Hey I just wanted to pop in and ask for some help from you veteran writers/readers. I am writing my first and probably only fanfiction write now and I'd like some criteque from you guys. While I will occasionally read a story that I think is good, I am not a writer by nature, but I have been itching to write a Mass Effect story for some time, and I've finnally gotten around to it. Since this is my first story, it is pretty noobish right now, but I have a decent sense of where I want to take the story and characters *PM me if you really want to go in depth*. The story is set in 2196 and is about a vigilante group commanded by a familiar face.
Any help is greatly appreciated, here is the link!
http://www.fanfictio...ilitation-Redux
Anyone mind helping a n00b writer?
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Quackjack
, janv. 10 2013 12:45
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Posté 10 janvier 2013 - 01:27
Drussius
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I haven't looked at your story yet, I'm kinda bogged down in something at the moment, but in case anyone else wanders in here and reads this, I'd just like to ask... What kind of help are you looking for? Story help? Spelling and grammar? Characters? And are you the type that takes corrections or criticisms well? I'm sure there are a number of people out there who might like to lend a hand, but sometimes it's hard to know just how much help is wanted.
Personally, I am the type of guy who would read through, probably point out at least a dozen spelling or grammar errors per chapter, but would never comment on a story's content unless there was a glaring plot hole, because I think the story is the part that should come exclusively from the writer.
And just so you know, there is a thread in this very forum called the Fanfic Writer's Support Thread. It is a great place to ask random writing questions and get opinions on your work. Lots of very talented writers there.
Personally, I am the type of guy who would read through, probably point out at least a dozen spelling or grammar errors per chapter, but would never comment on a story's content unless there was a glaring plot hole, because I think the story is the part that should come exclusively from the writer.
And just so you know, there is a thread in this very forum called the Fanfic Writer's Support Thread. It is a great place to ask random writing questions and get opinions on your work. Lots of very talented writers there.
Modifié par Drussius, 10 janvier 2013 - 01:27 .
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Posté 10 janvier 2013 - 01:45
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I tried that section, but to no avail. I am not looking for grammatical errors, I am looking more for critique on my characters, settings, plot, ect.
And yes, I take criticism well.
And yes, I take criticism well.
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Posté 10 janvier 2013 - 04:22
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Hey man I skimmed over your story, and I could giver you a few pointers. I'm not the best with grammatical errors there was a few, but none to jaring. I'm going to suggest a few things with you actually plot and story.
When you are describing events and characters thoughts try to delve deep, and be descriptive. You want the reader to be able to visualize every thing thats transpiring in the world you are creating with a crisp clarity. You want the reader to feel the emotions, and the experiences your character has and will be in. So, I'd just maybe revise those points in your story. And with all your characters when you introduce them try to create a vivid picture of them for your reader so they will remember each and every character you introduce. This once again touches on description.
Your plot is excellent to me very good! You can definitely continue on from what you have already.
If you want more feedback at all feel free to message me or even email me more of your stuff. I'm open and love helping others if I can.
But very good start so far man keep it up!
When you are describing events and characters thoughts try to delve deep, and be descriptive. You want the reader to be able to visualize every thing thats transpiring in the world you are creating with a crisp clarity. You want the reader to feel the emotions, and the experiences your character has and will be in. So, I'd just maybe revise those points in your story. And with all your characters when you introduce them try to create a vivid picture of them for your reader so they will remember each and every character you introduce. This once again touches on description.
Your plot is excellent to me very good! You can definitely continue on from what you have already.
If you want more feedback at all feel free to message me or even email me more of your stuff. I'm open and love helping others if I can.
But very good start so far man keep it up!
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Posté 10 janvier 2013 - 10:22
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Party Marti wrote...
Hey man I skimmed over your story, and I could giver you a few pointers. I'm not the best with grammatical errors there was a few, but none to jaring. I'm going to suggest a few things with you actually plot and story.
When you are describing events and characters thoughts try to delve deep, and be descriptive. You want the reader to be able to visualize every thing thats transpiring in the world you are creating with a crisp clarity. You want the reader to feel the emotions, and the experiences your character has and will be in. So, I'd just maybe revise those points in your story. And with all your characters when you introduce them try to create a vivid picture of them for your reader so they will remember each and every character you introduce. This once again touches on description.
Your plot is excellent to me very good! You can definitely continue on from what you have already.
If you want more feedback at all feel free to message me or even email me more of your stuff. I'm open and love helping others if I can.
But very good start so far man keep it up!
Right, I'll keep descriptions in mind. I was feeling the first few chapters were rather lacking in length, and that's probably why.
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Posté 12 janvier 2013 - 12:09
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Thanks for the help man, appreciate it 
Modifié par Quackjack, 14 janvier 2013 - 04:24 .
