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[noxiuniversitas1]

Icyflare wrote...

noxiuniversitas1 wrote...

@Icyflare YES. Although, I've had PMs from readers miffed at the one-shot spree, lol. So I had to make a promise of "more Monday (Liara's nickname in Nova et Vetera) before Monday"

...

Haha, you've had PMs from annoyed readers? My sympathies to you, but on the plus side, you've still got a day-ish...

Is it time for more fluff in Nova et Vetera?

lol, annoyed is probably a bit strong a word. But yeah - I try to respond to every review without using copy and paste job, and I think at least half of the people who read Forever As One also read Nova et Vetera. Got a lot of teasing PMs back saying they were getting impatient at a lack of an update. And then there were some who just PMed after seeing three non-NoV postings asking if I'd forgotten about it... hence the A/N at the start of chapter 2 of FAO, lol.

[noxiuniversitas1]

Spiritwolf1 wrote...

I found my story got lost here and I hate bumping for shameless self promotion. I posted some comments for you, hope it helps.

If anyone want to take a peek at mine and let me know what they think of the second chapter it would be nice. I liked it even though it didnt go the way I had planned. I was going to have it focus on one character but instead it focused on another, now I just have to figure out if I will re focus it in the next chapter or just move on with what I had planned.

I'll give it a look after I finish this particular piece and I get through the two I need to review. Hopefully that will happen within 5-6 hours

lillitheris wrote...
For unborn children, in addition to the
mention of cell division (and perhaps importantly the stem cell
differentiation process, whatever that’s called), maybe it could be
stipulated that eezo particularly concentrates in the placenta and/or
the umbilical, exponentiating the effect.

1. It is called differentiation, you're right

2. Placenta would probably the worst place IRL for a selective foetal effect. Placental blood flow can increase to almost 1/3rd of the cardiac output in the 2nd and 3rd trimesters of pregnancy. In contrast, the kidneys, which are probably the organs with the most consistent perfusion rate, even with changes in activity levels, recieve ~20% of the total cardiac output.

Modifié par noxiuniversitas1, 01 juillet 2012 - 10:21 .

[fluffywalrus]

LanceSolous13 wrote...

Oops. I forgot to post a link to the thread (I think).

http://social.biowar.../index/12880461

There you go.

Love to hear any concrit anyone has about it.

I'll see if I can't give it a read I have 45 minutes until  allow myself to eat, and writing about food is making the wait worse. May as well pass the time in a less hunger-inducing manner

[LanceSolous13]

fluffywalrus wrote...

LanceSolous13 wrote...

Oops. I forgot to post a link to the thread (I think).

http://social.biowar.../index/12880461

There you go.

Love to hear any concrit anyone has about it.

I'll see if I can't give it a read I have 45 minutes until  allow myself to eat, and writing about food is making the wait worse. May as well pass the time in a less hunger-inducing manner

Oh god. I just read the prior discussion about not advertising and what post is right after that? Me Advertising. Now  my cheeks a red with emberassment. My appolgies.

[noxiuniversitas1]

fluffywalrus wrote...

LanceSolous13 wrote...

Oops. I forgot to post a link to the thread (I think).

http://social.biowar.../index/12880461

There you go.

Love to hear any concrit anyone has about it.

I'll see if I can't give it a read I have 45 minutes until  allow myself to eat, and writing about food is making the wait worse. May as well pass the time in a less hunger-inducing manner

Eh, an early morning snack is never a bad thing

[fluffywalrus]

LanceSolous13 wrote...

fluffywalrus wrote...

LanceSolous13 wrote...

Oops. I forgot to post a link to the thread (I think).

http://social.biowar.../index/12880461

There you go.

Love to hear any concrit anyone has about it.

I'll see if I can't give it a read I have 45 minutes until  allow myself to eat, and writing about food is making the wait worse. May as well pass the time in a less hunger-inducing manner

Oh god. I just read the prior discussion about not advertising and what post is right after that? Me Advertising. Now  my cheeks a red with emberassment. My appolgies.

Eh , so long as you don't make a habit of it
It's more or less why I like FFnet. Lets me set up alerts on stories so that when they're posted or updated, I get notified, and the search system on the site is quite good and lets me know what's been posted and when.

Kind of does away with most advertising, imo. Also, adding your story to your sig works too, that way you don't need to blatantly advertise it

noxiuniversitas1 wrote...

Eh, an early morning snack is never a bad thing

It is when I have to wait until around 2 or 3PM for lunch to start. People are coming over for Canada Day celebrations (hurray for Canadians! I guess...), but they're generally coming later on, and dinner will probably be around 8 or 9PM.

I'm going to have to pace myself or I'll snack out on all the chocolate cake I made, and that's just a terrible (and delicious) idea

Modifié par fluffywalrus, 01 juillet 2012 - 10:28 .

[noxiuniversitas1]

... I'm procrastinating again...

[LanceSolous13]

I've tried using Fan Fiction before. Got nothing but reviews and messages from people saying "You need to have x do y" and "Add this!" or "x would never act like that ever!" and such bull. I need more than "You did this wrong" to improve writing. It got me a bit depressed enough to stop writing fics for awhile.

Come to think of it, This is the first time I've tried writing a fic since fiction.net. Hopefully, It'll go much better, but I can't see it going to wrong with a Support Group thread.

[lillitheris]

noxiuniversitas1 wrote...

2. Placenta would probably the worst place IRL for a selective foetal effect. Placental blood flow can increase to almost 1/3rd of the cardiac output in the 2nd and 3rd trimesters of pregnancy. In contrast, the kidneys, which are probably the organs with the most consistent perfusion rate, even with changes in activity levels, recieve ~20% of the total cardiac output.

Hm, is this ‘worst’ as in bad effect, or unlikely to have effect?

…

I need to write, too, but now the original “Pink Panther” is playing…

[noxiuniversitas1]

lillitheris wrote...

noxiuniversitas1 wrote...

2. Placenta would probably the worst place IRL for a selective foetal effect. Placental blood flow can increase to almost 1/3rd of the cardiac output in the 2nd and 3rd trimesters of pregnancy. In contrast, the kidneys, which are probably the organs with the most consistent perfusion rate, even with changes in activity levels, recieve ~20% of the total cardiac output.

Hm, is this ‘worst’ as in bad effect, or unlikely to have effect?

It would probably affect both mother and foetus - most placental diseases / pathologies / injuries (e.g. eclampsia), do.

And I have a 6pm GMT deadline... got to pick up the folks from Heathrow as they're house-sitting

[Spiritwolf1]

I just found ff. net and I love it for all the reasons mentioned above. I also like feedback cause it helps me improve. I am a firm believer in learning from mistake and sometimes good suggestions come from it as well. I have one reviewer, bless them, that points out grammar errors that I miss and I need that cause my grammar is terrible. I have also "bookmarked" a list of stuff to read mostly from you guys here since I think you guys are swell.

[noxiuniversitas1]

fluffywalrus wrote...

It is when I have to wait until around 2 or 3PM for lunch to start. People are coming over for Canada Day celebrations (hurray for Canadians! I guess...), but they're generally coming later on, and dinner will probably be around 8 or 9PM.

I'm going to have to pace myself or I'll snack out on all the chocolate cake I made, and that's just a terrible (and delicious) idea

HAPPY CANADA DAY!!!

It's *looks in calendar for big day*... plain old July 1 in gloomy England

Ahh cake! It's been weeks since I had something sweet... nights are bad for sugar times. Have a piece of toast - that usually satiates for a while

Modifié par noxiuniversitas1, 01 juillet 2012 - 10:43 .

[noxiuniversitas1]

Spiritwolf1 wrote...

I just found ff. net and I love it for all the reasons mentioned above. I also like feedback cause it helps me improve. I am a firm believer in learning from mistake and sometimes good suggestions come from it as well. I have one reviewer, bless them, that points out grammar errors that I miss and I need that cause my grammar is terrible. I have also "bookmarked" a list of stuff to read mostly from you guys here since I think you guys are swell.

I haven't looked at your stuff yet, but I will do - if you say your grammar is terrible, however, have you ever considered a beta reader?

[LanceSolous13]

Spiritwolf1 wrote...

I just found ff. net and I love it for all the reasons mentioned above. I also like feedback cause it helps me improve. I am a firm believer in learning from mistake and sometimes good suggestions come from it as well. I have one reviewer, bless them, that points out grammar errors that I miss and I need that cause my grammar is terrible. I have also "bookmarked" a list of stuff to read mostly from you guys here since I think you guys are swell.

You're making me turn green with envy. lol Even with gramar mistakes, All I get is something along the lines of "You're **** at spelling". Nothing to tell me where my mistakes were and ete. Anyways, That's in the past now so I'll shut up about it.

[Spiritwolf1]

My grammar is not that bad but there are errors that I always continue to make and even after proof reading twice I still miss some. 

Oh and Happy Canada day sucks that I have to work through it. 

***enter "I am a happy Canadian" self promotion here ***

Modifié par Spiritwolf1, 01 juillet 2012 - 10:52 .

[fluffywalrus]

LanceSolous13 wrote...

Spiritwolf1 wrote...

I just found ff. net and I love it for all the reasons mentioned above. I also like feedback cause it helps me improve. I am a firm believer in learning from mistake and sometimes good suggestions come from it as well. I have one reviewer, bless them, that points out grammar errors that I miss and I need that cause my grammar is terrible. I have also "bookmarked" a list of stuff to read mostly from you guys here since I think you guys are swell.

You're making me turn green with envy. lol Even with gramar mistakes, All I get is something along the lines of "You're **** at spelling". Nothing to tell me where my mistakes were and ete. Anyways, That's in the past now so I'll shut up about it.

I've never understood people getting all uppity about spelling. Point it out, make corrections, but don't get angry over it or anything. Serves no purpose to antagonize an author to that degree, for something so easly fixed.

I mean, some people are poor at spelling. I wish that was not a part of reality, but it's just how things are. Some are dyslexic and whatnot, like my cousin, and struggle with putting out consistently proper spelling. I proofread my cousin's sociology papers, and I'll admit I can be a spelling(and to a lesser degree, grammar) freak, and I'll point out every error I can find, but it's to help. To be constructive.

I don't see why some people can just say "You suck at spelling" and leave it at that, because it's hollow criticism. Just hit the back button and don't respond to the story. I know I occasionally stumble into a really poorly written story that I'll find is beyond salvaging, but insulting the author makes no sense to me. No point.

There are a fair bit of those people on FFnet, but I read a lot of Mass Effect fics on there, and I read the reviews to see if there was anything I missed, or what other people think, and I've noticed a lot of the haters fade away over the past months. I think it's because the games are kind of over, for now, and it gets less attention.

I'll never volunteer to beta-read for anyone, because that kind of commitment is a bit much for me, but I'll generally read anything, and I'll usually review anything I read.
Also, I'd like to think that this thread is good for helping everyone out with structure/grammar/lore/etc. issues that pop up.

Spiritwolf1 wrote...

My grammar is not that bad but there
are errors that I always continue to make and even after proof reading
twice I still miss some. 

Oh and Happy Canada day sucks that I have to work through it. 

***enter "I am a happy Canadian" self promotion here ***

Yay, another Canadian!
Also, working Canada day sucks, I did it last year, but....time and a half! Whoo money! Money that can be spent on food, possibly breakfast-related food!

And with that, I'm off to have as awesome of a breakfast as I can muster. Kitchen magic!

Modifié par fluffywalrus, 01 juillet 2012 - 11:01 .

[hot_heart]

I find FF.net is pretty good. I mean, generally it might be "Good work. Keep it up." but at least they took the effort, and it's always nice to see.

Plus, I do have one guy who expands on his thoughts, which is very helpful. I guess it's just a good sign that I've not had anyone say "This is wrong. ALL WRONG."

Either way, I wouldn't dissuade anyone from using it. Even negative feedback can be food for thought. Sometimes, it might be that there's something in the writing that people get hung up on, colouring the rest of their reading. And you can find a way to smooth out those wrinkles.

Ultimately though, I'd probably take the "I don't have to explain myself to you!" route.

Spiritwolf1 wrote...
Anyone ever just sit down to write a chapter and have it go somewhere you never forsaw?

I wouldn't say I never had any of the direction figured out, but I constantly tweak the details.

It's stuff that's only obvious to me, but chapters eight and ten went through some significant alterations (for the better, I feel). Eight has what might be an odd location shift but no one seemed to notice and it was there as part of another plan. Originally, Ten didn't even include a certain character, then it had elements that were meant to have symmetry with later stuff in ME3 but, eventually, I looked at why I was using the character and actually needed something moving forward, so it worked out for the best.

I think I mentioned my tortured work method before. I just jump in, let the 'magic' happen and then try and make something decent from the mess I just caused. I mean, how are you gonna start the puzzle unless you just shake the bits everywhere and find a way to piece them together?

Modifié par hot_heart, 01 juillet 2012 - 11:24 .

[Spiritwolf1]

Hmmm food. Well even though we have not met my main character yet I would say that she enjoys bacon for every breakfast and maybe as a side dish at every meal.

[Spiritwolf1]

hot_heart wrote...

I wouldn't say I never had any of the direction figured out, but I constantly tweak the details.

It's stuff that's only obvious to me, but chapters eight and ten went through some significant alterations (for the better, I feel). Eight has what might be an odd location shift but no one seemed to notice and it was there as part of another plan. Originally, Ten didn't even include a certain character, then it had elements that were meant to have symmetry with later stuff in ME3 but, eventually, I looked at why I was using the character and actually needed something moving forward, so it worked out for the best.

I think I mentioned my tortured work method before. I just jump in, let the 'magic' happen and then try and make something decent from the mess I just caused. I mean, how are you gonna start the puzzle unless you just shake the bits everywhere and find a way to piece them together?

Ha! Me too, Of course I have the character and the general Idea of where I want to go but usually I let things take me where ever until I can peice it out.

This time though I ahve vowed to plan every chapter before I started writing them. I had Chapter two all planned out in point form on a peice of paper and got maybe the first line right then it sort of went in its own direction.

[lillitheris]

fluffywalrus wrote...

I don't see why some people can just say "You suck at spelling" and leave it at that, because it's hollow criticism. Just hit the back button and don't respond to the story.

It’s still useful. Unkind, sure, and might make you feel bad…but personally I’d rather know that my spelling (or whatever) is turning someone off rather than just having a bunch of silent abandons.

Knowing that (whatever) is causing problems for some readers, you are then empowered to do something about it — be it nothing, or a conscious effort to try to improve. Dyslexia and so on are of course legitimate issues, and some people are more talented verbally, but nobody gets anything for free. Even the truly excellent writers constantly practice and learn. Even they have editors.

So, even if you think that your writing sucks and/or is irredeemable — which it probably isn’t — putting it out there is a great opportunity for getting much more rapid feedback than toiling away for months and then find out there are problems. You just have to try to be constructive about it yourself which, admittedly, is not always easy.

[hot_heart]

Yeah, as I was saying, a misspelt word or an oddly-structured sentence can suddenly alter how someone reads your story (possibly even take them right out of it), so it might be handy to know even the slightest thing.

Even if people who get really angry over spelling and grammar have problems...

[fluffywalrus]

lillitheris wrote...

fluffywalrus wrote...

I don't see why some people can just say "You suck at spelling" and leave it at that, because it's hollow criticism. Just hit the back button and don't respond to the story.

It’s still useful. Unkind, sure, and might make you feel bad…but personally I’d rather know that my spelling (or whatever) is turning someone off rather than just having a bunch of silent abandons.

Knowing that (whatever) is causing problems for some readers, you are then empowered to do something about it — be it nothing, or a conscious effort to try to improve. Dyslexia and so on are of course legitimate issues, and some people are more talented verbally, but nobody gets anything for free. Even the truly excellent writers constantly practice and learn. Even they have editors.

So, even if you think that your writing sucks and/or is irredeemable — which it probably isn’t — putting it out there is a great opportunity for getting much more rapid feedback than toiling away for months and then find out there are problems. You just have to try to be constructive about it yourself which, admittedly, is not always easy.

True enough. I just figure that telling someone "you're terrible at spelling, die in a fire", takes about as much effort as "'ranebow' should be 'rainbow'". Even pointing out a single spelling error makes me check my entire work over again, which often results in a few errors made note of and fixed. Someone pointing out that my spelling sucks will likely have me doing the same thing, but there's no point being that insulting. It's the same effort level.

[MrStoob]

As I've said before, I participate in a monthly music challenge (usually I do, I was a bit busy with a new job this month and missed it). Our hostess sets a musical style/premise and we write accordingly. It's not a competition, just a group of artists making and sharing their interpretations.

I was wondering if the group would be interested in doing something similar for FF?

A premise or title is set and we all write a short story to that. Just broad stuff like 'Red Letter Day', 'Down time', 'Message in a bottle' or 'Wrex's secret' where everyone can make it their own. I think it'd be interesting to see everyone's different takes on the same premise. It'd probably be best to keep them to short or one-shot stories, as reading through them all would be quite time consuming.

Would anyone be up for it?

[fluffywalrus]

I'd probably be up for something like that, though my priorities would likely fall on my main fic.

Though a 1500-2000 word one shot probably would be something I could churn out quickly. Yeah, a monthly thing would probably be an alright idea.

[Spiritwolf1]

Maybe not all the time but it's great practice.

Also I would like everyone opinion on what you hate when you give a review to some one. I am new to this fan fix stuff coming from a PBeM format for like the last ten years so there was never reviews. I am also a pretty positive person who hates being harsh so most of my reviews are nice and if I like the story I am forgiving of a few things.

In saying that I think what annoys me most when doing a review. And this happen everytime I open my big mouth, is when you say something about something you think could be improved and all you get back is an argument over why it's not. I mean I am slightly defensive as well but I was always taught that if you have to explain what you write, then perhaps you need to re write it.

In saying this I don't write scathing reviews. There is always positive when I throw out negative... Is just this my beef or does anyone share it.