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I originally had a piece of dialogue between Raan and the Vas Ileen's Captain and between Zar's parents that dealt with securing the food supply but I trashed it.
Once you reflect how Tuchanka looks like you might wonder what the Krogan actually ate. Thresher maws? Do the Turian drop food aid?
The stock universe delivers an epic story but nonchalantly leaves out the every-day parts to explore for us with strange ideas.
I'd say the Krogan were not predators originally. I didn't spot any fangs among their teeth. Evolution might have taken a different path, though and I'm not even sure wether krogan are mammals. They lay eggs, don't they?
Anyway, this leads to nothing, time for funny ideas:

Krogan were originally non-carnivore but had to compete for food and their lives with other animals. One day a "stone-age" krogan fought with a predator one a lush meadow he meant to graze on. That krogan won but in the fight they both trampled the neat meadow into oblivion. The krogan got really angry. Predator dead, meadow destroyed, other krogan too far away to headbutt. So he nibbled at the predator to channel the aggression and UTTERLY destroy the foe.
It tasted horribly so he plucked one of the more or less intact herbs to go with the meat (the first true chef in krogan history!).
When he returned he brought a piece of meat with him. He was still angry and about to demonstrate how cool he defeated the predator. He stood in the middle of the camp, the other krogan neared: "Oglub?" "Kaglob?" and watched him munch the meat, posing around, displaying how HE got so VERY MUCH STRONGER by swallowing the foe. A good deal of roaring and chest-pounding, too.

Later, the krogan developped devious strategies: They would move peacefully to a meadow, look about frightened and graze to lure some predators out. When they got a pack interested they would drop their disguise as "peaceful herd" and charge at their unsuspecting hunters and have a decent barbecue after the fight. Those were the times.

What does that tell?
Krogan are omnivores, but its always good to have an edge with a decent steak. Hunted and prepared (not necessarily) by yourself.

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THAT'S A LOT OF NUTS!


REFERENCE GOT! :lol:


As sad as it is. I did a damn lot of research just to make that refrence work. KUNG POW!!

Zar in the future cpn of his own ship.

Crew: Captain!

Zar: Yes? What is it? Don't you see I'm in the middle of gardening?

Crew: There's a blood pack ship attacking a trade ship!

Zar: Now why should we care? It doesn't belong to the fleet intel said the ship had been connected to Batarian slavers.

Crew: Sir. It's got an on board fast food joint.

Zar: ... DROP F****** EVERYTHING! MAN THE CANNONS! SAVE THE TRADE SHIP! SEND DEMANDS FOR FREE BURGERS!!
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Ziegrif wrote...

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THAT'S A LOT OF NUTS!


REFERENCE GOT! :lol:


As sad as it is. I did a damn lot of research just to make that refrence work. KUNG POW!!

Zar in the future cpn of his own ship.

Crew: Captain!

Zar: Yes? What is it? Don't you see I'm in the middle of gardening?

Crew: There's a blood pack ship attacking a trade ship!

Zar: Now why should we care? It doesn't belong to the fleet intel said the ship had been connected to Batarian slavers.

Crew: Sir. It's got an on board fast food joint.

Zar: ... DROP F****** EVERYTHING! MAN THE CANNONS! SAVE THE TRADE SHIP! SEND DEMANDS FOR FREE BURGERS!!


Geez, I had to check my stocks now with all the talk about meat and there's none in the house. And it's a holiday.

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I originally had a piece of dialogue between Raan and the Vas Ileen's Captain and between Zar's parents that dealt with securing the food supply but I trashed it.
Once you reflect how Tuchanka looks like you might wonder what the Krogan actually ate. Thresher maws? Do the Turian drop food aid?
The stock universe delivers an epic story but nonchalantly leaves out the every-day parts to explore for us with strange ideas.
I'd say the Krogan were not predators originally. I didn't spot any fangs among their teeth. Evolution might have taken a different path, though and I'm not even sure wether krogan are mammals. They lay eggs, don't they?
Anyway, this leads to nothing, time for funny ideas:

Krogan were originally non-carnivore but had to compete for food and their lives with other animals. One day a "stone-age" krogan fought with a predator one a lush meadow he meant to graze on. That krogan won but in the fight they both trampled the neat meadow into oblivion. The krogan got really angry. Predator dead, meadow destroyed, other krogan too far away to headbutt. So he nibbled at the predator to channel the aggression and UTTERLY destroy the foe.
It tasted horribly so he plucked one of the more or less intact herbs to go with the meat (the first true chef in krogan history!).
When he returned he brought a piece of meat with him. He was still angry and about to demonstrate how cool he defeated the predator. He stood in the middle of the camp, the other krogan neared: "Oglub?" "Kaglob?" and watched him munch the meat, posing around, displaying how HE got so VERY MUCH STRONGER by swallowing the foe. A good deal of roaring and chest-pounding, too.

Later, the krogan developped devious strategies: They would move peacefully to a meadow, look about frightened and graze to lure some predators out. When they got a pack interested they would drop their disguise as "peaceful herd" and charge at their unsuspecting hunters and have a decent barbecue after the fight. Those were the times.

What does that tell?
Krogan are omnivores, but its always good to have an edge with a decent steak. Hunted and prepared (not necessarily) by yourself.


Krogans seem to be anatomically refrencing dinosaurs. Sided eyes giving a better FOV, aggression, etc.
They probably had varren farms. Wrex pretty much confirms that Krogan eat ANYTHING. ''He's a fool! you should eat him!'' so they'd also eat their enemies and might be possible cannibals in a life or death situation.
Mostly just wanted to draw a comparison on that feeding a human size of a small Krogan doing a ton of excercise would bankrupt a small country.

The lack of food would actually stunt Zars growth making him smaller than a usual Krogan, This would be a drop off in power but an increase in agility and speed. If we look at multiplayer we see that Krogans are REALLY FRIGGING FAST RUNNERS. Now think if we had one as fast as a drell charging at you. Even if the mass was smaller the force of impact would still be equal to a full Krogan bodyslam cause of the smaller ones top speed. Speed making up for mass, Newton and all that physics. And the bodyslam would reach its target faster.

Eh. I'm just trying to justify a Ninja Krogan. With THIS as his theme song! Well I'm just bringing phycics into fiction. It can be ignored or not. Nitpicking and all that stuff.

Also for me it's ground beef day! After school that is.

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Ziegrif wrote...

Krogans seem to be anatomically refrencing dinosaurs. Sided eyes giving a better FOV, aggression, etc.
They probably had varren farms. Wrex pretty much confirms that Krogan eat ANYTHING. ''He's a fool! you should eat him!'' so they'd also eat their enemies and might be possible cannibals in a life or death situation.
Mostly just wanted to draw a comparison on that feeding a human size of a small Krogan doing a ton of excercise would bankrupt a small country.

The lack of food would actually stunt Zars growth making him smaller than a usual Krogan, This would be a drop off in power but an increase in agility and speed. If we look at multiplayer we see that Krogans are REALLY FRIGGING FAST RUNNERS. Now think if we had one as fast as a drell charging at you. Even if the mass was smaller the force of impact would still be equal to a full Krogan bodyslam cause of the smaller ones top speed. Speed making up for mass, Newton and all that physics. And the bodyslam would reach its target faster.

Eh. I'm just trying to justify a Ninja Krogan. With THIS as his theme song! Well I'm just bringing phycics into fiction. It can be ignored or not. Nitpicking and all that stuff.

Also for me it's ground beef day! After school that is.


OK, Pyjak infestation is the solution. They probably got decent protocols with the Flotilla, but Pyjaks are sneaky and there is always a slacker around or a system going down. Zar can hunt them, train his hunting skills and be of use to the community.
And have some burgers.

If someone would find out that Zar is a biotic candidate we need not worry about his body mass any more. He'd only need to train this ability and I've never heard of Quarian biotics.

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OK, Pyjak infestation is the solution. They probably got decent protocols with the Flotilla, but Pyjaks are sneaky and there is always a slacker around or a system going down. Zar can hunt them, train his hunting skills and be of use to the community.
And have some burgers.

If someone would find out that Zar is a biotic candidate we need not worry about his body mass any more. He'd only need to train this ability and I've never heard of Quarian biotics.


Damn. That's actually pretty smart. Pyjaks are bloody everywhere. They're also a health risk. They're bound to appear on the flotilla clean ship or not.
If Zars a biotic it'd make him a bigger risk for the fleet. Angry uncontrollable biotics are a problem. Also a solution for mass. But don't krogans need special gear if they want to do a Biotic charge? They can't shut down all of their nervous systems before impact so they slowly get brain damage. At least that's a rumour I heard a while back.

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If i'm not mistaken, i think the Codex states that there were in fact Quarian biotics, but very, very few since their fleeing from Rannoch 3 centuries ago. But that'd have to be double checked. Since there's more Krogan biotics like Wrex, there's a greater chance Zar could gain biotic powers since he'd grow up in a ship. Maybe learning to handle engine repairs could increase his Element Zero exposure?

Other than that, i like the story. Great job.

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Damn. That's actually pretty smart. Pyjaks are bloody everywhere. They're also a health risk. They're bound to appear on the flotilla clean ship or not.
If Zars a biotic it'd make him a bigger risk for the fleet. Angry uncontrollable biotics are a problem. Also a solution for mass. But don't krogans need special gear if they want to do a Biotic charge? They can't shut down all of their nervous systems before impact so they slowly get brain damage. At least that's a rumour I heard a while back.


Krogans with biotic potential needed special biotic amps, the surgery for which was dangerous and long since abandoned before Zar's time. Speedy Krogan seems a better fit for our friend, not to mention the added agility...now I'm not saying He's Mirror's Edge material (the thought of a parkour krogan IS amusing, however), but he's quick and nimble compared to other krogan.

Also Quarian biotics were rare due to eezo being used for ships more than deliberate sprinkling to get potential biotics grown...also a core failure would prove disaterous and lethal for the quarians, seeing as they...you know, live on the ship.

Also Pyjak dog, anybody? :o

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Krogans with biotic potential needed special biotic amps, the surgery for which was dangerous and long since abandoned before Zar's time. Speedy Krogan seems a better fit for our friend, not to mention the added agility...now I'm not saying He's Mirror's Edge material (the thought of a parkour krogan IS amusing, however), but he's quick and nimble compared to other krogan.

Also Quarian biotics were rare due to eezo being used for ships more than deliberate sprinkling to get potential biotics grown...also a core failure would prove disaterous and lethal for the quarians, seeing as they...you know, live on the ship.

Also Pyjak dog, anybody? :o


A varren dog would be a better fit actually. Or a smaller cyborg Pyjak could ride on his shoulder. You know. Something he doesn't end up eating.
Agile krogan = Assassin training. A krogan with tactical cloak. A hand cannon and a sword. Or a Krogan scout.
Maybe have him try and get out of his suit whenever he can. Kinda like have him take the top off and tie it to his waist. Or have him tie the upper part of a jumpsuit to tie with the sleeves around his waist. MANLY!

He'd possibly need the agility if he's going to hunt Pyjaks for meat. I don't really think Pyjaks would be let into the clean areas of Flotilla ships so they'd infest small unclean crevices and engine decks. So our Krogan here would have to be small and agile to fit through mazes of pipes, tight corridors, narrow walkways above eezo-cores. Screw it Parkour krogan all the way! It's 10 kinds of awesome!

Could justify his slim frame as fast paced adaptation to terrain and evolving due to circumstances. Zar would get stuck in some engine block end up with no food and unable to fit through and no one knew where he was. So his hump would have withered away or become smaller and his head become more flexible and neck gone a bit upwards. Like a Giant Gecko.

Or maybe not. Depends how you guys see it. :P

I never liked Biotics myself. Somehow they felt out of place for me. I dunno why really.

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Agile krogan = Assassin training. A krogan with tactical cloak. A hand cannon-

...Could justify his slim frame as fast paced adaptation to terrain...


If Retaliation doesn't have the 'Krogan Commando Infiltrator' class (complete with Shadow Charge and Tactical Tarp)... ; n;

Also when I said Pyjak dog I meant foods. But yeah. Robo- VARREN PET, HOOOOO!

Also Arm cannon? Jump n' Shoot krogan!:lol: (I would play that game.).

But back to serious time (mind you its not finished but I felt bad not giving you SOMETHING to read after all this time! D: ):

It wasn't easy to gather food for the growing Krogan. When the Flotilla passed close to a civilized planet, they were given little time to gather what they needed as is, and theship's credits were prioritized on collecting scrap for repairs, and medicine. What food they could gather was usually consumed in an instant by the hungry Zar; for the growing krogan had a large appetite. It was a blessing a Krogan could go months at a time without food or water!

Eventually his parents had an idea, a way to keep a stable food supply on hand as well as help curb their young krogan's anxieties and teach him a sense of responsibility: Gardening. They made it perfectly clear to the young krogan: If he neglected the garden, he'd run out of food. There was a thought for the Krogan, as he pierced the soil in his little slice of the liveship's plantation. Was he being punished for something? What did he do wrong? His mind began to search backwards to find out how he could have possibly upset his parents but instead found himself thinking about a Quarian, Seve'Yul, who had made a certain comment about his mother's...well, Zar's eyes became locked in a glare, yet as he stabbed the ground with the shovel a faint smile crept along the corner of his mouth. Again and again the young krogan plunged the tool into the soil, face now beaming with joy: he liked gardening.

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It wasn't easy to gather food for the growing Krogan. When the Flotilla passed close to a civilized planet, they were given little time to gather what they needed as is, and theship's credits were prioritized on collecting scrap for repairs, and medicine. What food they could gather was usually consumed in an instant by the hungry Zar; for the growing krogan had a large appetite. It was a blessing a Krogan could go months at a time without food or water!

Eventually his parents had an idea, a way to keep a stable food supply on hand as well as help curb their young krogan's anxieties and teach him a sense of responsibility: Gardening. They made it perfectly clear to the young krogan: If he neglected the garden, he'd run out of food. There was a thought for the Krogan, as he pierced the soil in his little slice of the liveship's plantation. Was he being punished for something? What did he do wrong? His mind began to search backwards to find out how he could have possibly upset his parents but instead found himself thinking about a Quarian, Seve'Yul, who had made a certain comment about his mother's...well, Zar's eyes became locked in a glare, yet as he stabbed the ground with the shovel a faint smile crept along the corner of his mouth. Again and again the young krogan plunged the tool into the soil, face now beaming with joy: he liked gardening.


He contributes! That's actually quite cute. Here's wondering if Zar will have basic knowledge of farming machines... it just feels ... impossible to not know a bloody thing about machines and grow up in the quarian fleet.
Also... maybe he sings? :D

I'm a Krogan and I'm dig-ging a hooole! Diggy Diggy hole! I'm dig-ging a hoole! Planting some seeds! Making me nuts! Salad bars over there! Shoot the Pyjak over here!~

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I'm a Krogan and I'm dig-ging a hooole! Diggy Diggy hole! I'm dig-ging a hoole! Planting some seeds! Making me nuts! Salad bars over there! Shoot the Pyjak over here!~


I just sang this aloud. And I giggled. I am a man with a deepish voice. Deep giggles man. They be deep.:police:

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This is amazing......

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Oh my, what happens if someone tramples that farm plot? Now he got a real territory to defend. Don't let him dig too deep, lest he stirs the Thresher Maw.

I agree on the more slender, agile and speedy perspective. It fits better into the Quarian surrounding and culture.

And guys: Rename your Krogan Vanguards to Zar or similar. They say Biotic Charge counts now towards the rage counter but it is probably a glitch.

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Oh my, what happens if someone tramples that farm plot? Now he got a real territory to defend. Don't let him dig too deep, lest he stirs the Thresher Maw.

I agree on the more slender, agile and speedy perspective. It fits better into the Quarian surrounding and culture.

And guys: Rename your Krogan Vanguards to Zar or similar. They say Biotic Charge counts now towards the rage counter but it is probably a glitch.


Uuuuh... So is Zar Biotic also? ^^;
I'll definetly use the name but I'd also like the color scheme for him.
Will he take off his suit periodically or be in the suit for forever?
Difference in that is. In suit all life = A much darker skin tone due to not getting enough light. Contrats to getting light.

Also someone must teach Zar that digging straight down is a bad idea, so is digging above him, Digging the block near lava will cause a flow, he should also remember that digging in gravel means said gravel might fall on top of him.
Also watch out for Cre... Pyjaks. Yes dem pyjaks are trying to steal his nuts! Kill em with a shovel!

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Ziegrif wrote...

dr_random wrote...

Oh my, what happens if someone tramples that farm plot? Now he got a real territory to defend. Don't let him dig too deep, lest he stirs the Thresher Maw.

I agree on the more slender, agile and speedy perspective. It fits better into the Quarian surrounding and culture.

And guys: Rename your Krogan Vanguards to Zar or similar. They say Biotic Charge counts now towards the rage counter but it is probably a glitch.


Uuuuh... So is Zar Biotic also? ^^;
I'll definetly use the name but I'd also like the color scheme for him.
Will he take off his suit periodically or be in the suit for forever?
Difference in that is. In suit all life = A much darker skin tone due to not getting enough light. Contrats to getting light.

Also someone must teach Zar that digging straight down is a bad idea, so is digging above him, Digging the block near lava will cause a flow, he should also remember that digging in gravel means said gravel might fall on top of him.
Also watch out for Cre... Pyjaks. Yes dem pyjaks are trying to steal his nuts! Kill em with a shovel!


I saw good points against his bioticness and who should teach him? No, Zar is just a cool name for the Vanguard. On my Vanguard I always use a darker green with yellow as a secondary colour for a nice effect. The KroSoldier usually goes in "flame armour" (camouflage red and yellow) and my KroSent is a white collar worker.
I guess wearing a suit is advisable when Quarians are around, unless he wants conversations to stop once he enters. I guess he'd take comfort in getting out of it whenever possible (as when digging).
For the digging Zar should always bring a bucket of water. He can also drown the Pyjaks in it and store all the nuts there.

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I saw good points against his bioticness and who should teach him? No, Zar is just a cool name for the Vanguard. On my Vanguard I always use a darker green with yellow as a secondary colour for a nice effect. The KroSoldier usually goes in "flame armour" (camouflage red and yellow) and my KroSent is a white collar worker.
I guess wearing a suit is advisable when Quarians are around, unless he wants conversations to stop once he enters. I guess he'd take comfort in getting out of it whenever possible (as when digging).
For the digging Zar should always bring a bucket of water. He can also drown the Pyjaks in it and store all the nuts there.


Actually I think he does need a mentor who can teach him about agriculture. An old Quarian veteran who did service in the marines and retired to work in the farming sector.

Kinda cliche, but it'd add a nice support charachter.

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Ziegrif wrote...

dr_random wrote...

I saw good points against his bioticness and who should teach him? No, Zar is just a cool name for the Vanguard. On my Vanguard I always use a darker green with yellow as a secondary colour for a nice effect. The KroSoldier usually goes in "flame armour" (camouflage red and yellow) and my KroSent is a white collar worker.
I guess wearing a suit is advisable when Quarians are around, unless he wants conversations to stop once he enters. I guess he'd take comfort in getting out of it whenever possible (as when digging).
For the digging Zar should always bring a bucket of water. He can also drown the Pyjaks in it and store all the nuts there.


Actually I think he does need a mentor who can teach him about agriculture. An old Quarian veteran who did service in the marines and retired to work in the farming sector.

Kinda cliche, but it'd add a nice support charachter.


I happen to working on a more garden-y story. ;3

Also I re-named my Krogan Soldier from Tank to Zar. His armor may or may not just look rusty and old. Because how on earth is he going to get something as awesomeas the battlemaster armor. D:

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The garden soon became Zar's own sanctuary after long days of dealing with others his age. The pent up anger from wanting to strike back at them was spent digging, planting, and staring at the ground. In a way it became his only friend and he cared for it...but as as hard as he tried nothing could grow. The krogan's disappointment was immense. After a few weeks Zar had all but given up on growing anything and sat down in the dirt, a small dust cloud forming about him as he did so.

His eyes stayed focused on the empty patch of soil before him, leaving him unaware of the presence behind him until a gentle hand fell upon his shoulder, "These things take time, young Zar. All things worth accomplishing do."

The young krogan looked over towards the armor-clad hand on his shoulder, and to the man who it belonged to. The armor pieces of the Quarian's suit were scratched in multiple places with their color faded beyond recognition, the tan cloth adorning his suit was splotched with dirt stains. In the man's other hand was a shovel. This was Adao'Verde, an elderly Quarian and former Marine who spent his final years tending to the liveship's crops.

Zar could see a faint smile behind Adao's visor as the Quarian's free hand lifted itself from Zar's shoulder. Squatting beside Zar, Adao grabbed a clump of soil for a moment, letting the dirt flow out between his finger as he turned towards Zar, before chuckling deeply, "How often have you been watering?"

Zar was silent. He usually watered them once every other day...was he watering them too little? Too much? He squirmed slightly as the Quarian stood back up," You should water the area twice daily, Zar. Just don't expect your crops to grow in a day, or you'll wake each day and be disappointed."

With this Adao turned and headed off to return to his duties. Zar watched him go, before watering his little sanctuary.

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And yes, Adao'Verde actually has a meaning to his name, huzzah!

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You know. I've been coming here every now and then... and I can't think of anything to say really.
This picture is... stumping me... A Krogan in a dress.
I know I find it funny, but... WHAT?!

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You know. I've been coming here every now and then... and I can't think of anything to say really.
This picture is... stumping me... A Krogan in a dress.
I know I find it funny, but... WHAT?!


You're just amazed at my Microsoft Paint abilities.

I AM AN ARTISTIC GOD. FEAR ME!

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Broganisity wrote...

Ziegrif wrote...

You know. I've been coming here every now and then... and I can't think of anything to say really.
This picture is... stumping me... A Krogan in a dress.
I know I find it funny, but... WHAT?!


You're just amazed at my Microsoft Paint abilities.

I AM AN ARTISTIC GOD. FEAR ME!

-Also new segment will be up tomorrow!-


Nice, the picture was indeed a bit unsettling, but I guess that was some artistic thing to trick us. Looking forward to your new stuff.

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Nice, the picture was indeed a bit unsettling, but I guess that was some artistic thing to trick us. Looking forward to your new stuff.


Yeah, had the opposite affect of what I planned. I mean, I can sorta draw...but it takes weeks of work and paint is just SO MUCH FUNNIER to use.

Also The story segment I'm writting right now involves meeting Vida'Nolus (which totally doesn't rhyme with Volus. Word.) So...brainstorm time! :lol:

EDIT: Current Characters:

- Zar: Protagonist. Krogan adopted by Quarian Parents. hebrew last name likely originating from an abbrievanted form of a Persian word meaning 'Neighbor'...also his first random incoherent word.
- Vida'Nolus: Friend of Zar. First name translates to 'Life'
- Adao'Verde: Retired Marine who now tends to the Liveship's gardens. Name translates to 'Earth Green'.

Minor Characters:

- Zar's Parents.
- Captain of the Ileen.
- Seve'Yul. Quarian 'punk' briefly mentioned. Name translates to- I forget. I think it was along the lines of 'Rash' or 'Arrogance'.

Currently seen places:

- Ruined area on Tuchanka
- Zar's garden on the Ileen, one of the Migrant Fleet's Liveships.

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Welp, not sure how to get that part of the story done and out of the way. Looking forward to what Doc Random has while I try and get some creative juices flowing.

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It was going to be a happy day.
Zar had been chosen as player for the class' gravball team. The exercise finally paid off! Now he was going to prove his worth in the match.
Zar was vividly imagining all the impossible throws, scores and heroic blocks he was going to do on his first official match as member of the 'Crickets' (Wasn't that some kind of insect?) and soon they would be the best team of the school!

Today the kids had the turf at the gravball dome and when he entered the stadium his teammates had already gathered around coach Jel'Ran issuing claims about their favourite positions.
Jel'Ran, the "Turian" - nobody knew where he got this nickname from - stood patiently amidst his charges completing the roster he was drafting.
When he finished, he cleared his throat and read out the starting team composition. All kids went silent at once with the occasional expressions of triumph or dismay.

Gravball matches had a large enough roster and it was very likely that everyone of them got their chance to play in the match.
Zar had been assigned a defensive position, as he already had suspected. He had bred the whole week-end about plans and moves to dominate the match. He even used those action figures that he normally never touched to simulate game moves.
In his opinion, the defensive position was a good opportunity to receive the ball, or "Hog", as it was called in Gravball-speak. The enemy hog-bearer would be funnelled conveniently into his direction and he just had to intercept them. They would never expect him to have exercised in quickness and agility - they were in for a big surprise.

Once he got the hog - or hog-bearer altogether - he would charge straight though their lines in a dashing counter-attack. He preferred the hog-bearer-variant - it would save precious moments and even injuries he would risk when trying to pry the hog from the other guy's hands.
If he got through to the enemy zone it wouldn't count as a goal score but they would get some points, embarass the enemy team and win the initiative.
It was a perfect strategy.
Jel'Ran told the kids to warm up while he went checking the tech stuff about keeping the essential zero-gravity bubble in place. No big deal, since it was just about going sure that artificial gravity was shut down for the dome section.
While the kids and their coach unwittingly prepared with for their match a little storm was forming unnoticed:
By this time the "Steelers" and "Oilers", hardy men from the engine room and flightdeck were gathering around the groundskeepers office and had just figured out that their favourite after-work activity had been removed from the schedule without notice.

In favour of some silly kids.

Under normal circumstances, the flightdeck crew called the engine room "dungeon rats" while they received the title of "waiters" by the engineers. They came here to settle long-standing dispute and bragging and to determine who was the best "once and for all" (a period of about half a galactic year in Quarian terms).
Now that they had been kicked like some ballast from the dome's schedule they quickly agreed unanimously how to handle this. And they were people with a very practical approach to problems. While one of them fixed the groundskeeper to his chair in a quick, efficient and practical way, the other guys flushed the dome and began to drag out the "brats" by coarse, crude and practical measures.
Naturally, Zar, alone by his presence, was not a primary target for the Steelers' and Oilers' hands as his teammates were already gathering around him with the smaller and youngest ones clutching at him fearfully. For the time being the engineers picked the stragglers, hauled them off to the outside and saw them off with a pat on the back and a crude joke.

Zar was pacing nervously the inner circle his teammates had formed around him.
"What shall we do, Zar?" asked Sil'or, the boy who usually led the pack.
"Why do you ask me? Won't you come up with something?"
"Well you're the biggest and strongest we have - I'd say we run..."
'Yes, run, I can tell daddy around the corner...'
'Mhmya! Let's go!'
"Mmpf, we stay! Don't be stupid - this is our turf!"
'But dey got dem heavy toolzes an' go beatin' us an' crack my helmet', cried little Bu'yin, the youngest of class and burst out into tears.
"Nah, they won't dare. The coach and our parents wouldn't allow."
'But dey're not HERE! Ai am frightend - dey gonna hurt us with deyr mean toolz!'
"Let me do the talking, then and you watch my back while I do, Bu'yin!"
With great relief, Bu'yin scurried behind Zar and began intently watching his back.

The engineers now began to approach the pod of kids that had gathered around Zar and with every step they neared, the circle around Zar went smaller and smaller.

"Oi, lads! Time to go home and leave this place to the real men! Off you go now or we'll have to carry you out like the others!"
"We're NOT going! This is OUR place! YOU leave!"
"Wha..What? What is this dirty lizard rambling about? Know your place Snake-Boy and get lost now, before I teach yer a lesson!"

Anger rose in Zar and dried his mouth and throat, he'd never been insulted like this. Zar twitched and was about to let go the control and charge at that Brute but he felt a sudden punch against his chest and the hissing voice of Sil'or in his ear:
"Leave it Zar! We need to stick together or they have easy game with us!"
"Rrrrrr!"
Another elbow-check into his ribs and a lot of hands now clutched Zar where they could get hold of him.
"Don't get yourself provoked! We NEED to stick TOGETHER!" hissed Sil'or.
"Hrright, right - We stick together. Brace yourselves, noone let go!"

The engineers had now arrived the ball of kids and began to tear at them which quickly resulted in a cacophony of maddening screams.

In the bowels of the dome coach Jel'Ran suddenly listened up, the muffled sounds from above were somewhat alarming, more clamorous and lacking in laughter. He slammed shut the hatchway and proceeded up to check what was going on.

"It's not even been five minutes and the heck I know wha...WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON HERE?" bellowed his voice through the dome.

"Heavens, it's the Turia-aaarghh!"
The coach had grabbed the nearest engineer coercing him to display an exemplary figure of Quarian flexibility. Sort of painful flexibility, too.
"LEGGO my kids or I'll break yer boneses one by one!" Jel'Ran underlined his command with the nasty sound of knuckles bending under stress and muffled sounds of pain from the engineer in his hands.

The men quickly backed away from the kids knowing they were in trouble if they kept angering "The Turian" whom they knew as a highly decorated and grizzled veteran from their common tours of duty.

"OFF YOU GO NOW, GUYS - We will discuss this later!" The engineers began an uneasy retreat.

Jel'Ran turned to the boys and looked at the huddle that was half trembling - half trying to look determined but still firmly interlocking arms, hands and limbs to a solid mass.

"So...", began Jel'Ran and Sil'or burst out:
"So we thought we'd better stick together."
'Dem being mean to us and witheyr toolzes and dat...'
'Mya, an' their running after us and surrounding us...'
'And Zar told him this is our place!"
'Ye, an', an' I shouda watch his back, hm? Nozzing wrong wizdat, yes?'
"Now, now, lads. Nothing wrong with that. Let's call it a day now - I need to see after some things right now..."
"But the match!"
"Match? No, lads, you've learned already one of the most important lessons today: To stick together as a team. That's a big lesson and we'll see if you can remember it next week - think about it!"

My, in minutes these little lads indeed had learned a lesson some teams would never learn. Jel'Ran took a quick glance at Sil'or and Zar - these boys could probably be a good start for a glorious season.

"Come on lads, wrap this up! There, there Bu'yin, no need to cry anymore, hm? You're NOT frightened? Just glad to see me? Charmer!"

Modifié par dr_random, 25 octobre 2012 - 04:15 .