmm. About to write something I'm very uncertain of. You know how sometimes you can go too far with an idea? I mean, like sometimes 'Rule of Cool' can be pushed too far? Yeah, I might be about to dive off that particular cliff top here. anybody willing to have a look at the idea if I PM them and tell me bluntly if its good or ridiculous?

Crazier than Jack's B.A.D.? OK, I'm game.

Modifié par hot_heart, 23 janvier 2013 - 09:29 .

[fainmaca]

@hot_heart: You asked for it. Sending the PM now.

[Spiritwolf1]

Have you ever written a chapter that really you just thrust some ideas in and was not a central chapter to the story (Ie: it can easily be taken out) then after writting it, think its your best chapter yet.

[hot_heart]

Chapter sixteen was a bit of an experiment, but I was pleased with the result. And it should 'pay off' in this latest chapter (provided I manage to convey the connection to the readers...not that it's subtle). I wouldn't say it was my best, though.

I think it's important to pursue ideas you take a liking to, though. Even if it seems incidental, you never know what you might discover.

EDIT: Should I be worried that, ten minutes later, fainmaca must still be composing the PM?

Modifié par hot_heart, 23 janvier 2013 - 09:46 .

[fainmaca]

Spiritwolf1 wrote...

Have you ever written a chapter that really you just thrust some ideas in and was not a central chapter to the story (Ie: it can easily be taken out) then after writting it, think its your best chapter yet.

Not a whole chapter, no, but I personally think that the scenes I wrote in chapter 37 of ITU, while not story crucial, are by far my best yet. There's a touching scene with Sha'ira and Septimus which I am really proud of, and a moment with shepard and Liara that I think serves as the highlight of the Commander's personality. With both of those places I just wanted to see where my line of thinking went, rather than having a specific agenda.

[fainmaca]

hot_heart wrote...
Should I be worried that, ten minutes later, fainmaca must still be composing the PM?

Would you rather I just linked you to this?

[Ignis Mors]

Drussius wrote...

Ignis Mors wrote...

 I've been working on a new chapter of Meus Mundus, and in it Shepard has a point where she just breaks down and starts crying. She's generally a tough,  not very cry-ey person, so this is new. Normally she handles grief by just putting on a mask of anger and cold separation. So, this is very different, and I was wandering what you guys think of it.
And, to put it into context for you, she is doing something to help her handle an indoctrination attempt. And, to take care of it, for various reasons, she has to see everyone she knew who has died. Including her father and sisters. So, it's a very emotional moment for her. I was wondering if you guys think I should have her still fall apart, which would be something new, or to handle it the same way she always does. Thanks in advance. 
Edit. Also, what do you guys think would be a good name for a reaper? (Other than Harbinger or Sovereign)

I don't have a lot to say about the Shepard issue other than that everyone has their breaking point, and crying happens to everyone now and then no matter how tough they are. So in the right context, I doubt anyone would complain. As for Reaper names, try looking here: http://social.biowar.../index/14299552. There were some decent suggestions.

You might want to credit the original suggestor in an author's note, however. Credit where credit is due and all...

Thanks, I'll be sure to look at it.

[enayasoul]

Yes, I think some of my chapters are better than others. It's a great feeling when a chapter is finished after putting lots of work into it. A big load is lifted off your shoulders so to speak. Then you get ready for the next chapter.

@hot heart, I read your latest chapter. My initial reaction was... I had a hard time following the first half of the story, visually speaking. It felt like just words. (but I could have been tired? Maybe?)

The second half of the story was great. I could visualize what was going on with Miranda and Kai Leng... She seemed to be getting her ass kicked but she prevailed in the end by putting the tracer on him. The taunts were good.

I think it was a long drawn out fight. I think it could be tighten up a bit more but I've always enjoyed reading your chapters. I hope this helps. Looking forward to the next chapter!

I recently wrote a Miranda/Shepard/Ashley confrontation and the chapter views were VERY high. I was kind of surprised. I had worked on that confrontation a great deal. On of the reviews gave me insight on how it was interpreted so that was good. I'll use that for when they meet again in future chapters coming up.

[hot_heart]

enayasoul wrote...
@hot heart, I read your latest chapter. My initial reaction was... I had a hard time following the first half of the story, visually speaking. It felt like just words. (but I could have been tired? Maybe?)

Ah, my writing secret's out!

Seriously, though, I was not too pleased with the beginning of the chapter. Seems to take a little while for me to get going, as the same went for the chapter before. I was a little worried the fight was a little long. Was meant to be like a Sarah Walker fight in Chuck (the long, drawn-out kind) and it became hard to edit it down, even if with some help from others. Because I'm an idiot, I'd only planned the main 'story beats' like the shields and omni-tool being wrecked, and the struggle with the elevator door, so the rest became a bit free-form. Interesting exercise anyway.

It's partly why the final bit picks up in pace (and I considered simplifying that as well). I'm glad to see it got a good reception from a fair few people anyway, so I guess the nightmare was worth it.

Anyway, thanks very much for reading and offering your feedback. Always useful! Will have to read your Ashley confrontation if I decide to go that route. I know the circumstances aren't the same, and I wouldn't dream of plagiarising anyone else's work (I call it 'paying homage' ), but it might help in capturing the character.

[enayasoul]

It's chapter 24: reflections.

What I did was watch a lot of video clips/scenes in-game of Ashley and her interactions, word choices and just listening to her voice basically. I have also taken notes on the character from reading what other fans thought of her character. And adding some of my own interpretations of what I thought the character was/is... and sticking to their main issues as presented in-game.

I think hearing the voices of the actors playing the character helps with writing them but sometimes our own thoughts/past influences in our lives get mixed in. Sometimes the characters are chatty other times you have no idea how they will/would respond to certain situations.

I think it's noticeble if people do and flattering to some degree.

[hot_heart]

Yeah, if I include her I'd rather make her more like the ME1 version. Or at least, not make any antagonism too blunt or rote. Seeing as you clearly did some preparation, if you have any pointers or advice, I'd be happy to hear it.

[enayasoul]

hot_heart wrote...

Yeah, if I include her I'd rather make her more like the ME1 version. Or at least, not make any antagonism too blunt or rote. Seeing as you clearly did some preparation, if you have any pointers or advice, I'd be happy to hear it.

I'll get back to you on pointers and advice after I finish up my journal entry assignment for my english composition 2 class that due today.  Plus replying to everyone else's work. Ugh... I dread that part.  I have to think. hahaha and reply with reason and constructive criticism and help the student improve... )) 

It's an interesting class... focuses a lot on "seeing through different lenses"  what a concept!   Somewhat mindboggling to wrap my brain around this stuff.  It's bascially viewpoints, interpretations and finding credible sources and writing. By the end I'll have written 6-8 page pursasive essay from a topic I chose within the degree of Web design...   OMG

My next chapter is begging for attention but it'll have to wait til tomorrow it seems.