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Pain87

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So, this is for your Feedback of the Story from this Threadhttp://social.biowar.../index/15222498 hope you will use it.

Next Time i will update this first posting, so you can see what Kysaek looks like, her Origin and whatever the german people were able to choose



*Update* Here i show you the Information of the Protagonist:)


General Information:

Name:Elaine Kysaek

Species: Asari (alternatives, who lost the voting:3 Votes Batarian, 2 Votes Turian, 1 Vote Quarian. There were even some more Species, but would´nt vote.)

Age: 27 (Yeah she is so young ^^)

Appearance:

Skin Color: Blue

Size: normal (around 1,80 till 1,90 m = around 5 to 6 feet)

Body Structure: lightly trained

Chest: flat/upright

Hair Cartilage: peaky and down at the end

Eye Color: Violet

Eyeshadow: lilac

Tattoo: Yes This kind of White-Blue tattoo(Only tattoo, not how Kysaek looks completly)
Image IPB


Scars:A lightning shaped scar at
the stomach area and a small scar at her cheek, which is invisible
almost. Former Bullet which scuffed her there.

Accessories: Dog tag from Service in the Forces, which looks quite damaged already. Also on the same necklace a medallion is hanging 



Background Information:

Past:

Born on the Home World, grown up by the parents, who rebuilt it, but fled in Teenage Years, when a small conspiracy has destroyed the idyll of the family.


Lost in Voting Past:
1) Grown up on the lowest level of the society, far away from law and order on Omega, parentless one needed to learn inevitably to look for oneself and escaped in young years by a narrow margin a nefarious slaver



2) Many species gathered in one place, grown up in a colony, where almost every species is represented and is known as the ideal example for Democracy and Unity. But the appearance of an Utopia is deceitful, when after a long time of riots the home world is led into all species spanning chaos and the mother dies.



Starting Point:

Shepard…Shepard, if someone likes it or not, this name is immortal and sets the benchmark for all times. That’s why Ijoined the army, when they promised full-bodied that everyone could be aShepard. But the reality months later showed me after there was no place for me in the Forces anymore, that I am a Nobody and far away from
the picture of a soldier, exactly like many others. Now I am nothing better than a Night Watch by a company on Illium and don’t even know what I am guarding. 


Lost in Voting Startpoints:
1) Omega…what a Sh-ithole. I think that if I would get a Credit for hearing this from a stranger, I could leave it with ease, after I heard that you could forge your own luck here. But no, I was tricked by this gang boss and as long as my debts aren’t gone, my leave would be not clever, so I work for him.


2) The
Citadel is rebuilt and like earlier the shining glory of the galaxy. Fewmonths ago I reached it to make my mark here, to play with the big guys. But here hard work doesn’t count more than to have brains, don’t even talking about the Politics. I survived by working occasional jobs.

Modifié par Pain87, 09 décembre 2012 - 09:12 .